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读后续写Afour-leggedguardianangel讲义试题呈现：AFour-leggedGuardianAngelSnowhadjustmeltedoffthegroundthatAprildayatourhouseinReginaBeach,Saskatchewan.Ihadjustcleanedupthepoolinpreparationforsellingthehouse.Theyearbefore,Ihadlostmyjobwiththeprovincialgovernment,andnowourfinancialsituationwasgrim.Indespair,Ihadfinallyputthehomeonthemarket,andarealestateagentwasduetoshowuplaterthatday.Evenworse,IwouldhavetogiveupmybelovedGreatDane(大丹犬),Brigitte,becauseIcouldnolongeraffordthecostoffeedingit.ThethoughtoflosingthedogandourbeautifulhomewasalmostmorethanIcouldbear.Deepindespair,Isattypingupresumesandcoverletters.OutofthecornerofmyeyeIcouldseemythirteen-month-oldson,Forrest,ashelayonthecarpet,playingnearourbig,gentlenanny-dog,Brigitte.ItseemedasifBrigittewasalwaysmeanttobeinthisfamilyandsheturnedouttobeaperfectcompanion.BrigittecametoourhouseonChristmasevewhenthedoorbellrangandIwassuresomeofmyChristmaspackageshadarrived.Irantothedoorandswungitopen,butnoonewasthere.Isensedsomethingandlookeddown,onlytofindabeautifulGreatDanesittingthere,lookingupatmewithbig,intelligenteyes.Therewasnowaythatshecouldhaverungthedoorbellbyherself,wasthere?Perhaps,someonehadfoundthepuppysomewhereandleftherthere,andthenrangthedoorbellandranaway.TheyaccuratelyguessedIwouldwelcomeanadditionalfamilymemberandtakecareofher.Thinkingofthese,Icouldn’thelpheavingasighandwentstraightbacktowork.However,Ihadn’ttypedmorethantwosentenceswhenBrigittebeganbarkingfuriouslyandrunningbackandforthtotheslidingglassdooroverlookingourpool.Iracedtoseewhatwashappeningandnoticedthattheslidingdoorwasslightlyopen.Suddenly,IrealizedForrestwasnowheretobeseen.Inpanic,Iopenedthedoorandranoutside.注意：1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.语言积累：打扫，清扫cleanup,tidyup为了做准备inpreparationfor...绝望地（deep)indespair出现，露面showup,turnup更糟糕的是Whatwasworse求职信coverletters从我眼睛的余光看出去outofthecornerofmyeye注定做/是bemeanttobe/do不可能+句子Thereisnowaythat...情不自禁地叹气can’thelpheavingasigh来回跑动runbackandforth,runupanddown无处可找/见benowheretobefound/seen惊恐地inpanic出院bereleasedfromhospital(拓展)住院beadmittedintohospital句式：1.Isensedsomethingandlookeddown,onlytofindabeautifulGreatDanesittingthere,lookingupatmewithbig,intelligenteyes....,onlytodo...出乎意料的结果2.Therewasnowaythatshecouldhaverungthedoorbellbyherself.Therewasnowaythat...相当于Itwasimpossiblethat...文本点题句：Brigittewasalwaysmeanttobeinthisfamilyandsheturnedouttobeaperfectcompanion.对于Brigitte的定位：1.amemberofmyfamily2.aperfectcompanion3.aguardianangel写的部分可以呼应的点：1.intelligenteyes--第一段写狗如何救我的孩子，体现intelligent一词；2.IwouldhavetogiveupmybelovedGreatDane(大丹犬),Brigitte,becauseIcouldnolongeraffordthecostoffeedingit.--狗救了我孩子，我感恩-不舍得抛弃-留下来；3.hadjustcleanedupthepoolinpreparationforsellingthehouse.Theyearbefore,Ihadlostmyjobwiththeprovincialgovernment--我暂时卖掉了房子，但是狗的守护和陪伴让我对生活重拾信心；4.SnowhadjustmeltedoffthegroundthatAprilday-雪的融化有象征含义，可以引申到我的生活中的种种suffering因为有了这次事件和我心态的变化，也会melt。下水作文115+132ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.Wonderingwhatwashappening,Iimmediatelydartedinthedirectionofthepool.Therefloatinginthepoolwasmy13-month-oldForrest,whowasdesperatelystruggling.AndBrigitte,likeaprofessionallifesaver,wasmakingeveryefforttokeepForrestoutofwaterwhilepullinghimclosetothebankwitheveryounceofhisstrength.Atthesight,Iwastednotimejumpingintothepool,holdingupmyboyandcarryinghimoutofwaterandintothehouse.Tomakesurethathewasallright,Irushedhimtohospital,withBrigitteforcompanyallthetime.(Anxiously,wewaitedfortheresults,prayingthatmyboywouldbesafeandsound.)Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Hearingthecomfortingnews,IscoopedupForrestupandheldhimcloselytomychest,tearswellingupinmyeyes.Brigitte,seeminglywellawareofthewholesituation,wagginghertailmerrilyaroundus,asifcelebratingForrest'ssurvival.OncewewerebackhomeandIsettledhimdownonthemat,BrigitteevenlaybyForrest’sside,watchingoverhimfromtimetotime.Seeingthis,IonceagainrealizedthatBrigittewasmeanttobeinmyfamilyandwasaguardianangel.