科普知识家庭温情类读后续写-他曾用星星许我童年我用星星还他此生讲义-高三上学期英语一轮复习专项

山东省济南市20242025学年高二下学期期末检测英语试题阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。MyDad,Matt,losthisjobandwhenChristmascame,wehadnomoneyatall.OnChristmasEve,Dadtookmeintoouryard.IwasfivethatyearandIsatnexttoDadandwelookedupatthesky,“Pickoutyourfavoritestar,”Dadsaid.HetoldmeIcouldhaveonestarforkeeps.HesaiditwasmyChristmaspresent.“Youcan’tgivemeastar!Nooneownsthestars.”“That’sright,Betty.Nooneelseownsthem.Youjusthavetoclaimitbeforeanyoneelsedoes.”Ilookeduptothestarsandtriedtofigureoutwhichwasthebestone.Icouldseehundreds,maybethousandsorevenmillions,hangingintheclearsky.Therewasoneinparticular,inthewestabovethemountainsbutlowinthesky,whichshonemorebrightlythanalltherest.Ipointedandclaimedit.Dadsmiled,tellingmeIchoseVenus.Itlookedbiggerandbrighterbecauseitwasmuchcloserthanotherstars.Itreflectedthelightofthesun.“Ilikeitanyway,”Isaid.“Alright,”Dadagreed.“It’sChristmas.Youcanhaveaplanetifyouwant.”Fromthenon,Venusgotanewnameinourfamily,Betty’sPlanet.AfterChristmas,Dadfoundanotherjobinthemineandheworkedlikemad.Gradually,wecouldmakeendsmeetandtherewerepresentsundertheChristmastreeandcakeswhenitwasmybirthday.Butdeepdown,nopresentcouldmatchBetty’sPlanet.Yearslater,Ientereduniversity,majoringinengineering,butIstucktomypassionforastronomyinmysparetime.Inmyjunioryear,Ibecamethefirstundergraduateevertodiscoveranasteroid(小行星)whenexaminingimagesofthousandsofasteroidsonmyputer,duetowhichIwasgiventherighttonamethisasteroidaccordingtothetraditionofInternationalAstronomicalUnion.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Thistime,IdecidedtogiveDadapresent.Paragraph2:DadsaidheowedmeanapologyforthatChristmas.

山东省济南市20242025学年高二下学期期末检测英语试题阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。MyDad,Matt,losthisjobandwhenChristmascame,wehadnomoneyatall.OnChristmasEve,Dadtookmeintoouryard.IwasfivethatyearandIsatnexttoDadandwelookedupatthesky,“Pickoutyourfavoritestar,”Dadsaid.HetoldmeIcouldhaveonestarforkeeps.HesaiditwasmyChristmaspresent.“Youcan’tgivemeastar!Nooneownsthestars.”“That’sright,Betty.Nooneelseownsthem.Youjusthavetoclaimitbeforeanyoneelsedoes.”Ilookeduptothestarsandtriedtofigureoutwhichwasthebestone.Icouldseehundreds,maybethousandsorevenmillions,hangingintheclearsky(现在分词做伴随动作).Therewasoneinparticular,inthewestabovethemountainsbutlowinthesky,whichshonemorebrightlythanalltherest.Ipointedandclaimedit.Dadsmiled,tellingme(现在分词做伴随动作)IchoseVenus.Itlookedbiggerandbrighterbecauseitwasmuchcloserthanotherstars.Itreflectedthelightofthesun.“Ilikeitanyway,”Isaid.“Alright,”Dadagreed.“It’sChristmas.Youcanhaveaplanetifyouwant.”Fromthenon,Venusgotanewnameinourfamily,Betty’sPlanet.AfterChristmas,Dadfoundanotherjobinthemineandheworkedlikemad.Gradually,wecouldmakeendsmeetandtherewerepresentsundertheChristmastreeandcakeswhenitwasmybirthday.Butdeepdown,nopresentcouldmatchBetty’sPlanet(重要的伏笔).Yearslater,Ientereduniversity,majoringinengineering(现在分词做伴随动作),butIstucktomypassionforastronomyinmysparetime.Inmyjunioryear,Ibecamethefirstundergraduateevertodiscoveranasteroidwhenexaminingimagesofthousandsofasteroidsonmyputer,duetowhichIwasgiventherighttonamethisasteroidaccordingtothetraditionofInternationalAstronomicalUnion.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Thistime,IdecidedtogiveDadapresent.Paragraph2:DadsaidheowedmeanapologyforthatChristmas.

