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热点05减负【预测题目】虽然人们不停的说给孩子减负，但是大部分学生的学习压力仍然很大，有些青少年尤其是高三的学生出现了心理问题，焦虑，不愿意与人交往等。就这种现象，你们班要举行一次班会，作为班长，写一篇发言稿。内容包括：1.健康的心理很重要。2..给同学提些建议：如了解自己，树立信心；与人相处；热爱生活注意：1.字数不少于100字。2.适当增加细节，使行文连贯。Dearclassmates,______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.下面这幅照片展现了女儿为回家妈妈拿包的情景。请根据你对这幅照片的理解用英语写一篇短文。你的短文应包含以下内容：1. 描述照片内容，如情景、人物、动作，等等；2. 结合自身实际，谈谈你的感想；3. 举例说明你能为家长减负做些什么。注意：1. 可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示，作必要的发挥想象。2. 词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。3. 作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。Theburdenofstudentshasbeenahottopicforyears,buttheloadofparentshasreceivedlittleattention,especiallyfromtheirownchildren.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．假如你是李华，你听说好友陈辉因为压力太大想辍学。请你根据以下要点提示给他写一封信:1.劝陈辉正确对待压力，并提出减轻压力的几个方法；2.希望陈辉接受自己的建议。注意:1.词数80左右；参考词汇:辍学dropout2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．假如你是李华，你听说好友小明因为压力太大想辍学。请你根据以下要点提示给他写一封信：1.劝小明正确对待压力，并提出减轻压力的几个方法；2.希望小明接受自己的建议。注意：1.词数80左右：2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。DearXiaoMing,________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yourstruly,LiHua4．翻译下列句子，然后加入过渡词，按照逻辑连成80字左右的短文。要求：尽可能用模块六所学词汇和短语；使用从句和分词结构。1．宋小宝，著名的喜剧演员，深受人们的欢迎，他的表演经常使我们捧腹大笑。2．笑可以减轻我们的压力,使我们振作精神；笑可以帮我们驱赶走负面的情绪,培养积极的思维方式；笑对我们的身心有积极的影响，正如谚语所说，“笑是最好的良药”。3．总之，笑在生活中很重要。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．假如你是李华，一名16岁的女生，目前在南阳一中就读。你发现很多学生压力巨大，因此向某报纸编辑Peter写信，分享你的适应高中生活的办法。内容要点应包括：1.确定新的学习目标，养成好习惯；2.学会独立生活，健康生活；3.参加课外活动，减轻压力，拓展视野；4.处理好人际关系。注意：1.内容要连贯完整，可适当增添内容；2.词数：120左右。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6．根据提示，写一篇100词左右的推荐信为了减轻学生的学习压力同时增强学生的体质，学校准备开始一些运动俱乐部，现向学生征求好点子。假如你是Leo，你看见后写信给学校领导推荐开设太极俱乐部，并从太极的作用和文化角度等方面陈述了你的理由，信的开头已经给出并不计入总词数。Dearschoolleaders,Wearesogladtohearthatyouhavedecidedtoopensomeschoolclubs.7．假定你是李华，请给你的笔友Martin写一封电子邮件，介绍音乐的魅力所在，并说明你喜欢的两种音乐类型及其原因。音乐的魅力1.心情愉悦，减轻压力，给人以鼓舞。2.抚慰心灵，了解国外文化。喜欢的音乐1.流行音乐：旋律优美。2.传统音乐：使人安静，领悟生活的真谛。注意：1.词数100左右；2.为使行文连贯，可适当增加内容；3.参考词汇：tune曲调。_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考答案1．Dearclassmates,Mentalhealthissomethingthatdecideswhetherwecanliveahappylifeornot.However,mentalhealthiseasytobeoverlooked,whichcanresultinseriousmentaldiseases.Hereissomeadviceonkeepingmentalhealth.First,knowyourownpotentialandacceptyourself.Insteadofhavingimpracticalandhighexpectationsanddemandsforyourself,youshouldmakepracticalgoalsforyourlife.Second,besociableandmakeasmanyfriendsaspossible.Trytobeapersoneasytogetalongwith.Whenyouarediscouraged,youcanshareyourtroublewithyourfriends,whosecomfortandhelpcangreatlyrelieveyoursufferingsandhelpyouout.Third,loveyourlifeandwork.Trytodisplayyourtalentinyourworkandyoucangetpleasureandsatisfactionfromyourachievements,whichcanhelpyoukeepagoodmood.Thatismyidea.Thankyouforlistening.