读后续写改卷心得Continuationwriting课件

1、Continuation Writing读后续写Continuation Writing新课程标准提出了英语学科核心素养：语言能力、思维品质、文化品格和学习能力。 读后续写：要求学生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。 语言能力：阅读和写作思维品质：想象能力和创新精神新课程标准提出了英语学科核心素养：语言能力、思维品质、文读后续写高档次的给分范围和要求对第四档(16-20)作文的描述： 与所给短文融洽度较高， 与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。 内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 所使

2、用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达； 比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。对第五档(21-25)作文的描述： 与所给短文融洽度高， 与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。 内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达； 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。读后续写高档次的给分范围和要求对第四档(16-20)作文的描写作的几个考虑语言的功能与目的逻辑语言作者是否能顺利地表达自己的意思这个意义是否能顺利地被接受 情节逻辑融洽度（1）原文与后续的逻辑（2）后续两段间的逻辑

3、（3）段落开头与后续语句间的逻辑（1）逻辑是否严密（2）情节是否有旁支 （1）衔接（2）语法结构与词汇的丰富性、准确性 （3）修辞(交际)写作的几个考虑作者是否能顺利地表达自己的意思这个意义是否能顺读后续写三大步骤readingplottingwriting内容语言主题细节衔接内容逻辑语言读后续写三大步骤readingplottingwritingreadingcontent whoJane, Tom (a couple) whenone weekend in July wherein the forest what One weekend in July, Jane and Tom deci

4、ded to camp by a lake. After a quarrel with Tom, Jane walked away angrily. Having walked too far, Jane got lost in the forest and couldnt contact Tom without her cell phone which was left in their car. With night falling, Jane had to stop for the night. Feeling tired, thirsty and hungry, she missed

5、Tom and her family very much. To her great joy, the next morning she drank and also found some berries to eat nearby a stream. As she walked along the stream, two helicopters flew overhead one after another. But the trees blocked out the sight. Jane thought it wise to make herself noticed by flaggin

6、g her yellow blouse on an open area.readingcontent whoJane, Tom ( content what One weekend in July, Jane and Tom decided to camp by a lake. After a quarrel with Tom, Jane walked away angrily. Having walked too far, Jane got lost in the forest and couldnt contact Tom without her cell phone which was

7、left in their car. With night falling, Jane had to stop for the night. Feeling tired, thirsty and hungry, she missed Tom and her family very much. To her great joy, the next morning she drank and also found some berries to eat nearby a stream. As she walked along the stream, two helicopters flew ove

8、rhead one after another. But the trees blocked out the sight. Jane thought it wise to make herself noticed by flagging her yellow blouse on an open area.Para1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Jane lake helicopter walked away at a

9、 distanceTom stream her yellow blouse climbed to her great joyTopic: survive language 1. Jane was so angry that she said to Tom 2. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. 3. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. 4. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest 5. To her

10、 great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. 6. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. 7. The farther she walked, the more confused she became. 8. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. language 1. Jane was so angry separatePara1: But no more helicopters came and i

11、t was getting dark again. Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. the paragraph topicJane suffered physically and mentally.darkdaybreak the paragraph topicJane survived.reunitedJane regretted what she had done.Jane realized how much they loved.plottingPara1: But no more helicoptersseparatePara1:

12、But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Para 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. whowhenwherewhat / howJanenightin the forest how Jane felt what Jane did darkdaybreakwhowhenwherewhat / howJaneTomdayin the forest or other places how Jane survived how they feltreunited disappoint

13、ed tiredwalk, find, climb, stop, sleepTom, helicopter, find, tell, love, hug happyPara1: But no more helicoptersJane was very disappointed, but she didnt give up.She still kept walking, and tried her best to find the lake.She climbed to a high place and fell asleep quickly.In the end, because she wa

14、s so tired that she stopped screaming.She screamed for help when she walked on the road.12345But Toms face floated in her mind before she closed her eyes.6writingJane was very disappointed, buJane was very disappointed, but she didnt give up.1She still kept walking, and tried her best to find the la

15、ke.2She was screamed when her walked on the road.3In the end, because she was too tired that she stopped to scream.4She climbed a high place and fall sleep quickly.5But Toms face crowded in her mind before she closed her eyes.6Tip 1: Plots should be logically connected. It was daybreak when Jane wok