1.文章分类及续写思路分析分类：该读后续写属于科普知识+家庭温情类，主题围绕父女之间的爱与精神传承展开，核心是“无形的礼物比物质更重要”。构思与布局：步骤具体内容提炼框架1.

续写方向：女儿用天文发现回报父亲当年的精神礼物。2.

情感升华：父亲道歉，女儿揭示礼物的真正意义。段落布局第一段：女儿命名小行星的细节，体现对父亲的感恩。第二段：父亲回忆往事，女儿点明“Betty’sPlanet”的精神价值。实施要点紧扣“天文”与“礼物”的呼应。通过对话和心理描写强化情感层次。续写注意事项：事项具体内容承接原文沿用“Betty’sPlanet”和“Venus”的象征。保持父亲乐观、女儿感性的性格。巧妙设计以小行星命名呼应父亲的“星星礼物”。用父亲道歉制造情感反转。2.故事山模式与原文分析故事山模式：阶段原文内容开端父亲失业，用“星星礼物”安慰女儿。发展女儿爱上天文，大学发现小行星。高潮女儿决定将小行星命名为父亲的礼物（续写部分）。结局父女和解，揭示礼物的精神价值（续写部分）。伏笔与冲突：分析角度内容原文反应句伏笔女儿对天文的兴趣始于父亲的“星星礼物”。“Butdeepdown,nopresentcouldmatchBetty’sPlanet.”冲突物质匮乏与精神富足的对比。“wehadnomoneyatall”vs.“Youcanhaveaplanetifyouwant.”隐含线索父亲的内疚（续写可揭示）。无直接描写，但“workedlikemad”暗示压力。解决方案女儿用天文成就回报父亲，化解其内疚。续写需通过命名小行星实现。3.原文细节分析表分析角度内容原文反应句人物刻画父亲：乐观、智慧；女儿：感性、执着。match...led,tellingmeIchoseVenus.”/“nopresentcouldmatch...”情感层次从贫困的失落→星星的温暖→成长的感恩。“wehadnomoney”→“It’smyChristmaspresent.”关键情节点父亲送星星→女儿发现小行星。“Pickoutyourfavoritestar”→“discoveranasteroid”语言特色口语化对话，质朴中蕴含哲理。“Youcan’tgivemeastar!Nooneownsthestars.”心理描写女儿对星星礼物的珍视。“nopresentcouldmatchBetty’sPlanet.”动作描写父女仰望星空，女儿指星。“Ipointedandclaimedit.”环境描写夜空清澈，星光璀璨。“hangingintheclearsky”隐含主题爱与精神传承胜过物质。全文对比物质匮乏与精神满足。情感转折从贫困的悲伤→星星的惊喜→成长的回报。无直接描写，需续写补充。续写段落示例（提纲）Paragraph1:动作描写：女儿在电脑前郑重提交小行星命名申请，命名为“Matt’sPromise”。心理描写：回忆父亲当年的话，决定用科学成就回报他。关键句：”Thistime,thestarsweremylanguageoflove.”Paragraph2:对话衔接：父亲落泪道歉：“I’msorryIcouldn’tgiveyourealgifts.”主题升华：女儿回应：“Yougavemetheuniverse.‘Betty’sPlanet’wasthestartofeverything.”环境呼应：结尾父女再次仰望星空，Venus依旧闪耀。3.读后续写例句及高级替换词动作描写（ActionDescriptions）Hegentlypointedattheshimmeringstar.（他轻轻指向那颗闪烁的星星。）Sheclutchedthetelescope,herfingerstremblingwithexcitement.（她紧握望远镜，手指因兴奋而颤抖。）Dad’seyesglistenedwithunshedtears.（爸爸的眼中闪烁着未落的泪水。）Shescrolledthroughtheastronomicaldata,herheartpounding.（她滚动浏览天文数据，心跳加速。）Hewrappedhisarmsaroundherinatightembrace.（他紧紧拥抱住她。）Shetracedtheconstellationwithherfingertip.（她用指尖描摹星座的轮廓。）Hisvoicecrackedashewhispered,“I’msoproudofyou.”（他的声音哽咽，低声说：“我为你骄傲。”）Sheleanedclosertotheputerscreen,squintingatthetinydot.（她凑近电脑屏幕，眯眼盯着那个小点。）Dadruffledherhairaffectionately.（爸爸疼爱地揉了揉她的头发。）Sheclenchedherfists,determinedtoproveherself.（她握紧拳头，决心证明自己。）心理描写（PsychologicalDescriptions）AwaveofnostalgiawashedoverherassherecalledthatChristmas.（回忆那个圣诞节时，一阵怀旧之情涌上心头。）Herchestswelledwithprideatherdiscovery.（她的发现让她心中充满自豪。）Guiltgnawedathimforyears,thoughheneverspokeofit.（多年来，愧疚感一直折磨着他，尽管他从未提及。）Shebitherlip,tornbetweenexcitementandnervousness.