【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写一篇发言稿，针对学生由于压力过大而出现心理问题这一现象提出一些建议。【详解】第一步：审题体裁：应用文时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。要求：1.健康的心理很重要。2.给同学提些建议：如了解自己，树立信心；与人相处；热爱生活第二步：列提纲（重点词组）liveahappylifeornot;mentalhealth;beeasytodo;overlook;resultin;disease;someadviceondoing;potential;Insteadofdoing;impractical;expectation;makepracticalgoalsfor;sociable;asmanyaspossible;getalongwith;discourage;share...with...;relievesufferings;display;pleasure;achievement;keepagoodmood.第三步：连词成句Mentalhealthissomethingthatdecideswhetherwecanliveahappylifeornot.However,mentalhealthiseasytobeoverlooked,whichcanresultinseriousmentaldiseases.First,knowyourownpotentialandacceptyourself.Insteadofhavingimpracticalandhighexpectationsanddemandsforyourself,youshouldmakepracticalgoalsforyourlife.Second,besociableandmakeasmanyfriendsaspossible.Whenyouarediscouraged,youcanshareyourtroublewithyourfriends,whosecomfortandhelpcangreatlyrelieveyoursufferingsandhelpyouout.Trytodisplayyourtalentinyourworkandyoucangetpleasureandsatisfactionfromyourachievements,whichcanhelpyoukeepagoodmood.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）1.表文章结构顺序：Firstofall,Firstly/First,Secondly/Second…,Andthen,Finally,Intheend,Atlast2.表并列补充关系：Whatismore,Besides,Moreover,Furthermore,InadditionAswellas,notonly…but(also),including,3.表转折对比关系：However,Onthecontrary,but,Although+clause(从句),Inspiteof+n./doing,Ontheonehand…,Ontheotherhand…Some…,whileothers…,asfor,so…that…4.表因果关系：Because,As,So,Thus,Therefore,Asaresult连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。第五步：润色修改【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：Mentalhealthissomethingthatdecideswhetherwecanliveahappylifeornot.这句话运用了that引导的定语从句；Whenyouarediscouraged,youcanshareyourtroublewithyourfriends,whosecomfortandhelpcangreatlyrelieveyoursufferingsandhelpyouout.这句话运用了when引导的时间状语从句，whose引导的定语从句；使用了一些固定词组，如beeasytodo、Insteadofdoing、asmanyaspossible等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。2．【解析】略3．DearChenHui，I'msorrytolearnthatyouintendtodropoutforhighstress.Asoneofyourfriends,Ihopethatyoucangiveuptheidea.Firstofall,youshouldhavearightattitudetowardsstress.Stressisasmallpartinournormallife.Second,Isuggestyoucalmdownandfindoutthecauseofyourstressandmanagetocomeupwithwaysofdealingwithit.Astohowtoreducestress,youmaytakeexercise,listentomusicorturntoyourteachersorclassmatesforhelp.IhopethatyoucantakemysuggestionintoaccountandI'mconvincedthatyouwillmakearightdecision.Yourstruly，Lihua【详解】审题立意：本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给陈辉写封信。人称：使用第一人称和第二人称；时态：使用一般现在时。2.谋篇布局：书信格式，称呼，落款。首段写：了解情况，深表遗憾。中间段写：劝其正确对待压力并提出减轻压力的几个方法。尾段写：希望其接受建议。根据写作要点及构思好的提纲我们可以初步确定文章可能使用到的词汇有：intendto打算，dropout辍学，stress压力，attitude态度，normallife正常的生活，calmdown冷静下来，dealwith处理，解决reduce减少，takeexercise锻炼，listentomusic听音乐，turntosomebodyforhelp向某人求助；takemysuggestionsintoconsideration考虑我的建议。明确了文章的主旨，再加上词汇的铺垫，接下来我们就可以造句了。