新高中考试英语读后续写素材与练习-句型点拨与例文讲评建议

读后续写素材与练专题（6）句型点拨与例文讲评建议句子结构1.

"....,"hesaid,

doing

...

--say后接分词作状语1)"Ididn'tknowwhatIwasdoing,"shesaid,

laughing

atthememory.2)"I'llgetussomecoffee,"shesaid,

heading

forthekitchen.3)"That'snice,"Alexsaidquietly,

focusing

onhisplate.4)"Veryclever,"saidtheteacher,

nodding

hisheadasifpleased.5)"Uncle,forgiveme,Ididthat...unintentionally,"hesaid,

pointing

tothebrokenglass.6)"Wedon'tdoanyharm,"saidtheboy,evidently

frightened

bymywords.2.

"...,"hesaid,

as/when/before/asif...

--say后接时间状语从句1)"Watchout!"sheshouted,

as

thecarstartedtomove.2)"Whatabeauty!"saidthenurse

as

shecametothedoor.3.

"....,"hesaid,

and

(thenhe)did....--say后接and,先后动作或构成并列句1)"Goodmorning,children!"saidtheminister;

and

hekindlyshookhandswithboth.2)"Yes,Ithinkso,"hesaidreluctantly(无奈地),

and

leftthestudy.3)"Comehere,"saidthelittleman,

and

tookhertooneofthecornersofthebuilding.4.

"....,"hesaid,

“...”--say后接要说的另一句话1)"TherewasaletterfromPrinceAndrewtoday,"hesaidtoPrincessMary

"Haven'tyoureadit?"2)"Well,well!"saidtheman;

"aretherereallypeopleinthisroom?"3)"Sinceyoulovehimsowell,"saidtheking,

"Iwilltellyousomething.4)"Sheisaveryadmirableandexcellentyoungwoman,"saidshe,

"andyoumustgoandcallonher."5.

...did..,

did,

and

said,“...”--say前有并列关系的先后动作He

paused,

looked

straightintohereyes,

and

said

inaquietvoice,"that'strue."6.

"....,"saidtheman,

who...

--用定语从句补充说明说话的人1)"Idon'tknow,"saidZeb,

who

wasstillconfused.2)"Toyourhealth!"saidMr.White,

who

alsoemptiedhisglass,andwipedhismouthwithhishandkerchief.7.

