初中英语人教课标版九年级全一册-英语作文课-公开课

Sheisakindteacher.Inordertohelpyou,shealwaysworkshard.Sheisateacherwhoisveryhelpful,forexample,shealwayshelpsyouwithyourChinese.Whoisshe?Let’splayaguessinggame!Sheisateacherwholikestravelling.Sheisateacher.EnglishWriting--TrytomakeyourwritingbetterpollutionHi!Tina,I’mhappytogetyourletter.Ihearthatthepollutionisbad.Ihavesomesuggestions.Youshouldwalktoschool.Youshouldturnofflights.Youshouldplantsometrees.Youshouldusesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Thesearemysuggestions.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterlater.Yours,BillTinaI’mhappytogetyourletter.Youshouldwalktoschool.Tip1:Usewordsandphrasesproperlyandvividly.用词适切、生动I’mhappytoreceiveyourletter.Youshouldgotoschoolonfoot.Howtomakeitmore

vivid(生动的)？I’mhappytohearfromyou.Youshouldgotoschoolonfootinsteadoftakingcars.PartsofBody:正文(节选)Youshouldwalktoschool.Youshouldturnofflights.Youshouldplantsometrees.Youshouldusesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.

Sentencepatterns(句型)ofgivingadvice:should/candosthWhynotdosth?/Whydon’tyoudosth?Whataboutdoingsth?/Howaboutdoingsth?Itis+adj+forsbtodosthItisagoodideatodosthHadbetterdosthItisbettertodosthTrytodosthLet’sdosth…Let’swalktoschool.Itisagoodideatowalktoschool.You’dbetterwalktoschool.…Tip2:

Trytousedifferentsentencepatterns(句型).We’dbetterturnofflightssothatwecansaveenergy.Youshouldturnofflights.PartsofBody:正文(节选)AdverbialClause状语从句sothat…,when,inorderto,…Turnofflightswhenweleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.Inordertosaveenergy,let’sturnofflights.…Youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.Youshouldplantsometrees.PartsofBody:正文(节选)AttributiveClause定语从句that,which……Tip3:

Usecomplexsentences(复合句)tomakesentencesbetter.Youshouldplantsometreesthatcanmakeourearthgreen.Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.PartsofBody:

正文(节选)Trytoaddanexample.forexample,suchas…Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes,suchasusingclothbagsinsteadofplasticbags.…Tip4:

Addexamplestomakeyourwritingpersuasive(有说服力的).

Hi!Tina,I’mhappytohearfromyou.BecauseI’msorrytohearthatthepollutionisserious.Ihavesomesuggestionsforyou.Let’swalktoschoolinsteadoftakingcars.It’sgoodforustoreduceairpollution.Youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.Turnofflightswhenweleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.Usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Thesearemysuggestions.Ifeveryonestartstodosomething,theworldwillbesaved.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterandbetterinthefuture.Yours,BillTip5:Uselinkingwordsproperly连接词使用恰当

()Coherent(连贯的)?写作中句子和句子之间比较常用的连接词1.表示并列/递进关系：and,besides,what’smore,also,notonly…,butalso…,atthesametime,…2.表示转折关系：but,however,…3.表示因果关系：because,since,so,therefore,…4.表示结果：asaresult,so…that…,…5.表示先后：First,Second,Third,Next,Finally…6.表示时间：when,while,after,before,assoonas…7.表示总结：inaword,generallyspeaking,allinall…

Hi!Tina,I’mhappytohearfromyou._______I’msorrytohearthatthepollutionisserious.____Ihavesomesuggestionsforyou.

______,Let’swalktoschoolinsteadoftakingcars.It’sgoodforustoreducepollution._______,Turnofflights______weleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.__________,youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.________,usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Thesearemysuggestions.Ifeveryonestartstodosomething,theworldwillbesaved.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterandbetterinthefuture.Yours,Billfinally,so,firstly,but;when;secondly;what’smore;

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Firstly,let’swalktoschoolinsteadoftakingcars.It’sgoodforustoreducepollution.Secondly,turnofflightswhenweleavetheclassroomstosaveenergy.What’smore,youshouldplantsometreesthataregoodfortheenvironment.Finally,usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.Finally,usesomethingthatcanbeusedmanytimes.Forexample,wecanusechinacupsinsteadofpaperones.

Hi!Tina.I’mhappytohearfromyou.ButI’msorrytohearthatthepollutionisserious.SoIhavesomesuggestionsforyou.

Thesearemysuggestions.Ifeveryonestartstodosomething,theworldwillbesaved.Ihopetheenvironmentinyourhometownwillbebetterandbetterinthefuture.Tip6:Makesurethestructure(结构)isclear.

作文评分标准评分原则：1.按5个档次给分。中档属第三档（9分—7分）。2.按学生所写内容和所用语言确定档次（内容分和语言分各占一半）。3.卷面整洁，词数符合要求。总词数不足40词可在本题总得分中扣去3分；超过120个可在本题总得分中扣去2分。4.内容评分要点：（1）内容的完整性；（6分）（2）语言的得体性和多样性（4分）；5.各档次的给分范围和要求：第五档（很好）：（15—13分）完全完成试题规定的任务。信息全。‚语言可读性强，语言结构基本正确，有少量错误。第四档（好）：（12—10分）完全完成试题规定的任务。