新教材高中英语Unit6Earthfirst表达作文巧升格学案外研版

Unit6Earthfirst劝说信本单元写作任务是写劝说信。劝说信要求对有关问题进行分析并针对这些问题劝说某人采纳自己的建议或看法。[基本框架]1．开头：说明写信目的；2．主体：分析问题并阐述理由；3．结尾：提出自己的建议或劝告。[常用词块]1．giverisetothetrafficproblems引起交通问题2．liveuptoparents'expectations不辜负父母的期望3．passourloveandfriendshiptoothers把我们的友谊和爱传递给别人4．takesomemeasurestoprotectrareanimals采取措施保护稀有动物5．usepublictransportasmuchaspossible尽可能多使用公共交通6．makeacontributiontoprotectingtheenvironment为保护环境做贡献[常用语句]精彩开头1．Iamwritingthislettertoraiseyourawarenessofairpollution.我写信旨在提高你们对空气污染的意识。2．Iamwritingtopersuadeyouto...我写信想说服你……3．Iwilltrymybesttomakesomeconstructivesuggestions.我会尽力提出一些建设性的建议。丰满主体1．Thefollowingaremysuggestions./Mysuggestionsareasfollows.我的建议如下。2．Inmyopinion/Personally/AsfarasI'mconcerned，itwouldbewisetotakethefollowingactions.在我看来，采取如下行动是明智的。3．Bytheway，youmaytakeBusNo.322anditwilltakeyoudirectlytotheclub.顺便说一下，你可以乘坐322路公交车，它会直接把你带到俱乐部。余味结尾1．Ihopethesesuggestionswillbeofusetoyou.我希望这些建议会对你有用。2．Ihopethatmysuggestionsarehelpfultoyouanyway.无论如何，我希望这些建议能对你有所帮助。3．Ifyouhaveanyquestionsorrequirements，pleasedonothesitatetotellme.如果你还有任何问题或要求，请及时告诉我。假定你是李华，你的朋友Mary因为缺乏运动而生病。请给她写一封信，劝说她康复以后多参加体育活动，每天至少锻炼一个小时，以增强身体素质。注意：1．词数80左右，开头和结尾部分已写好，不计入总词数；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。DearMary，____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours，LiHua[学生习作]DearMary，Iamsorrytohearthatyouhavebeenillfordaysandhopeyouhavegotbetternow.Youhavestudiedtoohard，andyouhavenotimeforexercise.Ifeelyoutakemoreexercisewillbegoodforyourhealth，soyoushouldtakemoreexerciseinthefuture.Exercisewillimproveourbodyhealth.Whenwehaveagoodbody，wecankeeponstudyingalongtimeanddon'tfeeltired.Exerciseisusefultoourbodyandstudy.Ihopeyoutotakeexerciseatleastonehoureveryday.Iwillbeveryhappytoseeyouverystrong.Yours，LiHua名师点评：1．习作中出现了一些错误，例如第一段最后一句Ifeel后面的youtakemoreexercise应作主语，可在其前加that或改为动名词复合结构。2．习作中出现了汉语式表达，例如ourbodyhealth，haveagoodbody，Ihopeyoutotakeexercise。3．尽可能多使用句型使表达更地道，例如第一段第二句可用so...that...句式，第三句可用it作形式主语，第二段第二句可用倒装句。[升格作文]DearMary，Iamsorrytohearthatyouhavebeenillfordaysandhopeyouhavegotbetternow.Youhavestudiedsohardthatyouhavehadnotimeforexercise.Ifeelitwouldbemorebeneficialtoyourhealthifyoucouldtakemoreexerciseinthefuture.Exercisecanimproveyourphysicalhealthandrefreshyourmind.Onlywhenyouhaveastrongbodycanyoukeeponstudyingwithoutfeelingexhausted.Exerciseisasusefulandimportantasyourstudy.Ihopeyoucantakeatleastonehour'sexerciseeverydayafteryourecover.Iwouldbemorethanhappytoseeyouhaveastrongerbody.Yours，LiHua假如你是李华，你的美国笔友Tom在考试中没有及格，但是他的妈妈对他寄予厚望，为了不让妈妈失望，他不得不撒了谎。请你给Tom写一封信，给他提出一些建议，解决这个问题。内容要点如下：1．表示安慰；2．提出建议：坦诚相告，积极沟通；努力学习，用实际行动证明自己。注意：1．词数80左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。DearTom，Ihavelearnedthatyouliedtoyourmotherbec_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours，LiHua【参考范文】DearTom，Ihavelearnedthatyouliedtoyourmotherbecauseyoufailedintheexam.Iknowyoudon'twanttodisappointyourmother.Butlyingcan'tsolvetheproblem.Mysuggestionsareasfollows.Firstofall，you'dbette，youshouldfo