16、e up. To her surprised, she found Tom was alongside her! She asked Tom why she was in there. Tom said he called the police to help him and they drived the helicopter the found her laid in a high place. Jane was so moved, then she told Tom how much she loved him, and promised she will never do it aga

17、in. Tom was very happy and they never have some quarrels. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane was very disappointed, but she didnt give up. She still kept walking, and tried her best to find the lake. She was screamed when her walked on the road. In the end, because she

18、was too tired that she stopped to scream. She climbed a high place and fall asleep quickly. But Toms face crowded in her mind before she closed her eyes. 13 能基本完成任务。 与原文关系密切，故事情节基本可信，衔接较好。 语言有错误，且影响意义传达。Jane was very disappointed, bu书面表达高档次的给分范围和要求对第五档(21-25)作文的描述： 与所给短文融洽度高， 与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。 内容丰富，应用

19、了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达； 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。 logical reasonable creative powerful书面表达高档次的给分范围和要求对第五档(21-25)作文的描creative writing windrainfogwild animals treeslake streamwild fruits stones/rocksgrass leaves wooden housecavesuffer survive tirednessthirsthungerloneline

20、ss fearcold matches a knife her yellow blousecigarette lighter a small torch forest JaneTip 2: Your creativity comes from your direct or indirect experience. creative writing windrainfogwisuffering: windA strong wind blowing through the forest, the shadows of trees were just like the shapes of aggre

21、ssive animals. Jane was so scared that she buried her head in her arms, not daring to see anything. suffering: rainWorse still, it began to rain. Jane was getting soaked, out there in the pouring rain. Helpless, dejected, and hungry, she threw herself down on the ground and sobbed. suffering: wild a

22、nimalsA tiger was roaring at a distance. Jane was too scared to open her eyes, hoping it would disappear right away. suffering: windsuffering: rainlanguagewordsphrasessentences narration = exposition + description Topic: a shocking knife attackAnne Slade, mother of three, had been stabbed repeatedly

23、 with a knife. She was lying in her front garden bleeding very heavily. Her hands had almost been cut off. languagewordsphrasessentences 1. Her feet was beginning to swell up after the whole days walk.2. Sweet memories flash across/through her mind. Sweet memories flooded in her mind.3. A wave of re

24、gret and fear swept over her pale face. 4. The unforgettable experience, Jane strongly believed, would never fail to remind her how much she loved Tom and her family.Tip 3: Use what we have learned flexibly. 1. Her feet was beginning to s1. “Tom, where are you?” Jane _. shouted yelled screamed excla

25、imed2. Anxiety and despair grabbed her mind.3. Overwhelmed with anxiety and tiredness, Jane failed to decide where on earth to go. 4. The branches waved in the breeze as if extending its encouragement and blessing to her. Tip 4: Accumulate advanced words. 1. “Tom, where are you?” Jane 1. feel hungry

26、2. feel tired3. feel scared4. feel hopelessan empty stomachintolerable physical exhaustionher aching feetthe whistling night windthe thick darknessher trembling lipsher watery eyes Her stomach was growling.She dragged her heavy feet, more slowly and painfully than she haddone. The terrifying sounds

27、made her hair stand on end. As everything was dissolved by the darkness, deep hopelessness set in.Tip 5: Vivid descriptions can focus on “how” and “what”. 1. feel hungryan empty stomach哭：泪如泉涌，泪如雨下，梨花带雨，喜极而泣1. with tears in her eyes2. with tears welling up in her eyes 3. with tears rolling/streaming

28、down her face4. Tears of excitement and relief streamed down her face.5. When Jane called up the happy and fragrant time spent with Tom, tears clouded her eyes.Tip 5: Vivid descriptions can focus on “how” and “what”. 哭：泪如泉涌，泪如雨下，梨花带雨，喜极而泣Tip 5: Vi1. Jane felt overwhelmingly scared.2. Jane was ultima

29、tely saved 3. Jane thought regretfully / rationally.4. Hungry and exhausted, Jane gradually fell asleep against a huge rock. 5. Dropped into despair, Jane walked aimlessly along the stream.Tip 5: Vivid descriptions can focus on “how” and “what”. 1. Jane felt overwhelmingly sc1.“It was all my fault.

