高考英语：读后续写：冲突构思大法(解析版)

专题01冲突构思大法（解析版）如何通过矛盾设计来写好作文？第一，矛盾冲突包括两种主要形式：一是外部冲突，包括人与人、人与周围环境的矛盾；二是内部冲突，指的是特定环境下人物自身的矛盾。第二，如何设计矛盾冲突？从大的方向上说，它包括三个方面：人与人、人与周围环境、人物内心。从内容方面来说，这种矛盾冲突，是现实生活里由于人们的立场、观点、思想感情、理想愿望的不同而产生的矛盾斗争，是人们的主观与客观、正确与错误、先进与落后等种种矛盾斗争的反映。在构思作文时，一般都会想到哪些矛盾冲突呢？从立意的角度来说，矛盾冲突要指向人们的价值取向。比如生与死、是与非、成与败、诚与伪、忠与奸、善与恶、荣与辱、得与失、乐与苦、爱与恨、兴与衰、小我与大我、主观与客观……这是需要我们在写作之前想清楚的。例子：下面这篇文章大意：感恩节到了,

我继续和往年一样,

这一天会开车送礼物如食物给穷人。但是有一年,

我和妻子呆在纽约的旅馆里,

不能回家团圆,

我告诉妻子我的往年的做法,

妻子非常开心。但我们需要货车（van）才能购物。于是我们准备在街头上拦一辆车,

妻子同意了。文章凭什么吸引阅卷者的眼光，拿到高分的？一句话：矛盾设计精巧。首先，是人与周围环境的矛盾。环境的恶劣：chillywind,我们却在拦车，突出艰难。（插一句：环境的描写，可以力求一个渐变的技巧，譬如在小说Isurvive里有一句：Thewindmoanedatfirst.Thenitstartedtohowl,andfinallyitwasshriekingsoloudlyDadhadtoturnuptheTV.）其次，是人与人的矛盾。纽约的街头，无人同情我们，更无人对我们道一声辛苦，大家似乎什么也没有看到。但最后我们还是看到了热心人，并且和我们一起去帮助他人。最后，是人的内心冲突。从开始的充满希望到绝望：“Whocanweturnto?”mywifemurmuredwithafiercefrown…wefoundourselvesonthe

verge(边缘)ofgivingup到重新充满期待：The

nearly-extinguished（快要熄灭的）sparksofhopewereinstantly

rekindled（点燃）最后想说的是：虽然读后续写无非就是简单的故事讲述，但是我们还是可以融入一点人文主义情怀，这就是美学价值了。我在文章中用到了：However,theycame,theysawandtheyspedup,onlytoleaveashanddirtdancingintheair.

和Itwastheworstoftimes,butitwasalsothebestoftimes.

当然这不是必须的，而是看平时的积累和那么一点点文学灵感的因素。就为我们平时备考提供了线索。下面我来说说，其中各个冲突并非孤立的，而是相互交织，解决方法也是如此：ConflictandEmotion：三冲突Danger系列和危险的动物害怕、紧张：Scared,

nervous和危险的环境和危险的人Quarrel系列误解失望、伤心、后悔、生气、困惑、害羞和尴尬：Disappointed,

sad,shy,embarrassed,regret,angry,confused背叛观念、性格、兴趣不一伤害（自尊、信任等）Frustration系列第一类：贫困、残疾、孤独（poor,disabled,loneliness）等同情和伤心：Sympathetic,

sad第二类：失败、骄傲或自卑（failure,notconfident/tooproud）等解决途径基本是：1.encouragement(某人的鼓励的话）2.comfort（某人的安慰）3.inspiration(突然灵机一动）4.effort(自己的努力训练）5.calm（冷静思考）6.kindness(某人的善良）7.courage（勇敢做起来）8.love（爱心，不过这个需要和move，patience结合，爱只是底子，还需要感化和耐心等待）9.help（准确说是及时帮助）SolutionandEmotion：四途径他人譬如：善心和爱（love,kindness），及时援助，安慰和鼓励，陪伴等情节中：1.镇定（calm）2.鼓舞（encouraged）3.不悦（dissatisfied）结尾：1.

