2024届广东广州市高三二模英语读后续写讲评课件

aflyerforanartcamp艺术营的传单

Willyouchoosetoattendanartcampafteryougetsuchaflyer?

Whatwouldpreventyoufromdoingit?2024年广州市综合测试（二）英语读后续写参加艺术夏令营阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ThisFridaybroughtamixofemotions—bothexcitementanddisappointment—allbecauseofaflyerfromschool.WhenIgothome,Mumsawtheflyerinmyhandandasked,“What'sthis?”“Aflyerforafive-dayartcamp,”Iexplained.“ButEmilycan'tgo.”“Wouldyouliketoattend?”Mumasked.“You'vealwayslovedart.”HerwordsremindedmeofwhatEmilyhadsaidearlier:“Tessa,you'retherealartist.MybrotherthoughttherosesIpaintedwererocketships.”Isighed.Mumpattedmyback.SheknewIhadahardtimejumpingintosomethingwithnofamiliarfacesaround.“Maybenextyear.”“Maybe,”Iechoed.ThenItoldMumIwantedtogooutsidetodrawtheWestons'pinetree(松树).Shenoddedwithanencouragingsmile.AsIwalkedintothebrightsunshine,Icouldn'thelpbutthinkabouttheartcamp.IwishedIfeltalittlebitbraver.Emilycouldmakefriendswithawholebusofkidsintenminutes,butmystomachfeltlikealittleboattossedinaheavystormwhenIwassurroundedbystrangers...BythetimeIstarteddrawing,Ihadmadeupmymindtoforgetabouttheartcamp.Ibeganbydrawingthepinetree'sstrongandstraighttrunk,andthenaddedthebeautifulbranches,makingsuretheupperonesliftedgentlytowardsthesun.Lostinmywork,IjumpedwhenIheardMr.Westonspeakup,“You'vedoneagreatjobshowingthestrengthofthattreeonpaper.”“Thanks,”Ismiled,glancingup.AsIdrewtheneedlestothebranches,Mr.WestontoldmesomethingIneverknewaboutpines:Ifyouplanttherootballtoodeep,thetreedies.Theirrootsgrowout,notdown—togetenoughwaterandgrowtall.“Youhaveagoodeye,Tessa.”Withthesewords,Mr.Westonnoddedgoodbye.

Paragraph1:Hiswordsmademepauseandthink.Paragraph2:ThenextMonday,Isignedupforthecamp.Guideline续写构思法--4321ApproachReadforcharacters:Underlinethesentencesthatindicatethecharacters'personalityandsummarizethem.I1.Ihadahardtimejumpingintosomethingwithnofamiliarfacesaround.2.....mystomachfeltlikealittleboattossedinaheavystormwhenIwassurroundedbystrangersMum1.“Wouldyouliketoattend?”Mumasked.“You'vealwayslovedart.”2.Mumpattedmyback.SheknewIhadahardtimejumpingintosomethingwithnofamiliarfacesaround.“Maybenextyear.”3.Shenoddedwithanencouragingsmile.EmilyHerwordsremindedmeofwhatEmilyhadsaidearlier:“Tessa,you'retherealartist.MybrotherthoughttherosesIpaintedwererocketships.”Mr.Weston1.“You'vedoneagreatjobshowingthestrengthofthattreeonpaper.”2.Ifyouplanttherootballtoodeep,thetreedies.Theirrootsgrowout,notdown—togetenoughwaterandgrowtall.3.“Youhaveagoodeye,Tessa.”Withthesewords,Mr.Westonnoddedgoodbye.step1Readforcharacterssociallyanxious/shy/reliantoncomfortzonesconsiderate/encouraging/supportive/empatheticinspiring/holdafirmbeliefinmeencouraging/inspiring/knowledgeableReadforemotionbeginningclimaxendingEmotion：excitedanddisappointed

unconfidenthesitantdeterminedtogiveupinspiredContinuationpara.1:Thebigdaycameatlast.Continuationpara.2:ThenextMonday,Isignedupforthecamp.Whathappened?Emotions?Ifyouplanttherootballtoodeep,thetreedies.Theirrootsgrowout,notdown—togetenoughwaterandgrowtall.“Youhaveagoodeye,Tessa.”Continuationpara.1:Hiswordsmademepauseandthink.IwishedIfeltalittlebitbraver.BythetimeIstarteddrawing,Ihadmadeupmymindtoforgetabouttheartcamp.ThisFridaybroughtamixofemotions—bothexcitementanddisappointmentIsighed.“Maybe,”Iechoed.Readforconflict“Wouldyouliketoattend?”Mumasked.“You'vealwayslovedart.”HerwordsremindedmeofwhatEmilyhadsaidearlier:“Tessa,you'retherealartist.MybrotherthoughttherosesIpaintedwererocketships.”Isighed.Mumpattedmyback.SheknewIhadahardtimejumpingintosomethingwithnofamiliarfacesaround.“Maybenextyear.”“Maybe,”Iechoed.ThenItoldMumIwantedtogooutsidetodrawtheWestons'pinetree(松树).Shenoddedwithanencouragingsmile....mystomachfeltlikealittleboattossedinaheavystormwhenIwassurroundedbystrangers....“Youhaveagoodeye,Tessa.”Paragraph1:Hiswordsmademepauseandthink.Paragraph2:ThenextMonday,Isignedupforthecamp.Conflict:mysocialanxietyvs.mytalentinartSoshouldIsignupforthecamp?

