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主题10.紧急事件的应对策略
素材积累
一、主题解析
本专题”紧急事件的应对策略”是高考读后续写的高频主题,涵盖意外伤害(如摔伤、溺水)、自然灾
害(如地震、火灾)、突发困境(如迷路、被困)等场景。这类文本核心考查“危机感知一理性决策一行
动执行一结果反馈”的逻辑链条,以及人物在高压下的心态变化与应对智慧。
从写作要求看,需把握三个关键:一是情节连贯性,应对行为需贴合前文铺垫的人物身份与场景条件,
如野外受伤应优先关联"急救包'"信号求助"等细节:二是细节真实性,通过精准动作(如“按压止血"固
定肢体”)与心态描写(如,•心跳加速”“强作镇定”)增强画面感;三是主题正向性,突出冷静、协作、应变
能力等核心品质,契合高考价值观导向。熟练掌握此类主题,口:有效应对约30%的读后续写真题场景。
二、词句储备
1.基本词汇及短语
emergency突发事件victim受害者
first-aidkit急救箱trap被困
bandage绷带collapse倒塌;晕倒
wound伤口earthquake地震
bleed流血flood洪水
stopthebleeding止血fire火灾
sprain扭伤choke噎住
fracture骨折breath呼吸
abrasion擦伤difficultyinbreathing呼吸困难
disinfect消毒panic恐慌
painkiller止痛药calm冷静的
ambulance救护车alert警觉的
firefighter消防员grab抓生
rescue营救drag拖现
rush迅速运送regainconsc沁usness恢复意识
callforhelp呼救shock休克
emergencyexit紧急出口pulse脉搏
safetydrill安全演习stretcher担架
shelter避难所evacuate疏散
medicalassistance医疗援助survive幸存
2.高分词汇及短语
stabilize(使)稳定;固定
【例句】Beforethedoctorarrived,hestabilizedtheinjuredarmwithasticktoavoidfurtherharm.(医生到来
前,他用树枝固定受伤的手臂以防二次伤害。)
acrid刺鼻的
【例句】Shesmelledanacridburningodorandrealizedthekitchenwasonfire.(她闻到刺鼻的焦味,意识
到厨房着火了。)
seclude偏僻的;隐蔽的
【例句】Theyfinallyfoundthelostchildonasecludedbenchinthepark.(他们最终在公园一张偏僻的长
椅上找到了走失的孩子。)
desperation绝望
【例句】Indesperation,hewavedhisjackettosignalthepassinghelicopter.(绝空中,他挥舞夹克向路过的
直升机发信号。)
promptly立即;迅速地
[例句]Theteacherpromptlyorganizedstudentstoevacuatewhen(healarmrang.(警报响起时,老师立即
组织学生疏散。)
alleviate缓解;减轻
【例句】Thepainkillerhelpedalleviatetheboy'sdiscomfortaftertheaccident.(止痛药相助缓解了男孩事
故后的不适。)
vigorous有力的
【例句】Hegavevigorouspressesonthevictim'schesttodoCPR.(他用力按压受害者胸部进行心肺复苏。)
disoriented迷失方向的
[例句]Aftertheearthquake,theoldmanfeltdisorientedandcouldn'tfindtheexit.(地震后,老人感到迷
失方向,找不到出口。)
crucial至关重要的
[例句]It'scmcialtostaycalmwhenfacingemergencysituations.(面对紧急情况时保持冷静至关重要。)
maneuver设法移动;操控
[例句]Shemaneuveredthroughthecrowdtocallanambulancefortheinjured.(她挤过人群为伤者叫救护
车。)
succor援助;救助
【例句】Thehikerwaitedforsuccoraftergettingstuckinthesnowslorm.(徒步者在暴风雪中被困后等待救
援。)
taut紧绷的
【例句】Hisfacewastautwithanxietyashewaitedfortherescueteam.(等待救援队时,他的脸因焦虑而
紧绷。)
administer实施;给予
【例句】Thenurseadministeredfirstaidtothepatientbeforehospilalizalion.(护士在患者住院前实施了急
救。)
imminent即将发生的
【例句JTheysensedtheimminentdangerandrantothesafezone.(他们察觉到即将到来的危险,跑向安
全区。)
retrieve取回:找回
【例句】Heriskedhislifetoretrievethetrappeddogfromtheflood.(他冒着生命危险从洪水中救出被困的
狗。)
trembling颤抖的
[例句]Withtremblinghands,sheappliedthebandagetothewound.(她用颤抖的手给伤口缠上绷带。)
expedite加速;促进
【例句】Thcpoliceexpeditedtherescueprocessafterreceivingthecall.(警方接到电话后加快了救援进程。〉
peril危险;险境
【例句】Thegroupmanagedtoescapefrom(heperilofthelandslide.(这群人成功逃离了山体滑坡的险境。)
soothe安抚;缓解
【例句】Shespokesoftlytosoothethescaredchild.(她轻声说话安抚受惊的孩子。)
