读后续写练习写作指导人神共奋讲义高三英语一轮复习

读后续写：人神共奋材料：When

Dr.Gullickson

wasassigning

project

matesforhisintroductiontoexperimentalpsychologyclass,

IsecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.

Aboveall,

Ihopedhewouldn’tassignmetoworkwiththeintense,fiercelypetitive,singularly

serious

fellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.

Asfatewouldhaveit,Dr.Gullicksonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthat

IwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.Iwentuptomynewlabmateandintroducedmyself.

HelookedatmeasthoughIweren’tthere.

IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablycausehisgradepointaveragetotakeanosedive.

Hewasn’toutrightmeanorabusive.Hejustgavemetheimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhedidit

alone.Needlesstosay,

Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff,butItriedtomakethebestofitand

didn’tsayanything,lestImakethingsworse.Theprojectrequiredeachlabteamtodevelopahypothesis,setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,runthetests,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthe

findings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbe

shared

bybothstudents.Whenmy

teammate

andImetto

discuss

ourproject,Iwasuneasy.

Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgradestheexactoppositeofme.

Iwasoutmatched.

Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint,butstoppedshortbecause

Ididn’twanttogivehimthe

satisfaction

ofmychickeningout.Afterlengthydiscussions,wesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthetactilekinestheticperceptionofspace.Iwasn’tsurewhatitmeant,butatleastwehadatopic.注意：

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Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Paragraph2:

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.写作指导#人物分析01Dr.Gullickson这位实验心理学博士老师起了“牵线搭桥”的作用，通过assignprojectmates，把“我”和“他”组了搭档，“人神”组合因此上线。02

“人”

自然是“我”内心无比希望与最好的朋友，或者最差也得是个志趣相投的同学组搭档；IsecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.内心OS被仿佛有顺风耳的老师听见，于是被有意安排与“他”牵手成功；IwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.第一次打交道，“他”把我当空气，默认“我”为“猪队友”。然而，“我”没吭声，唯恐把事情弄得更糟；HelookedatmeasthoughIweren’tthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablycausehisgradepointaveragetotakeanosedive....lestImakethingsworse.“我”，学业上虽然被outmatched，但也算有些志气，既不想chickenout而让“他”如了愿，也不想被“他”冷落整个学期，仍然希望能做到最好。Ididn’twanttogivehimthe

satisfaction

ofmychickeningout.Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff.Itriedtomakethebestofit.03

“神”就是“他”高冷学神，以专心致志和好成绩而闻名；theintense,fiercelypetitive,singularly

serious

fellowHejustgavemetheimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhedidit

alone.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsinglemindednessandgoodgradestheexactoppositeofme.越是对“他”敬而远之，越是“难逃孽缘”；Asfatewouldhaveit,

...“他”也没那么坏，毕竟学神的世界只可远观，“我”不配懂。

...hewasn’toutrightmeanorabusive.#情节分析人神交手，看点管够因为项目合作需要，“我”和“神”被强行绑定成为搭档。“一条绳上的两只蚂蚱”，互相再不待见，也必须碰撞出一些智慧的火花来，否则一荣俱荣，一损俱损。“学神”面前，“我”自然相形见绌，但好歹终究有了课题。在接下来的频繁见面中，“我”和“神”又会做些什么呢？仔细研读材料中的信息，小榜做出如下的预测：1.草拟项目计划(drawupourplans)根据材料，项目内容包括：todevelopahypothesis(提出一个假设);tosetupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis(建立一个实验来检验这个假设);torunthetests(运行测试);

todothestatisticalanalysis(做统计分析);

topresentthe

findings(展示研究结果)除了最后的研究结果展示，前面的4项内容都能在续写第一段中提及。考虑到小榜和各位榜粉可能都不懂“tactilekinestheticperceptionofspace”究竟是心理学领域中的什么东东，所以续写段落中建议规避关于学术专业方面的描写。不妨考虑用白描的写法讲述“我”和“神”之间的各种交集，如：项目如何分工、“我”能做什么，“神”做了什么......可以设计一些小冲突、小磨合或小突破来推动情节的发展从而激发人物情感的变化，很多电影电视剧不就是这么演的吗？2.搭档生病(partner'sdisease)从第二段段首句OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease中得知，“学神”搭档因为重病而入院治疗。因此，在“我”和“神”