ReadforthethemeItisnaturalthatwefacechallengesinourlife.Withothers'encouragement,wemaypluckupcourageandregainconfidence.Itisencouragedtostepoutofone'scomfortzone.Para1:Hiswordsmademepauseandthink.时间：空间：主要人物：关键情节:Q1WhatdidIthinkabout?thepinesortheartcampormyself?Q2HowdidIfeelwhenIgetinspiredfromhiswords?Q3WhatdecisionwouldImake?Para2:

ThenextMonday,Isignedupforthecamp.时间：afterthesigning,duringthecamp空间：inthecampsite主要人物：关键事件thatFridayintheWestons',backhomeI,Mum

Q4Whathappenedtomeinthe5-dayartcampwithoutfamiliarfacesaround?Q5HowdidItrytohandletheconditionsandwhatdidIget?Q6WhatdidIlearnfromthisexperience?I,campmatesDesigntheplotsIdecidedtothinktwiceaboutwhethertoattendthecampornot.Iattendedtheartcampwithstrangersaround.Summary成长类故事构造第一步：成长前的苦恼（负面情绪塑造）第二步：成长中（蜕变塑造）第三步：成长后的升华（喜悦+感激+升华）DesigntheplotsPara1:Hiswordsmademepauseandthink.

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当我继续在纸上画松树时，Mr.Weston的评论一直萦绕在我的脑海里。Mr.Weston’scommentlingeredinmymindasIcontinuedsketchingthepinetreeontothepaper.

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当我回想起韦斯顿先生的话时，松树的根长出来，而不是向下，引起了我深深的共鸣。AsIreflectedonMr.Weston’swords,pinerootsgrowingout,notdown,struckanechowithmedeeply.sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actionslike短语+非谓语+主句：就像松树伸出阳光和水一样，我也需要走出去，来拓展我的社交关系，培养我的艺术技能。Justlikethepinetreereachingforsunlightandwater,Ialsoneededtoreachouttostretchmysocialconnectionsandcultivatemyartisticskills.like短语+主句：也许，就像松树一样，我需要伸出手，向不同的方向成长。Maybe,justlikethepine,Ineededtoreachoutandgrowina

differentdirectiontoflourish.sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions主语从句：对我来说，真正重要的是拥抱新的体验，走出我的舒适区。

Whatreallymatteredformewastoembracenewexperiencesandstepoutofmycomfortzone.主句+justlike比喻：也许我可以从走出我的舒适区中学到一些有价值的东西，就像树需要伸展它的根来长得更高一样。PerhapsIcouldlearnsomethingvaluablefromsteppingbeyondmycomfortzone,justlikethetree’sneed

tospreaditsrootstogrowtall.sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions主句（无灵主语）+with结构这个想法驱使我去参加夏令营，我的内心激动又兴奋。Thethoughtdrovemetoattendthecamp,withanincreasingsenseofpassionandexcitementbubblinginsideme.adj表达情绪，+主句我感到决心和信心，把这个营地作为艺术探索和成长的机会。Determinedandconfident,Iwouldembracethecampasanopportunityforartisticexplorationandgrowth.sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions主句+独立主格我妈妈专心地听着，她的脸上洋溢着骄傲和鼓励Mymumlistenedintently,herfacelightingupwithprideandencouragement.回应原文伏笔：从句+非谓语知道了我的决定后，妈妈把我紧紧地拥抱起来，喃喃地说：“Tessa，你一定行的。Afterknowingmydecision,Mumwrappedmeintoawarmhug,murmuring,“Tessa,youcanmakeit.”sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions非谓语+主句兴奋又期待，我踏上了一段拥抱未知和挑战自己的营地之旅。Feelingamixtureofexcitementandanticipation,Isteppedonacampjourneyofembracingtheunknownandchallengingmyself.

