2023学年完整公开课版读后续写2

从具体案例谈读后续写

读后续写:提供一篇350词以内的材料，要求考生依据材料内容、所给段落开头语及所标关键词续写一篇150词左右的短文。（满分25分）新高考考试说明第五档：21-25第四档：16-20第三档：11-15第二档：6-10第一档：1-5评分原则第五档

(21-25)与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。

内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。

力争第5档一、记叙文阅读理解能力二、由读到写的思维能力三、记叙文书面表达能力提高学生的能力一、提高记叙文阅读理解能力1.浅层的信息定位能力:2.深层的文本分析能力：what,when,where,who,why,how1)理清故事的发展线索2)明确文本的中心思想3)分析人物的性格特点二、由读到写的思维能力细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节.三、提高书面表达能力1.语言的丰富性2.语篇的连贯性1.词汇、句式、语法的多样性

2.情感表达的多样性3.动词使用的丰富性1.内容连贯：故事大意一致，写作意图一致2.语句连贯：关联词的正确使用如何写读后续写？AstorywhenwherewhowhathowwhyStep1.ReadforbasicinformationStep2.Readforplotdevelopmentclues (情节发展线索)Tips:1.关注人物的性格、动作的描写2.关注文章的主题中心Step3.

PredictpossibleplotdevelopmentTips:1.阅读每段中的首句，进行布局。布局第一段时，

要兼顾两段的首句：第二段的句首决定着第一

段的走向。2.判断划线的关键词与主题内容的关联程度，确

定要选用的词，以及所在的段落位置(p1&p2)3.一段文章一个中心思想,续写的情节设计要自

然,情节可简单,但是要合理，情节的叙述上不

要有旁支。不要设计太过奇葩或怪诞的情节。4.结局抒发传递正能量Para.1:......................Para.2:..............................Step4.Draftacontinuation(起草续篇)Tips:1.语言在文体和色彩上要和原文保持一致。比如褒贬态度等。2.续写使用语言要简洁、准确且有闪光点。故事的叙述不要用太过复杂的句子,但是用词要精巧。要有“高级”的词汇。3.最后可以用高级的句子点出文章的主旨，升华感情。

Step5.Checkandcopyyourversion

(检查誊写)1.是否遵循文章主旨2.是否有5个以上的划线单词3.是否有语法错误4.是否字数足够thestoryReadforbasicinformationWhocharactersSusan

MarkdriverwhatSusanwas_____.Mark______her.howdidthestorydevelop?whereonthebusblindaccompaniedBasicinformation:1.Who2.thecharacteristicofthemaincharacters3.Howdidthestorydevelop?anoldman;theteacher;thestoreowner

Theoldman:

couldn'treadorwrite/eagertoreadTheteacher:

wearingglasses/

readsomethingwiththem

readnothingwithoutthemTheoldmanunabletoreaddreamedofreadingHefoundtheteacherwearingglassescanread.Howdidthestorydevelop?Hethoughttheglassesweremagical.(神奇的)Hewenttothestore,hopingtobuythiskindofglassesHowdidthestorydevelop?Susan'scharacteristic(性格特点):

frustrated&hopeless

Mark'scharacteristic:

fullofloveandpatience.Theme:Herhusband'sloveismorepowerfulthansight.SusanlostsightMarkdrovehertoworkMarkaccompaniedhertotakethebusSusantookthebus

?Thinkfurther：

Ifyouwereherhusband,wouldyouletSusantakethebusalone?Ifnot,whatwouldyoudo?MarkalsoaccompaniedSusansecretly.TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusan'scheek.Maybethisisthereasonwhythedriverenviedher.Para1Para2IfyouwereSusan,whatwouldyouthinkandwhatwouldyoudo?Thinkfurther：1.LookatthefollowingsentencePara.1“HowtalldoyouthinkIam?”askedtheP.E.teacher.Para.2Alicewasencouraged

whensheheardthat.2.Thinkabouttheconnectionbetweenthetwosentences.总结：Para1.体育老师通过自己的经历鼓励Alice要点：1）老师描述自己的身高2）老师描述自己虽然身高矮但是仍然坚持锻炼，最终取得成功。Para.2

