读后续写脱离困境型-新高考英语读后续写技巧与训练

读后续写：脱离困境型

Parti：经典例文（玩具店遇险）...............................................1

Part2：困境类场景描写.......................................................3

一、环境描写（恶劣）....................................................3

二、情绪描写（绝望、恐惧+挣扎）........................................5

三、转机描写一一描写声音传来或看见了什么...............................6

四、情绪描写（希望+努力）..............................................7

五、脱险描写............................................................7

六、情绪描写（感恩+高兴）..............................................8

七、主旨描写............................................................8

Part3：灵活应用..............................................................8

例1：瀑布遇险..........................................................8

例2：火灾救老人........................................................10

例3：森林迷路脱险.....................................................12

Parti：经典例文（玩具店遇险）

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

ItwasaSaturdayafternoon.Thecoloroftheskywaschanging,firstlightgray,thendark

gray,andfinallydarkanddense.Thewindwasblowingheavily,andthetreeswereswayinginthe

strongwind.Itbegantoraincatsanddogs.Soon,theroadwasfilledwithpuddlesfromtherain.

Onsuchastormyafternoon,mymothertookmyfiveyearoldbrother,Christopher,andmetoa

newbigtoystoreshehadreadaboutinthenewspaper.66Somanytoys,^^theadvertisementhad

shoutedinfullandflashycolor,"thatwehadtogetahugewarehousetofitthemall!^^

ChristopherandIcouldn*thavebeenmoreexcited.Weranacrosstheparkinglot,throughthe

coldrain,asfastasourlittlelegscouldcarryus.Weleftourmotheroutsidetobattlewiththe

frustratingumbrella,whichneverworkedwhenshewanteditto."Christine!Takecareofyour

youngbrother!9,Mothershoutedatthetopofhervoice.

64Christine!rmgoingtofindtheLegosection（乐高积木区）！There'sanewpirateshipIwant,

andIhavefourdollars!MaybeIcanbuyit!”Christopherexclaimedandranoffexcitedly.I

only

halfheardhim.Itookarightturnand,tomywideeyeddelight,foundmyselfinthemidstof

theBarbie（芭比）World.

IwasstudyingaBarbieanddoingsomesimplemathinmyheadwhensuddenlyan

earthshakingclapofthunderroaredfromthestormoutside.Ijumpedatthenoise,droppingthe

dolltothefloor.Thelightsflickered（闪烁）onceandwentout,coveringeverythinginablanketof

blackness.Thundercontinuedtoshaketheskyandlightningilluminatedthestoreforseconds,

castingfrighteningshadowsonmymind.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1:

“Ohno,^^Ithought,“Where'sChristopher?^^

Paragraph2:<6Christine,Pmhere.”

答案

［写作提示］原文讲述“我，，和弟弟以及妈妈去买玩具，结果“我”和弟弟刚进去玩具店没多

久，由于雷电，商店停电，我们都看不到对方。根据第一段的段首句,本段应该是作者在黑暗中寻

找弟弟的情景。在续写时，除了动作，还要注意心理描述。根据第二段的段首句可知，弟弟找到

了“我”。此段应该描述姐弟俩相遇的情景。这里的描述应该有“劫后余生”的感觉。

Paragraph1:

“OhnoJIthought,“Where'sChristopher?^^Scared,Iwasfrozenonthespot,overewith

theneedtoseemybrother,hughimandmakecertainhewasallright.Mystomachtwistedand

turnedinside.Iranupanddowntheaislesthroughthedarkness,panicfillingmysmallchestand

makingitdifficulttobreathe.Iknockedintodisplaysofcandyandtrippedovertoys,allthe

while

franticallycallingmybrother'sname.AnxiousasIwas,Icouldbarelyseehisfigure.Tears

offrustrationandfeartrickleddownmyface,butIcontinuedtorun.

“哦，不，”我想，“克里斯托弗在哪里？”我当场冻僵了，需要见到我哥哥，拥抱他，

确保他没事。我的胃扭曲了，转了进去。我在黑暗中跑来来跑去，恐慌充满了我的小胸部，

呼吸困难。我一直在看糖果，被玩具绊倒

疯狂地叫着我哥哥的名字。虽然我很焦虑，但我几乎看不见他的身影。沮丧和恐惧的

眼泪从我的脸上滴了下来，但我继续跑着。

Paragraph2:

“Christine,I'mhere.^^Excitementtookmybreathaway-thereinthedarkLegoaisleIfound

Christopher.Hewasstandingalone,perfectlystill,hidingunderthepirateshipset.Ibegantocry

outfromrelief,throwingmyarmsaroundhimandhuggedhimtightly.Hehuggedmeback,say

ing,“IknewifIwaitedhere,Christine,youwouldbeabletofindme.^Then,Itookhishandin

mineandwewenttofindourmother,whomustbedesperatelysearchingthestoreforus.

