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2025广州英语一模读后续写分析及下水文目录CONTENT010203故事原文续写分析下水文与原文答案评析PART故事原文01第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。LiMingwasa17-year-oldexchangestudentfromChina.Withaheartfullofdreamsandalittlebitofnervousness,heflewtotheUnitedKingdomtostartanewadventure.HehadalwaysimaginedwhatitwouldbeliketowalkthroughthehistoricstreetsofEnglandandmeetpeoplefromdifferentpartsoftheworld.Butassoonashearrivedathisnewschool,hefeltalittleunsure.Inhisnewclass,LiMingstruggledtostartconversationswithhisBritishclassmates.Theyspokesoquicklyandusedwordsandphraseshedidn'tunderstand.Whenhetriedtojointheirconversations,hefeltshyabouthisaccentandworriedthathemightsaysomethingwrong.HealsonoticedthatBritishstudentsseemedtovaluetheirpersonalspacemorethanhewasusedto,whichmadeitevenharderforhimtofindtherightmomenttostartameaningfultalk.Groupworkwasevenharder.Duringagroupprojectinliteratureclass,LiMinghadtroubleexplaininghisideasclearly,feelinglikehisideasweregettinglostintranslation.Andhestartedtodoubthimself. Socialeventsoutsideofclasswerejustasdifficult.Ataschoolparty,LiMingwatchedhisclassmateslaugh,dance,andsingalongtothelatestpopsongs.Hefeltleftout,notknowingthesongsorthedancemoves.Hewantedtojointhefun,butthefearoflookingsillykepthimonthesidelines.Oneday,theschoolannouncedatalentshow,LiMing,whopracticedtraditionalChinesekungfu,reallywantedtotry.Whilehewashesitating,agroupofBritishstudentsinterestedinculturalperformancesinvitedhimtojointhem.LiMingagreed.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.___________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。LiMingwasa17-year-oldexchangestudentfromChina.Withaheartfullofdreamsandalittlebitofnervousness,heflewtotheUnitedKingdomtostartanewadventure.HehadalwaysimaginedwhatitwouldbeliketowalkthroughthehistoricstreetsofEnglandandmeetpeoplefromdifferentpartsoftheworld.Butassoonashearrivedathisnewschool,hefeltalittleunsure.Inhisnewclass,LiMingstruggledtostartconversationswithhisBritishclassmates.Theyspokesoquicklyandusedwordsandphraseshedidn'tunderstand.Whenhetriedtojointheirconversations,hefeltshyabouthisaccentandworriedthathemightsaysomethingwrong.HealsonoticedthatBritishstudentsseemedtovaluetheirpersonalspacemorethanhewasusedto,whichmadeitevenharderforhimtofindtherightmomenttostartameaningfultalk.Groupworkwasevenharder.Duringagroupprojectinliteratureclass,LiMinghadtroubleexplaininghisideasclearly,feelinglikehisideasweregettinglostintranslation.Andhestartedtodoubthimself. Socialeventsoutsideofclasswerejustasdifficult.Ataschoolparty,LiMingwatchedhisclassmateslaugh,dance,andsingalongtothelatestpopsongs.Hefeltleftout,notknowingthesongsorthedancemoves.Hewantedtojointhefun,butthefearoflookingsillykepthimonthesidelines.Oneday,theschoolannouncedatalentshow,LiMing,whopracticedtraditionalChinesekungfu,reallywantedtotry.Whilehewashesitating,agroupofBritishstudentsinterestedinculturalperformancesinvitedhimtojointhem.LiMingagreed.续写首段提示续写第二段提示Paragraph2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.02Paragraph1:Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.01续写提示1【文本主旨】本文讲述了LiMing作为交换生前往英国开启学习生涯的新一片段，却遭遇了种种culturalshock，可是没想到学校的一次才艺秀，改变了他的境遇，立足于源远流长、精深的中国文化，让他找回了自信，文化交流也让他融入了新的集体和生活。LiMing17岁的李明开启新旅城，前往英国作为留学交换生，心里既怀着期待又有些许小紧张。到英国之后，一切又有一点不确定。种种culturalshocks课上，李明很难听懂同学，交流海派出糗，同学们很注重个人空间，很难抓住时机融入；小组活动更难参与，自己很难表述自己；社交活动也很难，似乎跟不上同学的流行文化，想加入又怕看起来很傻。转机atalentshow学校要办talentshow,李明跃跃欲试，他的犹豫被一群热爱文化表演的同学注意到了，并力邀他加入…2故事3.Whataretheplotsgiveninthereadingpart?（给出信息）17岁的中国学生LiMing在英国做交换生，满怀期待和小紧张开启了新旅程，他幻想着，可到了新学校又有点不安。→在新班里，他努力试图和同学交流，听不懂，怕出错，注重隐私空间的同学让他很难抓住切入时机；→小组活动也艰难，李明很难用英语表述自己的想法，让他开始自我怀疑→社交活动也糟糕，看着同学们笑跳唱，感觉自己落伍了，想加入又怕出糗，只能让他置身事外；→一天，学校宣布举办才艺秀，一直练习功夫的李明跃跃欲试，犹豫的他被热爱文化活动的团体力邀，他答应了。Paragraph1:Sallystarteddaydreamingaboutjoiningotherschoolclubs.________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Recallinghermother’swords,Sallywaswokenfromherdaydream._____________________________________________________

