读后续写TheLastLeaf课件高考英语二轮专题复习

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LASTLEAFDearstudents,Iknowthatyoucangetthemainideaofthetextbutcan'tanalysethetextindetail,youcanwritebutthelanguageisnotvividandplotsarenotlogicallyreasonable.Inthisclass,allofyouaretrainedtoanalysethetextthoroughlybasedonreadingcircles,andmaketheendingofthestorymoreattractiveandlogicallyreasonablebyadoptingthematicandrhematicprogressionandpolishingyourlanguageaswellassentencepatterns.Yours,Mr.SunP

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1文本分析Once

upon

a

time,

there

was

a

town

of

poor

painterson

a

high

hill.

Sue

and

Johnsy

were

both

training

tobe

painters.

They

lived

in

a

little

brick

house

at

theedge

of

town.

Johnsy

had

caught

pneumonia

(肺炎)andstayedinbed,feelingveryill.0102

Returning

home

after

work,

Sue

was

exhausted.“The

wind

is

so

cold

outside.

Winter

is

coming.

Haveyou

been

coughing

a

lot?

Have

you

taken

yourmedicine?”

asked

Sue.

Johnsy

was

too

weak

torespond,lyinginherbedandstaringoutthewindow.03

There

was

some

ivy

(常春藤)

on

the

opposite

walland

she

could

see

the

leaves

dancing

in

the

harsh(刺骨的)

wind.

Meanwhile,

Johnsy

began

to

countbackwards:

“Ten,

nine,

eight,

seven...”.

“When

thelast

leaf

falls,

I

will

die

too.”

hopelessly

said

Johnsy.“How

can

you

say

that?

That’s

ridiculous!

You

arenotaleaf.”saidSue.04

Although

Johnsy

had

no

will

to

live,

Sue

tried

herbest

to

give

her

hope

and

encouragement.

Suegently

took

Johnsy’s

hand,

“Please

Johnsy,

bestrong.

The

doctor

says

you

will

be

alright.”

saidSue.

“I

am

so

tired

of

coughing

all

the

time,

and

ofseeing

you

work

so

hard

to

support

me.

I

want

torest,

to

slip

away

quietly

like

those

falling

leaves.”repliedJohnsy.05

Sue

had

no

choice

but

to

turn

to

their

poorneighbor,

Mr

Behrman,

for

help.

He

was

a

paintertoo,

but

he

hadn’t

painted

anything

in

a

long

time.Some

people

believed

he

simply

had

no

talent.

Buthe

believed

someday

he

would

paint

a

masterpiece.Sue

told

him

that

the

doctor

said

Johnsy

could

stillrecoverifshefoundthewilltolive.06

Behrman

and

Sue

looked

out

the

window

at

the

ivyand

noticed

that

there

was

just

one

remaining

leaf.What’s

more,

a

cold

rain

was

falling,

mixed

withsnow.

Behrman

was

so

worried

about

Johnsy’shealth

that

he

hoped

to

find

a

way

to

give

herstrength.阅读小组长单词大师DiscussionLeaderWordMaster组织小组讨论，并针对阅读内容提问。讲解阅读内容中的生词、重点单词及词组。篇章大师PassagePerson篇章概括者SummarizerReadingCircles讲解阅读内容中有意思、重要或较难的段落。用自己的话概括篇章的主要内容。生活实际联结者文化采集者ConnectorCultureCollector将阅读内容与生活实际相联系，分享经验。寻找阅读内容中与自己国家文化相同或不同之处。单词大师

WordMasteredge[edʒ]n.边缘;刀口;优势vt.&

vi.

（使）徐徐移动;给...加边attheedgeof在...边缘单词大师

WordMasterpneumonia[njuːˈməʊniə]n.

肺炎单词大师

WordMasterexhausted[ɪ

ɡˈ

zɔː

stɪ

d]adj.

筋疲力尽的;疲惫不堪的;用完的单词大师

WordMastercough[kɒ

f]v.

咳嗽;

(从喉咙或肺中)咳出;突然发n.

咳嗽;咳嗽声;咳嗽病;单词大师

WordMasterrespond[rɪˈ

spɒ

nd]v.

回应;响应;作出反应;

(口头或书单词大师

WordMasterharsh[hɑːʃ

]adj.

严厉的;严酷的;恶劣的;残酷的;单词大师

WordMasterridiculous[rɪˈ

dɪ

kjə

lə

s]adj.

荒唐的;荒谬的;愚蠢的;单词大师

WordMastermasterpiece[ˈ

mɑː

stə

piː

s]n.