的多次交集中，“我”可能会注意到“他”身体上的某种不适症状，从而为第二段“他”的入院治疗打下伏笔。但是，小榜在这里提醒一下各位粉丝：千万不要把我们这位“学神”写死了。小榜的很多学生似乎都有一种悲剧情结，每个故事，必有事故，好像人物不离世，情感就不能爆发，主题就不能升华似的。21世纪，医学那么发达，再重的疾病，也有生还的希望吧，更何况是在虚拟的故事中呢。让我们怀揣最大的善心，释放最大的善意，让这位“学神”搭档劫后余生吧。3.双方的改变(changes)这篇作文无论是情节明线还是情感暗线，都应该共用一个主题词“改变”。下面用更为直观的方式为各位榜粉解读这三条重要的线索👇（这篇文章虽然文章的叙述视角依然是“我”，但是主人公却是“我”和“他”（“人”和“神”），“我们”俩人的情感在整个已知和未知情节的发展中都发生了改变。两个最不可能成为搭档的人在项目合作的过程中，无论是出于好奇、试探、忍让还是真心，从慢慢放下偏见与戒备，迈出了解对方、予对方以机会的第一步，进而逐渐信任对方、依靠对方，到最终接受对方、“化敌为友”，这种情感上的改变最终成就了情节上的圆满(HappyEnding)。#主题分析通过上述情节明线和情感暗线的分析，我们愿意成全“我”和“神”双双成为最后的赢家。其实，这个故事还有第三个赢家。他是谁？对，没错，Dr.Gullickson！Dr.Gullickson也许早就洞悉取“我”之长可以补“他”之短，反之亦然。他慧眼识珠，也许早就判定“我”是可造之材，于天时地利之外为“我”安排了最关键的“对的人”，让“他”成为“我”的幸运之“神”。他也许也期盼“学神”在学业之外的成长与改变。于是，Dr.Gullickson安排我们成了搭档，安排“人”“神”共同奋斗。小榜不禁感叹：Whatawiseman!所以，这篇文章的主题是什么？是改变。列夫·托尔斯泰曾说：所谓人生，是一刻也不停地变化着的。就是肉体生命的衰弱和灵魂生命的强大、扩大。自我认知会改变，对他人他事的认知也会改变，变则通，通则存，存则强，改变能成就所有的美好。#范文最近很多公众号都在推这篇作文的解析和下水文，甚至把原文也挖了出来。小榜倒是认为原文的参考意义已经不大。每个尝试续写此文的作者，都会根据自己的人生阅历，遵循自己的“三观”而赋予材料不同的背景和解读视角。读后续写本就是见仁见智的题型，没有标准答案。下水文Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Honestly,hisacademicexcellencedidputhiminauniquepositiontobeincharge.Iwatchedhimbusyinghimselfinthelab,curiouslyyetadmirably.Occasionally,hewouldsitdownasiftorturedbysomepains,whenhewouldmotionmetocontinue.Iwasgladtotakeoverandtriedtomakethebestofit.Themoretimeshequitforrest,themorechancesIhadtojustifythequalificationsashispartnerandthefaithhecouldputinme.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.

Iwasindeedstartledthatthepainshe’dbeensufferingshouldprovetroublesome.Seeinghimconfinedtothehospitalbed,Ifeltforthefirsttimethathewasnolongerintense,norfiercelypetitive.Isharedmyworriesaboutthefinalpresentationbuthestoppedme,sayingfirmly“Youcanmakeit.”So,wemade

thewardoursecondlab.ThebigmomentwasimpressivewhenIcarriedthroughourpresentationunexpectedlywell.Shownthe“Aplus”awardedbyDr.Gullickson,hebeamedabroadgrin.Ituckedhiminandsaidmerrily,“Justgetbetter.Wearepartners,everafter.”