pivotal关键的;核心的
【例句】Hisquickdecisionplayedapivotalroleinthesuccessfulrescue.(他的快速决策在成功救援中起到
了关键作用。)
3.高分句式
Sbcouldfeelone'sheartpoundingwildlyinone'schest.(某人感到心在胸中怦怦直跳。)
One'sheartthumpedwildlywhenseeingtheemergency.(看到紧急情况时,某人心怦怦直跳。)
Themomentsheheardthescream,sherushedoutoftheroom.(一听到尖叫声,她就冲出了房间T
Nosoonerhad(heearthquakestruck(hantheyrantotheopenarea.(地震一发生,他们就跑到了空旷地带。)
Hardlyhadherealizedthedangerwhenhegrabbedthefirst-aidkit.(他刚意识到危险,就抓起了急救箱。)
Withoutasecondthought,hejumpedintothewatertosavethedrowningboy.(他不假思索地跳进水里救溺水的
男孩。)
Withouthesitation,shecalledtheemergencynumber120.(她亳不犹豫地拨打了急救电话120。)
Withoutdelay,theycarriedtheinjuredtothenearesthospital.(他们立即把伤者抬到了最近的医院.)
Sbcouldhardlywaittoopenthefirst-aidkittohelpthevictim.(某人迫不及待地打一开急救箱帮助受害者。)
One'seyesmistedwithtearswhenseeingiherescueteamarrive.(看至U救援队至ij来,某人泪眼模糊。)
Tearsrolleddownhercheeksasshetalkedabouttheterribleexperience.(谈起那次可怕的经历,汨水从她脸颊
流下。)
Shewasclosetotearswhenrealizingherfriendwastrapped.(意识到朋友被困,她几乎要哭了。)
Sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonextinthechaos.(在混乱中,某人做了某事,不知道接下来该怎么办。)
Pretendingtobecalm,heshoutedatthetopofhisvoiceforhelp.(他假装镇定,声嘶力竭地呼救。)
Timetickedawayslowly,andhefelldeathwasdrawingnear.(时间缓缓流逝,他感到死亡正在逼近。)
With(hehelpofpassers-by,theymanagedtopull(hecaroutoftheditch.(在路人的帮助下,他们成功把车从沟
里拉了出来。)
Everyminutecountswhendealingwithableedingwound.(处理流111伤口时,分秒必争。)
Helaidthevictimonhisbackandbegantodoartificialrespiration.(他让受害者仰躺着,开始做人工呼吸。)
Applyingfirmpressuretothewoundcaneffectivelystopbleeding.(用力按压伤口能七f效止血。)
Theycarriedafirst-aidkitwhileh汰ingincaseofemergencies.(他们徒步时随身携带急救包,以防突发情况。)
Afterreachingasafespot,shefinallybreathedasighofrelief.(到达安全地带后,她终于松了一口气。)
Hecheckedhimselfcarefullytomakesurehewasn'tinjuredintheaccident.(他仔细检查自己,确保在事故中没
有受伤。)
Heranxietystartedtofadewhensheheardthehelicopter'ssound.(听到直升机的声而她的焦虑开始消散。)
Itwascrucialthattheystayedtogethertoavoidgettinglostfuriher.(他们待在,起以防进・步迷路,这至关重要。)
Hepainstakinglytooktinybreathstostayconsciousinthesmoke.(在烟雾中,他费力地做着浅呼吸以保持清醒。)
Thechildrenweresoscaredthattheirfacesturnedpaleandtheycriedforhelp.(孩子们吓得脸都白了,哭喊着救
命。)
Sheshookthesnowoffherhandsandtriedtofreehertrappedleg.(她抖掉手上的雪,努力挣脱被困的腿。)
Callingforanambulanceisthefirststepwhensomeonecollapsessuddenly.(有人突然晕倒时,叫救护车是第一
步。)
Thefirehadengulfedthekitchenbeforetheynoticedthedanger.(在他们察觉到危险前,大火已经吞噬了厨房。)
Withtremblinghands,sheappliedthedisinfectanttotheabrasiongently.(她用颤抖的手轻轻地把消毒液涂在擦
伤处。)
三、写作策略
【策略解析】
主题类型段落主体典型词句写作要求写作策略
意外伤害救援1.发现险情(感disinfectthewound,1.急救动作符合1.用“withoutdelay”
知信号+初步stabilizetheinjury,call常识2.体现等短语强化节奏2.通
判断)2.实施救fbranambulance,apply“分秒必争”的过“iremblinghands”
助(动作链:我abandage紧迫感3.穿插等细节增强真实感3.
