2.10 续写故事冲突的预设与解决7法-2023年新高考英语读后续写提分技能

2023年新高考英语读后续写提分技能2.10续写中的故事冲突的预设与解决背景回顾背景回顾1读后续写首先力争读懂原文，找出记叙文的几要素，找到故事情节中到底有什么冲突或问题。然后读懂需要续写的两段的首句，根据首句推测故事发展的走向和两段的大致内容。读后续写的文章属于叙事类文体，大部分故事都是围绕conflict(冲突)和solution(问题解决)来运转的，因此矛盾冲突在叙事类读后续写语篇中尤为重要。矛盾冲突的解决能推动故事情节的发展。矛盾冲突分预设与解决技巧，可以帮助学生在基于篇章主题意义下更好地发散思维，做到有话可说，有事可写。同时，在学生创设矛盾冲突进行续写的过程中，可以联系上文已有的故事冲突，提高故事的完整性和连贯性。学生掌握了矛盾冲突的基本写作技巧，有利于在续写的故事创作中打开思路，提高语言的综合运用能力。方法策略方法策略2故事冲突的预设与解决的7个技巧技巧1：面对问题，人物产生的消极或积极情绪【技巧举例】(2021年6月，浙江高考，Para.1)Thepaydayarrivedatlast.IwasdelightedtofinallygetthepaymentafterIworkedhardfortwoweeks.Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithoughtabouthowtomakeuseofthe“huge”sumofmoney.“Ineededanewfootballinthefuture.”Iwhisperedtomyself.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad.Itseemedasifsomethingwronghadhappened......【分析】续写第一段中的“Onthewayhomefullofexcitement”表明了故事主人公心情非常好，但是当面对新的问题“mydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad”时，故事主人公内心开始出现冲突与疑问，这就反映在“somethingwrong”上面。两种心态的冲突描写前后衔接自然、且恰到好处。【用语储备】“感到一阵……”：feelaflushof...=feelawaveof...=feelafeeling/senseof...[joy(高兴),excitement(兴奋),pride(骄傲),anger(愤怒),rage(狂怒),panic(惊慌),alarm(惊慌),terror(恐惧),horror(恐惧),fear(恐惧),unease(不安),sorrow(悲伤),sadness(悲伤),grief(悲伤),embarrassment(尴尬),disappointment(失望),shame(羞愧),guilt(愧疚)]。例如：Shefeltawaveofpanic,butforcedherselftoleavetheroomcalmly.她感到一阵惊慌，但是强迫自己镇静地离开了房间。技巧2：面对复杂的情境，人物产生急迫/复杂的心理【技巧举例】(2021年1月，浙江高考，Para.2)ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHalloween.Ilookedjustlikeapumpkinheadinit.Embarrassedandalittleannoyed,Ifledtomyroom,but

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stoppedme.“Youhaven’treadthecommentsyet.”IscrolleddownthescreenandmarveledatthestoriestheviewerssharedaboutHalloween.【分析】续写第二段首句提示语提供了一个新的情境，即“Thevideowaspostedonline”，这让故事主人公内心冲突加剧(Embarrassedandalittleannoyed)，但当听力母亲的话之后，主人公开始阅读网上的评论，这又将主人公引向另一情境，结果主人公内心又起了变化(marveled)。情境的不断变换，加剧了故事主人公内心的矛盾冲突的不断变换。【用语储备】(1)心里想：think/saytooneself(2)害怕；恐慌：withfear/panic/terror;tremble;shiver;shake;quake;tremblewithfear;beseizedwithpanic;screamwithpanic/terror;freeze/shakewithterror(3)生气；愤怒：withrage;bered-cheekedwithrage;tremble/shakewithrage;feellikecryingwithrage;bespeechlesswithrage;beboilingwithrage(4)兴奋；激动：withexcitement;yellwithexcitement;jumpupanddownwithexcitement;screamwithexcitement;gowildwithexcitement(5)悲伤；流泪：Tearsblurredone’seyes.泪水模糊了她的双眼。/One’seyesgotmisty.一个人的眼睛都模糊了。/One’seyesmisted/dimmedwithtears.泪眼模糊。/tearsrolldownone’seyes/cheeks/face泪水落下技巧3：面对他人的行为或行动，人物展开了新的动作/行为【技巧举例】(2021年，新高考I卷，Para.2)Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【分析】续写第二段中，当双胞胎叫醒母亲(woketheirmotherup)后，母亲的动作首先有“saw”和“wasverysurprised”，之后在双胞胎发出节日问候“HappyMother’sDay”时，母亲的动作有“hugged”和“kissed”。这种“动作主动应对”模式在休息的故事情节冲突拓展过程中是比较重要的，因为动作上的变化往往承载了人物对情节中的矛盾冲突的回应模式及态度。