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高分作文标志1：高考100词左右；四级120-150字；六级150—180字；2、是否长短句交叉；3、用词是否恰当，准确，形象，尽可能使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球闪光词；4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；1/17写好一篇作文注意事项1.适当用被动代替主动，这么能更客观反应事实,句子开头不要总是用we/I(比如写结尾时不用weshouldpayattentionto而用Attentionshouldbepaidto.)举个经典结尾：Itis,therefore,hightimethatsomeapplicableapproacheswereimplementedbytheserviceindustrylikethat.Thus，itscompetitiveedgewillbesharpenedeffectively.2/172.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，普通放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。

如however/therefore/forexample/Ibelieve做插入语放在中间，普通放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。比如说：Otherindividuals,however,taketheattitudethat…3/173.一定要学会换词，换形象，详细代替太宽泛。(考试中普通不要出现good,bad,many,thing,think,people,opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper,approaches代替ways,implement代替carryout,sharpenone’scompetitiveedge代替enhanceone’scompetitiveness(提升某物竞争力)4/17ComputerandIBySimmyIneverforgettheexceedinglythrillingdaywhenmymotherboughtmeacomputerasbirthdaypresent,whichexertedatremendousfascinationonmesothatiindulgedmyselfingooglinganarmyofusefulinformationihadexpected,andenjoyaseaofmelodiousclassicmusic.ThatnightIwassleepless,feelingthatthewholeworldbelongedtome.

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alotof5/17Thedawnofthenewcenturywitnessedtheincreasingpopularityofcomputers.Coincidentwiththeadvancementofscienceandtechnology,computerspouringintothecurrentsocietyasafashionareappealingtogrowingindividuals.Itisnoexaggerationtosaywehavebeensubmergedbythem,inlargemeasure!moreandmorepopular“与…一致With…development

(floodinto/swarminto)替换enterintonowsb.beinterestedinsth.moreandmorepeople6/17Thedawnofthenewcenturywitnessed精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；Itisnoexaggerationtosay经典句型说某事是毫不夸大7/17Forastart,wecan,freely,searchdesiredinformationatanymoment.Littlebylittle,ourknowledgewillbewellenriched,andourhorizonswillbegreatlybroadened.Additionally,wecangethugerecreationsonlinebychatting,playinggames,ordeliveringemail.Forastart替换Tobeginwith

Wecan,freely,search用了插入语写作手法

ourknowledgewillbewellenriched,andourhorizonswillbegreatlybroadened.用了非常精彩被动

Additionally替换Inaddition/Besides

Deliver替换send8/17Thereisnodenyingthat,however,computerscanfunctioninthedisserviceofhumanbeings,inaway,especiallythegrowingviolence,***,pornpictures,AV-filmsemergingonthescreen,whichleadsquietafewnetcitizenstocopying.这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先Thereisnodenyingthat这个句型，还有however作为插入语functioninthedisserviceof替换doharmtoEmerging代替appearing(fading代替disappearing)Netcitizen网民，属于精彩用词9/17Asaclassicproverbgoes,nogardenhasnoweeds.Computersdoplayapositiveroleinthedevelopmentofpeople'lives,despiteasliceofunfavorableimpacts.Weshould,therefore,takeadvantageofthefruitsandavoidtheoppositefacet.

Weshould,therefore,takeadvantageof…使用插入语Fruits(而且fruits用非常形象，merits/virtues)替换advantage(defects替换disadvantage)

Everycoinhastwosidesimportant/good等apartofbadeffects/influencesaspect10/17各位同学，上面作文里有这么多精彩闪光点，作文怎么会不得高分呢！1.individuals,characters,folks代(people,persons)2:positive,favorable,rosy(美好)，promising(有希望)，perfect,pleasurable,excellent,outstanding代替good3:dreadful,unfavorable,poor,adverse(有害)代替bad假如bad做表语，能够有belessimpressive代替eg.Anarmyofcollegestudentsindulgethemselvesinplayinggames,enjoyingromancewithgirls/boysorkillingtimepassivelyintheirdorms.Whenitapproachestograduation,asaresult,theyfindtheiracademicrecordsarelessimpressive.

11/174.(anarmyof,anoceanof,aseaof,amultitudeof,many,ifnotmost)代替many.注：用many,ifnotmost一定要小心，many后一定要有词。

Eg.Manyindividuals,ifnotmost,harbortheideathat….同理用most,ifnotall,代替most.5:asliceof,quietafew,several代替some6:harbortheideathat,taketheattitudethat,holdtheviewthat,itiswidelysharedthat,itisuniversallyacknowledgedthat)替think(因为是书面语，所以要加that)Asknotwhatyourcountrycandoforyou;askwhatyoucandoforyourcountry.12/177:affair,business,matter代替thing8:shared代common9.reaphugefruits代替getmuchbenefit)10:formypart,frommyownperspective代替inmyopinion11:Increasing(ly),growing代替moreandmore(注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副词用increasingly.Eg.sthhasgainedgrowingpopularity.Sthisincreasinglypopularwiththeadvancementofsth.

13/1712.littleifanything,或littleornothing代替hardly13..beneficialrewarding代替helpfulbebeneficialof14.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser,代替customer15.exceedingly,extremely代替very

16.hardlyunnecessary,hardlyinevitable...代替necessary,evitable

17.sthappealstosb,sthexertsatremendousfascinationonsb代替sbtakeinterestin18.captureone'sattention代替attractone'sattention.19.facet,demension,sphere代aspect14/1720.beindicativeof,besuggestiveof,befearfulof代indicate,suggest,fear21.giveriseto,leadto,resultin,trigger代替cause.22.Thereareseveralreasonsbehindsth代替..reasonsforsth23.desire代替want.

24.pourattentionto代替payattentionto25.bearinmi