“克里斯汀，我在这里。“兴奋让我喘住了呼吸一在黑暗的乐高走廊里，我找到了克

里斯托弗。他独自站着，完全不动，藏在海盗船下面。我开始欣慰地大叫起来，伸出双臂搂

住他，紧紧地拥抱着他。他拥抱我，说：“我知道如果我在这里等着，克里斯汀，你就能找

到我。”然后，我抓住我的手，我们去找我们的母亲，她一定是拼命地在商店里找我们。

Part2：困境类场景描写

一、环境描写（恶劣）

——波涛汹涌：

l.AsIfloatedon,ahugewave（一个巨浪）whistled（呼啸而来）andapproachedus.

2.Thebigwindroaredthroughourears（在耳边咆哮），andwewerepushedawayfromthe

shorefartherandfarther.

3.Allmysensestoldmethatabigwavewasabouttoe.（即将来临）

4.Apowerfullooking（看似猛烈的）wavewasingtowardsus.（靠近我们）

——鲨鱼的可怕：

Itwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.

Theshark'sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofsharpteeth.

——陆地上的水：

Splashingraindropshitthewindshieldfranticallyandtheskieswereoverhungwitha

blanketofgrey,.

雨滴疯狂地打在挡风玻璃上，天空笼罩在一片灰色之中。

Thewaterkeptrising,asifitwouldengulfmealive.

水不停地涨，仿佛要把我活吞下去。

Unfortunately,thewaterpouredinandcreptuponmywaist.

在水里行走（不可能rush,dash）

——推荐句型：

1.Thewindblows/whistles/howls/picksup/whipsthroughsth/sweepsacrosssth.

风刮/飕飕的舌I」/呼啸而过/愈刮愈大/刮过……/掠过……

2.Theyweregettingdrenchedbyicywater.他们被冰冷的水浇透了。

3.Theheavyrainwasviolentlybeatificagainstthewindow.大雨疯狂地击打窗户。

4.Theraindrummedontheroofofthebuilding.雨不停地击打着房预。

5.Thefuriousstormiscnimblin】outside.狂风暴雨在室外呼啸着。

6.Theicywindstartedhowlinq,stinqinqmyface.寒风开始咆哮，刺痛了我的脸。

7.AflashoflightninglitUDthewholesky.一道闪电点亮了整个天空。

8.Thesharpclapsofthunderpiercedthequietnight.声声清脆的雷声划破了宁静的夜

晚。

9.Theboltoflightningstabstheearth.一道闪电划过天空。

10.天空和海洋融为一体Itheskyandtheoceanmeltintoeachother

二、情绪描写（绝望、恐惧+挣扎）

——疲倦/寒冷

1.Saltstinging（刺痛）myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.

2.Timepassingus,tirednessengulfedHT）uswithmyfeetstiff/numb

木）andshivering.

3.Exhaustedaswewere（尽管彳艮累），wedidn'tstop.Grittingourteeth,wekept

swimming.

4.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifeltextremelyfatigued（三k常累）whileswimminghard

tokeepmyself研。血（漂浮着的）.

5.Hewashuddledintohiscoat,hisfacebluewithcold.他缩进大衣里,冷得脸都发紫

了。

6.Findersnumbedbythechillywater,throatchokedbyicywind,Ifeltontheverge

ofcoHaDsiii。.

7.Sheclaspedthebabytoherbosominthebitinc/cuttinc/piercinc/sharpwiod.在刺骨

的寒风里，她把孩子紧紧地抱在胸前。

8.Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife/needles.

寒风开始咆哮，像锋利的小刀/针一样刺痛了我的脸。

9.Herteethwerechatteringwithcold.她冷得牙齿直打颤。

――害怕

1.ItookadeepbreathandswallowedZzard（害怕地咽了口吐沫）.

2.Achillfeelingcreptupherspine.

3.Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,which

mademequiverwithanuncontrollableterror/horror/fright（难以控制地发抖）.

4.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywhole办.（在身体涌

动）

5.Astimetickedby,fearcreptuponmy（爬上我心头）andIcouldhardlytellhow

longIcouldploughon（前行）.

6.Thethoughtofhopelessnesssentshiversdownmysp加e（让我后脊背发凉）.

7.Iwasfloodedwithasense厂"（被恐惧感淹没）.

