高考英语作文的润色与提高

高考英语作文润色与提升以应用文为主1/55专题一：优异作文基本特征2/55优异高考英语作文六个基本特征1、层次不乱 2、句式多变3、亮点若干 3、巧妙串联4、蠢错不犯 6、整齐卷面3/55层次不乱开头：引出话题（第一段）主体：陈说观点或给出提议

（第二段）结尾：呼应、总结（第三段）4/55题目：假设你是李华，你朋友Liz刚才进入高中，在交友上面存在一些问题，请你依据以下提醒，帮她度过难关。要交朋友首先要做一个朋友。要和朋友同甘共苦；患难之中朋友才是真朋友。情谊需要时间和投入(effort).5/55DearLiz,______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,LiHua6/55层次不乱开头：引入话题主体：陈说观点或给出提议结尾：呼应、总结通常只需要2-3句话。提出话题，并说明你有提议。7/55第一段：引出话题通常只需要2-3句话。I’msorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasi’mconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaystosolvethisproblem.8/55层次不乱开头：引入话题主体：陈说观点或给出提议结尾：呼应、总结通常只需要2-3句话。提出话题，并说明你有提议。每一个观点或提议之间要保持层次清楚，加上适当过渡词语。9/55第二段：陈说观点或提议Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend...Then,youneed...Lastly,itisalsoimportanttodo....Firstandforemost,youshouldbeafriend...Secondly,youneed...Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo....10/55层次不乱开头：引入话题主体：陈说观点或给出提议结尾：呼应、总结通常只需要2-3句话。每一个观点或提议之间要保持层次清楚，加上适当过渡词语。总结，并提出美好愿景。11/55第三段：呼应、总结，或者表示愿景。Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.Andibelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome...12/55DearLiz,I’msorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasi’mconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaysto..Firstandforemost/Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend...Secondly,youneed...Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo...Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.AndIbelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome...

Yours,LiHua13/55句式多变长短改变主、被动改变主语改变同义词改变同功效句型改变横向比较改变14/55亮点若干高中词汇高中常见短语高级句型各种复合句倒装句强调句型虚拟语气句型非谓语动词结构15/55巧妙串联起：firstofall,tobeginwith,aboveall...承：inaddition,besides...转：however,ontheotherhand...合：inmyopinion,allinall,inaword...16/55蠢错不犯：初中二年级学生就应该掌握基本语言表示能力。1.Iverylikethebook.2.Hewasveryangrily.3.Therehavemanystudentintheclassroom.4.Thecarisyellowcolor.17/55整齐卷面英文书写大方、圆润、自然；词与词间距适当字母大小适当无大面积涂改不影响交际18/5519/5520/5521/5522/5523/55专题二肃清基础语言错误24/55中学生英语写作中常见14种语言错误：1.主谓不一致MyfatherandIlikesgoingfishingbythelake.Largequantitiesofsoilhasbeenwashedaway.25/552.时态、语态混用Lastnight,Ihadenjoyedaparty.Thepaintingonthewalldamagedseriously.∧was26/553.句子成份残缺Istoodupandsawthereaboy.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreet.∧∧waswas27/554.习惯搭配误用Ionceheardfromtheanimallikethis.Wepassedawaythebuilding.ofby28/555.名词单、复数不分Imademanyfriendinthesummercamp.WecangetsomeinformationsfromtheInternet.29/556.动词单、复数不分Ourteacheroftensaythatsuccesslieinhardwork.Mr.Smith,togetherwithsomestudents,arecomingtoourschool.30/557.赘词现象多发Ihopeyoucanreturnbacktoourschoolsoon.We'llholdapartyonnextSunday.31/558.近义词误用Theschoolrequeststhatallthestudentsshouldweartheschooluniform.Iquarreledwithmyteacheraboutmygrades.32/559.基本词汇拼写错误IfliedtoNewYorkdirectlyfromBeijing.Thiswillbedoneimmediatly.33/5510.前后人称不一致Theboywasborninapoorfamilybutsheworkshard.Wewatchedafewmoviesandwelovedit.34/5511.动词原形作主语/宾语Takeawalkafterdinnerisverygoodforyou.Atthatmoment,Ididn'tfeelliketakeawalk.35/5512.逻辑主语与主句主语不一致Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.Walkinginthestreet,acarhitanoldman.36/5513.一个简单句出现两个谓语Therewasnoworktodo,hewentbackhome.Ireceivedyouremail,Iwasveryexcited.being∧When∧and37/5514.中式英语Nextweekhaveaparty.IsorryyouIcan'twithyougoBeijing.38/55有则改之，无则加勉；专心则易，无心则难。39/55专题三：第一反应与抑制第一反应40/55他是个好人。第一反应测试：Heisagoodman.generous,humorous,interesting,smart,gentle,warm-hearted,hospitable,easy-going,devoted,open-minded,modest,friendly…41/55对不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。I’msorrythatIcan’tgotoBeijingwithyou.WouldyouacceptmyheartfeltapologythatIcan’tmakeittoBeijingwithyouaswehaveplanned?IsorryyouIcan’twithyougoBeijing.42/55存点钱是很主要。Thereisnodenying/Itisbeyondanydisputethatdepositingsomemoneyinthebankiscrucial.Sometimes,whetheryouhavemoneyathandmeansthedifferenceoflifeordeathforalovedone.43/55专题四：打感人心句型和打翻人胃句型