Alice受到鼓舞，努力坚持锻炼。最终获得奖学金，进入梦想大学。实现梦想。

Thinkfurther：1.LookatthefollowingsentencePara.1Aftertheoldmanenteredthestore,thestoreownergreetedhim.Para.2Thestoreowner,thinkingtheoldmandidn'tlikethatpair,pickedanotherpairforhim.2.Thinkabouttheconnectionbetweenthetwosentences.总结：Para1.老人不满意眼镜要点：1）店主给老人推荐眼镜2）老人试戴仍然不认识字不满意Para.2

老人说明对眼镜要求，店主告知无此类眼镜，老人失望离开。画龙点睛句式---主旨升华：爱的力量：1.Thegiftoflovecanbringlightwherethereisdarkness.2.Ifeltangerdisappearingandtheseedoflovebeginningtobloomonceagaininmyheart.品质：3.Everyonewantsanddeservestobetreatedwithrespect,dignigty（尊严）,andwarmth.4.Justasthesayinggoes,honestyisthebestpolicy.Weshouldbearinmindthatbeinghonestiswhatmakesusagoodman.珍惜，抓住机遇：5.Don'tlettimeslipthroughourfingerswithouthavingspentsomequalitytimewiththosewhoreallymattertous.6.Sometimesthesmallestthingscouldmeanthemosttoothers.Complimentthepeopleyouloveandcareabout,beforeitistoolate.7.Thereareplentyofopportunitiesforeveryoneinoursociety.Unlesswearevigilant(机警的)，it'seasytofailtorecognizeanopportunitywhenitisinhandandit'sjustaseasytothrowitaway.Therefore,Itisadvisablethatweshouldvalueandtreatopportunitywithcare.失败----成功：8.Wefirmlybelievethatnooneisboundtobeafailure,andabirdwithabrokenwingonlyneedsmending,andonceithashealed（恢复）,itcanflyhigherthantherest.改变：9.Changeisagoodthingnotjustformebutforeveryone,whichgivesusallanopportunitytotakeachance.10.Lifeislikethis:Giveuponethingandgetanotherchancetoreceiveabetterthing.时间关系:atfirst,inthebeginning,then,finally,atlast,

intheend,immediately,suddenly,soon,

beforelong,when,as,before,after,assoonas空间关系:

ontheright/left,infrontof,atthebackof,

nextto,here,there,

ononeside,ontheotherside并列关系:

both...and...,notonly...butalso...,

either...or...,neither...nor...,aswellas,or插入语:

Ithink,Ibelieve,asfarasIknow,

asweallknow对称关系:

ontheonehand,ontheotherhand;

foronething,foranother;not...but...对比关系:

while,onthecontrary递进关系:

even,what'smore,besides,what'sworse,tomakethingsworse,worsestill转折关系:

but,however,or,otherwise,orelse因果关系:

as,because,since,thanksto,asaresult(of)让步关系:

though,evenif/though,nomatterwh-,whether1.词汇、句式、语法的多样性简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、with的复合结构、虚拟语气的使用情况。常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。句式结构：语法结构：词汇选择：Curious,sheaskedthedriver(形容词做伴随状语),“Whydoyousaythatyouenvyme?”Thedrivermadeapositiveremarkon/thoughthighlyofMarkandsaidclearly,“whatimpressesmemostisthatagentlemaninamilitaryuniformaccompaniesyoutogetonandgetoffthebussecretly(名词性从句).Hemakessureyouhaveenteredyourofficebuildingsafelybeforewalkingaway.YouaresuchaluckyladythatIenvyyou.(结果状语从句)”Hearinghiswords,Susanwasoverwhelminglymoved.（分词做状语）TearsofhappinesspoureddownSusan'scheeks.Shewasfullofhappinesswhenthinkingaboutherhusband'scompany(状语从句省略).Forher,nothingismoredelightfulthanhavingsuchacaringhusband.(高级句式)Whenshereturnedhomefromwork,Susanhuggedherhusband.Tearsfillinghereyes(独立主格),sheexpressedherheartfeltgratitudetohim.Fromthenon,shewouldn'tbeafraidofwalkinginthedarkness.That'sbecauseitisherhusband'slovethatlitherlifeandmadeherfullofconfidence.（表语从句、强调句式）2.情感表达的多样性在读后续写中，我们会经常需要表达我们的情感。1.高兴、开心2.伤心3.愤怒4.感动5.害怕6.担忧7.注意力集中8.宽容9.高度评价10.后悔、遗憾11.表达情感变化的句子3.动词使用的丰富性firmly/excitedly/seriously/jokingly/