杰作;名著;代表作;篇章大师

PassagePersonReturninghomeafterwork,Suewasexhausted.“Thewindissocoldoutside.Winteriscoming.Haveyoubeencoughingalot?Haveyoutakenyourmedicine?”askedSue.Johnsywastooweaktorespond,lyinginherbedandstaringoutthewindow.文体时态人称记叙文narrative一般过去时pasttense第三人称thirdperson篇章大师

PassagePersonSuegentlytookJohnsy’shand,“PleaseJohnsy,bestrong.Thedoctorsaysyouwillbealright.”saidSue.“Iamsotiredofcoughingallthetime,andofseeingyouworksohardtosupportme.Iwanttorest,toslipawayquietlylikethosefallingleaves.”repliedJohnsy.语言描写:“PleaseJohnsy,bestrong.Thedoctorsaysyouwillbealright.”;“Iamsotiredofcoughingallthetime...”篇章大师

PassagePersonBehrmanandSuelookedoutthewindowattheivyandnoticedthattherewasjustoneremainingleaf.What’smore,acoldrainwasfalling,mixedwithsnow.BehrmanwassoworriedaboutJohnsy’shealththathehopedtofindawaytogiveherstrength.动作描写:BehrmanandSuelookedoutthewindowattheivyandnoticedthattherewasjustoneremainingleaf.篇章大师

PassagePersonSuehadnochoicebuttoturntotheirpoorneighbor,MrBehrman,forhelp.Hewasapaintertoo,buthehadn’tpaintedanythinginalongtime.Somepeoplebelievedhesimplyhadnotalent.Buthebelievedsomedayhewouldpaintamasterpiece.SuetoldhimthatthedoctorsaidJohnsycouldstillrecoverifshefoundthewilltolive.隐含线索:Buthebelievedsomedayhewouldpaintamasterpiece.篇章大师

PassagePersonBehrmanandSuelookedoutthewindowattheivyandnoticedthattherewasjustoneremainingleaf.What’smore,acoldrainwasfalling,mixedwithsnow.BehrmanwassoworriedaboutJohnsy’shealththathehopedtofindawaytogiveherstrength.事件：Behrman想帮助Johnsy阅读小组长（DiscussionLeader)人物分析情节发展主旨人与人之间的帮助与关爱人与社会主题语境•

BehrmanandSuelookedoutthewindowandfoundoneleafleft.Rert.•

Johand•

(Sue&Behrman)

worriedwhenthelastleaffalls•

(Johnsy)hopeless•

续写部分•

•(Sue)helplesspneumonia•

(Johnsy)painful•

续写部分•

(Sue)kindandconsiderate故

事

要

素Whencold&

windy

winterina

townWhereWhoJohnsyto

bringJohnsy

hopeJohnsy

hadnowilltoliveSueBehrman

DoctorWhatWhy本

文

情

节

线setting人物

时间

地点环

境risingaction患有肺炎的Johnsy倒数树叶，认为自发

展己的生命会随着树叶的凋零而结束。climax高

潮好姐妹Sue和热心肠的邻居Behrman发现常春藤的叶子只剩下一片。resolution解

决续写部分续写部分ending尾

声人物语言和行为分析“Haveyoubeencoughingalot?Haveyoutakenyourmedicine?”caringSue“Howcanyousaythat?That’sridiculous!Youarenotaleaf.”kindSue人物语言和行为分析“PleaseJohnsy,bestrong.Thedoctorsaysyouwillbealright.”anxiousworriedSueSuehadnochoicebuttoturntotheirpoorneighbor,MrBehrman,forhelp.helplessSue人物语言和行为分析Johnsywastooweaktorespond,lyinginherbedandstaringoutthewindow.weakJohnsy“Whenthelastleaffalls,IJohnsy

willdietoo.”hopeless人物语言和行为分析“Iamsotiredofcoughingallthetime,andofseeingyouworksohardtotiredpainfulunbearableJohnsysupportme.Iwanttorest,toslipawayquietlylikethosefallingleaves.”人物语言和行为分析ButhebelievedsomedayhewouldpaintaconfidentdeterminedBehrmanmasterpiece.Behrmanwassoworriedwarm-heartedBehrman

aboutJohnsy’shealththathehopedtofindawaytogiveherstrength.生活实际联结者

ConnectorDoyouknowhowtocomfortsomeone?篇章概括者

SummarizerJohnsy因感染肺炎对生存失去信心，认为自己的生命会随着常春藤树叶的飘落而结束，好姐妹Sue十分担心她的身体状况和精神状况，向好心的邻居Behrman求助，Behrman得知事情的经过后决定想法子帮助Johnsy，然后？Johnsywasseriouslyillbecauseofpneumonia,havingnowilltoliveandwillingtodiewiththefallingleaves.SueandtheirneighborBehrmandecidedtofindawaytohelpJohnsy.P

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行

性延

续

性交

叉

性JohnsyhadthewilltolivePlotDesign01Paragraph1SueandJohnsyembracedThenextmorning,when

02Suepushedthecurtainsopen,sheandJohnsySuesentforthedoctorweresurprisedtofindthe0304lastleafsurvived.ThedoctorbelievedJohnsywouldrecoversoonTheLastLeafParagraph1Paragraph2Thenextmorning,whenSuepushedthecurtainsThedoctorwasabouttoleavewhenhesuddenlyopen,sheandJohnsywere

rememberedtotellSuehersurprisedtofindthelastleafsurvived.neighborBehrmanwasbroughttothehospitalthatmorning.Paragraph1The

next

morning,

when

Sue

pushed

the

curtainsopen,

she

and

Johnsy

were

surprised

to

find

thelast

leaf

survived.