【用语储备】(1)常用词语：openone’smouth;widenone’seyes;risetoone’sfeet;jumptoone’sfeet;shoutatthetopofone’slung;reachout(伸出手)(2)常用句式：如：Havingpassedtheexam,hewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.通过考试后，他非常高兴，不知所措。Sheopenedthegiftwithherhandsshakingslightly.她用轻微颤抖的手打开了礼物。技巧4：人物沉浸在某一情境中，于是出现了新问题【技巧举例】(2018年6月，浙江高考,Para.1)Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,“Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewerewayoffthetrack.【分析】续写第一段首句承接源语篇提供了一个新的情境，即“rabbitjumpedout”，从而引发了马与人的一系列的避险动作，并且马由于受惊而奔跑起来，最终将主人公带入了另一个困境，即“wewerewayoffthetrack”。【用语储备】(1)不幸的是(unfortunately) Butbadluckforsb,...但是某人真不走运 Shetriedherbest,butinvain.她尽力了，但没有成功。(2)某人做了某事，不知道下一步该做什么。 Sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext. Sbdidsth,notknowingwhattodonext.技巧5：情况好转或情境向好，人物突然有了一个想法【技巧举例】(2020年7月，浙江高考，Para.2)Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.【分析】续写第二段首句预设了一个新的情境“thehelicopterarrived”，于是故事主人公的心情好转(Myheartleapedwithjoy)，并且当再次遇到熊的攻击时，主人公就又有了新的想法(wethrowallthefoodwehave)，这将故事的冲突与发展带到另一个情境中；此外，当获救后，主人公又开始感谢(Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound)。可见，用新的想法接续“情况好转”可以充分展现人物对整个事件的回应过程中的特写镜头。【用语储备】“某人突然想到……”：Itsuddenlyoccurredtosbthat...=Ithitsbthat...=Itstrucksbthat...=Itdawnedonsbthat...技巧6：面对他人的鼓励/激励/帮助等，人物找到了解决办法【技巧举例】(2017年6月，浙江高考,Para.2)Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople'sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.【分析】续写第二段首句提示给出了来帮忙的人(theothertwocyclistsarrived)，之后又不断有人加入(Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicycles/Moreandmorecarsstopped)，故事中的人物有了一系列与狼对抗的动作，如“circledthewolf”“tookoutthesticksfromthecars”“tookouttheknives”等，这些将故事中人狼对峙的冲突进一步推向高潮。【用语储备】(1)鼓起勇气(做某事):take/gather/one’scourage(todosth)(2)毫不犹豫/选择：withoutasecondthought/withoutdelay/withouthesitation/havingnochoice技巧7：获得新的成长，人物开始总结、点题并呼应前文【技巧举例】(2022年1月，浙江卷,Para.2)OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.IfeltsosorrytohearthatandIthoughtIshouldvisithiminanycase.HewasalittlesurprisedtoseemewhenIsteppedintohiswardwithsomeflowersandfruits.Iofferedtodotherestworkofourprojectandheinvitedmetosharemyideastoperfectit.Webegantoworkasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime.OurhardworkpaidoffandDr.Henderson’swasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject,wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates.Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravelfarther.【分析】续写第二段中主人公最后发现能与队友和谐相处并最终完成了项目(Webegantoworkasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime)，这引发了主人公的反响，并且主人公的这种体验不断地深入(从“wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates”到“agroupofpersonscantravelfarther”)，充分展现了主人公内心的矛盾冲突从不断激化到出现转机、再到一步步迎刃而解的过程。【用语储备】(1)直到……才意识到…… 倒装句：Notuntil...didsbrealize/noticethat... 强调句：Itwasonly...thatsbrealizedthat...(2)表达经历与教训 WhatavaluablelessonIhavelearnedfrom...!我从……中得到了宝贵的教训。 Whatanunforgettableexperience!多么难忘的经历啊!