工具一急救操人物心态变化按“判断・行动-
作)3.后续处理结果逻辑推进
(送医/等待救
援)
自然灾害逃生1.察觉危机(感acridburningodor,1.逃生行为符合1.用“themoment...**
官描写+确认evacuateimmediately,灾害应对规范2.句式衔接险情与行动
灾害)2.紧急避emergencyexit,shelter情节贴合场景2.借助"panic/calm”
险(逃生路径+inplace(如地震躲桌等词对比心态3.加入
防护动作)3.安底)3.突出冷静“grabwatcr/kif'等实
全确认(清点人协作用细节
员+求助)
野外被困脱困1.困境确认(迷disoriented,send1.自救方法合理1.用“timeticked
失/受困+资signals,succor,可行2.体现away”营造紧张感2.
源盘点)2.自救secludedarea,regain“绝望・坚持-通过“wave
尝试(发信号+consciousness希望”的情绪变jackct/shout^^等动作
寻找出路)3.救化3.与前文环链展现努力3.以
援衔接(发现救境呼应“tearsmistcd^^等句表
援+状态描述)现获救情绪
【策略应用】
[写作试题]
(重庆市第一中学校2025-2026学年高三9月月考英语试题)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续
写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
TheCanyon(峡谷)Escape
Thesummersunburnedlikeanovenovertherockycanyon.Seventeen-year-oldEthanwipedsweatfromhis
dustyforehead,lookingatthetrailaheadwithnarrowedeyes.HisyoungerbrotherLiam,fifteenandskinny,
adjustedhiscamerabeltexcitedly."Thewaterfallphotoswillwinfirstprize“hedeclared.Ethanchuckled,kicking
aloosestone."Onlyifwcsun'ivethehikc.^^
They'dbeenwalkingforhours.Birdschirpedin(hedistance,buttheairfeltheavy.Suddenly,theground
trembled.EthanGoze."Earthquake?”Liamwhispered,grippinghiscamera.Adeeplowboomanswered—not
fromtheearth,butthesky.Darkcloudsswallowedthesun.
“Run!”EthangrabbedLiam'sarm.Mudpoureddownthecanyonwalls,chokingthepath.Theyspedtoward
acrackinthecliffyslippingonwetrocks.Liam*sshoegotstuck.**Lcaveit!”Ethanshouted,dragginghimintothe
narrowgapjustasawaveofdebrisflow(泥石流)roaredpast.
Insidethecrack,rainhissedagainststone.Liamshivered,pointingtoarustymetaldoorhalf-buriedindirt.
“Look—anoldmine!”Theypried(撬动)itopen,carefullywalkingintodarkness.Theairsmelledofwetmetal
androt.Ethan'sphoneflashlightflickered,revealingalowtunnelsupportedbyrottingbeams(横梁).
Theycrawledforward,someoftheceilingevenrubbingtheirbacks.Liam'scamerabaghookedon
nails."Cutitloose!MEthanordered.Liamhesitated,butthenhedidashisbrotheraskedanywaywithapocketknife.
