2025届高考英语一轮复习读后续写说课课件

沿用文风定语言，丰富描绘来写意蕲春一中

余蕾Continuationwriting——以BOOK2U4单元主题语境读后续写课为例CONTENTS1234延时符Strategies

Theory&Solution

ProblemsTeachingProcedures-01-9月联考学生续写主要问题9月联考学生问题分析学生在续写中遇到最大的问题是：1.不知道选什么词来表达自己的意思

2.语言不准确不丰富3.续写内容语言风格与前文不协调-02-理论和解决问题的办法

AnalysisofprospositionalintentionContinuationwritingisanewtexttypeintheCollegeEntranceExamination,whichfirstappearedintheZhejiangCollegeEntranceExaminationof2016.Continuationwritingwillclosely

combinereadingandwriting,

focusontheaccuracyandrichnessoflanguageuse,

teststudents'abilitytograspthekeyinformationandlanguagecharacteristicsofthepassage,andtheabilitytocontroltextstructureandcreativethinking.(LiuQingsi,2016).Italsowillhelpstudentsbuildmoralintegrityandahealthyoutlookonlife.学生在阅读所给故事的基础上，在关键词和/或段首句的提示下续写两段话，要求学生在续写部分的故事内容和语言表达上和阅读材料保持一致，使两者产生协同性，促进学生的综合语言运用能力。AnalysisofGradingCriteria评分标准________________________________________Solution：王初明教授提出：“内容要创造，语言要模仿，创造与模仿要紧密结合。”分析原文的语言特色对增加原文协同性非常重要。对语言风格的分析应包括语言中高级词汇、长难句的使用和各种细节描写的运用。语言风格协同(LinguisticSynergy)-03-如何构建一堂以单元主题为依托的读后续写课依托高考真题结合单元语境读后续写

课例分享授课老师：余蕾教学重点：如何研读文本语言特征，在原文中获取丰富地道的语言表达？教学难点：如何基于语言协同原则查找语言素材，在续写中实现模仿与创新？雪夜圣诞Decemberstrode(阔步走)intothemountainsofColorado,shootingsnowflakesandblowingthemintoathickblanketofwhite.AsChristmasapproached,thefarmerstherecloseddownmostwoodenhousesforaholidaycheer.Notallwereclosed,however.Therewasstillworktobedone,andsomeonehadtostay.ThatsomeonewasSlimCarter.OldJake,anotherfarmerthere,hadofferedtokeephimcompany,butSlimshookhishead.“Afterall,ayoungmanlikemehasgotplentyofChristmasesahead,"Slimjoked.BeforeJakeofferedtostayagain,Slimhurriedon.“I'lljusthaveaprivateChristmasthisyear,andthat'sthewayIwantit."Sohewasleftaloneatthehouse.Alone,withhishorseinthefarmandthewolvesroaringintheforestnearby.Truthwas,SlimhaddecidednottocelebrateChristmasatall.Itwasn'tthathedidn'tlikeChristmas.Infact,hisChristmasmemoriesweregoodones.Hismotherwouldfilltheirhousewiththelightofcandlesandthesmellofcandy.HisfatherwouldmaketheirChristmastreehuntanall-day,men-onlyaffair.Slimsmiledasherememberedsittingonthebroadbackoftheirhorsewiththefreshlycuttreealongbehind.Backhome,theywouldcoverthetreewithpapersnowflakesandhomemadedecorationsandsingalltheChristmassongstheyknew.Andthat'sthewayhelikedit.Thosewerethememorieshepulledoutonnightswhenhewasworkingalone.Suchmemorieswarmedhiminside,evenifhisoutsideswereachingwithcold.1.体裁：记叙文TextType:Narrative2.主题语境：人与社会ThemeContext:HumanandSelf3.话题：独自留守山中圣诞-美丽的雪景，孤单的回忆，夜里的敲门声，会是谁呢？4.主题：体现圣诞精神：爱，善良，温暖.........（ReflectthespiritofChristmas）1.Itisveryinstructiveandeducational.2.Itaccordswiththesocialistvalue.Book2U4FestivalThiswasSlim'sfirstyearawayfromhome.“Christmasisnothingifnotspentwithfamily,"Slimdeclaredtotheemptyhouse.Thatwastherealreasonhe'dsentJakeaway.HefiguredhewouldhandleChristmasbetterifhejustpretendeditwasanordinarywinterworkday.ButonChristmasEve,asSlimheadedbackwithsnowbeneathhisfeetandstarsoverhead,hisheadhunglow.ItwasChristmas,evenwithoutthetreeandthegifts.Christmas,andhewasallalone.

