读后续写专题第10章如何快速进行原文仿写

读后续写之原文仿写“以终为始”:“知其目的,投其所好”◆“原文仿写”?以续促学”:“协同效应”理论“读.后.续写”:读语篇,模仿语言◆“读不懂原文”怎么办?(阅读材料要)易于理解和模仿”培养关注语篇、模仿语言的能力◆“直接套模板”可以吗?要求:“必须..防止事先背诵后的套写”结论:创造性模仿(语言可模仿,但内容要创造)◆“高分句式怕用错,用吗”?建议多写高分句式，亮点词汇减少错误:①仿原文句式;②备好万用句式读后续写全过程读原文:(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件(2)P1P2重点词(原文关键在哪)(疑惑之处,回原文找线索)(3)中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是?/看中文注释)2.设计固定的5句P1:XXXX①第四步:接首句(据给定句，接心理/动作)②围绕主要情节，以句式倒推内容③同②④同②.⑤第-步:结尾句(P2给定句上1个动作)P2:XXXx⑥第五步:接首句(据给定句，接心理/动作)⑦同②⑧同②⑨第二步:结尾句(角色1反应)⑩第三步:结尾句(角色2反应)/升华句3.另外五句:仿原文句式，逆推内容设计(1)仿原文句式(续写原文:常见句式10大类-熟悉/能辨析)自备句式(续写第4-7章:10大语法句式-熟记/能运用)1、读原文,步骤:(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件(2)P1P2重点词(原文关键在哪)(疑惑之处，回原文找线索)中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是?/看中文注释)who/关键词明线:动词/名词暗线：形容词人物1用来续写:延续关键动作/情节个性特点：预判人物行为/心里/结局人物2环境事物地点/环境/事物(作为续写的素材/工具)what关键句需求/冲突/待做的事(暗线，决定人物行为/心理/结局)P1P2关键词the+名词”;转机(定结尾);需求3w1H(各段落)①各类描写占比;②关键语法句式(挑选仿写)真题举例IwaswalkingalongtheroadtoschoolonedayandImetmyfriendRaine.Hesuggestedthatweskipschoolandgotothemovies.Irefusedasmydadwasveryfierceandstrict.Aítermuchpersuasion,Igavein.TherewasaWillSmithmovieonandIwasafan.Sowesetofftothemoviestogether,boughtourtickets,popcornanddrinksandsettleddowncomfortably.Aswewereearly,thelightswerestillon.Wewatchedpeoplecomeingroups,familiesandtherewerecouplestoo.Someofthemlookedlikeschoolstudentsplayingtruant(il#)likeus.AsIturnedaround,IcaughtaglimpseofmyuncleAndyandAuntJanewalkingin.Theywerekindandcaredaboutmeverymuch.Isankintomyseatquicklytoavoidbeingspotted.IsignaledtoRainethattherewassomeoneIdidn'twanttoseeandRainemadeitmoreobviousbytuningaroundandaskingWho?Andwhere?"loudly.Itmademesitevenlowerinmyseat.Tomakethingsworse,theycameandsatintherowbehindusandweresayingtoeachotherhowIwouldhavelovedtocometothismovieasIadoredWillSmith.Theywereevencommentingaboutthestudentsplayingtruant.SoonthemoviebeganandIwasgladwhenthelightswereturnedoffbutIdidn'tenjoythemovieatallforfearofbeingspotted.So,Isattherelikeanastronaut,peeringoverthefrontseat.EverynowandthenIwouldsecretlytakeaquicklookatmyauntanduncle.Iwassuretheywerealsolookingatme.Feelingnervousandanxious,IkeptwonderinghowIcouldleavethecinemawithoutbeingnoticed.[2022韶关一模]Paragraph1:Whenthemovieendedandthelightscameon,Iremainedseated.Paragraph2:Infrontofusweremyauntanduncle,waitingatthegate.1、读原文,步骤:(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件（每1句几乎皆可做结局呼应）首段:逃学看电影首段:IwaswalkingalongtheroadtoschoolonedayandImetmyfriendRaine.Hesuggestedthatweskipschoolandgotothemovies.Irefusedasmydadwasveryfierceandstrict.Aftermuchpersuasion,Igavein.TherewasaWillSmithmovieonandIwasafan.尾段：我躲藏尾段:EverynowandthenIwouldsecretlytakeaquicklookatmyauntanduncle.Iwassuretheywerealsolookingatme.Feelingnervousandanxious,IkeptwonderinghowIcouldleavethecinemawithoutbeingnoticed.P1：未拆穿Paragraph1:Whenthemovieendedandthelightscameon,Iremainedseated.Paragraph2:Infrontofusweremyauntanduncle,waitingatthegate.(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件（每1句几乎皆可做结局呼应）(2)P1P2重点词(推原文关键)(疑惑之处，回原文找线索)(3)中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是?