读后续写高效创作点拨之生动描写(1)讲义-高三英语写作专项

读后续写高效创作点拨生动描写(1)动作描写与神态描写一样，动作描写也是较为直白地展现人物内心的一种描写方式。细致地描写人物在相关语境中的动作反应，可以显示出人物的内心活动，表现出人物的性格特征，还可以推动情节的发展。在英语写作中，将动作描写与神态描写相结合，能够更加生动地刻画人物的内心世界。在语篇中加入一系列的动作描写，能更加细致地反映出人物的心理情绪变化。例1:She

got

up

ina

rage

and

stormed

out.她愤怒地站起来，气冲冲地走了。解析:本句用“got

up

in

a

rage”、“stormed

out”这两个动作展现主人公的愤怒。“storm”形容动作的迅速，恰当地表现出冲动的情绪，从而突显主人公的气愤。例2:Isank

down

into

a

chair,

completely

shattered.我瘫坐在椅子上，心态彻底崩溃了。解析:“sank

down

into

a

chair”形象生动地描写出“我”心灵遭受创伤的状态。例3:Inher

first

fit

of

terror,

she

raised

herself

from

the

sofa;

in

the

next,stronger

very

likely

thanthe

other,shefelldownagain

on

the

cushions.第一阵恐惧袭来时，她从沙发上站了起来,但接下来恐惧感似乎比之前更强烈了，她又跌坐在靠垫上。

解析:一开始站起来(raised

herself

from

the

sofa)，之后再次跌倒(fell

downagain

on

the

cushions)，通过动作的对比，形象生动地表现出主人公的恐惧。

动作描写高级表达:

1.

She

straightened

her

tired

back.她挺直疲惫的腰。

2.

Colin

stared

at

Mary

crossly.柯林生气地瞪着玛丽。

3.

She

sobbed,

hiding

her

face

in

her

hands.她掩面而泣。

4.

She

often

turned

aside

to

wipe

away

a

tear.她常常扭过头去擦眼泪。

5.

Istopped

where

I

was,

trembling

with

shock.我停在原地，吓得发抖。

6.

He

threw

a

look

of

triumph

at

Summerlee.他向萨莫里投去胜利的一瞥。

7.

They

were

casting

scared

glances

up

at

the

plateau.他们惊恐地抬头望着高原。

8.Iscreamed

with

shock

and

struggled

to

getfree.我惊恐地尖叫着，竭力想要挣脱。9.In

fury,

I

hit

out

and

slapped

Heep’s

cheek.盛怒之下，我一拳打在希普的脸上。

10.

Scarlet

gave

her

a

shove

and

loosened

hergrip.斯嘉丽推了她一下，松开了她的手。

11.

I

was

speechless

with

horror

and

unable

to

move.我吓得说不出话来，动弹不得。

12.

The

dreadful

man

leaped

outof

his

chair

with

a

roar.那可怕的人咆哮着从椅子上跳了起来。

13.

Throwing

the

overcoat

across

her

arm,

she

crossed

the

hall

quietly.她把外套搭在胳膊上，悄悄地穿过大厅。

14.

Iheld

my

arms

over

my

face,

dizzy

with

pain

and

shock.我用手臂挡住脸，痛苦和震惊使我晕眩。

15.

She

did

not

cry

out

but

bite

her

lip

and

went

even

whiter.她没有哭出声来，但咬紧嘴唇，脸色更加惨白了。

16.

Cathy

lost

her

temperatthese

words

and

stamped

her

foot.凯西听了这些话就开始跺着脚发脾气。

17.Iknelt

down

to

look.“It’s

askull!”Icried,

shuddering.我跪下来查看。“它是一个头骨!”我惊叫一声，打了个寒颤。18.

“Aaargh!”

I

gave

a

terrified

shriek.

I

almost

fell

out

ofthe

tree.

“啊啊啊!”我发出一阵惊恐的尖叫，差点从树上掉下来。

19.

A

boy

with

a

cheery

face

bounded

into

the

room,

laughing.一个兴高采烈的男孩笑着蹦蹦跳跳地进了房间。

20.

She

strode

up

to

the

screaming

boyandstampedher

foot.她大步走到那个尖叫的男孩跟前，跺了跺脚。

21.