（她咬着嘴唇，既兴奋又紧张。）Asenseofwonderfilledherwhenevershegazedatthestars.（每当她凝视星空，一种奇妙的感觉就会充满心间。）Hisheartachedatthememoryoftheirpoverty.（回忆过去的贫穷，他的心隐隐作痛。）Shehesitated,unsureifhergiftwouldmeananything.（她犹豫了，不确定自己的礼物是否有意义。）Aquietdeterminationsettledinhermind.（她心中悄然下定决心。）Hiswordslingeredinhermindlikeafortingmelody.（他的话像一首安慰的旋律，萦绕在她脑海。）Sheblinkedbacktears,notwantingtoseemsentimental.（她眨回泪水，不想显得多愁善感。）环境描写（EnvironmentalDescriptions）Thenightskystretchedendlessly,dottedwithcountlessstars.（夜空无限延伸，点缀着无数星辰。）Acrispwinterbreezerustledthebarebranches.（凛冽的冬风吹动光秃的树枝。）ThefaintglowofVenushunglowonthehorizon.（金星微弱的光芒低垂在地平线上。）Theputerscreencastapalebluelightinthedimroom.（电脑屏幕在昏暗的房间里投下淡蓝色的光。）Snowflakesdriftedlazilyfromthesky,settlingontheground.（雪花懒洋洋地从天空飘落，覆盖在地面上。）Themountainsstoodsilentunderthestarrycanopy.（群山在星空下静静矗立。）Theairsmelledofpineandfrost.（空气中弥漫着松树和霜冻的气息。）Thequiethumoftheputerfilledtheroom.（电脑的轻微嗡鸣声充斥着房间。）Moonlightspilledthroughthewindow,paintingsilverstreaksonthefloor.（月光透过窗户洒进来，在地板上留下银色的光痕。）Thedistanthowlofthewindaddedtothenight’smelancholy.（远处风的呼啸为夜晚增添了一丝忧郁。）高级替换词（场景分类）情感类（Emotions）Happy→Elated（狂喜的）Sad→Melancholic（忧郁的）Excited→Thrilled（激动的）Nervous→Apprehensive（忧虑的）Proud→Triumphant（胜利的）动作类（Actions）Look→Gaze/Peer（凝视/窥视）Say→Whisper/Murmur（低语/喃喃）Hold→Clutch/Grasp（紧握/抓住）Walk→Stride/Trudge（大步走/艰难跋涉）Run→Sprint/Dash（冲刺/飞奔）环境类（Environment）Dark→Gloomy/Murky（阴暗的/朦胧的）Bright→Radiant/Luminous（灿烂的/发光的）Cold→Frigid/Bitter（严寒的/刺骨的）Quiet→Serene/Hushed（宁静的/寂静的）Noisy→Cacophonous/Boisterous（刺耳的/喧闹的）4.固定搭配、词法解析及语料积累固定搭配（Collocations）Makeendsmeet（收支平衡）AfterDadfoundajob,wecouldfinallymakeendsmeet.Sticktoone’spassion（坚持热爱）Shestucktoherpassionforastronomydespitechallenges.Deepdown（内心深处）Deepdown,sheknewnogiftcouldreplaceBetty’sPlanet.Worklikemad（拼命工作）Dadworkedlikemadtoprovideforthefamily.Claimsomethingasone’sown（认领某物）SheclaimedthestarasherChristmaspresent.词法解析（LexicalAnalysis）Shimmer(v.)（闪烁）Thestarsshimmeredinthenightsky.近义词:Glimmer,Sparkle反义词:Dull,FadeNostalgia(n.)（怀旧）ShefeltapangofnostalgiawhenrecallingthatChristmas.近义词:Longing,Reminiscence反义词:Indifference,ForgetfulnessDetermination(n.)（决心）Herdeterminationledhertodiscovertheasteroid.近义词:Resolve,Persistence反义词:Hesitation,IndecisionReflect(v.)（反射/反映）Venusreflectsthelightofthesun.近义词:Mirror,Echo反义词:Absorb,ConcealWhisper(v.)（低语）Dadwhispered,“Youcanhaveaplanetifyouwant.”近义词:Murmur,Mutter反义词:Shout,Yell可积累的语料（UsefulPhrases）Castalighton（照亮/阐明）Themooncastasoftlightonthesnowyground.Begiventherightto（被授予…的权利）Shewasgiventherighttonametheasteroid.Lookupto（仰望/尊敬）Shelookeduptoherdadforhiswisdom.Stickwith（坚持）Despitedifficulties,shestuckwithherdream.Owesomeoneanapology（欠某人一个道歉）DadsaidheowedheranapologyforthatChristmas.

