读后续写助人类+Jordan找回丢失的小狗+讲义 高三英语一轮复习

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。“Tiki!”Iyelleddesperately.Ourdog,Tiki,hadslippedoutthedoorearlierthatevening.NowIwassearchingtheneighborhoodtryingtofindhim.Myseven-year-oldson,

Jordan,wasfollowingbehind.Iwas

worried

aboutJordan.Hehadlostsomuchalready.Thelastfewmonthshadbeendifficult.Aftergettingdivorced,Icouldnolongeraffordourhousein

Indianapolis.JordanandImovedinwithmyparentsinnorthernIndiana.Jordanmissedhisfriendsandhisoldschool.

Losinghischildhooddogwasthelastthingheneeded.WecalledoutTilki’snameuntilitwascompletelydark.Wewereforcedtoreturnhome,empty-handed.“Mom,it’sallnewhere.WhatifTikican’tfindGrandma’shouse?”askedJordan.“It’sokay,”Isaid.“He’swearinghiscollaranddog

tag

(标牌).”ItwasatthatmomentthatI

realized

Tiki’staglistedouraddressandphonenumberinIndianapolis.Ifsomeonefoundhim,they’dhavenowayto

reachme.Ifeltsicktomystomach.Thenextday,Ikeptaskingaroundtoseeifanyonehad

spotted

him.Butaftertwoweeks,Ibegantolosehope.Oneafternoon,IfoundJordancryinginhisroom.“Atschool,wehadtowriteaboutour

wishes,”hesaid.“Iwrote,‘Iwishmydogwouldcomehome.’Mrs.Rushhungourpapersinthehallway.EverytimeIseemypaper,Ifeelsad.”Myheartbrokeforhim.Solaterthatweek,whenheputonastained

shirt

fromhisoldschoolbackinIndianapolis,Ijustletitslide.Ifithelpedhimgetthroughtheschoolday,thatwasmoreimportantthanlookingput-together.Whenhegothomethatafternoon,hetoldmetheschoolcustodian(管理员)hadaskedhimabouthisshirt.“ItoldhimwejustmovedherefromIndianapolis,”saidJordan.Thenextday,IgotacallfromMrs.Rush.“I’mcallingonbehalfofourschoolcustodian,”shebegan.“Hisgrowndaughterfoundadogafewweeksago,andhethinksitmightbeyours.”注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Mrs.Rushdidn’tknowthedetails,butshepassedonthedaughter’sphonenumber.________________________Paragraph2:“Whatmadeyourdadthinkthedogwasours?”Iaskedcuriously.______________________________________

分析情节本文的主线其实只有一条:找Tiki。我们的写作重点在于“Tiki是如何被找到的'与之伴随的情绪起伏相对而言不是那么突出。这篇续写的情节走向和结局其实相对固定。为什么呢?因为所给文段给的线索实在是太多了，这就有点像侦探解谜，我们只要把这些线索有逻辑地串起来，得到的就是结局指向。那我们来看一下文章中的线索:1.Tiki’stag:Tiki的标签，上面写着我们的老家，即Indianapolis的地址和电话号码。但我们现在搬来跟外公外婆一起住了。2Jordan的作文:“Atschool,wehadtowriteaboutourwishes”hesaid.“wrote.lwishmydogcouldcomehome.'”Mrs.Rushhungourpapersinthehallway。Jordan在自己的作文中写过自己的愿望是让小狗回来，而且作文被老师贴在了走廊上。3.Jordan的衣服:Whenhegothomethatafternoon,hetoldmetheschoolcustodian(管理员)adaskedhimabouthisshirt.toldhimwejustmovedherefromIndianapolis”saidJordan.管理员看到Jordan穿了在老家Indianapolis的衣服，并且问过他相关问题4.人物线索:无非就是管理员，因为只有管理员才能将以上线索串起来。主要线索就是这四个，那我们将以上串起来情节就能推测的差不多了:管理员的女儿捡到了一只小狗，上面挂着Indianapolis的标牌管理员看到过Jordan穿着Indianapolis的衣服并得知他来自Indianapolis，后面再安排他偶然间看到了Jordan的作文，再联系班主任Mrs.Rush打电话来询问小狗是不是Jordan丢的。我们已经把大体情节推测的差不多了，那我们再来确定一下每一段要写什么先来看第一段给出的首句:Mrs.Rushdidn’tnowthedetails,butshepassedonthedaughter’sphonenumberandaddress.再来看第二段给出的首句“Whatmadeyourdadthinkthedogwasours?”Iaskedcuriously.也就是说在第一段里，我们并不需要把如何确认Tiki身份这一推理过程写出来，这一部分要放在第二段写。那第一段写什么呢?按照常理，应该是通过与管理员女儿的交流，我们确认管理员女儿的捡到的小狗就是Tiki。如何确认有两种写法:1.见面确认。这种方法其实比较简单，直接见面就好了，2.电话里确认，这种方法要求描述的要比较详细，在字数上有一定风险。所以笔者在这里就直接安排二者见面了。这样的话，两段的重点我们已经明确:第一段见面确认Tiki身份;第二段阐述推理过程。期间不要忘了加点情绪起伏、心理描写给文章润润色。下水文：Paragraph1:Mrs.Rushdidn’tknowthedetails,butshepassedonthedaughter’sphonenumber.

GazingatthenumberInoteddown,Iwasfilledwithasenseofextremeexcitementand,however,atouchofnervousnesstoo–whatifthe

dog

wasnotTiki?Nevertheless,Idialedthenumberwithmyhandssweatingandmyheartpumpingwildly.Afewsecondslater,aladyansweredthephoneandIexplainedeverything.“Yes,itisawhitedogwithaname‘Tiki’andanaddressin

Indianapolis

onhis

tag.”Theladydescribedthedetails.Listeningtoherwords,Icouldn’thelpbutburstintotearsofjoy–whoelsecoulditbe?SheaddedthatherdadaskedhertotakeagoodcareofTikiuntilthey

reached

me.(116)

Paragraph2:“Whatmadeyourdadthinkthedogwasours?”Iaskedcuriously.

“Yourson’sschool

shirt

andthepaperabouthis

wishes

gavemydadtheclues.”Shepaused,“Hetoldmethedogmustmeanalottoyourboy.”Myheartbroke–Ialmostlostthelasttreasure

Jordan

had!Deeplytouchedbytheirkinddeed,Icouldn’tutteranythingbutrepeatedthanks.Finally,

Jordanand

ItookTikiback.“I’llneve