Heathcliffthrust

her

away

from

him

and

dashed

from

the

room.希刺克厉夫把她推开，从屋里冲了出去。

22.

He

started

pulling

his

hair

out,

and

beating

his

head

with

his

own

fists.

他开始扯掉自己的头发，用拳头打自己的头。

23.

“My

husband

is

in

Virginia,”

said

Melly

with

a

proud

lift

of

her

head.

“我丈夫在弗吉尼亚。”梅利骄傲地抬起头说。

24.

The

young

girl

blushed

with

delight

and

leaped.年轻姑娘高兴得脸都红了，跳了起来。

25.

There

was

something

in

his

discussion

that

made

me

choke

with

laughter.

在他的讨论中有一些东西让我笑得喘不过气来。

26.

Rushing

towards

the

door,

she

opened

it,

saying,“Here,

Edmond,here

I

am!”

她冲到门口，把门打开，说道：“这儿!爱德蒙，我在这儿呢!”

27.I

yelled,

running

after

the

cartand

choking

back

sobs

of

fury

and

desperation.

我忍住愤怒和绝望的啜泣，一边大喊一边追着马车跑。

28.

“Who

said

that?”

he

roared,

clenching

his

fists

asifready

to

fight

all

the

students

atonce.

“谁说的?”他攥紧拳头吼道，好像马上要和所有的学生打架。

29.

He

galloped

away

in

a

great

fright,

and

after

that

of

course

Ihad

to

explain

everything.

他惊恐万状地跑开了,之后我当然得把一切都解释清楚。

练习:根据提示使用恰当的动作描写补全句子。

1.她哭着轻轻推了她一把。

She

cried

and

gave

her

a________________.

2.她握紧拳头，指甲戳进手掌。

Her

nails

dug

into

her

palms

as

she________________________.

3.她用拳头敲打着他的胸膛，随即又尖叫起来。

She________on

his________with

her

fists

and

________________.

4.她挺直疲惫的脊背，眺望着秋色渐暗的田野。

She________________________________and

looked

over

the

browning

autumn

fields.5.她握着他的手，用他的手绢擦去喜悦的眼泪。She

held

his

hand

and

used

his

handkerchief

to________________her________________________.

6.她一边挥舞着手臂，一边疯了似的向他们奔去。She

waved

her

arm

as

she________________toward

them.

7.她扭过头盯着她的背影，直到她消失在人群中。She________________and________________________until

she

was

lost

in

the

crowd.

8.他们沿着林荫道疾驰而去，挥舞着帽子，朝她叫喊着。They

went

down

the

avenue

at

a

gallop,________________________and________________________.

9.她在匆忙中摔倒在地板上，但她又猛地跳了起来，连疼痛都没有意识到。In

her

hurry

she________________the

floor

but________________so

quickly

thatshe

was

not

evenawareofthe

pain.

10.麦克惊恐万分地跑开了，之后我立即追上去把一切都解释清楚了。Mike________________in

a

great

fright,

and

after

thatIimmediately

caughtupandexplainedeverything.答案：1.slightshove2.clenchedherfists3.beat;chest;screamedagain4.straightenedhertiredback5.wipeaway;tearsofjoy6.gallopedmadly7.turnedaside/around;staredafterher8.wavingtheirhats;yellingtoher9.fellto;leaped/jumpedup10.gallopedaway环境描写环境播写包括社会环境描写和自然环境描写。一般来说，环境描写可以烘托氛围，从而折射出人物的心理状态。这样的写作虽然没有直白地告诉读者人物的心理状态，但是读者可以推测出人物的心理，文章会更加引人入胜。

例1:As

night

fell,

Henry

and

Bill

heard

the

first

cry,

a

horrible

wail,

terrifying

in

the

stillness.夜幕降临,亨利和比尔听到了第一声嚎叫，这可怕的叫声打破了夜晚的寂静。解析:通过对周围环境的描写，如“Asnightfell”、“ahorriblewail,

terrifyinginthestillness”展现了两位主人公此时此刻的境，并暗示了主人公的心情。例2:The

sunbeams

could

not

reach

him;

the

dust

did

not

yet

rise

from

the

road

after

the

heavy

rainofyesterday;and

his

grassy

lair

suited

the

young

man

better

than

a

bed

of

down.没有一丝阳光可以晒到他，昨天大雨过后路上还没有扬起尘土，那翠绿的栖身之地比天鹅绒床更加惬意。

解析:这一段描写了“sunbeams”、“the

road”、“grassy

lair”等周围环境，虽然没有一字提到主人公的心情如何，但读者可以通过这样美好的环境推测出主人公惬意的心情。

环境描写高级表达：

1.Thehousewasoverrunwithivy.房屋上爬满了常春藤。

2.