欣慰、欢喜（relieved,happy）2.

感动、感恩（moved,grateful）3.

希望、信心（hopeful,confident）他物譬如：河流，太阳等自己譬如：effort,inspiration自然突出和谐，时间与成长这样划分后，我们就比较方便去针对性进行训练。下面且以高考真题为例进行说明：卷别

ConflictSolution2020.7拍摄北极熊遇险（浙江）借助他物和他人：用辣椒喷雾器（文章有提示）暂退熊，然后救援队及时援助情绪变化：害怕熊到暂时镇定，到脱险后的欢喜卖爆米花方法救助穷人（山东）借助他物和他人：一家决定和被救助孩子卖爆米花，路人纷纷购买情绪变化：开始的同情到最后的开心与感恩2020.1大学生和宠物狗的离别借助他物：父母买来小狗，孩子回家后，看到两只狗彼此陪伴和陪伴父母，明白道理情绪变化：难过到欣慰2018.6父子骑马迷路借助他人他物：先父亲安慰我，然后我们看到小河后寻路回家情绪变化：害怕到镇定，最后到开心2017.11家庭旅游为野营争执借助他物：用自己带的帐篷来野营露宿情绪变化：不解困惑到最后开心2017.6骑车游玩遇狼脱险借助他人他物：用辣椒喷雾器（文章有提示）暂退狼，然后路人甲及时援助情绪变化：害怕到喜出望外，到害怕，最后开心2016.10夫妇森林旅游争执，女主人迷路借助他人他物：想起丈夫曾经的爱后悔，找到一个地方先睡下，第二天跟着河水来到空地，救援队及时赶到情绪变化：害怕

–》后悔—》开心模拟训练01读后续写

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。JohnBlanchard

stoodup,straightenedhisarmyuniform(制服),andstudiedthecrowdmakingtheirwaythroughthestation.Helookedfor

thegirl

whoseheartheknew,butwhosefacehehadneverseen,thegirlwitharose.Hisinterestinherbeganthirteenmonthsagoina

library.Takingabookofftheshelf,hefoundhimselffascinated,notwiththewordsofthe

book,butwiththenotespenciledinthemargin(页边的空白).Thesofthandwritingshowedathoughtfulsoulandbrilliantmind.Inthefrontofthebook,hediscoveredtheowner'sname,MissHollisMaynell.Withtimeandefforthefoundheraddress.ShelivedinNewYorkCity.Hewroteheraletterintroducinghimselfandinvitinghertocorrespond(通信).Thenextdayhewasshippedoverseasformilitaryservice.Duringthenextyearandonemonth,thetwobeguntoknoweachotherbymail.Each

letter

wasaseedfallingonbothhearts.Aromancewasbudding.Blanchardaskedforaphotograph,butsherefused.Shefeltthatifhereallycared,itwouldn'tmatterwhatshelookedlike.WhenthedayfinallycameforhimtoreturnfromEurope,theyscheduledtheirfirstmeeting—7pmatthe

GrandCentralStation

inNewYork.“You'llrecognizeme，”shewrote.“Bythe

redrose

I'llwearmydress.”Soat7：00hewasinthestationlookingforagirlwhoseheartheloved,butwhosefacehe'dneverseen.Ayoungladywascomingtowardhim.Herfigurewaslongandslim;herblondehairlaybackfromherears;hereyeswereblueasflowers;herlipsandchinhadagentlefirmness,and

inherpalegreensuit

shewaslikespringtimecomingalive.Hewenttowardher,entirelyforgettingtonoticethatshewasnotwearingarose.Ashemoved,amiddleagedwoman

whispered,“Goingmyway,Sir？”注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：Almost

uncontrollably

he

made

his

way

to

the

woman,and

then

he

noticed

that

she

was

wearing

a

red

rose.______________________________________________________________________________________

