读后续写-从沮丧到成长：小男孩的赛道心路 讲义 高考英语复习写作专项

读后续写--从沮丧到成长：小男孩的赛道心路讲义读后续写阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ThecrowdroaredasItookofffromthestartinglineinTheBigRace.Throughthecheers,IheardMomshouting,“Run,Sammy,run!”Iknewwithoutlookingthatshewassmilingfromeartoearandclappingherhandsforme.IkeptmyeyesstraightaheadrunningasfastasIcould.“Run,run,run,”IchantedtomyselfinmymindasIpassedmyfriendJustin.IsawJustin’sredfaceoutofthecornerofmyeyeandwonderedifmyownfacewasthatredtoo?“Run,run,run.”Iwasonfire,passingSarah,leavingherinmydust.Thecoachwaswaitingformeatthefinishline,holdingthemedalforthefastestrunnerinkindergarten.Iwouldwearthatblueandwhiteribbonaroundmyneckwhenwegooutforicecreamtocelebrateandthenhangitinmyroom.LastnightItookthecollectionofcapsoffthehookonmywallleavingitreadyformyshinynewmedal.Icouldn’twaittoseeiteverydaywhenIwokeup.Dadwasthereinthecrowdalsoandwouldpickmeupandputmeonhisshoulderstocarryaround.“Myson!”Hewouldtelltheotherfathers,“Mysonwontherace!”Iwasgoingtowin!FasterthanSarah,IcameupbehindMikey,givingmylegsthatextraburstofenergytopasshimby.Thewinner,Sammy!Allthatrunningintheparkwasworthit!JustasIheardtheroarofthecrowdwelcomingmetothefinishline,Isawabluroutofthecornerofmyeye.What?TherewasJustinwithhistomatocheeksrunningasfastashumanlypossible,huffingandpuffinglikehewasgoingtoblowthehousedown.Andthenhewasinfrontofme.IwasbehindtomatofaceJustin.Crossingthefinishline,Iheardthevoiceovertheloudspeakerboom,“Congratulationstothewinner,Justin!”CongratulationstoJustin?CongratulationstoJustin.注意：1.

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请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:IstoodtherefrozenasJustinwashandedhismedal.Paragraph2:Suddenly,stronghandsliftedmeontoDad’sshoulders.解题思路分析1.整体情感走向：开头是“我站在那里发愣”，情绪是震惊+失落+委屈；最后一段以“爸爸将我高高举起”收尾，要有一个情感升华：尽管没赢比赛，我依然得到了爱和认可。2.情节安排建议：第一段写心理变化+身体反应+爸爸出现的安慰；第二段写爸爸鼓励、观众反应，Sammy的内心完成“从羡慕别人➝接纳自己➝获得温暖”的成长。写作结构第一段：描写失落与转折，情感由低谷到第一波缓解段首给定句：Paragraph1:IstoodtherefrozenasJustinwashandedhismedal.句序类型内容示例1固定句①（情感描写）Awaveofdisappointmentwashedoverme,heavierthananythingIhadeverfeltbefore.2自拟句（细节描写）Iclenchedmyfistsandstaredattheground,tryinghardtoswallowthelumprisinginmythroat.3固定句②（动作链）Iturnedslowly,shuffledtowardthesideline,andblinkedawaythetearsthatthreatenedtofall.4自拟句（冲突铺垫）Aroundme,thecrowdcheeredforJustin,buttome,everythingsoundeddistantandmuffled.5固定句③（情节转折）NosoonerhadIloweredmyheadthanIfeltapairofstrongarmsliftingmeintotheair.第二段：情绪升华，完成成长性总结段首给定句：Paragraph2:Suddenly,stronghandsliftedmeontoDad’sshoulders.句序类型内容示例6固定句④（情感转变）AstrangewarmthroseinmychestasDadcarriedmehighabovethecrowdlikeIwasthetruewinner.7自拟句（背景渲染）Isawthecoachsmilingatme,andMomwipinghereyeswhilemouthing,“Youdidamazing.”8自拟句（细节描写）Fromabove,IspottedJustinwavingatmewithhismedalswingingfromhisneck—Iwavedback,smiling.9固定句⑤（结局升华）BythetimeDadputmedown,Irealizedthatsometimes,notwinningteachesyouevenmore.10固定句⑥（主题点睛）Thatday,Ilearnedthattruevictoryliesineffort,courage,andthelovethatliftsyouwhenyoufall.范文01Paragraph1：IstoodtherefrozenasJustinwashandedhismedal.Awaveofdisappointmentwashedoverme,heavierthananythingIhadeverfeltbefore.Iclenchedmyfistsandstaredattheground,tryinghardtoswallowthelumprisinginmythroat.Iturnedslowly,shuffledtowardthesideline,andblinkedawaythetearsthatthreatenedtofall.Aroundme,thecrowdcheeredforJustin,buttome,everythingsoundeddistantandmuffled.NosoonerhadIloweredmyheadthanIfeltapairofstrongarmsliftingmeintotheair.Paragraph2：Suddenly,stronghandsliftedmeontoDad’sshoulders.AstrangewarmthroseinmychestasDadcarriedmehighabovethecrowdlikeIwasthetruewinner.Isawthecoachsmilingatme,andMomwipinghereyeswhilemouthing,“Youdidamazing.”Fromabove,IspottedJustinwavingatmewithhismedalswingingfromhis