(3)结尾点题 Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.天助自助者。 Everyoneisthearchitectofhisownfate.每个人都是自己命运的建筑师。 Lifeisfulloflaughterandtears.Onlybyacceptingbothcanweenjoylife.生命就是充满欢笑和泪水的。只有同时接受两者，我们才能享受生活。 Neverunderestimatethepowerofyouraction.永远不要低估你的行为的力量。实践强化实践强化31．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。InlateDecember,thecowpathnearourhouseinTennesseewasstillcoveredwithleaves,butIknewsnowwouldbefallingsoonenough.Myyoungerbrother,BuddyEarl,andIwereonanimportantmission:GotoUncleTommie’splaceandgetagoose(鹅).ThehikingoverLittleMountainandgettingtherewouldbeworthit.UncleTommieraisedthebestgeesearound,andhe’dofferedtogiveusoneforChristmasdinner.UncleTommiemetusatthedoor.“I’mnotrushingyouboys,”hesaid,“butaslightsnowstarted,you’dbettergetthegooseandheadhome.”Itdidn’ttakemelongtopickupagoosefromhisyard.BuddyandIsaidaquickthankyouandgoodbye.Thesnowcamedownharder,windblowingeveryway.“I’mascoldasice.Howaboutyou?”askedBuddy.Itappedthegoose’shead.“Iwishwehadfeatherstokeepuswarmlikeyou,”Isaid.“Orheaviercoats.”“Doug,I’mfreezing,”Buddysaid.Icouldhardlyhearhimoverthewindandmyownchatteringteeth.“Ithinkweshouldgoback.”Theideawasattractive,butwewereclosertohomethantoUncleTommie’shouse.Wehadtopushon.Iheldthegooseclosertomychest.Thebirdwastheonlywarmthingaboutme.Isteppedinfrontofmybrother.“Buddy,openyourcoat!”“Areyoucrazy?”Heasked.“I’lllosethelittlewarmthIhave.”WhenhesawIwasserious,heslowlyunzipped(拉开……的拉链)hiscoatandopenedit.Iplacedthewarmgooseinsidehiscoatandzippeditbackup.“Makesureyoukeepthegoose’sheadoutsoitcanbreathe.”Buddysighedhappily.Myplanwasworking.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Doug,itistimeforyoutoopenyourcoat.”__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Hearingoursurvivingexperience,myparentshesitatedaboutwhattodowiththegoose.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】

“Doug,itistimeforyoutoopenyourcoat.”Buddyhandedthegoosetome.Itsfeatheredbodywasaswarmasangelfeathersinsidemycoat.Puttingmyfreezinghandsonitsbody,Ifeltarushofwarmthsweepingoverme.Wepassedthegoosebackandforthbetweenusallthewayhome,battlingbitingcold.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,wegothome.Uponarrival,wecouldn’twaittoexplaintoourparentshowthegoosehadkeptusfromfreezing.(76words)Hearingoursurvivingexperience,myparentshesitatedaboutwhattodowiththegoose.“WhatshouldwehaveforChristmasdinner?”Theylookedatuswithaconcernedlook.“Anythingbutthegoose.Hehassavedourlives.”BuddyandIexclaimed.Shiftinggazesbetweenusandthegoosewhichwashonkingasifhewerepleadingtoo.“Fine.Thenwe’lldowithoutit,”myparentsannounced.“Hooray!”wesprangtoourfeet.ThatChristmas,wedidn’thaveagrandfeast,butcameuponaheroinourlife.(75words)【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和弟弟巴迪·厄尔去汤米叔叔家买只鹅。因为父母要给他们一只做圣诞晚餐。在回家的路上，雪下得更大了，风到处刮。鹅帮助作者他们取暖，回到了家。作者他们迫不及待地向父母解释这只鹅是如何让他们免于冻僵的。最后父母决定不杀他们生命中的一位英雄。