高中三年级全学期英语《读后续写语言3》教学课件

年级：高中一年级学科：英语课题：读后续写--语言（三）

(2016年10月浙江卷)OneweekendinJuly,

Jane

andherhusband,

Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbya

lake

intheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”and

walked

away.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehad

climbed

toahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落）somewhere

atadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundto

astream.

Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janehearda

helicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffher

yellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.standardsfullscore25，7levels评分档次描

述（22-25分）

①logicplots②detaileddescription,variedsentencepatterns③properconnections

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Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight,whichwasquiteoutofherexpectation.Sheloweredherheadinsorrow,tearsrollingdownonhercheeks.Evensomenoisesmadeherfacepale.Slowlyfearcreptuponher.Huggingherkneesunderatree,shethoughtabout

Tom.“Hemusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybehewasinoneofthemandwillcomebackagain!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”Shefellasleep,dreamingofseeingTom.Paragraph2:

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

Aftereatingsomeberriesandthenwalkingalongthe

stream,shehopedtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Seeingarockinanopenarea

atadistance,sherushedtotherock,climbedontoitandwaited,craningherneck.Thehelicopterappearedagain.Janeflutteredherhands,whichsignaledclearlywhereitshouldland.Itdidn’tmissJaneanditlandedslowly.Jumpingoffthehelicopter,TomrantowardsJane.Withtearsstreamingdownherface,sheburstoutcrying,hookingherarmsaroundTom'sneck...Howmanyscoreswillyougive?Problems:Therearealomostnoeffectiveconnectors.LearningobjectivesBytheendofthisperiod,we’llbeableto:1.introduceseveralstrategiestomakeapassagemorelogical;2.makethepassagemorelogicalbyusingsomeeffectiveconnectors.Whatarethestrategiestomakeapassagelogical?1.substitution替代

Someanimalsproduceagreatvarietyofnoisesandscientistshavewonderedwhetherthesesoundsmakeupalanguage.Dianawasdead,whichmadealotofpeoplesad.2.repetition重复

Wewalkedandwalkeduntilverylateinthenight.Itseemedthatithadbeenalong,longday,andwefeltexhausted.3.anaphora前指Studentsareseldomexpectedtomemorizeinformation;instead,theyareencouragedtothinkforthemselves.Janehadtostayintheforestforanothercoldnight,andthis

madeherveryfrightened.4.conjunction---timeatthistime,first;second,atlast,next,previously,simultaneously,eventually,lastbutnotleast,tobeginwith,tostartwith,toendwith,finally,allofasudden,afewminuteslater...Theyfoughtabattle．Afterwardsitsnowed．Sherushedtotherock,climbedontoitandwaited,craningherneck.Allofasudden,

thehelicopterappearedagain.4.conjunction---causeandeffect因果because,becauseofthis,,anotherimportantfactor/reasonof...,since,as,for,inthat，owingto,dueto,forthereasonthat…,inviewof，resultfrom,asaresultofthis,therefore,…andso…,consequently,asaresult,thus,hence,so,sothat…,asaconsequence...Shemissedthetrain.Asaconsequence,shehadtowait.Janeflutteredherhands.Becauseofthis,itdidn’tmissJaneandlandedslowly.

4.conjunction---contrast转折but，evenso，however，though，eventhough，independentof，recklessof，despitethat，inspiteofthat，regardlessof，yet，unless，nonetheless，unfortunately,onthecontrary,differentfromthis...

Allthefigureswerecorrect；they’dbeenchecked．Yetthetotalcameoutwrong．

Janeflutteredherhands.Unfortunately,

nobodycametohelp.4.conjunction---parallel,progressiverelation并列和递进and;also，too，aswellas，either...or...，both…and...furthermore，moreover，further，，notonly...butalso...，not…but...，inaddition(to)，additionally,muchmoreinteresting,morespecifically，next，besides，moreover，ofevengreaterappeal...Shemissedthetrain.Moreover,shehadtonofoodtoeat.Janeflutteredherhands.Additionally,

sheevencriedloudlytocatchpeople'sattention.4.conjunction---examplesforexample,forinstance,inthiscase,namely,instance,asyouknow；youmayas/say;asheexplains;like;suchas；acaseinpointis，inparticular，including，toputitsimply，statedroughly，asanillustration，Shemissedthetrain.Moreover,shehadtonofoodtoeat.Janeflutteredherhands.Additionally,

sheevencriedloudlytocatchpeople'sattention.4.conjunction---emphasis强调infact，especially，particularly，whatismoreimportant，inreality，certainly，ofcourse，indeed，inparticular，nottomention，believeitornot，undeniably，itiscertain/surethat…，definitely，undoubtedly，withoutadoubt，intruth,inanyevent，obviously...Thiswasadarkforest.Undoubtedly,shehadtostayinitforacoldnight.Janeflutteredherhands.Obviously,shesparednoeffortstocatchpeople'sattenion.4.conjunction---placebeyond，oppositeto，adjacentto，atthesameplace，inthemiddle，around，infrontof，inthedistance，farther，hereandthere，above，below，between，onthisside，Sherestedherselfunderatree.Above,stoodanowlonthebranch.Shehopedtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Inthedistance,therewasalargelake.Basedonvarietiesofdifferentmeans,wecanmakeapassagemorelogicallyconnected.1.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight,whichwasquiteoutofherexpectation.

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Asaresult,

Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight,whichwasquiteoutofherexpectation.caueandeffect+substitution2.Evensomenoisesmadeherfacepale.Slowlyfearcreptuponher.Evensomenoisesmadeherfacepale.Slowlyfearcreptuponherundoubtedly.

emphasisSeeingarockinanopenarea

atadistance,sherushedtotherock,climbedontoitandwaited,craningherneck.Thehelicopterappearedagain.Janeflutteredherhands,whichsignaledclearlywhereitshouldland.Itdidn’tmissJaneanditlandedslowly.Seeingarockinanopenarea

atadistance,sherushedtotherock,climbedontoitandwaited,craningherneck.Thenthehelicopterappearedagain.Janeflutteredherhands,whichsignaledclearlywhereitshouldland.Thistime,itdidn’tmissJaneandlandedslowly.

timeRewritethepassagewithlogicalconnectorsParagraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Asaresult,Jane

hadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight,whichwasquiteoutofherexpectation.Sheloweredherheadinsorrow,tearsrollingdownonhercheeks.Evensomenoisesmadeherfacepale.Slowlyfearcreptuponherundoubtedly.

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