(WewerereallygratefulforhavingBrigittewithus.)Hereandnowanewdecisionwasmade-IwillneverabandonmybelovedGreatDane,butmakeherourlastingcompanion.Asformylife,Ibecameconfidentagain,confidentthatIwouldsoonhaveanewjobandadreamhouseagain.参考范文102+102ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,diveintothepool.Thentomyhorror,IcaughtsightofForrest’syellowsleeper.Brigittewasbravelydoingherbesttokeephimafloatbyholdingontohissleeperwithhermouth.Atthesametime,shewasdesperatelytryingtoswimtotheshallowend.OnlythendidIrealizethatForresthadsomehowopenedthedoor,wanderedoutandfallenintothepool.Inasplitsecond,Idovein,liftedmypreciousbabyoutandcarriedhiminside.Handsshaking,Icalled911andwewererushedtothehospitalimmediately,wherethedoctorkepthimforobservationforonenight.Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Backhome,onceBrigittesawhim,shebarkedwithapparentjoyandwouldn’tletForrestoutofhersight.Intimeshesettleddown,butremaineddedicatedtoForrestandfollowedhimeverywhere,concernedabouthissafety.EvenwhenForrestwasasleep,Brigittecrammedherselfunderthecrib,keepingavigil.Ourdogwasindeedanangel,erasinganydespairImighthavehadaboutlosingourhome.Ahousecouldalwaysbereplaced,butknowingwehadeachotheraroundwasthegreatestblessingofall.Iwasgratefulshewaspartofourlives,whoIwouldnevergiveup.考场优秀作文(22.5):错误有修正评价：情节比较拖沓，可以删除一些不必要的情节；语言错误较多，包括分词用法，独立主格结构的运用；个人评分第四档偏下。ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwaterdiveintothepool.Shehadnevertoughedthewaterbefore.Butthistimethingswasdifferent.AsIstoodthere,waitinglikeantsonthehotpot,IcouldseeBrigitte,whoswamforthefirst,searchingaroundthepoolatafullspeed,upanddown,withunclear,frustratingsoundofbarkingescapingfromhermouth.Mymindwentemptywhilemyheartwasbeatinglikedrums.FollowingthesightofBrigitte,Itriedtocatchthesightofmythirteen-mouth-oldlittlesonandallofasudden,Brigitteflashedtowardablackdotunderthewater--shecarriedmysononherbackandcamebacktotheground,settingmyheartatrest.Lettingoutasighofrelief,Inervouslycheckedhisbreathandcalledtheambulance.WithBrigittewaitinganxiouslyontheside,soonthedoctorarrivedandtookForresttothehospital.Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Seemingtounderstoodourwords,Brigittejumpedhighintotheair,wagginghistail,excitedandhappy.AsIdrovethemhome,ForresthuggedBrigittetightly,strokeditsfurandmurmured,“Wearefamily.”Obviouslymysonhadn'tknownthatweweregoingtogiveupthedog.Hearingthat,Ifeltastrongsenseoffrustrationandsorrowagainwelledupinmymind.Backhome,Ihadnoefforttoworkandwaslyingonmychair.Asifhavingreadmyfeeling,mybeloveddogmovedclosertotome,putherheadsoftlyagainstmylegsandsatdown.Bathedinthegolden,warmsunshine,Suddenlydeterminationcaughtme,asthosepastmemoryofhappinessflashedinmymind.“Weshouldnevergetseparated.Wearefamily.Night!”Isaidwiththesettingsunwitnessedmypromise.考场优秀作文(21.5):错误有修正ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwaterdiveintothepool.AterriblescarecreptuponmethemomentIrecognizedthelittleonewhowasstrugglinginthefreezingcoldwater-Forrest!Instinctively,Itookoffmycoat,readytodiveintothepoolthoughImyselfwasterrifiedofwateraswell.However,Brigittehadalreadycaughthimandpulledhimtotheedgeofthepoolgentlybutquickly.Mingledwithastonishmentanddesperateworry,IkneltdownandstretchedmyarmsasfarasIcouldtogetForrest,whosecryingnearlytoremyheartup.Wrappedinmycoat,Forrestwasimmediatelysenttohospital,whileBrigitteaccompaniedus.Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Inrelief,myheartsuspendedintheairultimatelyheavedasigh.Failingtofightbackmytears,Icrieduncontrollably.Itwasthenwhenafurrystuffapproachedmeandspreadasenseofwarmth.Wipingoffmytears,IfoundBrigittewassittingbymeallthetime.Herfurhadalreadyturneddryandbeautifulasusual.Lookingatherroundandstunningeyes,Ifeltguiltwelledupinmymind.HowcouldIgiveupsuchafaithfulfriend!Hugginghertightly,Imadearesolution:InsteadofgivingupourbelovedhouseandGreatDane,Iwouldapplytofindajobandstartanewlife.Lookingatmysonwhowassleepingsoundly,IbelievedthateveryobstacleinmywaywouldmeltoffwiththeAprilsnow.