的故事。1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“道格，你该把外套打开了。”可知，第一段可描写作者抱着鹅和弟弟一起冒着风雪回家的经过。②由第二段首句内容“听到我们幸存的经历，我的父母对如何处理这只鹅犹豫不决。”可知，第二段可描写作者父母决定不杀这只英雄鹅。2.续写线索：冒雪——取暖——解释——决定——感悟3.词汇激活行为类①递过来：deliver/pass/handover②.回家：allthewayhome/gobackhome/returnhome③.阻止某人做：keepusfrom/stopusfrom/preventsb(from)情绪类①.感谢：showingone'sappreciation/showone'sgratitude/begrateful②.担忧的：concerned/worried【典型句式】[句式1].Afterwhatseemedlikeages,wegothome.(由连接词what引导的宾语从句作after的宾语)[句式2].Shiftinggazesbetweenusandthegoosewhichwashonkingasifhewerepleadingtoo.(运用了非谓语动词，由关系代词which引导定语从句和asif引导的虚拟语气)2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ComingCleanDerekandJaneywereeatinginthehallandtalkingaboutthejacketofMr.Such,whowastheirteacher.“They’resocrumpledandbaggy,”Dereksaid.“Likeapairofolddish-cloths.”“Hewearsthemallthetime!Ireallywishhe’dgetsomenewones,”Janeysighed.AtthatmomentMr.Suchhimselfcameintothehall.Todayhewasinabrandnewsuit,whichwaswhiteandspotless.Everyoneinthehallstoppedeatingandstaredathiminamazement.“Wow!”saidDerek,leaningacrosshisplate.“Mr.Such,youlooksodifferenttoday!Ilikeyoursuit!”Thankyou,Derek.It’sforParents’meeting.”saidMr.Such,abitredintheface.“Butthat’snottillMonday,Mr.Such,”Janeysaid.Iknowthat,Janey.I’mjustgettingusedtoit.”Thelastlessonofthedaywasart.Incasehisnewjacketgotdirty,beforehisteaching.Mr.Suchtookitoffandhangitonthecupboarddoor.However,probablybecausehehadn’tgotusedtothenewjacket,heforgottotakeitbackwithhim.AllthestudentsleftexceptDerekandJaney,whowerestillbusywiththeirpainting.Derekmixeduptoomuchgreenpaintsandgothishandverydirty.Hereachedbehindhimandrubbedhishandsonthetowelonthecupboarddoor.Exceptthatitwasn’tthetowel.“Oh,”hesaidquietly.“WhathaveIdone!”Turingaround,hefoundhehadwipedhishandsonMr.Such’snewjacket!Janeywantedtohelp,soshequicklygrabbedsomepaperandrubbedatthegreenmarks.“Ohno!”Derekcriedinagony,“You’remakingthemworse.They’retwiceasbignow.”Janeyfeltsorryandthoughthard,andfinallyshecameupwithanidea.“Hewasstillintheoffice,sowestillhavetime.There’sonlyonethingforitnow,”shesaidwithdeterminationandpointedtothesinkoutsidetheclassroom.DesperateasDerekwas,hetooksomesoapsandfetchedthejacketsecretlytothesinkwithJaney.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答Theydartedovertothesinkandturnedonthetap.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“Ohdear,thegreenstuffwasstillthere.”Janeysighed.“Ithinkwehavetotellthetruth.”__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Theydartedovertothesinkandturnedonthetap.Thewaterrunning,theyquicklythrewthejacketintothesink.Withhisheartbeatingwildly,Derekrubbedthegreenmarkswiththesoaps，andwashed/scrubbedthemcarefully.Thewatersoonformedintoapileofbubbles.Afterwashingawaythebubblesandsqueezingthewaterout,theycouldn’twaittoturnitover.Totheirdisappointment,thegreenmarkswerestillthere!Derek’sheartsank.