Thelightofthephonewavered—thebatteiywasdying.Panicbegantosetin.
ThenLiampointed.44Light—upahead!”Afaintlightoutlinedapileoffallenrocksblockingtheirpath.
Theyscrambledtowardit,heartspounding.Butastheydrewcloser,theyrealizedtheopeningwastoosmall.They
weretrapped.
Ethanshonethedyingflashlightarounddesperately.Hiseyesfellonabrokentimber(木料)lyingnearby
注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Ethan'sfingersclosedaroundtherough,dampwoodofthebrekentimber.
Liamsatupslowlyunderaclearingsky,bmshingmudfromhisshoulders.
[范文实践]
【参考范文】
Ethan'sfingersclosedaroundtherough,dampwoodofthebrokentimber.Hejammedoneendintoagap
betweentherocks,gruntingashepushed.uIIclpmeleverthis!^^heyelledtoLiam.Together,theyheaveduntila
smallcrackwidened.Ethansqueezedthroughfirst,thenpulledLiamoutbythearm.Thephonedied,dutsunlight
guidedthem-ihey'dreachedthecanyonedge!Mudstilloozednearby,sotheystumbledupadryslope,gasping
forair.
Liamsatupslowlyunderaclearingsky,brushingmudfromhisshoulders.Hecheckedhispocket—his
cameramemorycard,savedbeforecuttingthebag,wassafe.uWemadeitJhesmiledweakly.Ethanclappedhis
shoulder,staringatthedistantwaterfallnowglintinginthesun.**Ncxttime,let'spickasaferhike/*Ethanjoked.
Liamlaughed,alreadyplanningtoeditthedisaster-turned-adventurephotos.Thecanyon'sroarfadedbehindthem,
replacedbytheirrelievedbreaths.
【写作解析】
本文以Ethan和Liam的峡谷徒步历险为线索,讲述兄弟二人遭遇泥石流后躲进废弃矿井,被困于落石后,
凭借智慧与合作利用断木撬开通道逃生,最终安全脱险并保住珍贵相机存储卡的故事,展现了困境中的勇
气与兄弟情谊。
1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“Elhan的手指攥住了那根粗糙潮湿的断木”可知,第一段可围绕“利用断木逃牛”展开:
描写Elhan与Liam合作撬动落石的动作(塞木、发力、扩大缝隙),突出二人的默契与坚持;再写成功脱
困后的场景(手机没电、借阳光辨路、逃离危险区域),体现逃生后的急切与庆幸.
②由第二段首句内容“Liam在放瞳的天空下慢慢坐起身,拂去肩上的泥巴”可知,第二段可描写脱险后的状
态与感悟,Liam检查相机存储卡:再写兄弟间的对话(玩笑、规划照片),展现紧张后的放松。
2.续写线索:发现断木一合作撬石一成功脱困一检查存储卡一兄弟对话一远离危险
3.词汇激活
行为类
①塞进:jam/heave
②代替:replace/taketheplaceof
③缓慢渗出:seep/ooze
心理类:
①虚弱地:wcakly/1imply
②微笑:smile/beam
[高分句型I]Hejammedoneendintoagapbetweentherocks,gruntingashepushed.(运用现在分词作伴随状
语以及as引导的时间状语从句)
[高分句型2]Together,theyheaveduntilasmallcrackwidened.(运用了until引导的时间状语从句)
[策略示例]
一、聚焦“历险求生+情感羁绊”,紧扣原文核心线索
该试题的主题属于“户外历险与困境求生”,同时嵌套“兄弟情谊”的情感线,二者相互支撑,构成故事
的核心框架。分析时需紧扣原文细节,确保续写不偏离主题基调:
1.历险求生线:原文通过“烈日徒步—地震疑云一泥石流突袭T躲进废弃矿井一被困落石后”的情节,
铺垫,,逃生.,,的核心矛盾。续写需围绕“如何解决,被困,问题”展开——范文以“断木为工具撬石”为突破口,设
计“塞木入缝-合力撬动一挤缝脱困一逃离危险区”的逃生链,完美承接“求生''主线,如"Hejammedoneend