8.Seeingthis,Ifeltmyfeargrow沅g/沅（剧增）inside.

9.Ifeltawaveofanxiety（一阵焦虑）sweptovermybody（袭来）.

10.Tearsoffrustrationandhorrorgushingfrommyeyes,IfeltIhadsunkinto

hopelessness.

11.Asenseofterrorsweepingthroughmybody,Ishoutedinpanic,<6Help!Help!^^

12.ThehairsonthebackofmyneckprickledwithdreadandIwasdrenchedinsweat.

（汗毛倒竖；湿透）

13.Swallowedbyawaveofdespair,Icrossedmyfingers,closedmyeyesandprayedina

shiveringvoice.

14.Tremblinglikealeaf,thecarwasreadytobefloodedawayatanytime,which

refrainedmefrommovingasingleinch.

——描写挣扎努力

1.Tomlookedthoughtful（若有所思）

2...."Weneedtothinkoutaway!^^Imuttered（喃喃自语），scratchingmyhead（绞尽脑汁）

,Weswamtoothandnail（全力以赴地）.

4.Wesparednoeffortto（不遗余力地）toswimtowardstheshore.

5.Weexchangedadeterminedlook（互换了坚定的神情）,thenploughedon（继续前行）

atanincrediblespeed（难以置信的速度）.

三、转机描写一一描写声音传来或看见了什么

1.Adistantsoundreachedourears.（传入耳朵）

2.Justthen,mymindraced-whynotcall911andJoe?

3.Thesoundoftheboatechoedinourears.（在我们耳内回响）

4.Atthatmoment,ashrillwhistle（汽笛声）iippedtheair（划破天空）.

5.Whenwewereatalossofwhattodo,thereweremsp加g（刺耳的）（喊叫

声）risingfromthedistance（从远处升起）.

6.Jasonsawsomethingflickerinthedistance.'"Lights!Iseelights!,,Jasonshoutedout.

7.Insheerdesperation（在绝望中），Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardson

themheadingtowardsusinthedistance.

8.Afteralongtime,alightspotappearedinthedistance!Wewavedourhandsandyelled

outforhelp.

四、情绪描写（希望+努力）

——描写如释重负

1.Asifclutchinuatstraws,Idialedthenumberagainandagain.

2.Hearingthefortingnews,Icouldn'thelprestrainingmyexc力6机6〃九（情难自抑）

3.Hiswordsrsipnitedtheflameofhopeinmyheart

4.Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandIsighedingreatr呢如释重负地叹了口

气）,grinningmerrilyateachother.

5.Smilingin用f（如释重负地微笑），I先〃a（感到一阵自豪）.

6.Overjoyed（JQ.W）toseeaboatingtoourrescue,TomandIbreathedasighofrelief（那

释重负地松了口气）

7.Stifffromkeepinginonepositionforhours,theyslowlyunfoldedtheirbodies.

五、脱险描写

l.Theboatfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.船终于到达了我们身

边，把我们所有人都带回了岸边。

2.Yellingatthetopofhislunq,Joetriedtosoothemeandconvincemethatitwasthe

bestwaytoescapethedanger.乔大声大叫，试图安慰我，让我相信这是逃离危险的最

好方法。

六、情绪描写（感恩+高兴）

l.Whenwepicturedwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappiness

waswrittenonmyface.当我们想象欢乐的场景是什么时，我心中有解脱，幸福写在我

的脸上。

2.Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhave

diediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.我如释重负，不停地想整个事件。我知道

如果他们再在海里，就会死了。

七、主旨描写

1.Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.

我突然想到，帮助别人是无价的，每个人都应该是一个救生员。

...Forthefirsttimesince...,one'semotionsgotthebestofhimandtearstrickleddownhis

cheeks.这是…，的情绪第一次充分利用他，眼泪从他的脸颊上滴下来。

3.OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasJoewhohadbeencaringformethroughthickand

thin.

4.Sobbinginrelief,Iwasoverwhelmedbywavesofquiltandremorse.Imurmured

sorry,reflectingthatIshouldhavetakenhiswarningseriously.

5.Allthistookonlyafewminutes,butBettywouldneverforgetthefrightening

experience.

Part3：灵活应用

例1：瀑布遇险

ItwaslastAugust.Wewereonvacation,havingdrivenfromourhomeinWashington,

DC,toNewHampshire.Wewouldn'tseefriendsorfamily-itwouldbejustme,my

husband,andourtwokidsoutforanice,safe,sociallydistancedweekaway.

