读后续写人与动物雀之情学案-高三英语二轮专题

看到这篇读后学写材料想到很多年前俄罗斯作家写的《羽毛留下的思念》：雪，融化了，湿漉漉的。玻璃窗上残留着一片羽毛。鸟羽揉破了。没有光泽而且看上去没有生命的神采，令人痛心。可能是一只小鸟儿夜里用喙啄我的窗户，哀求我给它些温暖，而我这个人听力不济，没有听见，因此没有把它放进屋里来，于是这片洁白的羽毛就贴在了窗玻璃上，像是在责怪我。后来阳光晒干了窗玻璃，小鸟的羽毛不知飘落到哪儿去了。可是它却给我留下了痛苦的思念。也许这只雏鸟儿没有找到栖身之所过冬，没有活到春暖花开的季节。我心中有一种莫名的郁闷和忧伤。无疑的是这片小小的羽毛飞入了我的心扉，黏贴在了我的心上。阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。OnesunnyafternooninJune,mysisterJennyandIwerewalkinghomefromschoolwhenweheardastrangesoundcomingfromanemptybox.Wewalkedovertoitandlookedinside.Asadlittlesparrow

（麻雀）wassittingatthebottomoftheboxanditsrightwingwasbroken.Jennyhelditinherhands,cooing（咕咕地叫）toit,soitwouldn’beafraid.AndthenJennyandItookithome.Mymomtookonelookatthelittlebirdandsaid,“Noway!

I’mnothavinganotheranimalinthehouse.”Butwhenshegotacloserlookatthebigandsadeyes,shechangedhermind.Momsetthesparrowonthekitchentabletogetabetterlookatit,Shesaiditsrightwingwasseriouslybroken,soshedesignedasplint

（夹板）

andcarefullyputitonitswing.Ourdog,Buttons,kepttryingtogetalookatthebird,butwedroveitaway.Oncethesplintwason,wefedthebirdwaterandgaveitbitsofbreadandberries.Atfirstitwouldn’teat,butafterawhile,itwouldn’tstop.ThelittlebirdgotthenamePeep.Wekeptitinacage.Everymorning,weputitscageoutside,soitcouldgetsomefreshair.Peepcouldn’tfly,whichseemedtomakeitsad.Afteraperiodoftime,Peep’swinggotbetter.WeputPeeponthekitchentable,andMomtookoffthesplint.Peepstartedflapping

（拍打）

itswingslikecrazy,andthenextmorningwhenweopenedthecage,itflewaboutfiftyfeetintotheairbeforecomingback.Wewatched

fromthegroundlikeproudparents,Fromthenon,weleftitscageoutsidewiththedooropen,andPeepflewfurthereachmorning,butitalwayscameback.1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Thenonemorning,anothersparrowstoppedonthePeepscage.__________...Afewmonthslater,asparrowlandedonthewindowofmyhome.__________...简要解读：这是人与动物之间生命和谐的一种精神叙事，叙事本身的显性&隐性线索：1发现麻雀（隐性：怜悯、爱护、本能Jennyhelditinherhands,cooing（咕咕地叫）toit,soitwouldn’beafraid）——2带麻雀回家(

隐性：真，善，美.）——3母亲拒绝麻雀（铺垫小波折：“Noway!

I’mnothavinganotheranimalinthehouse.”）——4

母亲接受麻雀（隐性：真，善，美.）——5

全家总动员-----（隐性：细腻，善良，纯朴,）（Momsetthesparrowonthekitchentabletogetabetterlookatit/shedesignedasplint