Paragraph2：The

woman's

face

broadened

into

a

big

smile.______________________________________________________________________________________翻译小练习：约翰·布兰查德看到这个40多岁的女人很失望。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.没错，她就是他等的那个女孩。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.尽管他想跟着那位年轻的女士，他还是停下来，朝那位女士走去，向她打招呼，并拿出他在图书馆里找到的那本书。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.“我是约翰·布兰查德，你一定是霍利斯·梅内尔小姐。我非常高兴你能见到我，我可以请你吃饭吗？”____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.“我不知道这是怎么回事，”她回答说，“但是刚才路过的那个穿着淡绿色西装的年轻女士求我把红玫瑰戴在我的外套上。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.她说如果你要请我吃饭，我应该告诉你她在街对面的餐厅等你。她说这是个考验！”____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考答案：1.约翰·布兰查德看到这个40多岁的女人很失望。JohnBlanchard

wasdisappointedtoseethewoman,whowasover40yearsold.2.没错，她就是他等的那个女孩。Exactly,Shewas

thegirl

hewaswaitingfor.3.尽管他想跟着那位年轻的女士，他还是停下来，朝那位女士走去，向她打招呼，并拿出他在图书馆里找到的那本书。Thoughhewouldliketofollowtheyounglady,hestoppedandwalkedtowardthewoman,greetedherandheldoutthe

book

hefoundinthe

library.4.“我是约翰·布兰查德，你一定是霍利斯·梅内尔小姐。我非常高兴你能见到我，我可以请你吃饭吗？”“I'mJohnBlanchard,andyoumustbe

MissHollisMaynell.Iammorethangladyoucouldmeetme;mayItakeyoutodinner？”5.“我不知道这是怎么回事，”她回答说，“但是刚才路过的那个穿着淡绿色西装的年轻女士求我把红玫瑰戴在我的外套上。“Idon'tknowwhatthisisabout，”sheanswered,“buttheyounglady

inherpalegreensuit

whojustwentbybeggedmetowearthe

redrose

onmycoat.6.她说如果你要请我吃饭，我应该告诉你她在街对面的餐厅等你。她说这是个考验！”Andshesaidifyouweregoingtoinvitemetodinner,Ishouldtellyouthatshe

iswaitingforyouintherestaurantacrossthestreet.Shesaiditwasatest！”参考范文：Paragraph1：Almost

uncontrollably

he

made

his

way

to

the

woman,and

then

he

noticed

that

she

was

wearing

a

red

rose.JohnBlanchard

wasdisappointedtoseethewoman,whowasover40yearsold.Exactly,Shewas

thegirl

hewaswaitingfor.Thoughhewouldliketofollowtheyounglady,hestoppedandwalkedtowardthewoman,greetedherandheldoutthe

book

hefoundinthe

library.“I'mJohnBlanchard,andyoumustbe

MissHollisMaynell.Iammorethangladyoucouldmeetme;mayItakeyoutodinner？”Paragraph2：The

woman's

face

broadened

into

a

big

smile.“Idon'tknowwhatthisisabout，”sheanswered,“buttheyounglady

inherpalegreensuit

whojustwentbybeggedmetowearthe

redrose

onmycoat.Andshesaidifyouweregoingtoinvitemetodinner,Ishouldtellyouthatshe

iswaitingforyouintherestaurantacrossthestreet.Shesaiditwasatest！”模拟训练02读后续写

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Ali

andhisyoungersister,

Zahra,livedwiththeirparentsinapoorneighborhood.Theirmotherwasverysickandtheirfatherwasstrugglingtofindajob,andtheyhadonlyalittlemoneywithwhichtobuyfood.Astheyhadnotpaidtherentforseveralmonths,thelandlordwasbreathingdowntheirnecks.Oneday,AlitookZahra’sshoestoashoerepairmantobefixed,buthelostthemonthewayhome.Itwasn’tuntilhegothomethatherealizedhehadlosttheshoes.Hewasafraidthathisparentswouldbeangryanddisappointed,sohebeggedhissistertokeepitsecret.ZahraagreedandthetwodecidedtoshareAli’srunning

