读后续写之情感情绪细节刻画（原卷版）-高考英语一轮考点复习

考向42读后续写之情感情绪细节刻画

情感细节包括人物的感受、情绪，是续写中必不可少的细节描写之一。合理的情感情绪描写与刻画，可

以凸显人物的性格、人际关系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮进而突出语篇主题等。因此，合理的情感情绪刻画在续

写中是非常必要的。以下就是读后续写过程中，刻画人物情感情绪的四个方法：

一、直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词、副词或名词、介词短语等表达人物的喜怒哀乐

例如：快乐（happy,delighted,pleased,joyful,enjoyable等）、吃惊（surprised,shocked,amazed,astonished）等形容

词或介词短语（toone'ssuiprise,inrelief,inpanic）等描述人物的情绪。

二、利用环境细节“融情于景”烘托人物的情感

例如：Dellafinishedhercryinganddriedherface.Shestoodbythewindowandlookedoutunhappilyatagraycat

walkingalongagrayfenceinagraybackyard.（小说《麦琪的礼物》中利用3个形容词gray,体现了Della的难受

和不开心。）

三、利用恰当的动作描写反映人物的情绪

例如I：下面文章片段中的句子：

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealonglime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturned

aroQnd」hoDingioseelhe」ake.（动作描写，说明Jane满怀期望）TahCISUrPlisg（利用介词短适体现一项）鱼的吃惊）

疝&一版双~。岫11上地人/。由鼠、且1«1,一01_±6'©。必一队SRQM二（寓情于景，体现Jane的无望失落）She

suddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

四、利用高级句式和修饰成分细化情感细节

例如：①“Absolutely!”repliedJohn,excitementshinninginhiseyes.（利用名词excitement和独立主格结构,

描写John的兴奋激动）

约翰答道，“一定”，他两眼兴奋地闪闪发光。

...angrywasthebearthatitroaredandsmackedthefenceviolently,（so...that倒装句型）

熊怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击护栏。

③Youcannotimaginehowfrighienedwewereattheapproachofthepolarbear,（how引导的宾语从句，介词短

语）

你无法想象北极熊向我们逼近时我们多么的恐惧。

【策略微练】

I.按要求补全下面动作、情感和心理细节的句子

I.简又害怕又无助，靠着一棵树坐下，歇歇疼痛的双脚。

,Janesatagainstatree,.（形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语）

2.“如果我没有和汤姆吵架，我现在就不会被困在这里了，"她想，悔恨的泪水模糊了她的眼睛。

“,"shethoughtto

herself.（虚拟语气的倒装句，with复合结构）

3.她挣扎着站起来寻找那个湖,

4.她精疲力竭，她爬上一块大石头，躺了下来，很快睡着了,

.......that状语从句,一连串

的动作）

5.简醒来时天已经亮了。

6.尽管很沮丧，她还是决定继续前进。

,shedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.（让步状语从句）

tshedecidedtocontinueforcingherwayahead.（状语从句的省略句）

7.随着小溪的声音，她向水边走去。

shewalkedtowardthewater.（非谓语动词作状语）

8.突然，她注意到远处有一个熟悉的身影向她走来。

____________________________________________（非谓语动词作宾补）

n.将以上补全后的各句合并为短文，注意恰当的衔接过渡

【典例示例】

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为15()

左右。

SaniWattswasa37-year-oldfishermanlivingandworkinginCanada.Oneday,Samplannedtoheadoutintothe

Pacificat9amandworkstraightthroughuntil5pmthenextday.JoiningSamwouldbehiscrewman,24-year-oklTom

Buck.

AlthoughSamhadbeenwarnedthatastormwasing,therewaslittlethatwouldkeephimfromgoing.Ashesailed

throughthewavessome120kilometersfromland,Samletouthisthree-kilonieter-longfishingline.Thestonnwas

gainingstrengthonlandbuthadyettoreachthemenfaroffshore.Thatchangedaround1am.Wavesrockedthesmall

boat,whichbegantoturnsidewayslikeanamusementparkride."Getusoutofhere!”TomscreamedtoSam."Let'sgo

back!”