30、I shouldnt have quarreled with Tom.”2. If only Tom would be here with her now! How regretful she was to quarrel with Tom and walk away!3. Never had she missed Tom so much. “If it were not for my stubborn behavior, I would have enjoyed the beauty of nature with Tom.” She thought regretfully.Tip 6: A

31、vivid description of ones inner thoughts adds color to writing.1.“It was all my fault. I shou4. She blamed herself thousands of times that she would not leave Tom again.5. “Why am I always quarrelling over trifles? Why am I always ignoring his consideration? It was Tom who came up with the idea of c

32、amping just to please me. Also, it was Tom who prepared everything for the camp.” A feeling of infinite regret swept over her.4. She blamed herself thousand他走了很久。She kept walking.2. She walked _.3. Jane had walked _ without pausing. and walked more than five hoursTip 7: Repetition and data, if used

33、properly, are powerful. 他走了很久。 and walked more than fwander漫无目的地闲逛 stagger 蹒跚 pace 踱步 trudge 艰难地走 limp 跛行 drag 拖，拉1. The injured man _ away like someone drunk. 2. After four hours walk, the tired soldier _ the last two miles to the town.3. He _ the room, lost in thought.4. The runner had sprained hi

34、s ankle and was _ off the field.5. What fun it is to _ through a strange city. 6. Feeling tired, she _ her aching feet towards a big tree and sat down. staggeredtrudgedpacedlimpingwanderdraggedTip 8: Accumulating words of a family is necessary. wander漫无目的地闲逛 stagger 蹒跚 pac Depressed and hopeless, sh

35、e wandered along the stream. “If only I hadnt quarreled with Tom.” At the thought of her impulsiveness, Jane fell into deep regret. She trudged forward, more slowly and painfully than she had done. There was a big stone in the way but she didnt notice it and tripped over. Her ankle was badly spraine

36、d. When Jane bent down to rub her aching ankle, a gust of wind came, blowing away her yellow blouse. Now the only hope was lost. She broke down and wept uncontrollably. Apart from her cry, the forest was silent. No helicopter, no Tom no difference. “Weeping makes no difference.” she thought, wiping

37、her tears away. Then she struggled to her feet and limped toward a big tree. Too tired, she leaned against the tree and fell asleep soon. Tip 9: A vivid description should be based on the topic, for example, suffering caused by walking. Depressed and hopeless, shlanguage 1. Jane was so angry that sh

38、e said to Tom 2. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. 3. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. 4. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest 5. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. 6. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. 7.

39、The farther she walked, the more confused she became. 8. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. So tired was she that she could hardly move her aching feet.With tears welling up in her eyes, she wanted to say sorry to Tom for having lost her temper.She took off her yellow blouse and began

40、 shaking it wildly, hoping someone would see her.If only Tom would be here with me now! How regretful I was to quarrel with Tom and walk away!By no means would she walk away so impulsively.The further she walked, the more tired she felt.language 1. Jane was so angry 1. Hardly had she opened her eyes

41、 when she noticed herself covered by a thick coat. Tom was sitting beside her, smiling to her.2. No sooner had she risen to her feet than she heard the sound of a helicopter at a distance.3. So tired was she that she could hardly move her heavy/aching feet.4. The further she walked, the more tired s

42、he felt.5. How much she missed Tom!6. Nothing could be better than a cup of hot coffee.7. She kept flagging the yellow blouse until the day became completely dark. 8. What if I cant walk out of the forest? 9. She was about to continue her walk along the stream when she heard slight calls of her name

43、 at a distance. 10. By no means would she walk away so impulsively.Tip 10: Imitate the original language and put the sentence patterns to use flexibly and naturally. 1. Hardly had she opened her eTip 11: A good beginning is half done. But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Anxie

44、ty and desire grabbed her mind. Astonishingly she found comfort in the tale of Robinson Crusoe who was stranded on an isolated island but managed to survive in the end. Jane began to think rationally. It was obvious that her bright yellow blouse would increase the chances of survival, so wrenching off a branch, she transformed it into a big flag and climbed up to a high platform. Drowsiness overwhelmed her and she fell to the ground in a dead faint. Tip 11: A g