2024届高考英语复习T8三月联考读后续写被困电梯课件

2024T8联考读后续写讲评电梯惊魂题目回顾人与社会文本简析原文大义：1.

我放学后坐电梯回公寓，遇到邻居Mrs.Lim也一起坐电梯；2.

本以为是平淡无事的一天，谁知电梯坏了，飞速下降到5楼，Mrs.Lim歇斯底里，情绪失控；3.

忽然Mrs.Lim呼吸困难，我帮忙松开衣服领子，等待救援。遇困等待救援Paragraph1:Severalminutespassed,butnohelpcame.情节构思①【衔接1】我被困后的心情②Mrs.Lim相较之前?

情况好转？更差了？③

我的应对：尽力冷静下来，并再次安抚Mrs.Lim。

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我的努力：敲电梯门/再次按按钮/喊叫求助⑤【衔接2】有人回应，并报火警；暂无回应，心情再次跌至谷底…情节构思①【衔接1】我被困的心情

Myinitialpositivityhadbeenwornoutbythelong-timeanxietyandfearbecauseoftrappinginthisnarrowanddankspace,tearsofhopelessnesswellingupmyeyes.（郑邦）因为被困在这个狭窄阴暗的空间里，长期的焦虑和恐惧已经磨灭了我最初的积极性，绝望的泪水在眼眶里打转。emotionemotionemotionaction情节构思①【衔接1】我被困的心情

Bigfatsweatsstreamingdownmyforehead,Ipacedrepeatedly,thinkingabouthowtogetout.(孔文昕)大汗顺着额头流下来，我反复踱步，思考着如何脱身。Emotion(shownottell)actionaction情节构思②Mrs.Lim相较之前?虚弱，不断啜泣发抖Mrs.Lim,whohadbeenstrugglingtobreathe,wasnowsobbing,herconsciousnessweakening,asshemurmured,“Idon‘twanttodie.“(郑邦)Mrs.Lim一直努力呼吸，现在已经泣不成声，意识也越来越模糊，她喃喃地说："我不想死。"actionactionactionParagraph2:Bang!MyhopeswereliftedwhenIheardthefirefightersontheothersideoftheliftdoor.情节构思①【衔接3】我的反应：激动地大声回应②firefighters的回应：让我们保持镇定+等待救援③Mrs.Lim的反应：放松下来，打起精神，等待破门④过了一会门终于开了，我们也获救了；感谢救援人员⑤【结尾】呼应原文开头：回想刚刚遭遇的电梯惊魂，珍惜平凡普通的一天。情节构思①【衔接3】我的反应IstoodupfirstandhelpedMrs.Limgetuptoo.Welookedateachotherwithexcitementandwaitedforfirefighterstoopenthedoorandhelpusout.(吴双)我首先站了起来，然后帮助林女士也站了起来。我们激动地看着彼此，等待着消防员开门救我们出去。actionactionactionemotionaction主题升华面对困境时保持冷静和同情心；乐于帮助他人；人生充满了意外，要珍惜生活的每一天；勇于克服困难，困境中的希望与勇气(可选主题)Standinginthesunshine,Ifeltthefreshair.Atthattime,itdawnedonmethatsafetyisthemostpreciousfortuneinone’slife.(孙中昊)遇险脱困类续写IwasshockedtofindthatIwastrappedin

someplace.(thehouse,thelift,…)Suddenly,adeadsilenceruledtheplaceandIfeltawaveofpanicwashoverme,butIknewIhadtostaystrongforbothofus(如果前文出现了次要人物)/,butIknewIhadtokeepcalmtowaitfortherescue.Therealizationdrovemetopluckupmycourageandtookadeepbreathtoyell/wave/crywithallmystrength.Luckily,somerescueworkerscametomyaid,bringingmethelastglimmerofhope.Asenseofcalmnessimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinmymind.Havingsufferedsomuch,Icouldnotcontainmyemotionsandtearsofgratitudestreameddownmycheeks.Thatdaywassounforgettablethatitwouldstayinmymemoryforever.遇险脱困类续写IwasshockedtofindthatIwastrappedin

someplace.(thehouse,thelift,…)Suddenly,adeadsilenceruledtheplaceandIfeltawaveofpanicwashoverme,butIknewIhadtostaystrongforbothofus(如果前文出现了次要人物)/,butIknewIhadtokeepcalmtowaitfortherescue.Therealizationdrovemetopluckupmycourageandtookadeepbreathtoyell/wave/crywithallmystrength.Afterwhatseemedlikeacentury,thefigureofsomebodydoingsth(E.g.firefightersholdingtheflashlight)appearedfrom…Whensomebodysawme,somebodyimmediatelycameoverandtookmyhand."Staycalm,"somebodysaid,his/hergentlevoicereassuredme.“Followme,andwe’llgetoutofthistogether.”With