（夹板）

andcarefullyputitonitswing/wedroveourdog--Buttonsaway/wefedthebirdwaterandgaveitbitsofbreadandberries/ThelittlebirdgotthenamePeep/Everymorning,weputitscageoutside,soitcouldgetsomefreshair.）——6麻雀“不辞而别”（隐性：作为生命个体，它有自己的追求与生活）——7麻雀“回归”（隐性：反向【感恩，善良，纯真，忠实】）。（6&7续写段落）这是一个完美的人类的爱与动物的爱相互印证的闭环结构，将落脚点拉回到人类关怀万物柔软的心灵本身。麻雀与小作者之间的一场双向奔赴，是美好与和谐最有力量的印证，这篇成熟的材料背后的文化负载和中国传统文化中对待生命的态度是交融的。以独特的生命教育，助力学生身心健康的发展。具有导向性价值和育人价值，为培养亲自然情节的人（敬畏生命；立德树人；正确价值观）提供了依托。人类善待动物的理念和实践在我国有着漫长的历史。中国传统文化中动物与人关系论述《论语》中记载说，孔子“钓而不纲，弋不射宿”。知名汉学家理雅各将这句话译作：ThehumanityofKonfucius.Themasterangled,—Butdidnotuseanet.Heshot,—Butnotasbirdsperching.这也就是说，为了满足生活需要，人们也钓鱼打猎，但是孔子不用渔网捕鱼，也不射归巢、歇宿的鸟，因为它们可能正在养育幼鸟。敬畏自然是人们社会活动的前提和基本规则。儒家对自然的认识是有科学性的，它能让人们产生敬畏自然而非盲目征服自然的意识。诗人范仲淹非常喜欢鹤的仪态和声音，写有“八变奇姿已过人”“独爱九皋嘹唳好，声声天地为之清”的称赞诗句。欧阳修喜欢鸟，在《啼鸟》中写道：“鸟言我岂解尔意，绵蛮但爱声可听。”“黄鹂颜色已可爱，舌端哑咤如娇婴。”王安石的《放鱼》说：“捉鱼浅水中，投置最深处。当暑脱煎熬，翛然泳而去。岂无良庖者，可使供七箸。物我皆畏苦，舍之宁啖茹。还有”杜甫的《病马》:

乘尔亦已久，天寒关塞深。尘中老尽力，岁晚病伤心。毛骨岂殊众？驯良犹至今。物微意不浅，感动一沉吟。英译：ToMySickHorseDuFuYouhavebeenriddenlongThroughcold,deepmountainpass.Industyoutoilalong,Sickatyear’send,alas!Isyourcoatnotthesame?Youaretameuptonow.Fardearerthanyourframe.CanInotbemoved?How?注释与解读：我长久地骑着你，冒着天寒，朝着关塞前进。仆仆风尘的你年老体衰，却还在继续为我尽力。岁晚之际，你病了，这不由得让我无比伤心。你的毛骨和其他的马相比，难道有什么不同？却和善驯良地伴随我直到今天。你虽只是微小的生物，情意却不可浅论。我内心无比感动，陷入深深的思索之中。哲学家叔本华很喜欢自己的卷毛狗，曾在一名友人的信上写着：所有哲学家及学者的讨论，都比不上“我和我的只有十七个月的小狗四目相视、无言交流。”参考范文：Thenonemorning,anothersparrowstoppedonthePeep’scage.ThesparrowkeptcooingtoPeepandtouchPeep’sheadwithitsownhead.Atthesametime,Peepalsoseemedexcitedandkeptflappingitswings.WesupposedthatthesparrowmustbePeep’smother.Afterawhile.Peepflewoutofthecage,followingthesparrow,graduallydisappearinginthesky.Ononehand,wewerehappythatitfinallyreunitedwithitsfamily.Ontheotherhand,wefeltsosadbuthadtoacceptitsleaving.Afewmonthslater,asparrowlandedonthewindowofmyhome.JennyandIbothlookedatitamazingly.Withthemarksonitsrightwing,weimmediatelyrecognizedthatitwasPeep.Itstoodtherelookingatusforacoupleofseconds,andIalsobegancooingtoitandtocheditsfeathertoexpressmyhappiness.Thenitflewuptotheskyagain.WelookedupandsawPeepoff,lookingforwardtoitsprobablevisitnexttime.下水作文：Thenonemorning,anothersparrowstoppedonthePeep’scage.A

cheerful

smile

played

over

Peep’s

face.It

ruffled

up

its

feathers

,

hopping

and

cooing,

as

if

showing

its

pain

oflovesickness

.Apparently,thesparrowisPeep’smom.Andthenthearrivaloftheuninvitedguestsmadeustakebettercareofthem.MymomandIwouldgoouttofeedthesparrows.Shetaughtmehowtocallthemwithaclickingsoundshemadewithhertongue.Iwouldobservingandcelebratingtheirdancefromourwindowinmysparetime.Istuffedthemwiththeleftoversonourtableclothaftereverymeal.Theyevengatheredupcourageandslidedintoourbedroomorevenreadingroom.

