温情类主题读后续写姐弟关系修复课件高三英语一轮复习专项()

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课时一123教学目标课时一ReviewwordsandexpressionstodescribedetailsincontinuationwritingReviewandpractisethestructureofNon-verbsinwriting;ApplytheNon-VerbstodescribethedetailsPreview优点：抓住了原文“被困电梯”的核心冲突，延续了紧张的氛围；尝试通过“安慰邻居、等待救援”推进情节，符合读后续写“情节衔接”的基本要求。有待提升之处：时态混乱、词性错误、搭配错误情节逻辑松散语言表达单薄：多用简单句，缺乏复合句/细节描写（如人物的动作/心理）；词汇重复（wantto多次出现），用词不准确，用词不够精准Preview修改后：MypalmssweatedasIbangedontheliftdoor,myvoicecrackingwhenIshoutedforhelp.我掌心渗汗，一边猛砸电梯门，一边嘶哑着嗓子呼救。用词精准动作细节非谓语复合句PresentIwassadMykneeswentweakandmyheartpoundwildly/beatfast.双膝发软，心脏狂跳。withashiningsmileonone'sface脸上露出灿烂的笑容awaveofwarmthmovethroughsb.

一股暖流涌过心头tearswellupinone'seyes泪如泉涌Present2134Iwashappy.moved.Iwasscared.Myheartsank/stoodfrozen/smilefaded.我的心猛地一沉/僵在原地/笑容淡了。12boilwithanger/flamewithanger气得冒烟3openone’smouthinsurprise惊讶得张大嘴

IwassadPresentPresentWithashiningsmileonherface,sherantowardsherparentsattheairport.脸上露出灿烂的笑容，她朝着机场的父母跑去。Shestaredattheunexpectedguestatthedoor,openinghermouthinsurprise.惊讶得张大嘴巴，她盯着门口这位不速之客。Sheheardthetouchingstory,asenseofmoverunningthroughher.她听到这个感人的故事，一股感动涌上心头。Present句型：1.with结构2.Ving/done....,主语+谓语,ving/done...3.主语+谓语，asenseof名词running/surgingthroughsb.Practise2025高三适应性检测修复姐弟关系MybrotherandIareonlyayearapartinage.Whenwewerelittle,peoplewouldaskifweweretwins.Welivedinthemountainsandonlyhadeachotherforalongtime,soweweren'tjustbrotherandsister,wewerebestfriends.Everythingchangedafterourparentsdivorced.Hewenttolivewithmyfather,Iwithmymother.SometimeshevisitedusandsometimesIvisitedthem,butwegrewmoredistanteachtime.BythetimeIwasthirteen,we'dstoppedhangingoutaltogether.IthinktheonlytimeweeverspokewasatNewYear,anditwasallpolitebutpainfullyawkward,likehewasacompletestrangerinsteadofmylittlebrother.Severalyearslater,afterbeingacceptedintoamajoruniversitythreethousandmilesaway,Imadeaboldplan:todriveacrossthecountryonmyown.

Theideaoftravelingalonethrilledme,fillingmewithexcitementandahintofnervousness,thoughIknewthattheroadcouldbelonesomeandunpredictable-endlessstretcheswithoutmyseeingasingleperson,人（人物形象）“我”（姐姐）：独立、倔强，内心深处仍怀念童年的兄妹情，对疏远感到无奈又有点委屈。弟弟：看似冷漠、叛逆，实则内心有责任感，藏着对姐姐的关心（只是被隔阂掩盖），童年时是姐姐的守护者。父母：出于关爱安排同行，是推动情节发展的“间接推手”，体现对子女情感联结的重视。andsometimesevenwildanimalscrossingoutofhowever,thoughtitwouldbesaferifmybrothercamealongasmytravelcompanionnowhere.Myparents,onthelongdrivetocollege.Needlesstosay,wewerebothfurious(愤怒的)abouttheidea.Thelastthingeitherofuswantedwastospendaweekinacartogether-he,withasisterhebarelyknew,andI,witha“babysitter"Ineveraskedfor.Butitwassettled.Twoweekslater,wesetoff.Forthefirstsixhundredmiles,neitherofusspokemuchunlessabsolutelynecessary.Thesilencewasthickwithtension,anditdidn'ttakelongbeforewearguedoverwhatmusictoplay,howfasttodrive,andwhentotakebreaks,eachofusstubbornlystickingtoourownway,rollingoureyesandsighinginfrustration.JustwhenIthoughtthetripwouldbeunbearable,somethingunexpectedhappened.________Stilltremblingfromtheaccident,Irealizedhewasholdingmyhand._____物（道具/环境的象征意义）汽车：封闭空间，既是冲突的“发酵罐”（初期沉默、争吵），也是和解的“催化剂”（被迫共处、共同面对危险）。公路：象征“成长之路”与“亲情重建之路”，漫长、未知，对应兄妹关系的起伏。暴雨/野生动物：突发困境，打破表面的冷漠，迫使两人展现真实的内心（保护欲、依赖）。音乐、车速：细节冲突点，体现两人的性格差异，也为后续和解后的“默契”做铺垫。主题意义亲情的韧性——即使被距离和时间疏远，血缘中的羁绊仍能在关键时刻被唤醒。情节：童年挚友→父母离异疏远→姐姐考上远方大学，计划独自驾车→父母安排弟弟同行→旅途初期冲突不断。Para.1JustwhenIthoughtthetripwouldbeunbearable,somethingunexpectedhappened.S1衔接句