TheplottingWho:LiMing,Britishclassmates,Where:aschoolinUKWhen:sometime,

oneday.What:LiMing,anexchangestudent,flewtoUKtostarthiscareer,withmanyimaginationsanduncertainty.Whileinhisnewclass,hefeltithardtoadapttothenewenvironment.Hecouldn’tunderstandhisclassmates,fearedmakingmistakes,orfindgoodchancestostartatalk.Ingroupwork,hehadtroublegettinghisideaacrosstoclassmatesinEnglish,andinsocialevents,hethoughthewasoutofdate,leftoutbytheirpopculture.Oneday,theschoolwastolaunchatalentshow.LiMingwaseagertotrybuthesitatedtojoin.Agroupofculturefansinvitedhimtojointhem.How:Shebegantoshowhistalentandconquerthemwithhisuniquecultures.

TheplottingBriefintroduction/Backgroundinfo:LiMing,anexchangestudentwenttoUK,withalotofanticipationsandalittlenervousness.Thebeginning:Uponarrivingnewschools,hefeltlittleuncertainties.Thedevelopment:Whileinhisnewclass,hefeltithardtoadapttothenewenvironment.Hecouldn’tunderstandhisclassmates,fearedmakingmistakes,orfindgoodchancestostartatalk.Ingroupwork,hehadtroublegettinghisideaacrosstoclassmatesinEnglish.Insocialevents,hethoughthewasoutofdate,leftoutbytheirpopculture.OneClimax:Oneday,theschoolwastolaunchatalentshow.LiMingwaseagertotrybuthesitatedtojoin.Agroupofculturefansinvitedhimtojointhem.Thebiggerclimax:Itdependsonyou….PART续写分析02单击此处添加标题根据原文，本续写段落最好通过紧密的逻辑衔接、细腻的情感描写、合理的情节想象与开头的伏笔呼应，将LiMing的个人经历用自身才艺打动同学升华为灿烂中国文化搭起沟通桥梁，促进跨文化交流。既要满足情节的合理性，又要赋予故事深度，诠释人与人和谐共进及中国文化名片的自豪和魅力。LiMing在练习当中，展现中华武术的魅力，惊艳众人，带着众人表演中国武术，架起沟通桥梁，打通隔阂，文化就是普世的名片，这是小沟通，崭露头角，开始破冰。情节合理性01LiMing想融入，却又有少年合理的顾虑，那么在武术这个文化魅力的加持下，自身获得了自信，也征服了同学的心，应该是围绕他组件武术表演节目，收获了有效沟通和信心。情感铺垫02续写首段分析注意到变化演出成功后，才会有量变到质变，变化是内心的，扩展到生活学习的方方面面，对照原文，要对三个方面进行阐述，课堂，小组，和社交。0102LiMing由最初的害羞，害怕，甚至自我怀疑，逐渐过渡到自信和自豪，这通过LiMing在第二段当中的具体活动中得到体现。情感升华续写第二段分析单击此处添加标题首尾呼应：老板邀请Rita“随时探望Max”（visitthedoganytime），既为故事增添开放性，也暗示Rita未来可能通过与小狗互动来延续善举，与前文“童年创伤”形成闭环。LiMing，在前文中开启交换生生涯，遇上种种文化冲击，那么利用自身中华文化的特色和魅力，打通交际隔阂，架起沟通桥梁，逐渐克服之前前文的“种种困难”形成闭环。首尾呼应：

