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Readthefollowingprofessionalessay.Thenanswerthequestionsandreadthecommentsthatfollow.

Lou’sPlace

byBethJohnson

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Imaginearestaurantwhereyoureverywhimiscateredto,youreverywantsatisfied,youreveryrequestgrantedwithouthesitation.Thepeopleonthestafflivetopleaseyou.Theyhoveranxiouslyasyousampleyourselection,waitingforyourjudgment.Yourpleasureistheirdelight,yourdissatisfactiontheirdismay.

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Lou’sisn’tthatkindofplace.

3

AtLou’sKosyKornerKoffeeShop,themockabuseflowslikeacupofspilledFolgers.Customersareyelledat,lectured,blamed,mocked,teased,andignored.Theypayfortheprivilegeofpouringtheirowncoffeeandscramblingtheirowneggs.Asinafondbutdysfunctionalfamily,Loudisplayshisaffectionthroughcriticismandinsults,andhiscustomersrespondinkind.IfLou’shadaslogan,itmightbe,“IfI’mpolitetoyou,askyourselfwhat’swrong.”

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Lou’sisoneofthreebreakfastjointslocatedinthebusinessdistrictofasmallmid-Atlantictown.Thecountycourthouseisnearby,supplyingasteadystreamoflawyers,jurors,andofficeworkerslookingforabitetoeat.AlocaltruckingfirmalsoprovidesLouwithcustomersasitsdriverscomeandgointown.Lou’sisonthecorner.Besideitisajewelryshop(“InBusinessSince1946—WatchRepairsOurSpeciality”)andanupscalehomeaccessoriesstorethatfeaturesbonsaitreesandhand-paintedbirdhousesinitswindow.There’sabusstopinfrontofLou’s.Louhimselfhasbeenknowntostormoutontothesidewalktoshooawaypeoplewho’vedismountedfromthebusandlingeredtoolongonthecorner.

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ThesignonLou’sfrontdoorsays“Open

7A.M.–3P.M.”Butby6:40onabriskspringmorning,therestaurant’slightsareon,thedoorisunlocked,andLouissettledintheboothnearestthedoor,withthe

PhiladelphiaInquirer

spreadoverthetable.Louissunkdeepintothebooth’sbrownvinylseat,itsripsneatlymendedwithsilverducttape.Heisstudyingtheboxscoresfromthenightbeforeasawould-becustomerpausesonthesidewalk,unsurewhethertobelievethesignorherowneyes.Sheopensthedoorenoughtostickherheadin.

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“Areyouopen?”sheasks.

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Withoutliftinghiseyesfromthepaper,Louanswers.“I’mhere,aren’tI?”

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Unsurehowtointerpretthisremark,thewomanentersandsitsatabooth.Loukeepsstudyingthepaper.Hebeginstohumunderhisbreath.Thewomanstartstracingapatternontheglass-toppedtablewithherfingernail.Shepullsouthercheckbookandpretendstobalanceit.Afterafewlongminutes,Louapparentlyreachesastoppingpointinhisreading.Herises,hiseyesstillonthefoldednewspaperhecarrieswithhim.Hishummingbreaksintolow-volume

songashetrudgesbehindthecounter.“Maaaaaaaakesomeonehappy…Make-makemaaaaaakesomeonehappy,”hecroonsasheliftsthesteamingpotthathasinfusedtheroomwiththericharomaoffreshlybrewedcoffee.Hecarriesittothewoman’stable,fillshercup,anddropstwosingle-servingcontainersofhalf-and-halfnearby.Hethenpeersoverthetopsofhisreadingglassesathiscustomer.“Youwantanythingelse,dear?”heasks,hisbushygrayeyebrowsrisingwiththequestion.

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Sheshakesherhead.“I’mmeetingsomeone.I’llorderwhenhegetshere.”

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Lounodsabsently,hiseyesbackonhispaper.Asheshufflesbacktohisseat,hemuttersoverhisshoulder,“Hopeheshowsupbeforethree.Iclosethen.”

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Loureadshispaper;thewomandrinkshercoffeeandgazesaroundtheroom.It’sasmallrestaurant:justaneight-seatcounterandsevenpaddedbooths.Agrill,coffeepots,andahugestainless-steelrefrigeratorlinethewallbehindthecounter.Undertheglasstopofthetablesisthebreakfastmenu:itofferseggs,pancakes,homefries,bacon,andsausage.AwallrackholdsKellogg’sJumboPacksofsingle-servingcereals:smilingtoucansandcheerfultigersofferFrootLoopsandFrostedFlakes.

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Twoposter-sizephotographshangsidebysideatthefarwall.OneisofLouandhiswifeontheirweddingday.Theyappeartobeintheirmidtwenties.Heisslim,dark-haired,beaming;hisarmcirclestheshouldersofhisfair-hairedbride.Theotherphotoshowsthesamecoupleinanidenticalpose—onlyinthisone,Loulooksmuchasheistoday.Hisshortwhitehairispartedattheside;acroppedwhitebeardemphasizeshisprominentredmouth.Hisformerlyslimfigurenowexpandstotakeupmuchofthephotograph.Butthesmileisthesameasheembraceshissilver-hairedwife.