44/5545/55审题：“十年后我”---“感性、充满想象”切忌：套用了太多所谓“万能句式”，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了：

（1）利用了大量表示次序词句(太过理性)：

Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;

Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;

Myfuturelifeisasfollows.46/55审题：“十年后我”---“感性、充满想象”切忌：套用了太多所谓“万能句式”，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了：

（1）利用了大量表示次序词句(太过理性)：

Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;

Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;

Myfuturelifeisasfollows.47/55（2）利用了大量表示强烈观点句式（语气太刚）：IholdthepointofviewthatThereisnodoubtthat…Istronglybelievethat…Iamfirmlyconvincedthat(therewillbeexcitingandwonderfulchangesin…/itgivesmeastrongbody)Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…WhatIwanttostressisthat(healthisveryimportanttous)48/55（3）利用了大量总结、转换、强调、转折等语气、句式，不够得体。Allinall,…/Generallyspeaking,Asamatteroffact,Asformysparetime,…AsfarasIamconcerned,Ihopebecomeadoctor.Whenitcomestomyownfamily,itoccurstomethatIwillhave2children.Itisknowntousthatfamilyisthemostimportantthinginourlife.Ontheonehand,…ontheotherhand…49/55注意：在结构清楚，逻辑通顺基础上，要注意句型多变，句子优美。50/55（1）利用大量强调句和倒装句，给人非常生涩感觉。Inmysparetime,soactiveamIthatIwillgofishingwithmyfamily.Itisaftertenyearsthat…（2）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量一样句式：It’sIthatwanttobeateacher;ItisIthatamfondonchildren.ItisIthatlikemakingalotoffriends.ItisfamouscitythatI’llgoto…（3）中式英语，意思相差较大,或完全不达意。LoverOrganizeafamilyIhopemywillbelittlespeakEnglish.51/55那些能稍微充满想象句子，就显得难能可贵：…Mytwosonssurroundingmesmilelikesunshine.…Onweekends,Iwilltakemyfamilytothebeachtohavearest,enjoyingthesunrises.…gooutforapicnic,huggingthenatureandstrengtheningouremotion…cleverandoptimistic,mydaughterisgoingtobethesortofgirlwhospreadsunshinetoothersthroughhersmile.…Lovecanadddelightfulcolortolife.52/55

MyChineseDream

Tomakeourmotherlandbecomemoreandmorepowerful,teenagersshouldplayaroleinrealizingChinesedream.Recently,ourclasshasheldameetingaboutthis.ThereIwilldiscusshowIunderstandChinesedream.Maybeeveryonehasadream,whateveritis.Dreamislikewater,whichcanwaterourheart;dreamislikesunshine,whichcanmeltthesnow;dreamislikewind,whichcanblowawayfoginfrontofoureyes.WhenIwasachild,Iwantedtobeadoctor,whocansavethedyingpeople.AndnowIwanttomakemyfanilyliveabetterlife.