单击此处添加文本具体内容，简明扼要地阐述您的观点。根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者准确地理解您传达的思想。单击此处添加文本具体内容，简明扼要地阐述您的观点。根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者准确地理解您传达的思想。单击此处添加文本具体内容，简明扼要地阐述您的观点。根据需要可酌情增减文字，以便观者准确地理解您传达的思想。单击此处添加文本具体内容单击添加标题续写情感走向情感链条：anticipation/imagination+alittlenervous（flewtoUK）→uncertain（arriveatnewschool）→shy+worried（innewclass）→doubthimself+unconfident（groupwork）→fearandfeelleftout（socialevent）→hesitant(launchoftalentshow)，前文展示了LiMing初期在异乡他国的种种情感冲击。→续写需要收复失地→自信（confident）→自豪(proud)→和谐（harmonious）情感走向与主题深化1.把握内容要点所给首句：阅读每一段中的首句，进行布局、解读。在布局第一段的内容时，要兼顾两段的首句：第二段的首句决定着第一段的走向。1:

Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.Step2审题与构思注意：第一段续写要巧妙衔接第二段，陈述方案一定要通过-对应好消息。Step2:Outlinethepossibleplotsorevents

ineachparagraph.1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右,主线清楚;描写视角是第三人视角称LiMing；2.关键人物和角色随故事情节逻辑发展转变自然，人称保持一致;3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;用过去时态；4.确定好续写情节，用合理句型和直接引语表达;原文段末交代talentshow，在续写中都需要交代，第一：准备talentshow当中展示了精湛武术，迷倒无数，组队进行talentshow表演；第二：一武（舞台）成名，打开任督二脉，从此交换生涯开挂，所有问题慢慢迎刃而解，。文章主题：强烈的文化认同感促进自我意识和自信，让个人能从容面对自身经历和外界交流。Astrongsenseofculturalidentity______________________________,enablingindividuals______________________________________withtheoutsideworld.中华文化的魅力助力少年找回自信，在异国文化生活中，克服交流障碍，弥合文化隔阂，与异国文化和谐共生。ThecharmofChineseculture_________________________________,overcomecommunicationbarriersinaforeignculturalenvironment,________________________________,andachieveharmoniouscoexistencewithdiversecultures.theawarenessofculturalidentity---buildingcross-culturalconfidence---overcomingcommunicationbarriers---embracingandnavigatingculturaldiversitywithassurancefostersself-awarenessandconfidencetonavigatetheirexperiencesandinteractionsempowersyoungindividualstoregainconfidencebridgeculturaldividesWhattowrite?段1首句:1.Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.1.HowdidLiMing’skungfushowstunnedthem?(既然李明的功夫秀惊艳到他们，能否描写下李明的功夫)2.HowdidLiMingfeelandwhatwerethegroup’sresponses?（描写下李明得到的赞许，表演的心态和文化小组的反应）3.Whatweretheirfurtherexchangesforthetalentshowandpreparations?(既然是为talentshow做准备，那么接下来互相交流沟通为show做准备)4.Howwastheshow?Thecore:LiMing’sChinesekungfu theirexchangesfortalentshow Howwastheshow?