/看中文注释)Sowesetofftothemoviestogether,boughtourtickets,popcornanddrinksandsettleddowncomfortably.Aswewereearly,thelightswerestillon.Wewatchedpeoplecomeingroups,familiesandtherewerecouplestoo.Someofthemlookedlikeschoolstudentsplayingtruant(逃学)likeus.AsIturnedaround,IcaughtaglimpseofmyuncleAndyandAuntJanewalkingin.Theywerekindandcaredaboutmeverymuch.Isankintomyseatquicklytoavoidbeingspotted.IsignaledtoRainethattherewassomeoneIdidn'twanttoseeandRainemadeitmoreobviousbytuningaroundandasking“Who?Andwhere?"loudly.Itmademesitevenlowerinmyseat.◆明线v/n:学生逃学I看见叔姨I我躲|猪队友大声暴露◆暗线adj.:叔姨对我好I我不该|怕被发现|被发现而不知(3)中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是?/看中文注释)Tomakethingsworse,theycameandsatintherowbehindusandweresayingtoeachotherhowIwouldhavelovedtocometothismovieasIadoredWillSmith.Theywereevencommentingaboutthestudentsplayingtruant.SoonthemoviebeganandIwasgladwhenthelightswereturnedoffbutIdidn'tenjoythemovieatallforfearofbeingspotted.So,Isattherelikeanastronaut,peeringoverthefrontseat.◆明线v/n:叔姨坐我们后面I叔姨说逃学的学生|我偷窥◆暗线adj.:叔姨没戳破|被发现而不知读原文，找素材who/关键词[明线]:动词/名词[暗线]:形容词RaineandII:lovedtocome;peer;R:persuade;askedloudlyafan;fearofbeingspotted;nervousandanxiousUncleandAuntcommentingaboutthestudentsplayingtruantkindandcaredaboutmeDadfierceandstrict环境事物cinema;seat;lights;what关键句leavethecinemawithoutbeingnoticed/spottedP1P2关键词P1:lightson,Iseated;P2:Auntandunclewaitingatthegate3w1Hplayingtruant;watchedmovie2.设计固定的5句:第一步:P1结尾句:据Paragraph2给定句出现的人物/动作,写前一个动作/事件第二/三步:P2结尾句(1-2句)+升华:(1)根据事件,定合价值观的结局(逃学)(2)各个角色，对应的做法第四/五步:P1/P2续写首句(承接给定句,写心理/动作链)P1:Whenthemovieendedandthelightscameon,Iremainedseated.①第四步心理:担心害怕/动作:躲②人们&叔姨最终离开,没看见我们③我们松口气④我们离开⑤第一步:我们抵达大门感觉前方有人P2:Infrontofusweremyauntanduncle,waitingatthegate.⑥第五步心理:震惊忐忑/动作:不自在⑦我&R解释⑧叔姨拆穿:早就发现⑨第二步我/Raine:意识到&承认错误⑩第三步叔姨:教育/呼应首段/或升华3.另外五句:仿原文句式，逆推内容设计如何遣词造句?“读语篇，模仿语言”->留意原文高频句式，可适当仿写好处:减少错误原文找句式:(续写原文:10大常见句式,依次)●When/As...时间状语从句●非谓语(V-ing/V-ed/Todo)●从句(定从/名从)●副词/介词短语!●对话独白●倒装句●虚拟语气●无灵主语(无生命事物作主语,尤其情绪)●比喻●特殊小词(as...;.so...tht..IwaswalkingalongtheroadtoschoolonedayandImetmyfriendRaine.Hesuggeested:thatweskipschoolandgotothemovies.Irefusedasmydadwasveryfierceandstrict.Aftermuchpersuasion,Igavein.TherewasaWillSmithmovieonandIwasafan.Sowesetofftothemoviestogether,boughtourtickets,popcornanddrinksandsettleddowncomfortably.Aswewereearly,thelightswerestillon.Wewatchedpeoplecomeingroups,familiesandtherewerecouplestoo.Someofthemlookedlikeschoolstudentsplayingtruant(t逃学)likeus.AsIturnedaround,IcaughtaglimpseofmyuncleAndyandAuntJanewalkingin.Theywerekindandcaredaboutmeverymuch.Isankintomyseatquicklytoavoidbeingspotted.IsignaledtoRainethattherewassomeoneIdidn'twanttoseeandRainemadeitmoreobviousbytuningaroundandaskingWho?Andwhere?"loudly.Itmademesitevenlowerinmyseat.Tomakethingsworse,theycameandsatintherowbehindusandweresayingtoeachotherhowIwouldhavelovedtocometothismovieasIadoredWillSmith.Theywereevencommentingaboutthestudentsplayingtruant.SoonthemoviebeganandIwasgladwhenthelightswereturnedoffbutIdidn'tenjoythemovieatallforfearofbeingspotted.So,Isattherelikeanastronaut,peeringoverthefrontseat.EverynowandthenIwouldsecretlytakeaquicklookatmyauntanduncle.Iwassuretheywerealsolookingatme.Feelingnervousandanxious,IkeptwonderinghowIcouldleavethecinemawithoutbeingnoticed.