考场优秀作文(23):错误有修正ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwaterdiveintothepool.Strugglinginwater,Brigittetriedtoswimtothecentreofthepool,whereIwasstartledtofindmypoorForrestwassinkingwithoutconsciousness.Overwhelmedwithpanic,Iwasfrozenonmyfeet,notabletomoveaninch.Atthatmoment,IsawBrigittewasswinginghislegsandtail,breathinginbuffingandpuffingonthesurfacenowandthen.AsBrigittewasgettingcloser,Icomposedmyselfandjumpedintothepool.ThecoldwatersentachilldownmyspineasInervouslykeptmybalanceandfoundBrigitteswimmingtowardsmewithForrest’ssleeveinhismouth.Afterdraggingbothofthemtotheshore,IimmediatelycheckedForrestandconductedfirstaidbeforetheambulancecame.Werushedhimtohospitalformedicaltreat.Finally,thedoctorsaidForrestwasallrightandcouldbereleasedfromhospital.Forresthadrecoveredalotwhenwethreeleftthehospital.Thehorribleexperienceflashedinmymind,whichmademefeltblessedthateveryonewassafeandsoundnow.Asthemosthelpfulanddeservingguardianangleinthisaccident,BrigittewaggedhistailforpettingaroundForrest.AstrongwillingnesstokeepBrigittewithuswelledupinsidemewhenIsawthislovelyscene.Brigittewastrulyafamilymemberforme,whowasalwaysloyalandtrust-worthywhateverhappened,andbroughtlotsoffuninthegloomydayscoveredindarkness.Itdawnedonmethatlovewassocherishedbetweenhumanandanimals.原文本学习：ChickensoupfortheCanadiansoulByKarinBjerke-LisleIfyoutalktotheanimalstheywilltalkwithyouandyouwillknoweachother.Ifyoudonottalktothemyouwillnotknowthem,andwhatyoudonotknow,youwillfear.Whatonefears,onedestroys.-ChiefDanGeorgeSnowhadjustmeltedoffthegroundthatAprildayatourhouseinReginaBeach,Saskatchewan.Myhusband,Doug,hadjustcleanedupthepoolinpreparationforsellingourhouse.Theyearbefore,Doughadlosthisjobwiththeprovincialgovernment,andnowourfinancialsituationwasgrim.Indespair,wehadfinallyputourhomeonthemarket,andarealestateagentwasduetoshowuplaterthatday.Evenworse,wewouldhavetogiveupourtwobelovedGreatDanes,BambiandBrigitte,becausewecouldnolongeraffordthecostoffeedingthem.ThethoughtoflosingourdogsandourbeautifulhomewasalmostmorethanIcouldbear.Deepindespair,IsattypingupresumesandcoverlettersforDoug.OutofthecornerofmyeyeIcouldseeourthirteen-month-oldson,Forrest,ashelayonthecarpet,playingnearourbig,gentlenanny-dog,Brigitte.Ihadn’ttypedmorethantwosentenceswhenourotherdog,Bambi,beganbarkingfuriouslyandrunningbackandforthtotheslidingglassdooroverlookingourpool.Iracedtoseewhatwashappeningandnoticedthattheslidingdoorwasslightlyopen.Suddenly,IrealizedForrestwasnowheretobeseen.Inapanic,Iopenedthedoorandranoutside.ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,splashingaroundinthepool.Thentomyhorror,myeyescaughtsightofForrest’syellowsleeper.Brigittewasbravelydoingherbesttokeephimafloatbyholdingontohissleeperwithhermouth.Atthesametime,shewasdesperatelytryingtoswimtotheshallowend.IrealizedthatForresthadsomehowopenedthedoor,wanderedoutandfallenintothepool.Inasplitsecond,Idovein,liftedmypreciousbabyoutandcarriedhiminside.ButwhenIrealizedForrestwasn’tbreathing,Ibegantogointoshock.IwastrainedinCPR,butmymindwentcompletelyblank.WhenIcalled911,allIcoulddowasscream.Ontheotherend,aparamedictriedtocalmmedownsothatIcouldfollowhisCPRinstructions,butinmyhysteriaIwasunabletocarryitoutsuccessfully.Thankfully,Doug,whowasaformerCanadianForcesofficerandwastrainedinCPR,arrivedandtookover.Istoodbywithmyheartinmythroat,andafteraboutthreeminutes,Forrestbegantobreatheagain.Whentheambulancearrived,IrodewithForresttothehospital.Alongthewayhestoppedbreathingacoupleoftimes,buteachtimetheparamedicsmanagedtorevivehim.Onceatthehospital,itwasn’tlongbeforeadoctortoldusthatForrestwouldbeallright.DougandIwereoverwhelmedwithgratitude.Theykepthimforobservationforatotaloffourdays,andIstayedbyhissidethewholetime.WhileForrestwasinthehospital,Dougwasoftenathome.WhenhewentintoForrest’sbedroom,hediscoveredthatbothBrigitteandBambihadcrammedthemselvesunderthecri