Withthewindsandwaveskickingup,theboatbegantofillwithwater.SamandTomtriedtopullinthefishingline

together,butthehighwavesfilledtheboatwithwaler,forcingSamiomakeaharddecision.Hecuttheline,losing

thousandsofdollars'worthofequipmentandfishinthesea.Hethenpointedtheboattowardaportfivehoursaway.

Sam(hencalledhisboss,WilliamFox,toreporthisposition.

Withdawning,Samspottedtheriseofthemountainsonthehorizon.Hewasfiguringoutaroutethroughthe

dangerouswaterswhensuddenlythemotorstopped.t4Icouldn'tbelieveit,“Samsaid.uWcwere24kilometersoffthe

coast,andthemotordied.''Highwavesraisedanddroppedtheboat,sendingthemencrashingintothesides.44William,

William!”

Samyelledintotheradio."Ifyou'reingtogetme,enow!”

"We'reing!MWilliamshoutedback.

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Shortlyafter,theradiodiedandthewindcontinuedtoblowstraightoffshore,drivingthemenfartherouttosea.

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Thenextmorning,Samspottedafishingboatinthedistance.

【写作分析】

文章主旨：原文叙述SaniWatts和船员ToniBuck去海上捕鱼时，突遇风暴，在危险之际SamWatts做出了

艰难的抉择：割断像.线，损失了价值数千万美元的设备和鱼。虽然和老板报告了自己的位置，然而SamWatls和

TomBuck船上的发动机熄火。续写部分应叙述他们被救出的过程。

续写第一段：根据首句关键信息“theradiodied"和"drivingthemenfartherouttosea”可知该段应叙述Sam和

Tom在发动机熄火和无线电死机的情况下，被困海上面临死亡。此时应用心理活动描写，描写他们的恐惧以及

Sam后悔的心情，后悔自己不顾风暴的警告固执地出海的决定。

续写第二段：根据首句关键信息“afishingboat”结合原文中提到到海上寻找他们的William可知，该段应叙述

他们最线获救。该段的叙述可利用动作描写显示他们见到来营救他们的船只时高兴的心情。

【参考范文】

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Shortlyafter,theradiodiedandthewindcontinuedtoblowstraightoffshore,drivingthemenfartherouttosea.

FearseizedTomandhewastrembling,fbr(hewaterhadnotonlywethisclothesbutalsoruinedhishopeofsurviving.

Sammurmured,waswarnedthatastormwasing.Haditnotbeenformystubbornness,wcwouldnothavelostour

equipmentandhadtofacesuchaterriblesituation.^^Hisvoicegraduallydisappearedaswavesrockedtheboat,making

terrifyingsounds.Afterwhatseemedtobeacentury,agreatdarknessfell.Exhausted,theyfellasleep.

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Immediately,Daisyfetchedsomebutter.

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Soontheywerealthevet'soffice.

2.阅读下面材料，根据所给内容进行续写,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasdeepintothenightmanyyearsago.Therainjustcamepouringdownoutside.Anelderlynanandhiswife

enteredthelobby(大厅)ofasmallhotelinPhiladelphia,USA.

Tryingtogetoutoftherain,thecoupleapproachedthefrontdeskhopingtogetaroomtostayinforthenight.

“Couldyoupossiblygiveusaroomherc?^,thehusbandasked.

Theclerk,afriendlyyoungmanwithawinningsmile,lookedatthecoupleandexplainedthattherewerethree

conferencesinthetown,"Allofourroomsaretaken,"theclerksaid."ButIcan'tsendanicecouplelikeyououtintothe

rainatoneo'clockatnight.Wouldyouperhapsbewillingtosleepinmyroom?It'snotexactlyasuite,butitwillbegood

enoughtomakeyouPortableforthenighl.^^

When(hecoupledeclined,theyoungmanpressedon."Don'tworryaboutme.I'llmakeoutjuslfine,"theclerktold

them.Sothecoupleagreed.