Johnsy

found

the

leaf

was

strongand

she

also

had

the

will

to

live.

Johnsy

and

Sue

smiledat

each

other

and

embraced.

Immediately,

Sue

sent

forthe

doctor

to

inform

him

of

the

good

news.

After

thedoctor

checked

Johnsy's

condition,

he

believed

shewouldrecoververysoon.平行叙述延续叙述Johnsyfoundtheleafwasstrongandshealsohadthewilltolive.01JohnsyandSuesmiledateachotherandembraced.0203Immediately,Suesentforthedoctortoinformhimofthegoodnews.AfterthedoctorcheckedJohnsy'scondition,hebelievedshewouldrecoververysoon.04TheLastLeafParagraph1Paragraph2Thenextmorning,whenSuepushedthecurtainsThedoctorwasabouttoleavewhenhesuddenlyopen,sheandJohnsywere

rememberedtotellSuehersurprisedtofindthelastleafsurvived.neighborBehrmanwasbroughttothehospitalthatmorning.PlotDesignBehrmanwasfoundlyinginthestreet01Paragraph2Behrman'shandswerestainedwithpaintThedoctorwasabouttoleavewhenhesuddenlyrememberedtotellSueherneighbor020304SuelookedagainatthelastivyleafBehrmanwasbroughttothehospitalthatmorning.SherealizeditwasBehrman'smasterpieceParagraph2The

doctor

was

about

to

leave

when

he

suddenlyremembered

to

tell

Sue

her

neighbor

Behrman

wasbrought

to

the

hospital

that

morning.

The

doctor

toldSue

that

Behrman

was

found

lying

in

the

street.

Behrmanwas

uncouncious

because

of

the

cold,

and

his

handswere

stained

with

paint.

When

Sue

looked

at

the

last

ivyleaf

again,

she

found

it

wasn't

moving

in

the

wind.

It

wasreallyBehrman'smasterpiece.交叉叙述0102ThedoctortoldSuethatBehrmanwasfoundlyinginthestreet.Behrmanwasuncounciousbecauseofthecold,andhishandswerestainedwithpaint.03

WhenSuelookedatthelastivyleafagain,shefounditwasn'tmovinginthewind.ItwasreallyBehrman'smasterpiece.04P

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3润色批改词汇润色一般动词细节动词看see/look意外地看到

onlytofind瞥见glancestare盯着看怒视glare注意到观察到noticeobserve词汇润色一般动词细节动词When

Sue

looked

at

the

last

ivy

leaf

again,

shefounditwasn'tmovinginthewind.When

Sue

stared

at

the

last

ivy

leaf,

she

found

itwasn'tmovinginthewind.词汇润色情绪状态身体表征bemovedtotearswordsfailedsb.when.....smilelightsupone'sfaceJohnsy

and

Sue

smiled

at

each

other

andembraced.Johnsy

and

Sue

embraced

each

other

and

smileslituptheirfaces.词汇润色缺少形容丰富形容pullsb.intoa

gentleembrace=drawsb.intoa

tighthugutterlyamazedherbright

smilingface词汇润色单一状语多样状语

副词utterly

amazedImmediately,Suesentfor...couldhardly

waittodeeply

moved...词汇润色单一状语多样状语

介词短语withhishandsstainedwithpaintshe

popped

her

head

out

of

window

withcuriosity句式润色单一状语多样状语

非谓语动词Johnsy

found

the

leaf

was

strong

and

she

alsohadthewilltolive.Finding

the

leaf

was

strong,

Johnsy

also

hadthewilltolive.句式润色单一状语多样状语

非谓语动词After

the

doctor

checked

Johnsy's

condition,hebelievedshewouldrecoververysoon.Having

checked

Johnsy's

condition,

thedoctorbelievedshewouldrecoververysoon.句式润色单一状语多样状语

状语从句WhenSue

staredatthelastivyleaf,shefounditwasn'tmovinginthewind.Paragraph1The

next

morning,

when

Sue

pushed

the

curtains

open,she

and

Johnsy

were

surprised

to

find

the

last

leafsurvived.

【1】Finding

the

leaf

was

strong,

Johnsy,

sitting

upstraight

on

her

bed

then,

also

had

the

will

to

live.

【2】Suepulled

Johnsy

into

a

gentle

embrace,

smiles

lighting

up

theirfaces.

【3】Immediately,

Sue

jumped

out

to

send

for

the

doctorand

couldn't

wait

to

inform

him

of

the

good

news.

【4】Havingchecked

Johnsy's

condition,

the

doctor

believed

she

wouldrecover

very

soon,

which

brought

great

joy

to

the

sisters.(69words)Paragraph2The

doctor

was

about

to

leave

when

he

suddenlyremembered

to

tell

Sue

her

neighbor

Behrman

was

broughtto

the

hospital

that

morning.

【

1】

The

doctor

added

thatBehrman

was

found

lying

in