Whattowrite?段2首句：2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.1.Whatchangeshappenedinhisexchangelife?(紧扣原文，形成闭环：原文交代的三个不适应，一一破解。1)inhisnewclasses 2)Groupwork 3)socialeventsoutsideclasses)2.Howwashislifeandstudyandhisfeelings?3.WhatwereLiMing’sgainsorunderstandingsafterhisadaptiveprocess?Thecore:1.WhatchangeshavehappenedinLiMing’sexchange lifeinUK? 2.Whatlessondidhelearn?

Practiceofkungfu1.他的动作敏捷且准确，与英国同伴马虎的动作是鲜明的对比。Hismovementswereswiftandprecise,______________________thecasualdemeanorofhisBritishpeers.2.他敏捷优雅的招式结合了力量感的出击创造了一种令人兴奋的引人入胜的舞蹈。_______________________________________combinedwithpowerfulstrikescreatedathrillingandmesmerizingdance.3.步子敏捷手握拳在空中挥舞，李明每次移动口中利落地喊出“啊”，好似东方战神。Steppingnimblywithaclenchedfistintheair,LiMingyelledacrisp"ah"eachtimehemoved,______________________________.4.LiMing完成一套复杂的招式和表演时，步子优雅而准确，这套招式结合了武术，舞蹈和杂技。LiMing___________________________________asheexecutedaseriesofcomplexmovesandstuntscombiningelementsofmartialarts,dance,andacrobatics.astarkcontrasttoHisswiftandgracefulmovesasifhewereanorientalwarriormovedwithgraceandprecisionInteractionsinrehearsal1.他的行云流水般的动作和精准的动作迷住了所有人，激发了大家对中国文化的好奇也弥合了代沟。Hisfluidmovementsandprecisetechniquescaptivatedeveryone,____________________________________andbridgingtheirgap.2.他们的真诚的兴趣让李明觉得被重视，合作的氛围消除了他的紧张。Theirgenuineinterestmadehimfeelvalued,and_____________________________________________________________.3.最初李明还有点害羞，随着教导同伴们功夫招式也变得越来越自信了。LiMing,initiallyabitshy,_________________________ashetaughtthemsomebasickungfupostures.4.通过交流，语言和文化障碍慢慢消散了。Throughthisinteraction,thelanguageandculturalbarriers_______________________.sparkingcuriosityaboutChineseculturethecollaborativeatmosphereeasedhisnervousnessbecameincreasinglyconfidentstartedtofadeawayNervousness1.当听到自己的名字后，LiMing可以听到自己的心跳声甚至紧张的呼吸声。Whenhearinghis

namecalled,LiMingcouldhearhisownheartbeatandevennervousbreaths.2.他如此紧张以致他可以感觉到手心出汗心脏猛跳。Sonervouswashethathecouldfeelhispalmssweatingandhisheartpoundingviolently.Theperformanceturnedouttobeasuccess,___________________

fillinginthewholetheatre.(独立主格).演出结束，观众投来赞许的目光，热烈的掌声。Whentheirshowwasfinished,theaudience_______________________atthem,

thunderousapplauseechoingaroundthehall.Theaudience______________thunderousapplause.thunderousapplausecastapprovingglancesbrokeintoTheshowTheperformanceturnedouttobeasuccess,___________________

fillinginthewholetheatre.(独立主格).演出结束，观众投来赞许的目光，热烈的掌声。Whentheirshowwasfinished,theaudience_______________________atthem,

thunderousapplauseechoingaroundthehall.Theaudience______________thunderousapplause.thunderousapplausecastapprovingglancesbrokeintoTheshowExcitementandJoy1.听到雷鸣般的掌声响彻礼堂LiMing内心狂喜。LiMingwaswildwithjoywhenhearingthunderousapplauseechoinginthehall.2.演出成功让他一阵兴奋，让他确信他得到了认可。Thenewssentarippleofexcitementthroughhim,convincinghim