intoagapbetweentherocks,gnintingashepushed.4Hclpmeleverthis!*heyelledtoLiam”,动作描写直接指向
“突破困境”的核心目标。
2.兄弟情谊线:原文中Ethan的“沉稳保护”(“Run!”“Leaveit!”“Cutitloose!”)与Liam的“依赖信任”
("hesitated,butthenhedidashisbrotherasked")已塑造鲜明人物关系。续写需强化这一情感:范文中
Ethan"squeezedthroughfirst,thenpulledLiamoutbythearm”的保护动作、Liam脱险后“checkedhispocket一
hiscameramemorycard...wassafe”的细节(既呼应Liam对相机的重视,也暗含对兄弟建议的认可),以及结
尾“Ethanclappedhisshoulder,H€Liamlaughed”的互动,均让兄弟情自然落地,避免主题空洞。
二、"开头句引领+逻辑分层推进”,每段有“核心动作/场景”
读后续写的两段需独立成意又紧密衔接,每段需以“给定开头句”为起点,按小动作/状态过程'一,结
果/过渡的逻辑分层,避免情节跳跃。
1.第一段:以“工具使用+逃生行动”为核心,分层推进“脱困过程”
给定开头句:*Ethan'sfingersclosedaroundtherough,dampwoodofthebrokentimber*(聚焦''断木"这一
关键工具)
段落结构需围绕“如何用断木逃生”展开,分三层推进:
第一层:匚具利用的初始动作:(解决“怎么用断木”):[范文以“Hejammedoneendintoagapbetweenthe
rocks,gruntingashepushed”开篇,直接回应开头句的“擦住断木”,通过"jam(塞进)皿push(推)”等动词,
明确工具的使用方式,避免“拿到工具却不行动”的逻辑断层。
第二层:合作强化与突破(解决“如何成功”):用“Together,theyheaveduntilasmallcrackwidened”体现
兄弟协作(呼应原文的“互相依赖''),"unti『引导的时间状语从句让“从缝隙到裂缝”的过程更真实,无突兀
感。
第三层:脱困后的初步行动(完成"逃生"闭环):"Ethansqueezedthroughfirst,thenpulledLiam
out',ustumblcdupadryslope,gaspingforair",既描写“逃出落石区”的动作,又通过“gaspingfbrair”的细节体
现逃生后的生理反应,衔接自然;同时用“Thephonedied,butsunlightguidedthem”呼应原文“phoneflashlight
flickered...batterywasdying”,让场景连贯。
2.第二段:以“状态恢复+情感升华”为核心,分层收束“故事结尾”
给定开头句:*Liamsatupslowlyunderaclearingsky,brushingmudfromhisshoulders*(聚焦”脱险后的
状态”)
段落结构需围绕..恢友+感悟••展开,分三层收束:
第一层:关键细节的呼应(勾连原文伏笔):"Hecheckedhispocket—hiscameramemorycard,savedbefore
cuttingthebag,wassafe”,直接呼应原文"Liam'scamerabaghookedonnails.*Cutitloose!'“,既满足Liam”重
视相机”的人物设定,又让“切断相机包却保留存储卡”的细节更合理,避免前文伏笔浪费。
第二层:人物互动与情绪放松(强化情感线):‘"Wemadeit/hesmiledweakly.Ethanclappedhis
shouldef,tt4Nexttime,lefspickasaferhike/Ethanjoked'\通过对话和动作(clap、joke)展现紧张后的放松,
兄弟间的调侃让情感更鲜活,而丰生硬的“抒情
第三层:环境与情绪的收尾(升华主题):“staringatthedistantwaterfallnowglintinginthesun,,uThe
canyon'sroarfadedbehindthem,replacedbytheirrelievedbreaths",用"glintingwaterfall”(与原文Liam期待的
“waterfallphotos"呼应)和"canyorfsroarfaded”(对比泥石流时的"roarpast”)的环境描写,烘托“脱险后的平
静”,以“relievedbreaths”收尾,让故事有“余韵”。
三、“分类精准+服务场景”,用细节增强真实感
读后续写的词句需“贴合场景、匹配人物、传递情绪”,避免堆砌华丽辞藻。结合试题及范文,可将典
型词句分为四类,每类均有明确的功能指向:
类
典型词句(原文+范文)功能分析
别
行原文:gripping(攥住)、pried(撬动)、crawled均为“户外历险”场景的精准动作词,如“heave”体现
为(爬行);范文:jam(塞进)、heave(用力推)、撬石的费力,“squeeze”体现缝隙的狭窄,让“逃生''动
类squeeze(挤)、stumble(踉跄走)作更真实可感,避免笼统的“push”“walk”,