M.C.adhikedabouthalfamiletoapopularspotcalledDiana'sBaths,nearthetownof

NorthConway,wherethewaterfallsoffaseriesofflatboulderslayeredupthe

mountainsidelikeanM.C.Escherdrawing.Thebathswerefulloffamilies,sowemade

ourwaytooneoftheupperlevelsofrocktokeepourdistance.

Bothwherewesatanddownbelow,thewatercascadedandfellintosmallpools,

wherekidsinswimsuitsweresplashingaround.Iwatchedassomeyoungerparents

nervouslycorralledtheirtoddlersawayfromtherocks'edges,feelinggratefulthatmy

husbandandIwereoutofthatstage-thatourkids,atsixandeight,couldnavigatetheir

physicalspacewithmoreconfidence.Don'tgetmewrong:IwasstillterrifiedasIsawmy

twoboysjumpbetweentheslipperyrocks."Norunning,9,Isaidagainandagain."Stay

awayfromallthoseedges.”

ButIsoonrelaxed,andwewereallhavingfun,splashinginthepools,mykids

laughingasmyhusbanddunkedhisheadunderthecoldrunningwater.Then,seconds

later,everyfearI'deverhadrosetothesurface.

IturnedandsawmysonWyattsittingdownbetweentwoboulders（大圆石）ina

fastmovingstream.Iyelledathimtogetout.HeyelledbacksomethingthatIcouldn't

hear,andthenhedisappearedovertheedge.

Myhusbandwasalreadysprintingdowntherocks.Ifinallylooked.Wyattwassitting

up一hewasalive.Mybiggestfearwaserased.

Whileeveryoneelselookedonfromadistance,tooafraidorunbotheredtohelp,alady

withamaskdidn'thesitate.Infact,bythetimeIhadclimbeddowntherocksandmy

husbandhadpulledWyattoutofthewater,shehadalreadycalled911.

Paragraph1:

Shetoldmethatshewasanurse.____________________________________________

Paragraph2:

Therescueteamcame._________________________________________

参考答案：

Shetoldmethatshewasanurse.ShegaveWyattared,white,andbluestripedtowelto

putunderhishead.Sheimploredustokeephimstillandonhisbackincasehehad

injuredhisspinalcord.Ifinallyhadthewherewithaltoaskhername."Lisa,“shesaid.

“AndI'mnotleavingyou.^^Shelookedatmesodeeply,asifsheweretryingtotake

everybitofenergy,love,andstrengthinherbodyandpushitoutthroughtheonlypartof

herfaceIcouldsee.

她告诉我她是一名护士。她给了怀亚特一条红、白、蓝条纹的毛巾放在他的头底下。

她恳求我们让他保持不动，以防他伤了脊髓。我终于有了钱问她的名字了。“丽莎，”

她说。“我不会离开你。她深深地看着我，仿佛她想把身体里的一切能量、爱和力量，

从我唯一看到的脸推出去。

Therescueteamcame.TheytookWyattoutoftheparkonastretcher.Anambulancetook

ustothesmalllocalhospitalwherehewasundergoingtestsandscans.AssoonasIknew

thatWyattwasgoingtobeOK,mythoughtsfelltoLisa.Ifshehadnotsteppedup,would

someoneelsehavedoneso?Perhaps.Butitwasher.Shewastheonewhowenttowardthe

unthinkableinsteadofturningaway.

救援队来了。他们用担架把怀亚特带出了公园。一辆救护车把我们送到当地的小医院，他正

在那里接受检查和扫描。我一知道怀亚特会没事，我的思绪就落到丽莎身上了。如果她没有

站起来，还有其他人会这样做吗？也许吧。但那是她。她是那个走向不可想象的事情而不是

转身离开的人。

例2：火灾救老人

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

TheeventthatstandsoutinTom'smemoryhappenedonemorningwhenTomwasonlyten

yearsold.HewasathomewithhiseldersisterJane.Tomwasdoinghishomeworkwhenheheard

raisedvoices.Atfirsthethoughtnothingofitsincecustomersinthemotorcycleshopdirectly

belowtheirflatoftenbecameloud,buthesoonrealizedthistimeitwasdifferent.

yelled.Thenk!Removethemotorcyclesfromtheshop."someoneyelled.Thenathickburning

smellfilledtheair.WhenTomopenedthefrontdooroftheirflattoinvestigate,athickcloudof

smokegreetedhim.Themotorcycleshophadcaughtfireandpeoplewererunningandcrying.

Jane,whohadbeenplayingtheviolininherroom,hurriedtothelivingroom.Theyrushed

outofthedoorandalongthecorridor（走廊）throughthesmoke.

stopped.SheeadingtowardsthestairwayatthefarendofthecorridorwhenJanesuddenly

stopped.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame.Tomhadnoideawhatshewas

doing,buthefollowedher.

Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70swholivednextdoortothem,whothey

calledMakcik.JanebeganbangingonMakcik'sdoor,butgotnoanswer.Asthesmokethickened

aroundthem,Tomcouldseemanyoftheirneighbors-somestillintheirpyjamasrunningfor

safety.Thethoughtoffearcrossedhismind.

“Shewouldhaverunforsafetylikeeveryoneelse!”Tomcried.However,Janerefusedtogiveup.

“IknowMakcik'sstillinside."ShesaidshewasfamiliarwithMakcik'sdailyroutineand

wascertainshewouldstillbesleeping.Shepoundedagainstthedoor."Godownstairs.Gonow!

Go!”

注意:

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1:

Tomnoticedtheflamewasreachingup.

Paragraph2:

Luckily,someneighborspassingbystoppedandofferedhelp.

［写作提示］这是一篇比较典型的具有正能量,而且故事性比较强的文章。文章讲述了在一次

火灾中Jane和Tom不顾安危去救援一个邻居老人的故事。文章的第一部分叙述了两个孩子

在大火中表现出的勇敢和善良。那么续写部分就应该延续这种故事情节和赞扬的态度。根据

第一段的提示句，该段应该是对他们在敲门救邻居时火势蔓延的描述，当然更应该涉及两个孩

子在这种情况下的表现。而第二段的提示句提示我们有其他的邻居来帮忙，那么应该是一个

幸运的结尾。

Paragraph1:

Tomnoticedtheflamewasreachingup.Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot.He

prehendedthegravityofthesituationandheldJane*shandtightly.Bothofthemwerecoughing

andtheireyeswerestinging.Timeseemedtostandstill,thoughtheywereprobablythereforonly

twoorthreeminutes.TombeggedJanetorunforsafetyasquicklyaspossible.Janetriedtoshield

hernosefromthechokingsmokeandshookherhead.Shekeptpoundingagainstthedoor.Tom

burstoutcrying.

汤姆注意到火焰正在升起。他被吓得冻僵了，深深地站在那里。他明白了形势的严重性，

紧紧地握着简的手。他们俩都在咳嗽，眼睛都在刺痛。时间似乎停滞不前，尽管他们可能在

那里只有两三分钟。汤姆请求简尽快跑安全。简试图保护她的鼻子不受窒息的烟雾，并摇了

摇头。她不停地敲敲门。汤姆突然哭了起来。

Paragraph2:

Luckily,someneighborspassingbystoppedandofferedhelp.Asenseofstrengthimmediatelyre

placedthemountingfearandanxietyinJane'smind.ShetoldthemMs.Makcikmustbestillin

theroom.Theyforcedthedooropenwithalltheirmight.Sureenough,Makcikwaslyinginbed,

unconscious.Shewascarrieddownstairsandthenrushedtothehospital,whereshefinallycame

toherself.PeopleintheneighborhoodfeltrelievedandJaneandTomwereveryhappy.

幸运的是，一些路过的邻居停下来提供了帮助。一种力量感立刻使简的心中充满了越来越强

烈的恐惧和焦虑。她告诉他们，马克西克女士一定还在房间里。他们竭尽全力地强行打开了

门。果然，马克西克正躺在床上，失去了知觉。她被带下楼，然后被紧急送往医院，最后苏

醒过来。附近的人都松了一口气，简和汤姆也非常高兴。

高级语块poundagainst猛敲withallone'smight竭尽全力

佳句背诵Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot.

AsenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinJane'smind.

例3：森林迷路脱险

Deepintheforest,myhusbandandIhadfunclimbingoverandcrawlingunderthedowned

treesthatblockedthedirtpathbeforeus.ItwasMay,yetwewalkedupasnowcoveredhill.When

wenoticedourjeanswerewetuptoourknees,itdidnotdampenourspiritsNotoncedidwesay,

“Let'sturnaround.??Thiswasourvacation,andwewereonanadventure.Littledidweknow

thiswasthebeginningofmanymoresurprises.

Thetrailwasmarkedasaneasyonekilometerlikeyetwewerealreadywalkingalong

distance.Ourlightheartednessstoppedwhenwecameoutintoaclearingandsawaparkinglot

withoutourrentalcarinit.Asmyeyesscannedthesurroundings,nothinglookedfamiliar.My

heartraced.Irealizedwewerelostinanationalparkthatdidnotofficiallyopenforanotherweek.

Usually,Iamthecalmoneinthe