PossibleVersions（4）Version1Paragraph1:Thistime,IdecidedtogiveDadapresent.Arealstar,onethatcouldforevercarryourmemory.Sittingaloneinthelab(现在分词做伴随动作),IrecalledtheChristmasEveskyandthewarmthinhisvoice.AftersubmittingtheasteroiddatatotheInternationalAstronomicalUnion,IwastoldIcouldnameit.Withouthesitation,Ityped“Matt’sStar.”Iimaginedhisfacelightingup,justasminehad(省略句)whenIwasfive.Thatyear,hegavemeVenus;now,itwasmyturntoreturnthelight.Iprintedthecertificate,framedit,andbroughtithome(动作串并列)duringwinterbreak.MyhandstrembledasIwrappeditup,realizing(现在分词短语做伴随动作)nopresentunderourtreecouldevermatchthismoment.Itwasn’tabouttherockinthesky—itwasaboutthelovethatoncegavemeaplanet.Paragraph2:DadsaidheowedmeanapologyforthatChristmas.Thelifeburdenpressedonourfamily,sothenandthere,allhecouldgivemewasthesky.“IfeltlikeIfailedyou,”hewhispered,eyesfixedontheframedname(独立主格).Ishookmyhead,placingahandonhis(现在分词做伴随动作).“Youdidn’tgivemeless,”Isaid,voicefirmbutalittleemotional(独立主格),“Yougavemeeverything—dreams,hobbies,andthestars(名词并列).”Hiseyesglistened,andhepulledmeintoatighthug.Theroomwassilentexceptforthetickingclockandthecracklingfire,butIfelttheweightofyearsmeltingaway.Thatstar,floatingindistantspace(现在分词短语做后置定语),wasnowoursharedlegacy—proofthatevenindarkness,lovecanshine(同位语从句).Wesatbythewindow,watchingVenusriseagain(现在分词短语做伴随动作),justasithadallthoseyearsago.语言亮点分析类型例词/短语升级表达/同义替换情绪描写myhandstrembled;eyesglistened;pulledmeintoatighthugvoicefirm(坚定);warmthinhisvoice动作描写typed“Matt’sStar”;printedthecertificate;wrappeditup;watchingVenusriseplacedahandonhis(细节动作)搭配短语carryourmemory;lightupone’sface;returnthelight;sharedlegacyunderourtree→表圣诞背景高分语法点withouthesitation;justasIhad;nopresent…couldevermatch…;nowthatIcould非谓语、倒装、强调、虚拟词汇升级例句lightupone’sface→bringagleamtoone’seyesgivehope→planttheseedofhopeapresent→atokenofloveVersion2Paragraph1:Thistime,IdecidedtogiveDadapresent.Itwasnotjustanygift,butsomethingthatbelongedtobothofus.Staringattheblinkingcursor,Ityped“Betty’sPlanet,”theverynameDadhadoncegiventoVenus,thenighthebroughtmagictoourcoldyard.Ismiled,rememberinghisgrin(现在分词做伴随动作)ashepointedtothesky,pretending(现在分词做伴随动作)wecouldclaimaplanet.Butthistime,itwasreal.Thatnight,Icalledhimandaskedhimtoetocampus,withoutrevealingthereason.Whenhearrived,Ihandedhimatinyboxwiththenamecertificateinside.Watchinghiseyesmoveacrosstheletters(现在分词短语做伴随动作),Isawconfusionturntoawe,thenpride.