为了避免句子结构的错误，我们可以先写一些简单的句子：①.I'msorrytolearnthatyouintendtodropoutforhighstressasoneofyourfriends.②.youmustgiveuptheideaFirstofall③.youshouldhavearightattitudetowardsstress④.Stressisasmallpartinournormallife⑤.Isuggestyoucalmdownandfindoutthecauseofyourstress⑥.Youmanagedtocomeupwithwaystodealwithit⑦.Astohowtoreducestress,youmaytakeexercise,listentomusic,orturntoyourteacherorclassmatesforhelp⑧.Ihopeyoucantakemysuggestionintoconsideration⑨.I'mconvincedthatyouwillmaketherightdecision.【点睛】在上述句子的基础上，我们可以通过整合信息、改变句式等方式对句子进行加工润色，尽量使用结构较为复杂的句式，以增加写作亮点，如：第5句和第6句是所提的建议，可将两句话整合为一个and连接的并列句，避免语言的重复，第8句和9句也可连接起来避免重复。完成上述步骤之后，就已经形成了文章的初稿。然后，我们再次阅读全文，检查文中是否存在拼写或语法错误，并增加一些细节和过渡性的词汇，如tobeginwith，firstofall,moreover，asforme，atlast等，使全文衔接自然，语义流畅。4．Dear

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arightdecision.这句话使用了由and连接的并列句等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。5．ItisuniversallyassumedthatSongXiaobaoisoneofthefamouscomedians,whoenjoyspopularitywithus.Hisperformanceoftenmakesuslaughmyheadoff,whichisbeneficialtous.Firstandforemost,laughingcanrelieveourstress,liftingupourspirits.Inaddition,laughingcandriveawayournegativeemotions,allowingustocultivateapositivewayofthinking.Furthermore,laughinghasapositiveeffectonourbodyandhealth.Justasthesayinggoes,“Laughteristhebestmedicine.”So,wecansafelyconcludethatitisofgreatsignificanceforustolaughmoreinourlife.【分析】本大题根据要求翻译句子。要求尽可能用模块六所学词汇和短语，使用从句和分词结构，加入适当的过渡词，按照逻辑连成80字左右的短文。此题首先要分析所给的汉语句意及具体的范围内的所学的词汇和短语，明确考核的要点，即要用从句和分词结构，选择恰当的词语搭配。这不仅要用所给的语法项目进行恰当的翻译，同时还要注意翻译句子时要根据具体的语境。此外一定要避免汉语式的英语翻译。【详解】本大题用所学的词汇和短语，使用从句和分词结构，加入适当的过渡词，按照逻辑连成80字左右的短文。分析这三个句子可知，第一句是对宋小宝作个简单的介绍，可运用定语从句来未完成这个句子，用所学的短语“enjoypopularitywith.../bepopularwith...，laughone’sheadoff(捧腹大笑),bebeneficialto...(对有益的)”。所以此处可用定语从句来翻译句子“宋小宝，著名的喜剧演员，深受人们的欢迎，他的表演经常使我们捧腹大笑。”为“ItisuniversallyassumedthatSongXiaobaoisoneofthefamouscomedians,whoenjoyspopularitywithus.”。接着对“笑对人们有益”为“Hisperformanceoftenmakesuslaughmyheadoff,whichisbeneficialtous.”进一步解释，此时可用顺序连词如Firstandforemost,...inaddition,...furthermore,...把三个好处时按照逻辑连成短文。在翻译三个点时，可使用动词的—ing形式作主语来翻译“笑可以减轻我们的压力,使我们振作精神；笑可以帮我们驱赶走负面的情绪,培养积极的思维方式；笑对我们的身心有积极的影响”，如laughingcanrelieveourstress,liftingupourspirits.Inaddition,laughingcandriveawayournegativeemotions,allowingustocultivateapositivewayofthinking....laughinghasapositiveeffectonourbodyandhealth。再用一个非限制性定语从句Justasthesayinggoes,“Laughteristhebestmedicine.”来说明正如谚语所说，“笑是最好的良药”。以上的内容可运用所学的词组如“relieveone’sstress,liftupone’sspirits,driveaway,,,,,haveaneffecton...。最后用宾语从句及所学的词汇如ofgreatsignificance作一个总结：So,wecansafelyconcludethatitisofgreatsignificanceforustolaughmoreinourlife。”要注意用词要恰当，句式要相对灵活，语言要精练，要有逻辑，才能为一篇文章。6．