佳作展示范文1Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

Ireallyhadbutterfliesinmystomachinthebeginning.Butaswegraduallygotacquaintedwitheachother,Idiscoveredthathewasactuallymoreshythandistant.Ihadtoadmitthatitwashethatwaspushingaheadwithmostoftheproject.ButhedidletmeparticipateasmuchasIcouldandofferedtimelyhelpwhennecessary,thusmakingmyconcernsthingsofthepast.IguessedIcouldseewhyDr.Gullicksonpairedhimwithme.

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.

Itwasdrawingclosetothefinalpresentation.Andasfatewouldhaveit,thereremainedonlyonesingleguytofaceit.However,Ididn’twantourprojecttoendinfailure,whichwouldcertainlybeanotherblowtomyhospitalizedpartner.Itookovertherestoftheworkanddevotedallmyselftoit,informinghimofdailyupdatesandmeanwhilegettingencouragementoverthephone.WhenIfinallyshowedupinhiswardwiththeAplusgrade,webothlaughedheartily.Weweregladthatwehadgotcloser,academicallyandemotionally.Andwewereluckytohavebeenpartnered.

范文2：Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

Serious

asmyteammatewas,wegradually

grewingoodtunewith

eachother.He

hadawaywithtechnicalthings

and

approachedeverydetail

withaclearpurpose.AndIsparednoefforttodomybit,

collectingdata

and

recordingresults

carefully,soasto

makeupfor

my

academicdisadvantage.I

fullydiscussedmyideas

andsharedmyinsightswithhim,whowasonce

indifferent

but

laterlistenedtome

withcloseattention.Weweremakingsteadyprogresswithour

project.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.ThemomentIsawhimlyinghelplesslyinbed,

Idecided

Ihadtoactaloneanddomybest.

Iassuredhim

Iwouldnotlethimdownandheshouldconcentrateonrecovering.

Ipouredmoretimeandenergy

intothat

project

thaneverbefore,andfinally

presentedourfindings

totheclass,whichsurprisinglyearnedus

anexcellentgrade!WhenItoldhimaboutoursharedsuccess,hesmiled.Ithadtodowithtrustandthejoyofsharingamonprize.范文3：Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupour,hisacademicexcellencedidputhiminauniquepositiontobeincharge.Iwatchedhimbusyinghimselfinthelab,curiouslyyetadmirably.Occasionally,hewouldsitdownasiftorturedbysomepains,whenhewouldmotionmetocontinue.Iwasgladtotakeoverandtriedtomakethebestofit.Themoretimeshequitforrest,themorechancesIhadtojustifythequalificationsashispartnerandthefaithhecouldputinme.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Iwasindeedstartledthatthepainshe’dbeensufferingshouldprovetroublesome.Seeinghimconfinedtothehospitalbed,Ifeltforthefirsttimethathewasnolongerintense,norfiercelypetitive.Isharedmyworriesaboutthefinalpresentationbuthestoppedme,sayingfirmly“Youcanmakeit.”So,wemadethewardoursecondlab.ThebigmomentwasimpressivewhenIcarriedthroughourpresentationunexpectedlywell.Shownthe“Aplus”awardedbyDr.Gullickson,hebeamedabroadgrin.Ituckedhiminandsaidmerrily,“Justgetbetter.Wearepartners,everafter.”范文4：Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.panionasIwasintheproject,Istillhad

nosenseofparticipatingintheproject.Myteammatekepthisbrainoccupiedin

developingthehypothesis,

settingupanexperimenttotestit,andrunningthetestsalone

,leavingmejuststandingbesidehim

asifIwereafool.“Whatadullprojectitis!”

Imurmuredtomyself.However,

somethingchangedgradually,asIbecameawarewhatthe

psychologicalwellbeingofteenagers

meant.Thankstotheintense,

fiercelypetitive,

singularlyserious

fellow,thewholeprocedurewentsmoothly,closetothefinalstage.OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Withoutanydelay,Ipackedupmyschoolbag,tookallthe

experimentstatistics

andrushedtothehospital.Seeingthepalefellowwearingpurewhiteclothesinsteadoftheannoyingdarkclothes,Ifeltasenseofsympathyandmercywellingupinmyheart.Withhisguidance,Ifinishedthe

statisticalanalysis

and

presentedthefindings.ItturnedouttobesuchanamazingandpersuasivestudythatmyteammateandIdidwinthebestgrade.Now,wehavebeenmostrel