thathewaswellreceived.3.喜不自胜，LiMing和他的团队庆祝他们的合作成功。Transportedwithpleasure/Delightedbeyondmeasure/Beamingwithpleasure,LiMingcelebratedtheirsuccessofcooperationwiththegroup.ThechangesinLiMing’slife1.他的同学们带着敬仰和好奇找他，告诉他他的表演有多惊艳，表示了对他和中国文化的兴趣。Hisclassmatesapproachedhimwithcuriosityandrespect,____________________________________________________andthattheywereinterestedinhimandhisculture.2.李明觉得更容易开启交流对话，他的口音曾经一度是他的焦虑源，现在也被视为了他的独有文化名片。Hefoundit____________________________________,andhisaccent,onceasourceofanxiety,_________________________________________.3.小组活动中，他的团队成员会额外尽力吸纳理解他的观点，耐心倾听他的表述。Ingroupwork,hisgroupmates____________________________________,patientlygivingeartohispresentation.tellinghimhowtheywereimpressedbyhisperformanceeasiertostrikeupconversationswasnowseenasauniqueculturalidentitycardmadeextraefforttoincludehisideassublimation(1)

才艺秀成为了一个转折点：他的独特性，曾经让他自我怀疑，现在让他能更好融入大家。Thetalentshow___________________________:hisuniqueness,onceasourceofdoubt,nowconnectedhimtoothers.(2)

在会场，她们也被深深感动朝他竖起了大拇指。Itdawnedonhimthat______________________________________thathelpedhimfindtheconfidenceandpridetointegratewiththeoutsideworld.(3)自信和骄傲洋溢在眼中，李明意识到弘扬自身文化的意义，这极大促进了他的自信弥合了代沟。With______________________________________,LiMingeventuallyrealizedthesignificanceofpromotinghisownculture,whichgreatly_________________________________________________.(4)是的，坚信自己的文化身份，李明把这次才艺秀-伪装的小确幸-变成了一个契机。Yes,__________________________________,LiMingtransformedtheshowcase,ablessingindisguise,intoanopportunitytobeknownandwell-receivedbytheoutsideworld.itwashisuniqueculturalidentitywhowerealsodeeplyimpressedbyconfidenceandpridebrimminginhiseyesboostedhisconfidenceandbridgedthegapwithafirmbeliefinhisculturalidentitybecameaturningpointPART下水文与原文答案评析03Paragraph1Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.Hisswiftandgracefulmovescombinedwithpowerfulstrikescreatedathrillingandmesmerizingdance.Astheywatchedinawe,theyconstantlycheeredhimon,captivatedbyhisperformance.LiMing,atfirstabitshy,graduallybecamemoreconfident.Hepatientlytaughtthemsomebasickungfupostures.Throughthisinteraction,thelanguageandculturalbarriersstartedtofadeaway.Theylaughedandjokedwhilepracticinggraduallyformingastrongandlastingbondthroughtheirsharedexperiences.Paragraph2Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.HisBritishclassmates,noweagertolearnmoreaboutChineseculture,cametohimmoreoftenforguidanceandinsights.Ingroupwork,theyactivelylistenedtohisideas,andhefounditmucheasiertoexpresshimself,Atsocialevents,hewasnolongeronthesidelines.Hewasinvitedtojoininthefun,andtheysharedtheirfavoritesongsanddanceswithhim.LiMingrealizedthatbyshowinghistalent,hehadopenedthedoortoanewworldoffriendshipandculturalexchange.与原文及段落开头语衔接合理，内容基本合理，情感表达完整，语法结构和词汇使用基本准确。上下文连贯性需加强，词汇丰富性有限，部分细节逻辑待完善。增加过渡词和细节描写，替换重复词汇，尝试使用更丰富的表达，补充关键细节，完善故事逻辑。优点不足