Ashepaidhisbillthenextmorning,theelderlymansaidtotheclerk,uYouarcthekindofmanagerwhoshouldbe

thebossofthebesthotel.MaybesomedayI'llbuildonefbryou.”

Theclerklookedatthemandsmiled.Thethreeofthemhadagoodlaugh.Astheydroveaway,theelderlycouple

agreedthatthehelpfulclerkwasindeedexceptional,asfindingpeoplewhoarebothfriendlyandhelpfulisn'teasy.

Threeyearspassed.Theclerkhadalmostforgottenthethingwhenhereceivedaletterfromtheelderlyman.It

recalledthatstormynight,whenheofferedhiskindhelptotheelderlycouple.Intheenvelope,(herewasaroundtrip

tickettoNewYork,andaletteraskingtheyoungmantopaythemavisit.Theyoungmandecidedtosetout

immediately.

注意：

1.续写词数应为15()左右；

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

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“Doyoustillremembermypromiseyearsago?”theelderlymansaidtotheyoungman.

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“Youmustbejoking/5theyoungmansaid.

3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

plastic...checkedagain:water,food,bandage,medicines,apass,andamapwrappedinplastic...Bingo!Hepulall

thathepreparedfortheinghikingintohisbackpack.

Mr.Taylorwasfondofhiking,thistimeinparticular,foritwasthefirsttimeforhimtohikewithhistwosons,

HarryandJoel.JoellikedreadingbooksaboutexplorersandHarryjoinedthehikingclubinhisschoolthisterm.Itwill

beanunforgettableexperience,definitely,hewhisperedtohimselfunconsciouslyasmilespreadingoverhisface.

HarryandJoel,however,arguedforthefirstthreemilesoftheirhikingtrip.HarryaccusedJoelofwearingsmelly

oldshoes.JoelblamedHarryforusingallofthebugspray(喷雾防虫剂).HarrytoldJoelhesmelledterrible.Joelcalled

Harryacoward（懦夫）.

“WiHthetwoofyoujustquietdownandenjoyourhiketogether?^^theirfathersaid."You'remissingallofthe

beautifulscenery!"

Itwastrue.NeitherJoelnorHarryhadtakennoticeofthebeartheirfatherhadspiedatthestartoftheirtrip.They

hadn'tlookedupattheeaglehepointedoutoverhead.Worstofall,theyhadn'tpaidanyattentiontotheturnsandtwists

alongthewaywhiletheycontinuedtheirargument.

“Joelthrewastickatme!^^Harryscreamed."That'snottrue!”Joelshoutedback.

Mr.Taylorcouldnolongercontainhisanger."Andbothofyouneedtostoparguing!"heerupted.Asheturnedto

facethem,hisleftfootcaughtonaroot.Heslippedbackwardanddownmuddybank,fallingintotheriverthatran

alongsidethepath.

HarryandJoelracedtotheirfather'sassistance.Theyhelpedhimupoutofthewater,andthendraggedhiswet

backpackupontoland.

Fortunately,theirwetthroughfatherfoundhimselfjustslightlyinjured.

注意：

L续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。

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Buthisglassescameoffwhenhefellinthewater.

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“Justcalmdown.'*Mr.Taylorshouted,"Withoutmyglasses,weneedtoworktogethertofindourway.

4.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

JesseDuftonwasbornwithageneticcondition,retinitispigmentosa（色素性视网膜炎）,andovertheyears,his

eyesightgraduallyworsened.BythetimehegottouniversityinBathtostudyChemistryithadgottothepointwherehe

couldn'treallyseeimagesatail,onlythedifferencebetweenlightanddark.Andafewyearslater,hewasalmost100%

blind.

Jesse'smumwasateacherandhisdadranacharity,andthey'vealwaysencouragedandsupportedhimin

everything.