shoes.Zahra’sschoolhourswereinthemorning,soshewouldwearthemfirst.Afterschool,shewouldrushbackandgivethemtoAli.Hecouldthenruntohisschool,whichbeganintheafternoon.Althoughheranasfastashecould,Alioftenarrivedlateandwaswarnedbytheschool.Aliheardaboutalongdistance

race

thatwasheldfortheboysinthecity.Whenhelearnedthatthethird

prize

wasanewpairofshoes,hedecidedtotakepart.Heranhome

excitedly

andpromisedhissisterthathewouldwinherthenewshoes.Thedayofracearrived.Alihadastrongstart,buthalfwaythroughtheracehebegantogettiredandhislegsbegantoache.GettingmoreandmoreexhaustedhethoughtonlyofZahraandhis

promise

toher.Dreamingofthenewshoeshewouldwinforhissistergavehimstrength,andhestayedrightbehindthetwofastest

runners,determinedtofinish

third.Suddenly,asthefinishlinedrewnear,anotherrunnercollided

(碰撞)withAlifrombehindandhecrashedtotheground.注意：1.

所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.

应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.

续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.

续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Alilookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.______________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph

2:Filledwithdelight,Aliwalkedhomequickly.

______________________________________________________________________________________翻译小练习：1.在这一点上他拒绝放弃，他跳起来，尽可能快地跑。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.他冲过终点线，得了四等奖。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.想到他会让她妹妹失望，阿里忍不住抽泣起来。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.就在这时，他突然听到广播里宣布他获得了三等奖，因为与阿里相撞的赛跑者因违反规定被取消资格。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.在颁奖典礼上把鞋放在胸前，阿里感到欣喜若狂，如释重负因为他最终为妹妹赢得了这双鞋。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.他迫不及待地想见到他的妹妹并分享这个令人激动的消息。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7.到达时，阿里发现萨拉在外面等着。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8.她真的很紧张她哥哥是否给她带来了她想要的东西。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________9.“萨拉，看看我给你带来了什么。”他用颤抖的双手从包里拿出奖品。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________10.萨拉一看到鞋子，脸上就喜形于色。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________11.她激动得向阿里扑了过去。“谢谢你！”当兄妹紧紧拥抱在一起时，他们的眼睛里涌出喜悦的泪水。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考答案：1.在这一点上他拒绝放弃，他跳起来，尽可能快地跑。Refusingtogiveupatthispoint,hejumpedtohisfeetandranasfastashecould.2.他冲过终点线，得了四等奖。Hedashedacrossthefinishlineandwonthefourthprize.3.想到他会让她妹妹失望，阿里忍不住抽泣起来。Thinkinghewouldlethersisterdown,

Ali

couldn’thelpsobbing.4.就在这时，他突然听到广播里宣布他获得了三等奖，因为与阿里相撞的赛跑者因违反规定被取消资格。Justthenhesuddenlyheardtheannouncementfromthebroadcastthathewonthe

third

prize

asthe

runner

who

collided

withAliwasdisqualifiedforbreakingtherule.5.在颁奖典礼上把鞋放在胸前，阿里感到欣喜若狂，如释重负因为他最终为妹妹赢得了这双鞋。Holdingthe

shoes

closetohischestduringtheawardceremony,Alifeltoverjoyedandrelievedasheeventuallywontheshoesforhissister.6.他迫不及待地想见到他的妹妹并分享这个令人激动的消息。Hecouldnotwaittoseehissisterandsharethethrillingnews.7.到达时，阿里发现萨拉在外面等着。Onhisarrival,Alifound

Zahra

waswaitingoutside.8.她真的很紧张她哥哥是否给她带来了她想要的东西。Shewasreallynervouswhetherherbrotherhadbroughtherwhatshewasexpecting.9.“萨拉，看看我给你带来了什么。”他用颤抖的双手从包里拿出奖品。“Zahra,seewhatIhavegotforyou.”hetooktheprizeoutofhisbag