“Youreallydidit,”hewhispered.“Wedid,”Ireplied.Paragraph2:DadsaidheowedmeanapologyforthatChristmas.Thefinancialstatusthenwasterrible,allhecouldgivemewasamadeupgift,adreamorawhitelie(名词并列).“Ididn’tknowyou’drememberitalltheseyears.”“Ineverforgot,”Ismiled.“Thatnight,yougavemetheskywhenwehadnothing.”Hishandstrembledslightlyasheheldthecertificatetighter.“Youturnedapretendplanetintoarealone,”hemurmured,eyesmisty(独立主格刻画人物).Inodded,heartfull(独立主格).Tome,thiswasn’tjustaboutscienceorastronomy.Itwasaboutturningloveintolegacy,andturningalittlegirl’smemoryintoaforeverstar.Thatnight,westeppedoutside.Theskylookedjustasithadyearsago,butthistime,asmallpartofittrulybelongedtous.语言亮点分析类型内容升级/替换表达情绪描写confusionturntoawe;eyesmisty;handstrembledslightlyheartfull(饱含情感);smiledthroughtears动作描写handedhimatinybox;staredattheblinkingcursortypedthenameslowly(细节处理)搭配短语revealthereason;holdtighter;belongtousturnmemoryintoaforeverstar高分语法点whenallhecouldgive…;notjust…but…;asheheld…;tome,thiswasn’tjustabout…强调结构+名词性从句词汇升级例句trembledslightly→quiveredwithemotionrememberedit→etchedinmymemorypride→quietjoyVersion3Paragraph1:Thistime,IdecidedtogiveDadapresent.Onethatcamefromthestars,justliketheoneheoncegaveme.MyheartpoundedasIentered“Matt1995,”bininghisnameandtheyear(现在分词做后置定语)hegavemeVenus.Tome,thatwaswhenthestarsfirstbecamereachable(表语从句).Ienclosedtheofficialdocumentinavelvetfolder,alongwithanote:Forthemanwhogavemethesky.Returninghomeforwinterbreak(现在分词短语做伴随动作),IwaitedtillChristmasEve.Themomentmirroredourpast(无灵主语句)—Iledhimtotheyard,handedhimthefolder,andlookedup(动作串).faces.Thisindcarriedwhispersofthepast,asstarlightdancedonourfaces.Thistime,hewastheonespeechless(adj做补语).Paragraph2:DadsaidheowedmeanapologyforthatChristmas.Hehadalwaysregrettednotbeingabletobuymearealgift.“ButIdidn’trealizethatmomentmeantsomuchtoyou.”“Itdid,”Isaid,“anditalwayswill.”Heunfoldedthecertificateagain,thenlookedupatthestars.“Matt1995,”hemurmured,voicecracking(独立主格刻画人物情绪).“That’smine.”“Italwayswas,”Inodded.Thecoldbreezewrappedaroundus,butoursilencew