2024届高三英语一轮复习写作专项读后续写父子关系 My first hunting 学案

试题呈现：Hisfathersaid,“Allset,boy?”andJeremynodded,pickinguphis

gun

withawkwardglovedhands.Hisfatherpushedopenthedoorandtheywentoutintothefreezingdawntogether.OrdinarilyJeremywouldtakeouthis

camera

torecordthescenery,butnotthismorning.Thiswasthemorning,particularlysacred,when14-year-oldJeremywouldgo

duck

huntingforthefirsttime.However,he

hated

it,andhadhatedthewholeideasincehisfatherboughthimagun.Buthewasdeterminedtogothroughwithit.Helovedhisfather,andwantedhis

approval

morethananythingintheworld.

Theycametoanarrowandhiddenplacefacingthebay.Jeremysatdownnervouslyand

waited.Toreducefear,hetooka

picture

ofhisfatheragainstthecleanwater.Thenheputthecamerahurriedlyonthegrassandpickeduphisgun.Jeremygothisgunready.“I'llletyou

shoot

first,”hisfathersaid,loadinghisowngun.“Youknow,I'vebeenwaitingforalongtimeforthisday.Justthetwoofus..."Hebrokeoff,bendingforward,eyesnarrowed.“There'sasmallflightheadingthiswaynow.Keepyourheaddown.I'llgiveyoutheword.”

Thesuncameout.Jeremycouldseeeverythingclearly:hisfather'sface,

tense

andeager;thewhitefrostonthegun.Hisheartwasbeatingwildly.Heprayed,“Don'tletthemcome,please!”

Buttheykeptcoming."Fourblack,”hisfathersaid.“Onemallard(绿头鸭）.”Highabove,Jeremyheardthepulsingwhistleofwingsastheflightbegantocircle.Themallardwasleading,hisfeetdroppingdown,reachingforthesilver-coloredwater.Closer,closer...“Getset,”hisfatherwhispered.

“Now!”criedJeremy'sfather.“Takethem!”Jeremyfelthisbodyobey.Hestoodup,holdingthegun.Inthesameinstant,thewildduckssawthegunnersand

flew.“Shoot!”saidsomethingsharplyinJeremy'sbrain.Butupwentthemallardhigherstill,untilsuddenlyhecaughtthefullforceofthewindandflewaway,outofrange.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:

Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?”__________________________Paragraph2:ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.______________________________Analysisofthetext:1.Whoarethemaincharactersinthearticle?Whatarethedescriptionsoftheirpersonalitiesandhobbiesinthearticle?JeremyIlovephotography,hatehunting,lovemyfather,andcravehisapprovalFatherLikeshuntingandlooksforwardtohuntingwithmyson(thinkinghealsoenjoyshunting)2.Whatarethetimeandplacewherethestorytakesplaceinthearticle?Whatisthedescriptionofthistimepointinthearticle?Howhelpfulisitfordescribingdetails?Time:atdawnDescription:free;Sacred;Thesuncomesout;ThewhitefrostonthegunLocation:nearthecleanwaterHelp:Useenvironmentaldescriptioninoutdoorscenarios,echoingrelevantdetailsoftimeandplace3.Whatdoesthewordshootmeanintheoriginaltext?Thepunmeaningof"shoot"is1:shooting;Meaning2:ShootingWhatarethemaincontradictions/issuesinthearticle?Superficialcontradiction:ShouldJeremyshootforhunting4.Deeplevelcontradictions:1)ShouldJeremysticktohisinterests(takingphotos)orchoosehuntingtogainhisfather'sapproval2)Howtogetalongwithafatherandson:DosonshavetolistentoandlikethingsthatthefatherlikesWhatshouldbewrittenattheendofthefirstparagraphfromthebeginningofthesecondparagraph?5.Atthebeginningofthesecondparagraph,ToJeremy'ssurprise,itcanbeseenthattheendofthefirstparagraphcanbewrittenaboutJeremy'spsychologicaldescriptionafterexplainingwhyhedidn'tshoot,thinkingthathisfatherwouldbeangry.参考范文：Paragraph1:

Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn’tyoushoot?”

Judgingfromhisexpression,itwasevidentthathewasabouttoexplode.Jeremydroppedhisheaddown,tenseandspeechless.Atthethoughtoflosinghisfather’s

approval,hewasovercomewithasenseoffailure,tearsfallingontothesilentground.“Son,tellmewhat’sthematter?”murmuredthefather,gatheringJeremyintohisarms.“Youlike

duck

hunting,don’tyou?”Jeremyexplainedthathedidn’tlikehuntingatallandhowexcitingitwastostrollwithhimandtakephotosasusual.Thenupwenttheboy’shead,throughhismistyeyes,hewitnessedhisfatherturningandleaving.（103w）Paragraph2:ToJeremy’ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecameratohim.

“Sorry,Ithoughtyouwerefondofhuntingjustlikeme,”apologizedthefather,puttingthe

camera

ontheboy’spalms.Eyesglintingandlipscurvingintoabigsmile,theboywasjumpingwithjoy,takinga

picture

ofhisfatherandthecharmingscenery.Havingtakingawaythe

gun,thefatherwasbathedintheradiantglowofsun.Hecouldhearthechirpsofthebirdsandlaughterfromhisson.Itsuddenlydawnedonhimthathewasfullofhimselfinshowinghislovetohisson.（92w）下水作文:Hisfatheraskedinacontrolledvoice,“Whydidn'tyoushoot?"LookingintoJeremy'seyes,hetriedtofigureoutwhathadhappenedButthelittleboysimplylookedaway.apparentlyinanattempttoavoideyecontactwithhisfather,withtearswellingupinhiseyes.Onepartofhimwantedtohavefather'sapproval,justoutoflove,butanothervoiceurgedhimtoletthemallardgoandflylikethewindandcapturethelivelyscenewithhiscamera.Afterquiteamomentofsilence,heturnedhiseyesinthedirectionofthecamera.ToJeremy'ssurprise,hisfatherwashandingthecamerato