读后续写之邻里之间如何用“四点”“五所”写好和谐邻里类故事？讲义高考英语一轮复习

卖爆米花（2020年新高考全国卷Ⅰ）Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.“I’lltellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.___________________________________________________________________________________________续写分析与构思构思续写两段主要情节结合对原文及续写第一段、第二段段首句的分析，可以构思续写第一段和第二段的主要情节。续写第一段的主要情节：TheMeredithfamilyhelpedBernardmakepopcorn.续写第二段的主要情节：Bernardsoldpopcorninthemunity.构思续写“四点”内容根据对原文的分析和两个段首句推测续写两段首尾部分“四点”的内容，确保段落当中和段落之间情节连贯以及故事的主题和结局积极向上。续写第一段的段首衔接句：Thentheymadeaplan.续写第一段的段尾衔接句：Whentheworkwasdone,Bernardpackedthepopcorn.续写第二段的段首衔接句：Bernardwasalittlehesitateduponreachingthefirstdoor.结尾句：Withallhehadearned,Bernardwalkedbackhomejoyfully.呼应前文①Heissuchahelptohismother.②Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,...练习：结合文中出现的以下伏笔，预测续写部分可能发生的情节。Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.→Neighborswouldoffertobuypopcorn,andeventhelessprivilegedhouseholdsweregoingtomakefairtradeswiththeirextrafood.分析：前文中提到经济萧条，但邻居们都相互扶持，体现了邻居之间的友爱互助。所以在续写时，可以设计相关情节，突出邻居之间的友爱。另外，在续写时可以考虑邻居们的实际经济情况设计不同的帮助形式，比如家庭条件较差的邻居可能会采取以物易物的形式帮助Bernard。Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags…→Bernardwouldcarefullysealthepaperbagsandgathertheminabasket.分析：前文中提到John提议把爆米花放进纸袋里让Bernard去卖，所以在续写时，可以考虑呼应这一点，设计Bernard将爆米花装袋的情景，可以增强续写的画面感。续写创作前面的步骤已经将续写两段的首句和末句构思完成，接下来需要补充具体情节。请根据“五所”（即人物的所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思/感）提示，完成续写。①WhatdidMrs.Meredithdo?②Whatdidthechildrendo?③WhatdidBernarddo?WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Sheboughtamachineformakingpopcorn.Intheevening,shetaughtthekidshowtomakepopcorn.Itwastrickybuteveryonewasfocusedonlearning.Whentheyknewallthedetails,joyfloodedthewholeroom.ButtheyworriedthatBernardmightnotaccepttheirkindness.TheirheartsthumpedastheywaitedforBernard’sresponse(时间状语从句).Totheirgreatexcitement,Bernard’seyeslitupimmediately(神态描写)afterhearingtheproposal.HethankedtheMeredithfamilyforbeingsokindandhelpful.①Whatdidthechildrendoorsay?②Whatdidtheneighborsdoorsay?③HowdidBernardfeel?Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Whenitwasclosetonoon,thenewsspreadlikewildfirefromhometohome(比喻).TheneighborsweretoldaboutBernard’sbusinessandtheywerepleasedtosupportthepoorboy(原文协同).Bernardwasbeginningtoenjoysuccessandwasglowingwithjoy.Hisdoortodoorrunninghadsentsplendidcolortohisface(无灵主语句).SeeingBernardbeelivelyandcheerful(现在分词作状语),theMeredithfamilyfeltasenseofjoy.Everyonelearnedthatitisbettertogivethantotake.高分范文WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Aplanwasmade,andworkwasallocatedwithinminutes(排比).WhileMrs.Meredithsoughtoutthelargestpaninherpossession,thechildrenwenttofindBernardandtellhimtheidea.Thelittleboywassothankfulthathewaslostforwords(结果状语从句).SoontheMeredithhouseholdwasfilledwithlaughter.Thearomaspreadoutformiles(环境描写).Neighborspoppedtheirheadsoutoftheirwindows(动作描写)insearchofitssource.Whentheworkwasdone,Bernardcarefullysealedthepaperbagsandgatheredtheminabasket.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Theshyboyhesitateduponreachingthefirstdoor,buttheMeredithkidsencouragedhimwitha“goforit”gesture.Afterashortgentleknock,thedooropenedandafriendlyfaceemerged.Theneighboraskedifshecouldbuyabagofthetemptingsnack.Astheywentdownthestreet,moredoorsopened.Eventh