Jessestartedclimbingwhenhewasyoung.Hisdadtookhimuphisfirstrockroutewhenhewastwo.Allhisearly

climbingwasoutdoortraditionalclimbing.HisdadhadbeenintheMountainRescueandwaspartofamountaineering

club,sotheywouldgofbrweekendsawayclimbingthroughout（heUK.

Jesse'sfathertaughthimeverythingandguidedhisfirstrouteoutsidewhenhewas11.Atthistimehehadabout30%

blurry（模糊不清的）centralvision.Hecouldjustseewellenoughtoplacerockequipment,butnotwellenoughtopick

outtheroutesfromtheground.

AtuniversityhejoinedtheMountaineeringClubandwasabletoclimbmuchmorefrequently.Theyhadregular

tripstoindoorwallsandweekendsawayoutdoors.Hedevelopedagreatcircleofclimbingfriendsandwentonmultiple

tripstoEurope.OnthesehestartedAlpineclimbingandiceclimbingtoo.

Butwhenhissightdroppedtoalevelwherehecouldnolongerread,itstartedtobedifficulttoplaceequipmentas

hecoildn'lseewhetheritwasproperlyseated.Healsostoppedbeingabletopickouttheholdsatindoorwalls.

Jessethoughthemighthavetogiveupclimbingashiseyesightgotworse.Buthisparentsnevergiveuphopesfor

him.TheyplannedaclimbingfbrthefamilyandencouragedJessetohaveatryagain.Jessesmiledbecauseheknewhis

parentswouldalwaysbehisbestguide.

注意：

I.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Itwasroutelikemilestone（里程碑）anditwasnoteasy.

SomepeopleaskedJessewhyhechosetotryclimbing.

5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

“MeetonemoreandI'lldefinitelyaskafavour/'Ginathought,lookingupatthestreetlights,everythingimmersed

（沉浸在）inthedarknight."Alas!Thisunluckystuff?'Shesaidtoherself,helpless.

Behindhercamethejinglingofbicyclebells.HardlyhadGinaletout“ah”whenacyclingyoungiransweptpast.

“Why,thecyclistwasback?”Ginawhisperedtoherself.Theyoungmansuddenlyreturnedandwasalreadyinfront

ofGinabeforesheknewit.Gina'sheartwaspoundingunderhightension.uWhatwillhedoonsuchadarknight?”

“Calledmejustnow?”Theyoungmangotoffhisbike.Ginashookherheadrepeatedlybutgently.Astrongsenseof

seifdelenseovercameherandsherefusedtosayyes.

“Somethingwrongwithyourbike?”Apairofsmilingeyesmethers.Ginabecamesomewhatcalm.“Thefronttire

hasgonesheresponded,headdown,arayofhopearising.uWell.Ican'thelpitwithnotools."Theyoungman

managedasmile.Gina'sheartsankagain.uDoyoulivefar?,,theyoungmansearchedherfacefbrananswer."Me?”she

asked,keepingpushingherbikeforward.t€Wcll,ontheleftsideofthestreetendisarepairshop.Wishyouluck!”With

thesewords,theyoungmanrodeaway.Ginaalmostburstintotears."It'salmostmidnight.WherecanIfindarepair

shop?Aliar.”Shestartedtohatetheyoungman.

Almostattheendofthestreet,Ginacouldn'thelpbutlookup.Nearthesidewalk,therewasreallyashopwiththe

lightstillon.

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Shepausedhesitantly,andoutoftheshopcameagirlinhertwenties.

Withthehelpoftheyoungmanandthegirl,thetirewassoonrepaired.

6.阅读卜面材料・，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

OnabeautifulThursdayofthisApril,AmyandAlanGreentooktheirdaughterAbbeyoutforawalkinthe

neighborhood.Ontheirwayback,AmypickedupakiteforAbbeyfromtheDollarTree,bluewithrainbows一therearea

lotofrainbowsdecoratinghomesaroundtheregionthesedays,whichhelpsmakeli