Unit+8+Literature+Writing+Workshop+读后续写高中英语北师大版（2019）选择性必修第三册

—TheLastLeafAContinuationofaStoryUnit8LiteratureWritingworkshopLearningobjectives

analyzethestory’smainelements.learnthe skills on continuation writing.applywhatyouhavelearnttotheContinuationWriting.learnandappreciatethepossiblestoryending.Attheendofthisclass,IcanYouaregoingtowriteacontinuationofthestoryTheLastLeaf.WritingTaskwherewhowhatwhy/howinGreenwichVillageJohnsy,SueandBehrman

JohnsyhadfallenillandwasdyingofpneumoniaMr.BehrmanpaintedthelastleafandhediedwheninNovemberTask1:Readforthebasicinformation.RisingActionClimaxTask2:Rereadthestoryandfigureouttheplot.ClimaxRisingActionInNovember,Johnsy___________________.Thedoctorsaid.zgotsickwithpneumoniashemightnotgetbetterShecountedthe______

outthewindow.Shethoughtshemustgowhenthelastleaf____leavesfellFigureouttheplot.FallingActionContinuationThedoctor____________________________.MrBehrman____________________saidshewouldliveandgetbetterwassickwithpneumoniaBehrmanandSuelookedoutthewindowandfound___________.ThenextmorningJohnsy________________________

oneleafleftsawtheleafwasstillthere.Thenextday,MrBehrman_____.ThelastleafwaspaintedbyMr.Behrman.diedClimaxJohnsysurvivedand...Figureouttheplot.ClimaxRisingActionJhonsywasill.

Johnsycountedtheleavesoutside.Therewasonlyoneleafoutsidethewindow.Thefollowingday,thelastleafwasstillthere.Johnsysurvived.MrbehrmandiedWhathappenedtoJohnsy?Whydidshebecameafamouspainter?TheplotContinuationCharactersPersonalityExamples(Evidence)Johnsypessimisticstubbornwaitedtodie;mindwasmadeupSueconsideratekind,patientencouraged

Johnsyconstantlyandtookcare

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JohnsycarefullyBehrmanambitiousselflessbraveForfortyyearshehadbeenabouttopaintamasterpiece.HesacrificedhislifetosaveJohnsy.AnalysethecharacterscharacterizationTearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.________________________________________Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork._______________________________WritingTask

对段首语进行分析、设问。两个段首语是重要的续写提示，控制着情节的发展方向。对其分析设问，能够将预测的故事情节以问题的形式呈现，利于打开思路，整理信息和组织语言。Task3:AnalysethetwogivensentencesPara1:

TearscametoJohnsy’seyes,assheknewwhatMr.BehrmanhaddoneforherPara2:

Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork.Whydidshecry?Whatwasherfeeling？Whatwouldshesay?

Whatwouldshedowhensherealizedherdream?Howdidshefeelwhenrememberedthepast?WhatwasMr.Behrman’sinfluenceonherpaintings?

→Johnsywastoodepressedtoutterawordandpromisedthatfromtodayon,shewillputallherheartandsoulintopainting.WhatdidshedoforMr.Behrman?

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.TearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.Q2：Whatdidshedo?Q1：Whatwereherfeelings?WenttoseeMr.Behrmanimmediatelyandsaidgoodbyetohim.Q3：WhatwouldshesaytoMr.Behrman?surprised,heartbroken,andgratefulExpressingherdeepgratitudeandtoldherfuturedreamTask4:DeveloptheplotsfeelingswordsbehaviorsPara.2Para.2.Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork.Q1:Whatwouldshedowhensherealizedherdream?Q3:WhatwasMr.Behrman’sinfluenceonherpaintings?Q2:Howdidshefeelwhenrememberedthepast?ReturntotheGreenwichVillage.RecalltheoldtimesandfeltmovedagainKeephiminmindandmadehisdreamcometrue.FeelingsTearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork..

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结局/升华主旨承接首段首句承接二段首句承启二段首句TearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork.

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TearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.

Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork.JohnsycriedShedecidedtoseeBehrmanShesawBehrmanShesaidgoodbyetohimSheexpressedgratitudeShepromised“InNovember,acold,unseenstranger,whomthedoctorscalledPneumonia,arrivedinGreenwichVilliage.”(para.2)“Iwanttogosailingdown,down,justlikeoneofthosepoor,tiredleaves.”(para.6)“Johnsy’seyeswereopen,buttheyweren’twatchingher.Instead,shestaredotthewindowandcountedbackwards:’Ten,nine,eight,seven...’”(para.4)“Didn’tyouwonderwhyitnevermovedaninchwhenthewindblew?Ah,dear,it’sBehrman’smasterpiece...”(para.13)personificationthevividnessofdetailssimile&personificationthesursprisingbutlogicalendingWritingstylesofO.Henryhints:simile(明喻)personification(拟人)thevividnessofdetails(生动的细节描写)thesurprisingbutlogicalending(惊人但合逻辑的结局)say:claim,ask,reply,cry,tellsee:look,watch,stare,noticedie:go,gosailingdown,goaway,slipaway