原文:mudpoured(泥浆倾泻)、debrisflowroared
环用环境变化烘托情绪:"mudoozed”暗示危险未完全消
(泥石流轰鸣);范文:mudoozed(泥浆渗出)、
境失,^waterfallglinting'象征希望,“roarfaded”体现安
waterfallglinting(瀑布闪光)、canyon'sroarfaded
类全,环境与人物情绪同步变化。
(峡谷轰鸣渐弱)
心原文:Panicbegantosetin(恐慌蔓延);范文:用细微表情/动作传递心理:“smiledweakly”体现
理smiledweakly(虚弱微笑)、relievedbreaths(释Liam脱险后的疲惫与庆幸,"relievedbreaths”比直接写
类然的呼吸)“theyfbltrelieved”更含蓄、更有画面感。
高1.Hejammedoneendintoagapbetweenthe
句型服务情节:"grunting”补充“push”时的状态(费
分rocks,gruntingashepushed.(现在分词作伴随状
力),“until”展现“撬动”的过程性,避免句子简单堆砌
句语+as时间从句)2.Together,theyheaveduntila
(如“Hepushedthewood.Acrackbecamewide")0
型smallcrackwidened,(until引导时间从句)
四、“严格对标+细节落地”,避免偏离评分标准
试题明确要求”续写词数150左右”“按格式作答”,且隐含“衔接原文、人物一致、情节合理”的要求。范
文通过以下方式精准满足:
1.词数控制:两段分别约70-80词,合计150词左右,避免一段过详、一段过略(如第一段聚焦“逃生
动作”,第二段聚焦“脱险互动”,篇幅均衡)。
2.衔接原文:无“断档”细节如原文“phonebatterydying",范文“Thephonedied”承接;原文“Liamcut
thecamerabagM»范文“cameramemorycard,savedbefbrecullingihebag”呼应,确保“前有铺热、后有呼应”。
3.人物一致:始终保持Ethan“沉稳主导”、Liam“重视相机”的人设——Ethan全程指挥(“Helpmelever
this!”)、保护兄弟("pulledLiamout");Liam脱险后第一时间检查存储卡,符合原文“adjustedhiscamerabelt
excitedly,Hlhesitated,5(不舍相机包)的性格,无“人设崩塌
五、“四步走”确保续写质量,可复制性强
结合该试题的写作逻辑,可提炼出通用的“读后续写四步策略”,每一步均有明确操作方法:
1,第一步:读透原文,抓3条核心线
动笔前需梳理原文的“人物线”“矛盾线”“伏笔线”,避免续写偏离:
人物线:Ethan(17岁,沉稳、保护者)vsLiam(15岁,兴奋、重视相机);
矛盾线:“遭遇泥石流一躲进矿井一被困落石后“,核心矛盾是“如何逃出落石区”:
伏笔线:Liam的相机(多次关及,需在续写中交代结局)、手机电量(逐渐耗尽,需衔接)。
例如:范文正是抓住“相机”这一伏笔,让Liam检查存储卡的细节更合理,而非凭空新增情节。
2.第二步:围绕开头句,搭“动作/场景”框架
针对每段开头句,先确定“核心动作(第一段)”或“核心场景(第二段)“,再拆分细节:
第一段开头句“攥住断木”T核心动作:”用断木撬石逃生”T拆分细节:塞木―发力一扩缝-脱困一逃离;
笫二段开头句“坐起身拂泥”一核心场景:“脱险后恢复与互动”一拆分细节:查存储卡-对话玩笑一看瀑
布一远离危险。
例如:范文未偏离开头句的“新木拂泥'',所有情节均围绕这两个起点展开,无“跑题”。
3.第三步;用“小细节”让情节“落地”
避免“空泛叙事”,加入“生理反应、环境互动”等小细节:
生理反应:“gaspingforair”(逃生后喘气)、“smiledweakly”(疲惫微笑),让人物更“有血有肉”;
环境互动:"stumbledupadryslope”(踉跄走在干坡上,体现地形)、“waterfallnowglintinginthesun”
(瀑布反光,体现天气转晴),让场景更“真实可触
例如:若只写“theygotoutandleft”,则情节空洞:范文加入“gasping""stumbled”等细节,让逃生更具“画
面感”。
4,第四步:情感收尾,呼应主题
结尾需通过“人物互动+环境烘托''升华情感,而非生硬总结:
人物互动:兄弟间的玩笑("Nexttime,let'spickasaferhikcn)^动作(“clappedhisshoulder”),体现兄
弟情;
环境烘托:“canyon'sroarfaded”“relievedbreaths",用环境平静呼应人物情绪放松,让主题(历险中的
勇气与亲情)自然落地。
例如:范文未直接写“theylovedeachother",而是通过调侃和呼吸声,让情感更含蓄、更动人。
y实战演炼
1.(25-26高三上•浙江•开学考试)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇
完整的短文。
Bearwasnotabear.ShewasabigdogonthePerkinses'familyfann,awoollycreaturewithfloppyearsand