sincerely/

impressively/overwhelminglyingreatsurprise/asoftvoicewithcaution/patience/可以用一些高级词汇来修饰动词常用动词搭配：1说得明白深刻saysthclearlyandimpressively2.步态优雅的走walkgracefully3.极为感动beoverwhelminglymoved4.就某事发表评论makearemarkuponsb5.严厉训斥某人givesbasharpscoldingeyeshandsheadstare/glareat/lookherintheeyewithhereyesshining/filledwithtearsHiseyessparkle闪耀withexcitement/gratitude感激.pathimontheshoulder/headgrasp/holdone'shandspointtosb/sthwavehishandsnod/shakehisheadviolently猛烈地Hethoughtforamoment

表达感动：1.Toucheddeeply/immensely极大地,we…2.Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfeltgratitude（独立主格）.3.

Withtearsstreamingdownherface,she...（with复合结构）

4.beoverwhelmingly(巨大地)moved

表达注意力集中1.Withhiseyesgluedtotheballoon,hedidn'tpayattentiontoanything.2.Hewaswalkingonthestreetwhenhewasknockedoverbyapersonandlosthisbalance.表达担忧：Whatifitdoesn'twork?假使...将会怎样Whatifshedoesn'tlikethering?

表达害怕：1.Heturnedtome,withhiseyesfullofhorror.2.Shewasstruckwithhorrorwhen...3.Herfaceturnedpaleandstoodtheretongue-tied（说不出话）.4.Afloodoffearwelledupinhim./Fearfloodedoverhim.5.Herheartbeatsoviolentlythatshefeltnearlysuffocated（窒息）.6.Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.（非谓语结构）表达开心的句子：1.Davidwalkedonthestreet,confidentandpleased.2.Nothingcandelighthimasmuchasseeinghisgirlfriend'ssmile.Nothingismoredelightfulthan......3.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.4.

Iwaswildwithjoy.5.Iwaspleasedbeyonddescription.6.Sheworeashiningsmileonherface.7.Hersmilelitupthewholeroom.8.Sheshed（流出）tearsofjoy.9.Awildgaiety[ˈgeəti]（快乐）

tookholdofher10.Shewasoverflowingwith(fullof)happiness.表达伤心的句子：1.withtearswellingupinhereyes2.withtearsintheireyes3.Istoodtheredumbfounded.目瞪口呆的4.Nothingismorefrustratingthanlosingtheringbeforetheproposal.5.Hewalkedonthestreet,frustratedandexhausted.6.

Afrown（皱眉）nowstoodonhisface.7.

Hearingthenews,

sodesperatewasshethatshe

drowned

sadness

in

wine.8.

Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinherhands.9.

IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.表达愤怒的句子：1.

Iwasseizedbyanger.2.Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhisrage(狂怒).3.Hewasbreathingfireandfury.(愤怒)4.His

voice

trembled

with

anger.5.Heglaredatmewithburningeyes.6.Hegavemealookofburninganger.7.stharouseone'sdispleasure8.sbgetirritatedat.......9.stampone'sfootonanger

愤怒地跺脚表达后悔、遗憾的句子：1.IfIhadbeenaman,IwouldneverhavetoldmyDadIwastoooldforagoodbyekiss.2.IfIhadn'tcovereduphermistakesfromthebeginning,shewouldn'thavegonethatfar.情感变化的句子：1.Allthefrustration挫折andstressthathadbeenbuildingupinsideofmecametoacompletestop.2.Dayswhenyoufeelsmallandinsignificant无关紧要的havegoneaway.3.Withthesunshinningaround,I'mreallyfeelhapinessfromthebottomofmyheart.宽容的情绪：1.宽容的精神aforgivingspirit2.以和蔼可亲的态度withakindlyandgood-humoredspirit表达人物个性品格：1.光明的前途promisingfuture2.对教学过程有着敏锐的洞察力armed/equippedwithakeeninsightintoteachingprocess3.高素质，有经验的老师

highlyqualified,well-experiencedteachingstaff.4.有前途的青年