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Thebellatthedoortinkles;twosleepy-eyedmeninflannelshirts,workboots,andoilcompanycapswalkin.Louglancesupandgruntsatthem;theynod.OnepicksupanInquirer

fromthedisplaystandandleavestwoquartersonthecashregister.Theydropontoseatsatthecounter,simultaneouslyswiveltolookatthewomanintheboothbehindthem,andthenturnback.Forafewminutes,theyflipthroughthesportssection.Loudoesn’tmove.Onemanrisesfromhisseatandwandersbehindthecountertofindcups

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Lou’swaitress,Stacy,hasarrived,andbeginstakingordersanddeliveringmeals.Loualternatesbetweenworkingthegrillandclearingtables.Mid-stride,hehaltsbeforethegolden-hairedwomanatthecounter,whohaspushedherplateasideandislightinganothercigarette.“What?Whatisthis?”hedemands.

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“Looouuu…”shebeginssoothingly,astreamofsmokejettingfromhermouthwiththeword.

*suits:

businessexecutivesorprofessionals(peoplewearingbusinesssuits).

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“Don’t‘Lou’me,”heretorts.“Youdon’teatyourtoast,youdon’teatyourpotatoes,youbarelytouchyoureggs.Whatchagonnaliveon?Camels?”

38

“Awww,Lou,”shesays,butshepullsherplatebackandeatsafewmorebites.

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Astherushofcustomersslowstoatrickle,Loureturnstotheregister,makingchangeandconversation,talkingPhilliesandtheweather.Oneoftheflannel-shirtedmenrisesfromhiscounterseatandheadsforthedoor,droppinghismoneyonthecounter.“’Bye,Stacy,”hesaystothewaitress.“Haveaniceday.”

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“’Bye,Mel,”shereplies.“Youtoo.”

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“Whataboutme?”LoucallsafterMel.

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Meldoesn’tpause.“Whocareswhatkindofaday

you

have?”

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Meldisappearsintothemorningsunshine;theCamelladypullsacrosswordpuzzleoutofherpurseandtapsanunlitcigaretterapidlyagainstthecounter.Stacywipesthetablesandemptiesawastebasketofitsloadofdark,wetcoffeegrounds.Loubuttersapieceoftoastandreturnstohisfavoritebooth.Hespreadsouthisnewspaperagain,thenglancesuptocatchtheeyeofthehot-saucewoman.“Where’syourfriend?”heasks.

44

“Heleft,”shereplies.

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“Heleftyou,eh?”Louasks.

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“No,hedidn’t

leave

me.Hejusthadtogotowork…”

47

“Dumphim,”Lourespondsautomatically.“Andnow,ifyoudon’tmind

very

much,Iwouldliketofinishmynewspaper.”

Questions2

AboutUnity

1.WhatisthethesisofJohnson’sessay?Ifitisstateddirectly,locatetherelevantsentenceorsentences.Ifitisimplied,statethethesisinyourownwords.

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2.Whichstatementwouldbestserveasatopicsentenceforparagraph13?

ManyofLou’scustomersare,likehim,interestedinthe

Philadelphia

sportsteams.

Loudoesn’tmindifcustomersservethemselvescoffee.

Louapparentlydislikedthetwomeninoil-companycapswhocameintotherestaurant.

RegularcustomersatLou’sareusedtotakingcareofthemselveswhileLoureadshispaper.

AboutSupport

3.Inparagraph3,JohnsonclaimsthatLouandhiscustomersarefondofoneanother.Howdoesshesupportthatclaiminthecaseofthegolden-hairedwomanwhoisfirstmentionedinparagraph26?

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4.WearetoldthatcustomersenjoytheunusualatmosphereofLou’scoffeeshop.Whatdetailinparagraph25supportsthisidea?

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5.Findaparagraphthatappealstothreesensesandidentifythosesenses.

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AboutCoherence

6.Whichsentenceinparagraph31containsachange-of-directionsignal?

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7.Whichsentenceinparagraph23beginswithatimesignal?(Writetheopeningwordsofthatsentence.)

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8.Thesentencethatmakesupparagraph38includeswhichofthefollowingtypesoftransition?

time

addition

changeofdirection

conclusion

AbouttheIntroductionandConclusion

9.Johnsonbeginswithasituationthatistheoppositeoftheonethatwillbedeveloped.

Rewriteparagraph1usinganothermethodforintroducingessaysexplainedin

Chapter4:abroadstatementthatgetsnarrowed,aquestion,orabriefstory.

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10.“Lou’sPlace”endswithacommentbyLouthatcharacterizesthemoodofhisshop.RewritethisconclusionbyusinganothermethodforconcludingessaysasexplainedinChapter4,summarizingthedescriptionoftheshoporpredictingsomethingaboutthefutureoftheshoporitsowner.

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