The

spring

murmured

drowsily

beside

him.泉水在他耳边发出昏昏沉沉的低语。

3.

A

that

moment,

more

shrillwolfish

cries

ripped

the

night

air.那时，更多尖锐的狼嚎声响彻天际。

4.

Here

in

North

Georgia

wasrugged

sectionheldby

ahardy

people.这是北乔治亚州的一个崎岖地区，这里的人民吃苦耐劳。5.Thesunshoneandtheshipskimmedbeforethebreezelikeabird.阳光明媚，船像鸟一样在微风中掠过。

6.

The

branches

waved

dreamily

across

thebluesky

over

his

head.枝条在他头顶的蓝天上如梦一般地飘动着。

7.

The

webs

of

vapour

by

this

time

formed

veils

between

the

trees.这时候，夜雾已在大树之间织成了一张张薄纱。

8.

The

floors

were

covered

with

the

richest

carpets

Turkey

could

produce.地板上铺着土耳其能生产的最昂贵的地毯。

9.

An

immense

landscape

stretched

around

them

on

every

side.一大片风景在他们四周伸展开来，一望无垠。

10.

The

cliffs

were

ringed

with

fallen

rocks

where

the

breakers

crashed

foaming

white.

悬崖四周都是落石，浪花溅起白色的泡沫。

11.

The

sun

blazes

down

upon

fields

so

large

as

to

give

an

unenclosed

character

to

the

landscape.

太阳照耀着广阔的田野，使那片风景更显开阔。

12.

This

fertileand

sheltered

tractof

country

is

bounded

on

the

south

by

the

bold

chalk

ridge.

这是一片远离尘嚣的肥沃原野，一道陡峭的石灰岩山岭在南边形成界线。13.

The

fog

seemed

to

hold

the

moonlight

in

suspension,rendering

it

more

pervasivethanin

clear

air.

那层雾似乎使月光悬浮起来，让它比在晴朗的天气里多了几分氤氲。

14.

The

atmosphere

turned

pale,the

birds

shook

themselvesin

the

hedges,arose

and

twittered.

大气变成一片熹微的晨光，鸟儿在树篱上摇身醒来，叽叽喳喳地叫着。

15.Itis

a

fine

September

evening,

just

before

sunset,

when

yellowlights

struggle

with

blue

shadesin

hair-like

lines.这是九月里一个晴朗的傍晚，太阳就要落山了，黄色的灯光同蓝色的阴影在发丝般的线条中相互映衬。16.

There

appeared

a

little

tuft

of

maples,

with

a

delightful

recessin

the

midst,and

suchafresh

bubblingspring.一小簇茂密的枫树出现在眼前，树丛中间有一个漂亮的四陷，清澈的泉水从中涌出。

17.

There

was

not

a

soul

on

deck,

only

muddy

footprints

and

a

brokenbottlerolling

backwards

andforwardswiththerise

and

fall

of

the

ship.甲板上没有一个人，只有一些泥脚印和一个随着船的起落前后滚动的破瓶子。

18.

The

walls

hung

with

silk

of

the

most

magnificent

designs,while

around

each

chamber

luxurious

sofas

wereplaced,

with

piles

ofsoft

cushions.

墙上挂着最华丽的绸缎，每个房间的四壁都摆有豪华的沙发，上面放着许多柔软的靠垫。

19.

The

time

was

not

long

past

daybreak,

and

the

yellow

luminosity

upon

the

horizon

behind

herbacklightedtheridgetowards

which

her

face

was

set.天刚亮不久，她背后的地平线上出现的黄色光辉，照亮了她面前的那道山。

20.

The

midnight

airs

and-gusts,

moaning

amongstthe

tightly-wrapped

buds

and

bark

ofthe

winter

twigs,wereformulae

of

bitter

reproach.

午夜的冷风和寒气，在冬天树枝上还紧紧包裹着的苞芽和树皮中间鸣咽着，变成了苛责的言语。