Howdoesthewriterusedifferentwordstoexpresssimilarmeaningsinthestory?varietyinlanguageWonderfulexpressionsandbeautifulsentencesExpressions:1.Vividwords&variousexpressions（生动的词/多样的表达）2.Verbsinaction（表动作的词）3.Variedsentencepatterns（句式多样）4.Plotscorrespondingtothegivenpassage（情节紧扣）5.Properstatementofthetheme（主题升华恰当）

写句式

招招升级招式1：名词性从句常见句型：Whatwassurprisedwasthat...

招式2：“so...that...”因果关系逻辑强，动作情绪全包含，想更高级也容易，so提前变成倒装

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招式3：

完全倒装

表示时间、地点、方位的介词或副词置于句首时，使用完全倒装

结构，即“谓语动词+主语”招式4：

强调句“Itwas...that/who...”

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虚拟语气

常用句式：Without.../Butfor...,Sb.could/couldn’thavedone...

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非谓语动词常用句式：

①...,doing②Doing…③Havingdone...,...

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定语从句“先行词n.+who/that....”招式8：

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ParaSurroundings环境Events事件Places地点Emotions情绪

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TearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.________________________________________Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork._______________________________

Task5:Composing读后续写的高考评分标准

评分标准：1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2.评分时，先根据所续写内容和语言（词汇语法、篇章结构）等考虑。（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；（2）内容的合理性；（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；（4）上下文的连贯性；3.先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。4.评分时还应注意：（1）拼写与标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英美拼写均可接受；5.书写较差，以至影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次；6.词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。

v使用多样化的语法结构，使用高级词汇表达，并在此基础上保证准确性。力争“升档”，严防“掉档”续写内容与所给段首句和短文有合理的衔接。保证所写情节的合理性有效地使用语句间的连接成分，短文结构紧凑。有最低字数要求，但无明确上限，建议不超过180词拼写、标点及试卷的整洁度会影响整体得分。Para.1TearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.Lookingoutofthewindowandstaringatthelastivyleafthatnevermovedaninch,Johnsycouldn’thelpcryingsadly.

Althoughshewastooweaktositupandmovearound,shewasdeterminedtoseeMrBehrmanthelasttime.SupportedbySue,Johnsygotoutofbed

andwentdownstairs.

TherewasMr.Behrmanlyingdeadinhisbed.

HoldingMr.Behrman’shandtightly,Johnsywhisperedtothepaleface,“DearMr.Behrman!

It’syouwhogavemeasecondlifeandIpromisethatIwillcontinuemypainting.”AsimpleversionPara.1TearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.Lookingoutofthewindowandgazingatthelastivyleafthatnevermovedaninch,Johnsycouldnotcontainherselfanylongerandbrokeintotears.Infragilehealthasshewas,shewasdeterminedtoseeMrBehrmanthelasttime.SupportedbySue,Johnsystruggledoutofbedandshuffleddownstairs.TherewasMr.Behrman,thepooroldpainter,lying

deadinhisbed.

HoldingMr.Behrman’shandtightly,Johnsywastoodepressedtoutteraword.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,sheheldbackhertearsand

murmuredtothepaleface,“DearMr.Behrman!

It’syouwhogavemeasecondlife.Ipromisethatfromtodayon,Iwillputallmyheartandsoulintopainting.”Advancedversion1.PolishPara1.2.FinishPara2andpolishit.Homework

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TearscametoJohnsy’seyesassheknewwhatMr.Behrmanhaddoneforher.

Tenyearslater,Johnsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork.JohnsycriedShedecidedtoseeBehrmanShesawBehrmanShesaidgoodbyetohimSheexpressedgratitudeShepromisedHerpaintingswerepopularShereturnedShesawtheleafSherecalledthetimesShefinishedthedrawingThelastleafisthehopePara.2Tenyearslater,Jonhsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork.

Herpaintingswerewidelyadmiredandonexhibitionatartgalleriesallovertheworld.Oneday,shereturnedtoGreenwichVillage.Whensheopened

thewindowandsawtheleafonthewall,shedecideditwastherighttimeforhertodrawthepaintingthatshehad

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produce.Inthepainting,aleafheldfirmlyonto

thedrybranchesintheicywind.Withthelaststrokeonthepaper,Johnsysmiled

broadly.Toher,thelastleaf

isaglimmerofhopethatanoldmangavetoadesperategirlatthecostofhisownlife.Paragraph2.Tenyearslater,Jonhsybecameafamouspainterduetoherdedicationandhardwork.

Herpaintingswerehighlyacclaimedandonexhibitionatartgal