Weneverhavethefeelingthatweconsiderthemtroublemakers,butlovelyfamilymembers.

However,

one

day

they

dartedaway

without

saying

bye.

We

were

happy

with

its

reunion

with

its

mom

andlooking

forward

to

seeing

her

again.Afewmonthslater,asparrowlandedonthewindowofmyhome.Itsatrighttheretolookinforsomeone’sattention.ThemarksonitsrightwingrevealedthatitwasPeep.

JennyandIrushedoutofthedoortobegreetedandhappilyranbackinsidetothebigbowlofgrainsforher.Itsactionsofeatingwithcooingshowedthatitsappetitehadbeengreatlyexcited!...loveistheactiveconcernforthelifeandthegrowthofthatwhichwelove.Ican’twaititspresencenexttime!文本赏析（1）老舍的《小麻雀》英文赏析：ALittleSparrow

LaoSheAssoonastherainstopped,alittlesparrow,almost

full-fledged（adj.羽毛生齐的）,flewintothecourtyard.Ithopped,fluttered（V.拍打翅膀）,

dartingup（V.跳起来）

totheedgeofflowerpotsandbacktothegroundagain.Watchingitmoveupanddownacoupleoftimes,Irealizeddratitcouldnotflyanyhigherasthe

plumes（n.羽毛）onitsleftwinghadgottwistedwithonestickingoutasifabouttocomeoff.WhenImadeanattempttomovecloser,itjumpedoffahitandstoppedagain,staringbackatmewithitssmall,blackandbean-likeeyesthathadamixedlookofwantingtobefriendswithmeandnotbeingcertainthatIwastrustworthy.Itoccurredtomethatthismustbeatamebird,havingbeencagedsinceitwashatchedperhaps.Nowonderitwasnotmuchscaredofmypresence.Itsleftwingmighthavebeen

impaired(adj.受损的，出毛病的)

bysomekidandthatwaswhytherewasdistrustinitslookthoughitshowedsomeintimacywithman.SuddenlyIwasseizedwithsadness.Howmiserableitwasforabirdtoloseitswings!Withoutsomeonetakingcareofitthissmallthingcouldnotsurvive.Butmanhadinjureditswing.Howcruelhewas!Injuredasitwas,itstillwantedtorelyonman.Howpitiable!ThelookinitseyesshowedthatShelittlecreaturewasoftwominds.Itwassmallandbynomeanspretty,yetitsgesturesandexpressionsrevealedthatithadbeenwrongedandlandedinadifficultsituation.Itwasanxioustokeepitsdelicatelifeoutofdanger,butitdidnotknowwhattodo.Ithadlittleconfidenceinitselfandlesstrustinman,but

itneededsomeonetorelyon.Ithoppedandstopped,lookingatmebuttooshytocomeover.Ithoughtoffetchingsomecookedricetoattractit,butIdarednotleaveitalonetestitshouldbeattackedbythekitten.Asthekittenwasnotaroundatthemoment,Ihurriedtothekitchenandcausebackwithafewgrainsonlytofindthebirdmissing.Irantotheouteryardandsawthekitten

crouching(vi.蹲伏，蜷缩)byaflowerpotinfrontofthescreenwall.