"....,"hesaid+方式副词(-ly)或短语,

--作状语修饰say1）"Ofcourse,"Nacyreplied

withasmile.2）"I'msorry,"shesaid

withasigh.3）"Buttheydon'tunderstandourtalkatall,"saidthedancer

withapuzzledsmile.4）"Natasha,youloveme?"shesaid

inasofttrustfulwhisper.5）"CometoyourPapaatonce,please!"saidshe

withastrange,excitedlook.6）"IfonlyIhadknown..."shesaid

throughhertears.强调一下，概要写作一般以议论文或说明文为主，提炼中心词，关键句，不忘承上启下的连接词，千万不要加上自己的观点，一般以第三人称概述。读后续写应遵从以下原则，下面以一篇原文为例来说明一下读后续写的6大步骤。1.理解阅读文本，掌握其大意，关注画线关键词2.找出阅读文本中的悬念，并根据悬念发挥想象，续写故事；3.理解所给两个段落首句的隐含意思，注意续写故事的连贯性4.明白读后续写的要求和评分原则。Step1：Skimthepassageandfindoutthebasicinformationofthepassage.重读原文，找记叙文要素之时间、地点和人物Iwasrespondingtoacallfromasmallbrickflatinaquietpartoftown.IassumedIwasbeingsenttopickupsomeparty-goers，orsomeonewhohadjusthadafightwithalover，oraworkerheadingtoanearlyshiftatsomefactoryfortheindustrialpartoftown.WhenIarrivedat2：30a.m.,thebuildingwasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow.Undersuchcircumstances,manydriversjusthonk（按喇叭）onceortwice，waitaminute，thendriveaway.ButIhadseentoomanyweakpeoplewhodependedontaxisastheironlymeansoftransportation.Unlessasituationsmelledofdanger，Ialwayswenttothedoor.Thispassengermightbesomeonewhoneedsmyassistance，Ireasonedtomyself.SoIwalkedtothedoorandknocked.“Justaminute，”answeredafrail(虚弱的)，elderlyvoice.Icouldhearsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.Afteralongpause，thedooropened.Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Shewaswearingaprintdress(印花裙子)andapillboxhat(小圆帽)，likesomebodywhowasgoingtoapartyina1940smovie.Byhersidewasasmallnylonsuitcase.Theapartmentlookedasifnoonehadlivedinitforyears.Allthefurniturewascoveredwithsheets.Therewerenoclocksonthewalls,noequipmentonthecounters.Inthecornerwasacardboardboxfilledwithphotosandglassware(玻璃器皿).“Wouldyoucarrymybagouttothecar？”shesaid.Itookthesuitcasetothecab，thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm，andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.“It'snothing.IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.”Itoldherandaskedwhereshewasheaded.Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice(临终医院),sheasked.“Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?”Para1:"Butitisn’ttheshortestway,”Iremindedher.“No,itisn't.”sheanswered,“Butitwasthelastchanceformeto…Para2:Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,and…WHEN:2:30amWHERER:abrickflatinaquietpartoftownahospice--ahospiceisaspecialhospitalforpeoplewhoaredyingWHO:“I”thedriver,asmallwomanStep2:readthepassageagainandfindthedetails.Abrickflat:“thebuildingwasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow”“Theapartmentlookedasifnoonehadlivedinitforyears.Allthefurniturewascoveredwithsheets.Therewerenoclocksonthewalls,noequipmentonthecounters.Inthecornerwasacardboardboxfilledwithphotosandglassware(玻璃器皿).”Downtown:“‘Butitisn’ttheshortestway,’Iremindedher.‘No,itisn’t.’”“Butitwasthelastchanceformeto…”“I”thedriver:Unlessasituationsmelledofdanger，Ialwayswenttothedoor.Thispassengermightbesomeonewhoneedsmyassistance,Ireasonedtomyself.Itookthesuitcasetothecab，thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm，andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.“It'snothing.IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.”Thesmallwoman:“ButIhadseentoomanyweakpeoplewhodependedontaxisastheironlymeansoftransportation.”“‘Justaminute,’answeredafrail(虚弱的)，elderlyvoice.Icouldhearsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.”“Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Shewaswearingaprintdress(印花裙子)andapillboxhat(小圆帽)，likesomebodywhowasgoingtoapartyina1940smovie.Byhersidewasasmallnylonsuitcase.”“Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.”“Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice(临终医院),sheasked.‘Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?’”StepThree:Readthepassageforthethirdtimeandtrytooutlinethedevelopmentoftheplot:三读原文，续写情节。“Butit(throughdowntown)isn’ttheshortestway,”Iremindedher.“No,itisn’t.”sheanswered,“Butitwasthelastchanceformeto…Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,and…首先要明确的是，从老人家里蒙着床单的家具(coveredbysheets)，司机对她是“身体不好(weakpeople)”的推测,80多岁的高龄(inher80s),虚弱的声音(frailvoice)，和没有被补充完整的“最后的机会”(mylastchance)，要去临终医院(thehospice)的人肯定是老人自己(thesmallwoman)，而不是她的儿子或丈夫甚至父母之类。根据老人哪怕绕远路也要去市中心，以及她的富有年代感的盛装打扮，应当可以推断出老人是想要去故地重游，在生命终结之前，对往昔岁月进行一场隆重的告别。所以第一段的主要内容应围绕着“怀旧”来写，可以描述车窗外市中心的场景，辅以老人的诉说(自言自语)。根据给出的第二段开头“她之前给我的地址”(“theaddressshehadgivenme”)所指为临终医院(thehospice)，第二段的主要内容应围绕到达临终医院后老人和司机的互动展开。为了连接续写的两个段落，第一段结尾最好提一下市中心之旅已经结束，比如“Atlast,shesaidshewastiredandwantedtogotothehospice.”。根据行驶过程中两人都没有说话(“Wedroveinsilence…”)，最好在第一段结尾交代一下原因，比如老人沉浸在回忆中，又想到生命走到尽头，因为悲痛所以没有说话；或者是老人本来会低声自语，但司机提到了让她伤心的往事，于是陷入沉默；再比如老人身体虚弱，所以无力再说话……Stepfour:Inferthethemeandfinishtheendofthewriting:推断主题，完成续写。可以是体现爱。虽然司机和老人是陌生人，但是司机把老人当做自己母亲来对待（有些考生还提到老人也觉得司机像自己的儿子），让老人在人生的最后一程感觉到温暖。文章可以以老人感谢司机结尾（也有同学写到司机经过此事的启发，决定第二天去看望自己的母亲）。可以是对死亡的思索。原文中的老人虽然孤苦，但却在告别人生的仪式中穿上了年轻时穿过的裙子(aprintdress)和礼帽(apillboxhat)，所以可以顺应原文塑造一下老人或是优雅从容或是乐观豁达去赴“死亡之约”(thepartyofdeath)的形象。文章可以以司机为老人感动结尾。StepFive:briefthestudentssomeunreasonablepoints.以孩子为重点。“Itturnedoutthatshewasdiagnosedwithcancerandbecamesingleafterherson’sdeath.”Para1:去看儿子（结婚五年了，没来看过她）Para2:回忆儿子的各种好。点评：不要增加不必要的跟主题无关的故事情节。（比如讲述儿子是怎么死的？---有的交通事故，有的交友不慎，走上犯罪的道路，有的跟妈妈有过节，不来看妈妈等等。）老人死在路上。“…andwhenwearrivedatthehospice,IfoundthatshehadpassedawayasIopenedthedoortoassisther.”点评：（尽量不要安排这样的情节。老妇人是一个很有计划的人---看她的打扮，看她的说话方式，看她打电话叫车，看她家里的家具sheets）结尾过于出乎意料，偏离主题。“Idrovebackhome,openedthesuitcaseandfounditwasfilledwithmoney.（crazyaboutmoney?）StepSix:Briefthestudentssomeexcellentideas.第一段重游市中心的过程中，司机故意开得很慢，为了让老人不留遗憾。第二段老人下车时，要付钱给司机，司机拒绝了。适当呼应前文。·Shesmiledandturnedaround,saying"goodbye"asifshewasgoingtoapartyina1940smovie.·Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,andwithmyassistance,shegotoutofthecar.Shethankedmeagainandmadeanattempttopayme,whichimmediatelymetwithmyrejection.Withaglimpsenotonpurposethough,Isawaphotoinherpurse.Asshemadeherwaytothehospicewithastagger,thedawnappearedandoutlinedhersmallfigure.Bathinginthelightofthemorningsun,sheturnedaroundandwavedmegoodbyewithawarmsmile,sowarmthatitremindedmeofwhatIhadseeninthatphoto:Ayoungcouple，thehusbandinasoldiersuit,andthewifewearingaprintdressandapillboxhat.参考范文Paragraph1:

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