无灵主语+高级动词witness+with短语夏令营的第一天，我很紧张，周围有很多不熟悉的面孔。Thefirstdayofthecampwitnessedmynervousness,withsomanyunfamiliarfacesaroundme.sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actionssentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions回应原文伏笔（disappointed,fear）：倒装

so+助动词+主语我的艺术技能提高了，我新获得的自信和自我发现也提高了。Myartisticskillsgrew,sodidmynewfoundconfidenceandself-discovery.回应原文伏笔（disappointed,fear）：并列句夏令营结束得太快了，但我带着自信和新的友谊离开了。Thecampendedtoosoon,butIleftwithanewfoundconfidenceinmyselfandnewfriendshipssentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions回应原文伏笔（fear)

并列句+省略用法这段经历给我上了一个宝贵的教训：担心永远不会激发你的潜力和建立未来，但走出舒适区确实会。Thisexperiencetoldmeavaluablelesson:fearneverstimulatesyourpotentialandbuildsthefuture,butsteppingoutofthecomfortzonedoes.回应原文伏笔（unfamiliarfaces）

主句+从句+双逗号它教会了我，就像那些有强韧的松树一样，我们的成长往往在于敢于超越我们的舒适区，拥抱不熟悉的事物。Ittaughtmethatourgrowth,muchliketheresilientpinetree,oftenliesindaringtoreachbeyondourcomfortzonesandembracingtheunfamiliar.Para2:

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画面定格sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions回应原文伏笔（adapt+personalgrowth）主语+双逗号+谓语这棵树的根，向外伸展，而不是向下伸展，象征着用接触他人和拥抱陌生的环境来滋养个人成长的重要性。

Thetree’sroots,spreadingoutwardratherthandownward,symbolizedtheimportanceofreachingouttoothersandembracingunfamiliarsituationstonourishpersonalgrowth.回应原文伏笔（haveatalentforart）——倒装句这个夏令营不仅是个练习艺术技能的宝贵机会，也是个在许多方面提高自己的机会。Notonlywasthecampjustapreciousopportunitytopractisemyartisticskillsbutachancetobettermyselfinmanyaspects.Para2:

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画面定格sentencepatterns+advancedandprecisewordsfeelings+actions回应原文伏笔（fear+personalgrowth）祈使句+非谓语永远不要低估勇敢的小行为的力量，标志着走向一个全新的个人成长的旅程的开始。

Neverunderestimatethepowerofthesmallactofbravery,marking

thebeginningofthejourneytowardsabrand-newpersonalgrowth.回应原文伏笔（fear+personalgrowth）并列句永远不要低估你的行动的力量，而走出舒适区的一个简单行为就会对个人的成长产生巨大的影响。Neverunderestimatethepowerofyouractionandonesimpleactofsteppingoutofthecomfortzoneismakingahugedifferenceforapersonalgrowth.Para2:

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画面定格一、社恐Tessa走出舒适区【B6U1Art话题相关读后续写】

Hiswordsmademepauseandthink.AsIreflectedonMr.Weston'swords,theanalogyofpinerootsgrowingout,notdown,struckachordwithme（1.引起了我的共鸣）

deeply.PerhapsIcouldlearnsomethingvaluablefromsteppingbeyondmycomfortzone(2.走出我的舒适区)

,justlikethetree'sneedtospreaditsrootstogrowtall.Surprisingly,evenintheabsenceofmybestfriend(3.我的好朋友不在场的情况下),theideaoftheartcampnowseemedsoappealing.Fueledbythisnewfoundunderstanding(4.被这个新发现的理解所鼓舞),IeagerlysharedmyinsightswithMum,wholistenedattentively(5.认真聆听)asIpouredoutmythoughts.Withherapprovingnods(6.赞许的点头)andencouraginggaze,Ifeltasurgeofdetermination(7.坚定的决心)andconfidencetoembracethecampasanopportunityforartisticexplorationandgrowth(8.艺术探索与成长).

ThenextMonday,Isignedupforthecamp.AsIhandedinmyregistrationform(9.提交报名表),theinitialdisappointment(10.起初的失望)Ifeltgraduallygavewaytoathrillingsenseofanticipation(11.激动人心的期待感),fueledbythecountlesspossibilitiesawaitingme.Throughoutthecamp,Iimmersedmyselfininteractiveworkshops(12.沉浸在互动研讨会中),eagerlyabsorbingnewtechniquesandconnectingwithfellowartenthusiastslikeme.Itturnedoutthat(13.结果显示)thestrangersIwasinitiallyafraidofwerealreadymyfriends.Fromthisexperience,Irealizedthatembracingunfamiliarityandconqueringfears(14.拥抱陌生，战胜恐惧)canpavethewayforremarkablepersonalgrowth(15.为非凡的个人成长铺平道路)andopportunities.ThetoweringpinetreeintheWestons'yardservesasaconstantreminder(16.起到不断提醒的作用)thatthestrongestgrowthoftenspringsfromventuringintotheunknownworld(17.源于冒险进入未知世界).参考范文：

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