Para.1:Thenheremembereddecoratingthetreewithhisfamilyagain.______________________________________________________________________________

Para.2:WhilesingingtohisdecoratedChristmastree,Slimheardaknockonthedoor._____________________________________________________________________

03教学过程OutlinetheplotReadforbasicelements

Buildtheframework如何读？（教学过程略）从三个角度1.词句选择

Wordselection（提高语言表达的丰富性准确性）2.场景描写Scenedescription

（确保语言运用的的得体性）3.修辞手法Rhetoricaldeviceapplication

（关注语言运用的有效性）如何研读文本语言，在原文中获取丰富地道的语言表达？Step3分析原文语言特征：如何写？（这节课要解决的重点问题）大量动词短语（verbphrase）动作链（actionchain）closeddownofferedtokeepcompanyofferedtostayagainfill......withcoverthetreewithpulledoutdeclaredtoheadedback非谓语动词（non-finiteverb）.........shootingsnowflakesandblowing.....Step3分析原文语言特征：一：Wordselection（词句选择）各类从句（variousclauses）With复合结构（单元主题句式）withChristmasapproaching............Withhishorseinthefarmandthewolvesroaringintheforestnearby..................withthefreshlycuttreealongbehind.................withsnowbeneathhisfeetandstaroverhead........一：Wordselection（词句选择）二.Scenedescription(场景描写)语言描写：对话（dialogue）独白（monologue）“Afterall,ayoungmanlikemehasgotplentyofChristmasesahead,".......“I'lljusthaveaprivateChristmasthisyear,andthat'sthewayIwantit.‘’

“Christmasisnothingifnotspentwithfamily,"...........心理描写：Suchmemorieswarmedhiminside,evenifhisoutsideswereachingwithcold.withsnowbeneathhisfeetandstarsoverhead,hisheadhunglow.Sohewasleftaloneatthehouse.Alone..........Christmas,andhewasallalone.三.Rhetoricaldeviceapplication(修辞手法应用）

无灵主语（Inanimatesubject）+比喻（metaphor）December

strode(阔步走)intothemountainsofColorado,shootingsnowflakesandblowingthemintoathickblanketofwhite.对比：（contrast）Suchmemorieswarmedhiminside,evenifhisoutsideswereachingwithcold.withsnowbeneathhisfeetandstarsoverhead,hisheadhunglow.Step4.如何构建续写语料（模仿+创新）从四个方面入手1.

沿用follow（主要体现在时态上）2.

借用borrow（直接在原文中搬用单词，短语和结构，是语言协同的基本方法）3.

仿用imitate（通过感知原文语言特色，在续写时，应于原文风格保持一致，但应避免为了博人眼球，故意使用长难句和特殊句型的做法）4.

创新innovate（语言水平较高的同学，可以根据原文中使用的语言结构，进行更加灵活自如的表达，更好的展示学生的语言水平。）仿写练习：模仿+创新

（搭建续写语言支架）Para1:砍树+装扮圣诞树1.with复合结构：烛光在屋里闪烁着（仿用）2.感叹句：他多么想念蜡烛和新砍的树所散发的香味啊！（创新）3.非谓语动词：决定即使是自己一个人也要庆祝圣诞节，他动身前往森林深处寻找圣诞树。（仿用）4.动作链：他穿上厚外套，抓起斧头，然后打开大门。（仿用）5.倒装：一扛着新砍的树到家，他就迫不及待的开始装扮。（创新+借用）6.夸张修辞手法：似乎过了一个世纪，他终于装扮好了圣诞树（创新）7.with复合结构：脸上露出了灿烂的微笑（仿用）仿写练习：模仿+创新

（搭建续写语言支架）Para2：二人欢度圣诞节+主题升华（体现圣诞精神）1.语言描写（独白）：这么晚了，会是谁呢？（仿用）2.with复合结构：篮子里装满了酒（仿用）3.语言描写（对话）：OldJake笑的合不拢嘴，大声说：“圣诞节快乐！”（仿用）4.心理描写+无灵主语：一阵巨大的惊讶和感激感淹没了他。（仿用）5.with复合结构：在oldJake的陪伴下，他过了一个难忘的圣诞节。（仿用）6.定语从句：.........他也是他的家人，用温暖，善良和爱装满了他的心灵。（创新）课堂呈现课堂呈现原生态课堂课堂呈现下笔如有神讨论很热烈Step5学生作品赏析：根据写作提纲，模仿续写原文语言风格并创新形成续写成品。Step6：HowtopolishthewritingPara1:Thenheremembereddecoratingthetreewithhisfamilyagain.Atthatmoment,hisfamilyweresittingaroundthetableandenjoyingthebigfeast,Withthelightofcandlesflickeringinthehouse.(烛光在屋内闪烁着).How

hemissedthesmelloflightedcandlesandnewly-cuttree!（感叹句）Allofasudden,SlimCarterputon

histhickcoat,grabbed

anaxeand

opened

thedoor.（动作链）

Determinedto

celebratetheChristmasevenonhisown,Slimheadedforthedarkforestinthehopeoffindinganidealtree.（非谓语动词）

Itdidn’ttakealongtimebefore(没过多久)hefoundandcutasmalltree.Nosooner

hadhecarriedthefreshlycuttreeintothewoodenhousethan

hebegantodecorateitwithpapersnowflakes,home-madedecorations,justashisfamilydidbefore.（倒装句）Afterwhatseemedlikecenturies(似乎几个世纪的时间),hefinishedthejobofdecoratingthetree,abigsmilebloomingacrosshisface.(脸上露出了灿烂的笑容).Para2:WhilesingingtohisdecoratedChristmastree,Slimheardaknockonthedoor.

“Whocoulditbe?”Slim

sighed

and

steppedup

toopenthedoor.Themomentthe

dooropened,aheadpokedin.ItwasOldJake,

withabasketfilledwithabottleofwine,

candiesandseveralgiftpackage