pawslikebedroomslippers.Sheprotectedtheducksandchickensfrombeingeatenbyfoxesandraccoons(浣熊).
Sheguardedthechildrenaswell,watchingoverthemascloselyasshedidthechickensandducks.Inwinter
(hedogranalongside(hechildrenastheysledded(滑雪橇)downsnowyhills.Insummersheswamwiththemina
nearbyriver.
Bearbelongedtoabreed(品种)thathadlongbeenusedbyAtlanticfishermentohelpwiththeirwork,andit
hadakeeninstinctforwaterrescue.Whenthechildrenwereintheriver,thedogwouldswimincirclesaround
(hem,barkingwhenshefelttheywen(outtoofar.Shewastheperfectfarmdog-companion,guardian,protector.
Thedog'sfavoriteamongthethreechildrenwasthree-year-oldlittleMike.Theyoftencurleduptogether.
SometimesBearwoulddozewhileMikepretendedtoreadtoher.Oftenbothweresoundasleep,atangleofdark
fur,blondhair,smallhandsandhugepaws.Atbedtime,MikesavedhislasthugfbrBear,his“bestfiiend,\
Onacoldwinterday,whentheirparentswentouttosendaparcel,eight-year-oldMartha,seven-year-old
SaraandMike,wenttoslideonthefrozenpondoftheirfarm.Shoutinghappily,theyslidbackandforth,their
bootsglidingeasilyacrosstheice.TheylaughedastheywatchedBear'sattemptstostopsuddenly,whichwould
insteadsendherskiddingbeyondthem.Then,tired,thethreesaldownontheice,withBearbesidethem.Suddenly
theicegavewayundertheircombinedweight.
AsBearjumpedforshore,thethreechildrenfellintothefreezingcoldwater.Screaming,MarthaandSarah
struggledtofindfootingonrocksunderwater.Branchesfromatreenearbyprovidedhandholds,andusingeverybit
oftheirstrength,thetwogirlspulledthemselvestoshore.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卷的相应位置作答。
Paragraph1:Lookingback,theysawlittleMikeholdingontoabrokenchunk1人块)ofice,unabletocrawlonto
it.
Paragraph2:Seeingthat,Bearletoutaseriesofwoofsandjumpedintothewater,headingstraightforMike.
2.(2025・河南•模拟预测)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短
文。
Underaflatwinterlight,fourwomenrodetheirbicyclesinnorthernColorado'sRooseveltNationalForest.
Theyarccompetitivecyclistswhoknowtheroutewell.MostofthemrideforateamcalledRecycledCycles
Racing,basedoutofSeattle.Astheymadetheirwayalongawidesectionofthepath.Wolfledtheway,Williams
rodealoneinthemiddle,andBergereandTietzbroughtuptherear(殿后).
Suddenly,Tietzsawtwolargeanimalsemergefrom(hewoodsofftotherightjustafterBergerepassed.She
didn'tseeclearly,socouldn'tidentifywhatthetwoanimalswere.