“Ohdear,thegreenstuffwasstillthere.”Janeysighed,“Ithinkwehavetotellthetruth.”Gatheringuphiscourage,DerekheadedtotheofficewithJaney.DerektoldMr.Sucheverythingandapologizedtohim,“IamsorryIruinedyourjacket.”However,Mr.Suchsaidgently,“AnywayIreallyappreciateyourcouragetoadmityourmistake.”Surprised,DerekandJaneyaskedanxiously,“ButwhatabouttheParents’meeting?”Mr.Suchputonhisoldjacketandreplied,“Thisonejustsuitsmebetter.”Withlaughterlingeringintheoffice,theyallfeltawarmcurrentwellingupintheirhearts.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了德里克和詹尼的老师萨奇先生为了这次家长会准备了一件新外套，在最后一节艺术课后，萨奇忘了把外套带回去，结果德里克不小心将外套当成毛巾擦手，他和詹尼一起洗还是没洗掉最后坦诚相告的故事。1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“他们冲到水池边，打开水龙头。”可知，第一段可描写他们试图通过肥皂能洗掉污渍。②由第二段首句内容““哦，天哪，绿色的东西还在。”詹尼叹了口气。“我认为我们必须说出真相。””可知，第二段可描写詹尼和德里克与老师坦诚相告。2.续写线索：帮忙——无果——说明真相——道歉——欣赏——感悟3.词汇激活行为类①.去：headto/go/leave/apartfrom②.道歉：apologize/makeanapology情绪类①.温柔地：gently/softly/tenderly②.焦急地：anxiously/inanxiety/nervously【典型句式】[句式1].Gatheringuphiscourage,DerekheadedtotheofficewithJaney.(这句话运用了动词现在分词作状语)[句式2].Withlaughterlingeringintheoffice,theyallfeltawarmcurrentwellingupintheirhearts.(这句话运用了现在分词作宾语补足语和现在分词作后置定语)3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Alongtimeago,therewasacountrywherethepeoplewouldchangeakingeveryyear.Thepersonwhowouldbecomethekinghadtosignacontractthathewouldbesenttoanislandafteroneyear.Onekingfinishedhistermanditwastimeforhimtogototheisland.Thepeopledressedhimupinexpensiveclothesandputhimonanelephantandtookhimaroundthecitiestosaygoodbyetoallthepeople.Thiswasthemomentofsadnessforallthekingswhoruledforoneyear.Thenthepeopletookthekinginaboattotheremoteislandandlefthimthere.Ontheirwayback,thepeoplediscoveredashipthathadsunkjustrecentlyandayoungmanwhosurvivedbyholdingontoafloatingpieceofwood.Astheyneededanewking,theypickeduptheyoungmanandtookhimtotheircountry.Theyrequestedhimtobeakingandtoldhimaboutalltherulesandregulations.Atfirst,herefusedbutlaterheagreedtobeaking.Afterthreedaysofbeingaking,heaskedtheministersiftheycouldshowhimtheislandwherealltheotherkingsweresent.Theyagreedandtookhimtotheisland.Theislandwascoveredwiththickjunglesandsoundsofdangerousanimalswereheardcomingoutofthem.Thekingdiscoveredthedeadbodiesofallthepastkings.Itwasclearthatassoonastheywereleftintheisland,theanimalscameandkilledthem.Onreturningtohiscountry,theyoungkingaskedthepeopletoprovidehimwith100strongworkers.Hetookthemtotheislandandtoldthemtoremoveallthedeadlyanimalsandtocutdownsometrees.Heoftenvisitedtheislandtoseehowtheworkwasprogressing.Afteramonth,thewholeislandwascleanedout.Thekingthentoldtheworkerstoplantgardensandraiseusefulanimalslikechickens,ducks,birds,goatsandcows.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Inthethirdmonth,heorderedtheworkerstobuildbighousesandships._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________