高考英语二模林书豪的成功

DiscussionaboutJeremyLin’ssuccess整理课件内容要点（写作时注意得分点）Para1（左边文字）：成功的原因是勤奋（3’）成功的原因是天赋（3’）成功的原因是教育（3’）成功的原因是运气（3’）

Para2（描述右边的饼状图piechart）：描述饼状图所讲内容（4个数字，用不同句型表达）70%的网民认为他的成就会超过姚明（3’）20%的调查者认为他的成就不会超过姚明（3’）10%认为他的成就是否会超过姚明很难说（3’）Para3（向林书豪学习什么：4’）：除了勤奋、天赋、教育、运气之外的品质都可写，例如：setagoal；determination；confident（confident）sticktoourdreams；facedifficultybravely；nevergiveup；believeinourselves；bepersistent…整理课件

Cooperatewithyourpartner,pointingoutthemistakesinthepaperifpossibleandappreciatingthegoodsentencesatthesametime.整理课件典型普遍错误：

Asisvividlyshowninthesurvey,therearefourreasonsaccountingforJeremyLin’ssuccess.Thefirst

ishishardworking.Thesecondishehasgiftinplayingbasketballandthethirdishiseducation.Thelastoneisheisgoodluck.AccordingtothequestionnairethatJeremyLin’sachievementweatherwillbeyondYaoMing’s,20%ofpeoplesaythatitisimpossible;10%ofnetizenssaythatitisuncertain.However,70percentofthemsaythatLinmustbeyondYaoMing.Inmyopinion,wemustlearnfromLin.Firstly,workinghardisthekeytosuccess.Besides,weshouldreceiveasmucheducationaswecan.Third,bebrave.Onlyinthiswecanwewin.

整理课件1.70%ofthembelievethathewillbesuperiorto/bemoreoutstanding/popularthanYM.2.Goodluckisalsoresponsiblefor/accountsfor/isthekeyto/contributestoLin’ssuccess.3.…playanimportantrolein...../makeadifferencetohissuccess4....matter/count5....owehissuccessto....6....,whileothersholdtheopinionthatitishisgiftforbasketballthatreallymatters/counts.（强调句）7.Thereisnodenying/doubtthat.....8....,whichisthekeytohissuccess.学习好句子:整理课件9....thinkthattalentfurnishestheworkonlywithmaterialsofsuccess,itisworkinghardthatmakeswhatwedosuccessful.（强调句）10.Goodeducationfromhisparentsalsocounts/isofgreatimportance.11.70%peoplethinkthereisnodoubtthathewillmakegreaterachievementsthanYaoMinginthefuture.12.Whenchancesareknockingatourdoor,weshouldcatchthemwithouthesitation.13.Whatthequestionnaireconveystousisthattherearefourreasonsaccountingforhissuccess.整理课件1414.70%ofthembelievethatLinwillabsolutelymakegreaterachievementsthan/performbetterthanYMdid.15.Whenitcomestohissuccess,themajorityofpeoplebelieve

heisverylikelytosurpassYao.16.Afterafewyears'waiting,hefinallyseizedthechanceandopenedhisera......IffinallyIhavethechancetowin,IwillgraspitastightlyasIcanandneverletitgo.17.MostpeoplethinkheissogoodthathewillbebetterthanYao,forheisapromisingplayer.18.Aslongaswemakeefforts,oureffortswilleventuallypayoff.整理课件本次考试0分作文：

IhateLin.点评：考生用简简单单的三个字IhateLin来宣泄对林书豪的讨厌以及对本场英语考试的不满，文不对题，态度极端恶劣，给予0分，“实至名归”，望广大考生引以为戒！！！整理课件3分作文：

Whatafuckingmanheisinmyopinion.Idon’tunderstandwhysomanypeoplelikehimashejustapersonwhoplaybasketballverywell.Ofcourse,hedevoteshimselfforbasketballisagoodcaseforustolearn,but“Nopain,nogain”.Allhisachievementsjustbecauseofhishard-working.Ithinkeveryonewhoworkhardcanachievethesamegradeslikehim,soIdon’tthinkIcanlearnanythingfromhim.What’sthefuckingexam.Ijustwantsleepinsteadofwritingthefuckingarticle.Idon’tlikeEnglish.Chineseisthebestlanguageintheworld.点评：全文考生用了三个污秽字眼，藐视出卷人和本场考试，学习态度不端正，考试时要写正面积极的观点。整理课件ThesurveyincludedaquestionthatweatherJeremyLinwillbemoresuperiortoYaoMinginthefurther.70%ofpeoplethinkagreewithit.ItcannotbedeniedthatJeremyLinmakeagreatsuccessinplayingbasketball.Heissohard-working,giftedandlucky.Tohissuccess,Ithinkeducationisveryimportant.JeremyLinisaAmerican,hegrowupundertheeducationoftheUSA.WithouttheeducationoftheUSA,hecan’tbesuccessfulanymore.AsfarasI’mconcerned,Icanlearnalotfromhissuccess.Beforehebecomefamous,hewasjustacommonbasketballplayer,buthehastheabilityinthebasketballfield.Soweshouldworkhardforourdreams.Ifwehavethechance,wewillshowourselves.Scretchchanceandworkhard,thenwewillwin.点评：考生基本完成了试题规定的任务，但是漏了两个要点；应用的语法结构也出现一些错误，但不影响理解。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。15分作文

整理课件Asisvividlyshowninthechart,thesuccessofJeremyLinisbasedonthefollowingreasons.Firstly,itishisdiligencethatleadstohissuccess.Haditnotbeenforhisefforts,hewouldn’thavebeensuccessful.Secondly,thereisnodoubtthathisbeinggiftedinplayingbasketballalsoplaysanimportantrole.Thirdly,goodeducationhelpshimthinkandadjusthisplanswhichisthekeytohisperfectskills.What’smore,hisgoodluckalsocontributestohisachievements.

Intermsofhispopularity,approximately70%ofnetizensholdtheopinionthatLinwillbemorepromisingthanYaoMing.Onthecontrary,20%ofthemjustdenytheopinion.Therestthinkit’sdifficulttopredict.整理课件WhenitcomestotheeffectsthatLinhasonus,therearemanyqualitiesofhimworthytobelearned.Weshouldhaveastrongwill.Inaddition,henevergivesup.Hisbravery,persistenceandconfidencemakeusunderstandthatRomewasn’tbuiltinaday.

点评：考生完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容，应用了很多高级语法结构和高级词汇，有较强的语言运用能力。23分，实至名归！23分，美文欣赏

整理课件IthinkLin’ssuccessisnotacoincidence.Manyfactorsareresponsibleforhissuccess,ofwhichhishardworkranksfirst.Additionally,hisgreattalentforbasketballbenefitshimalot,makingiteasierforhimtomakegreatachievements.Thatheiswell-educatedmattersaswell.Hisgoodluckalsoplaysanimportantroleonhiswaytosuccess.

Successfulasheis,differentpeoplemakedifferentcommentsonhis