I

hastened(v.j加速)todriveherawaybut,withaquickjump,shecaughtholdofthebird.Thetamesparrow,withitstailandclawsdanglingfromthekitten’smouth,didnotevenknowhowtostruggle.Itlookedmoredeadthanalive.Withmyeyesfixedonthebird,Iwatchedthekittenrunfirsttothekitchenandthentotheramatthewestend.Iwasafraidto

press（紧追）hard

afterher,butIhadtofollowherincasesheshouldtightenherjaws.Thoughthebird'sheadwasnotvisibletotoe,thelookof

anticipated（adj.受期待的）dangerinitseyeswasvividinmywind.Betweenitslookandmysympathystoodthatsmallwhitecat.HavingrunafewroundsafterherIquit,thinkingitwaspointlesstochaseherlikethatbecause,bythetimeIcaughther,thebirdwouldhavebeenhalfdead.Whenthecatslippedbacktothekitchenagain,Ihesitatedforasecondandthenhurriedovertheretoo.Itseemed,inmymind'seye,thelittlebirdwere

pleading（adj.恳求的）

forhelpwithitstwoblackbean-likeeyes.InthekitchenInoticedthecatwascrouchingbyatinpipewhichwasinstalledassmokeductinwinterand

dismantled（拆卸）inspring,atthecorner,butthebirdwasnotwithher.Thepipeleanedagainstthecornerand,betweenitslowerendandthefloor;therewasanopeningthroughwhichthecatwas

probing（V.探查）

withherpaws.Myhoperevived:thebirdwasnotdead.Asthekittenwaslessthanfourmonthsold,ithadnotteamedhowtocatchmice,orhowtokillforthatmatter.Itwasmerelyholdingthebirdinitsmouthandhavingfunwithit.WhileIwasthinkingalongtheselinesthelittlebirdsuddenlyemergedandthekitten,takenaback,boltedbackward.TilewaythelittlebirdlookedwassoregisteredtomeatthefirstglancethatIfeltlikeshuttingmyeyesimmediately.Itwasvirtuallycrouching,withitschestclosetothefloor,likeamansufferingfromastomachache.Therewasnostainofbloodonitsbody,butitseemedtobeshrinking

upintoitself.Itsheaddroppedlow,itssmallbeakpointingtothefloor.Itstwoblackeyes,unseeing,wereveryblackandlarge,lookinglast.Thelittlelifeleftinitwasallintheeyes.Itseemedtobeexpectingthecattochargeagain,withnostrengthtoresistorrun;orwishingthatthecatwouldbekindenoughtopardonitorthatsomesaviourwouldcomealongtoitsrescue.Lifeanddeathcoexistedinitseyes.Ithoughtthebinmustbeconfusedorstunned,orelsewhyshouldithavecomeoutfromthepipe?Stunnedasitwas,itstillcherishedsomehopewhich,thoughhardtodefine,wasthesourceoflife.Withthathopeitgazedatthefloor,expectingeithertosurviveordie.Iwassoreallyscaredthatitbecamecompletelymotionless,leavingitselfalltotheprecarioushope.Itkeptquietandstillasifwaitingforitslifetoflowoutofitseyes.Thekittenmadenomoreattempts

toattackit.Sheonlytriedtotouchitwithherlittlepaws.Asthekittentouchedit,ittiltedfromsidetoside,itsheadundisturbedanditseyeslookingblankatthefloor.Itwouldnotfightbacksolongastherewasachanceofsurvival.Butthebirdhadnotlostallofitscourage;itactedthiswayonlywiththecat.Iwentaverlight-footed,pickedupthecatandputheroutsidethedoor,thesparrowremainingwhereitwas.WhenItookitupinmyhandsandlooked,itwasriotseriouslyinjured,thoughsomefluffhadcomeoffitschest.Itwaslookingatme.Ihadnoideawhattodo.IfIletitgo,itwassuretodie;ifIkeptitwithme,Ididrothaveacageforit.Ihelditinmyhandsasifholdingallthelivesintheworld,notknowingwhattodo.'Mesparrowhuddledup,motionless,itseyesasblackasever,stillexpectant.Itremainedthatwayforalongwhile.Itookittomybedroom,putitonthedeskandwatcheditforafewmoments.SuddenlyittilteditsheadWitandthenrigh