DearPeter,IamLiHua,agirlaged16,presentlyattendingNanyangNo.1MiddleSchool.RecentlyIhavenoticedthatmostofthestudentsareundergreatstress.Facingsuchserioussituations,I’dliketosharemyadviceonhowtoadopttotheseniorhighschoollife.Firstofall,weshouldsetgoalsinstudyanddevelopgoodlearninghabitssuchaspreviewingandreviewingregularly.Besides,asweareawayfromparents,wearesupposedtoliveonourownsuchasdoingsomewashingandcleaningbyourselves;Furthermore,weshouldkeepawayfromjunkfoodandnevergetaddictedtotheNet.What'smore,wehadbettertakepartinafter-classactivitiesinoursparetime,whichwillhelpusreducestressandbroadenourhorizons.Lastbutnotleast,weneedtogetalongwellwithteachersandclassmates,withwhomwecansharewhateverwehaveincommon.Ihaveconfidencethatwecangetused.totheseniorhighschoollifebydoingso.Lookingforwardtoyourearlyreplyassoonaspossibly.Yourstruly,LiHua【解析】试题分析：本文是一篇提纲作文，内容要点应包括：确定新的学习目标，养成好习惯；学会独立生活，健康生活；参加课外活动，减轻压力，拓展视野；处理好人际关系。首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，然后确定文章的主题、文体、人称和时态。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来。写作时注意时态、语态的合理运用，主次分明，详略得当，语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。【亮点说明】本文是一篇提纲作文，内容齐全，结构布局合理，句子衔接紧密，文中使用高级句子。IamLiHua,agirlaged16,presentlyattendingNanyangNo.1MiddleSchool句中使用过去分词和现在分词做定语；.Facingsuchserioussituations,I’dliketosharemyadviceonhowtoadopttotheseniorhighschoollife.现在分词做时间状语；asweareawayfromparents,wearesupposedtoliveonourownsuchasdoingsomewashingandcleaningbyourselves;as引导原因状语从句；whichwillhelpusreducestressandbroadenourhorizons.which引导非限制性定语从句；withwhomwecansharewhateverwehaveincommon句中with+whom引导定语从句，同时使用whatever引导的宾语从句；另外，Firstofall,Besides,Furthermore,What'smore,Lastbutnotleast,等的运用为文章增色添彩。7．Dearschoolleaders,Wearesogladtohearthatyouhavedecidedtoopensomeschoolclubs.Thereisnodoubtthattheclubswillbenefitusstudentsbothphysicallyandmentally.Inmyopinion,aTaichiclubwillbeagoodchoice.Asisknowntousall,TaichihasalonghistoryinChina,whichisasymbolofChineseculture.However,itisashamethatwestudentsknowlittleaboutTaichi.Createdthousandsofyearsago,Taichiaimstostrengthenpeople'sbodyandtoadvocateharmoniousrelationshipbetweenpeople.IbelieveaTaichiclubwillsurelymakeusknowmoreaboutChinesetraditionalculture.Besides,itisofgreathelpforustoformahabitofdoingexercise.IamlookingforwardtoaTaichiclubtobesetupinthenearfuture.Yours,Leo.【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给学校领导写一封推荐信，推荐在学校开设太极俱乐部，并陈述理由。【详解】第一步：审题体裁：应用文时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时和一般将来时。结构：总分法总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。要求：1.推荐开设太极俱乐部2.太极文化的地位3.太极的作用第二步:列提纲benefitusstudentsbothphysicallyandmentally;inone'sopinion;asisknowntousall;aimtodosth.;ofgreathelp;lookforwardto;setup第三步：连词成句1.Thereisnodoubtthattheclubswillbenefitusstudentsbothphysicallyandmentally.2.Asisknowntousall,TaichihasalonghistoryinChina,whichisonesymbolofChineseculture.3.Taichiaimstostrengthenpeople'sbodyandtoadvocateharmoniousrelationshipbetweenpeople.4.Besides,itisofgreathelpforustoformahabitofdoingexercise.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）1.表并列补充关系：Besides，and2.表转折对比关系：Howe