Nosoonerhadtheyidentifiedtheanimalsthantheterriblethinghappened.Thefirstoneranquicklyacross
thepathinfrontofBergere,andthenrushedtotheleftanddisappeared.Thesecondfollowed,butinthelastinstant
itstopped.ItmighthavebeendistractedbythemovementofBergere'sbicycle,jumpedatBergere'sback,and
pulledhertothegroundwithteethandclaws(爪子).Tietzletoutascaryscream,t4Ohmy,theyarecougars(美洲
狮)”
Wolfturnedaroundquickly.Herfirstreactionwastoputasmuchdistanceaspossiblebetweenherselfand
thescaryanimal.Butquickly,shepusheddownherfearandrushedtohelpBergere.Williamsandotherfriendsall
cametohelp.TheypulledtheanimalawayfromBergere'sneck.
“Call911,“yelledWolf.Tietzimmediatelycalledbuttherewasnoresponse.For15minutes,thewomen
werehitting,kicking,punching,andscreaming.Finally,thecougarreleasedBergere,anditmightturnonanyorall
ofthem.Bergerestretchedout,andshewastiredandinjured—butbreathingandawake.UHELLO?THISIS911.
STATEYOUREMERGENCY.^^Thevoiceofthe911callcentercamethroughTietz'sphone,whichwaslyingon
theground.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Whenseeinganothercyclistridingtowardthem,thewomenrealizeditwastheirteammateCaswell.
Bergerespentfivedaysinthehospital.
3.(2025・安徽・三模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
AfterHurricaneMiltonhitFlorida'sGulfCoasthard,theCoastGuardhelicopterteamhadatoughjob:find
amissingboatcaptainfloatinginthehugeocean.Alltheyknewwasthathehadonaredlifejacket,ablackshirt,
andblackpants.Itseemedreallyhardtofindhim,buttheykeptsearching,watchingtheroughwatersbelow.
Themissingcaptain,Mike,hadbeenaboardafishingboatcalledthe"Capi.Davc,\tryingtobringitbackto
portaftermakingrepairsearlyonWednesday.Sadly,theboat'senginestoppedworking,andastheafternoonwent
by,thestormgotstronger.Withstrongwindscomingat2p.m.andHurricaneMiltongettingevenmorepowerful,
thingsgotreallybad.TheCoastGuardcalledMikeontheradioandtoldhimtoputonhislifejacketandstaywith
theboat'semergencysignaldevice.Theylasttalkedat6:45p.m.,justafewhoursbeforethehurricanereachedthe
land.
Alonein(hewildsea,Mikeheldon(oacooler,theonlythingkeepinghimsteadyinthebigwaves.Asthe
hoursdraggedon,Mike'sarmsachedunbearablyfromtheconstantstrainofclingingtothecooler.Thewindblew
loudly,andhugewaveshitaroundhim.buthislifejacketkepthimfromsinking.Allthroughthelongnight,he
facedthestorm'sanger,checkingtheemergencysignalinhispocketnowandthen,hopingfbrhelp.
WhenthesuncameuponThursday,thehelicopterteamwasstartingtolosehopeafterlookingforhours
withoutsuccess.Butthen,aweaksignalshowedontheirfindingequipment.Theirheartsbeatingfast,they
followed(hesignal,eyeslockedonthewater.Suddenly,theysawsomethingmovinginthewaves.Astheygot
closer,theysawtwoarmswavingwildly—itwasMike,stillholding(hecoolertightly.Thehelicopterquickly
loweredarescueswimmerintothewater.
注意:
1.绘写词数应为150左右:
2.请按如卜格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
TherescueswimmerswamtowardsMikea*fastashecould.
Atthehospital,Mike'sfamilypacedoutsidetheemergencyroom.
4.(2025•河北秦皇岛•三模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的
短文。
Thestonncloudsgatheredfasterthanweexpected.MyclimbingpartnerJakeandIwerehalfvvayupEagle's
Peakwhenthefirsthailstones(冰雹)struckourhelmetslikebullets.Ourgloved(戴手套的)handsgrippedtothe
wetrockfaceas(hewindtriedtoblowusoff(hemountain.
“Climbdown!Now!^^Jakeshoutedoverth
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