阅读时，留意原文高频句式◆原文关键句式:(部分列举)●Sowesetofftothemoviestogether,boughtourtickets,popcornanddrinksandsettleddowncomfortably.●Feelingnervousandanxious,IkeptwonderinghowIcouldleavethecinemawithoutbeingnoticed.●AsIturnedaround,Icaughtaglimpseofmyuncle....walkingin.2●Tomakethingsworse,theycameandsatintherowbehindusand..●So,Isattherelikeanastronaut,peeringoverthefrontseat.得出本文高频句式:①动词排比:V1,V2,andV3;②非谓语:Feeling+情绪形容词,sbdidsth.③时间状从+非谓:Assbdidsth,sbcaughtaglimpseofsbdoingsth;(heard/saw)④非谓语不定式:Todosth,sbdidsth;⑤对话;⑥其他:比喻;as...as;so...that....◆原文句式仿写示例:尾段:EverynowandthenIwouldsecretlytakeaquicklookatmyauntanduncle.Iwassuretheywerealsolookingatme.Feelingnervousandanxious,IkeptwonderinghowIcouldleavethecinemawithoutbeingnoticed.句式提炼:Feeling+情绪形容词,IwonderedhowIcoul...without...句式仿写:FeelingEmbarrassed,IwonderedhowIcouldexplaineverythingwithoutbeingblamed.感到尴尬，我想知道如何解释一切而不会受到指责。以此类推，设计另外五句总结全篇展示写作全国过程细致解析P1:Whenthemovieendedandthelightscameon,Iremainedseated.Astheotheraudiencestartedmovingtowardsthedoor,Ipaidcloserattentiontomyuncleandauntwho,however,stillsattheretalking.原文仿写:As时间状从原文仿写:seesbdoingShortlyafterwards,tomygreatrelief,Isawthemstandingupandwalkingtothedoor.Themomentthecoastwasclear,weleftourseats,madeadashoutofthehall,andfleddownthestairswithoutanydelay.原文仿写:V1,V2andV3原文仿写:When时间状从WerantowardsthegateofthecinemalikecrazywhenIspottedtwofamiliarfigures.P2:In,frontofusweremyauntanduncle,waitingatthegate.Myuncleshotmeasignificantlookwhileauntstoodtheresmiling.Stunnedandembarrassed,IfeltmytongueknottedandwonderedhowIcouldexplainthewholestorywithoutbeingblamed.原文尾句仿写:情绪形容词,IwonderedhowIcould.."Wesawyouwhileleaving.Weagreedyoushouldcomeandenjoythemovie,butobviouslynotnow.Thinkabouthowdisappointedyourfatherwouldbe."Onhearingthis,anenormousshameenvelopedmeandIswiftlyconfessedeverything.BothRaineandIreflectedonwhatwehavedonewrong,madesincereapologiesandheadedbacktoschoolatlast.可适当仿写原文高频句式，非必须P1:Whenthemovieendedandthelightscameon,Iremainedseated.Astheotheraudiencestartedmovingtowardsthedoor,Ipaidcloserattentiontomyuncleandaunt,who,however,stillsattheretalking.原文仿写:As时间状从补:who定从当其他观众开始向门口移动时,我更仔细地注意我的叔叔和阿姨，然而，他们仍然坐在那里说话。原文仿写:seesbdoingShortlyafterwards,tomygreatrelief,Isawthemstandingupandwalkingtothedoor.不久之后，令我松了一口气的是，我看到他们站起来走到门口。Themomentthecoastwasclear,weleftourseats,madeadashoutofthehall,andfleddownthestairswithoutanydelay.[原文仿写:V1,V2andV3(动词排比)危机解除的那一刻，我们离开座位，冲出大厅，毫不拖延地逃下楼梯。WerantowardsthegateofthecinemalikecrazywhenIspottedtwofamiliarfigures.(=whentwofamiliarfigurescameintomysight.)原文仿写：when时间状语从句我们疯狂地向电影院门口跑去，这时我发现了两个熟悉的身影。P2:Infrontofusweremyauntanduncle,waitingatthegate.Myuncleshotmeasignificantlookwhileauntstoodtheresmiling.舅舅意味深长地看我一眼，阿姨站在那里微笑着。Stunnedandembarrassed,IfeltmytongueknottedandwonderedhowIcouldexplainthewholestorywithoutbeingblamed.原文尾句仿写：情绪形容词IwonderhowIcould...我感到震惊和尴尬，舌头打结,想知道我该如何解释整个故事而不受到指责。"Wesawyouwhileleaving.Weagreedyoushouldcomeandenjoythemovie,butobviouslynotnow.Thinkabouthowdisappointedyourfatherwouldbe."“我们在离开时看到你了。我们赞同你应该来欣赏这部电影，但显然不是现在。想想你父亲会有多失望。”Onhearingthis,anenormousshameenvelopedmeandIswiftlyconfessedeverything.听到这句话，我感到无比羞耻，我迅速承认了一-切。BothRaineandIreflectedonwhatwehave