S2S3S4S5衔接句Para.2Stilltremblingfromtheaccident,Irealizedhewasholdingmyhand.S6衔接句S7S8S9解决问题S10主题升华情节构建123教学目标课时二DeveloptheawarenessofthestructureinwritingLearnhowtosummerizethethemeTrytowritewiththetipsandapplyNon-verbtoaddsomedetailtobeautifythesentences（一）优点主题一致：紧扣“突发意外促成亲情和解”的核心主题情节连贯、框架完整：

突发状况（车祸、野生动物、抛锚等）—冲突化解（互相关心）—关系修复情感导向正确：从“愤怒/尴尬”到“理解/亲近”的情感转变，突出“血浓于水”的亲情内核。作业反馈情况1.语言表达薄弱①语法错误②词汇精准度③细节描写2.情节逻辑松散3.衔接与连贯不足作业反馈情况A.被震惊和他意想不到的关怀压垮了，我哭了起来，一句话也说不出来。E.就在我生气地调收音机时，一只大鹿突然冲上了这条渺无人烟的公路,从车前跑过。C.我害怕地尖叫着踩下刹车，急忙变向躲避它，刚好躲过了那只动物，但汽车失去了控制。B.当车终于停下时，我的脑海中闪回刚才关于车速的争吵，我后悔自己的固执。D.我以为弟弟会勃然大怒，但他没有，而是立刻凑过来检查我是否受伤。情节构思(句子排序)Para.1JustwhenIthoughtthetripwouldbeunbearable,somethingunexpectedhappened.__________________________________正确顺序：________->_________->________->________->__________ECBDA急忙变向躲避它，却失去了对车辆的控制。Para.2Stilltremblingfromtheaccident,Irealizedhewasholdingmyhand.依然从事故的惊吓中颤抖着，我意识到他正紧紧握着我的手。C.他坚定的握持温暖而令人安心，瞬间融化了横亘在我们之间多年的坚冰。D.他一直跟我说话，让我感觉好受些。这次我们在放什么音乐，开多快，什么时候休息上达成了一致.A.当我们重新上路时，沉重的沉默消失了，取而代之的是关于童年回忆的愉快交谈E.我看着他，那一刻，我仿佛看到了小时候那个和我一起玩耍的弟弟。B.那次事故虽然可怕，却让我们意识到，即使我们分开很久，家人也永远是家人。我知道我们会重新变得亲密起来。正确顺序：________->_________->________->________->__________CEDAB情节构思(句子排序)1.（衔接句）就在我生气地调音乐时，一只大野生动物突然冲上了这条渺无人烟的公路,

从车前跑过。Ahugewildanimalsuddenlydashedoutontothelonesomeroad，______rightinfrontofthecarwhenIwasangrilyadjustingthemusic.

2.我惊恐地尖叫(screen)着踩下刹车，急忙变向躲避它avoid，刚好躲过了那只动物，但

汽车失去了控制。

____________interror,Ihitthebrakeandchangeddirectioninahurry_______________itbutlostcontrol.3.当车终于停下时，我的脑海中闪回刚才关于车速的争吵，我后悔自己的固执。_____________________________________,mymindflashedbacktoourearlierargumentsabouthowfasttodrive,andIregrettedmystubbornness.4.我以为弟弟会勃然大怒，但他没有，而是立刻凑过来检查我是否受伤。avoidScreamingtoAsthecarfinallycametoastopIhadexpectedmybrothertoexplode___________________,butinstead,heimmediatelyleanedovertocheckifIwashurt.withangerrunning根据提示完成句子，注意用正确的形式5.被震惊和他意想不到的关怀压垮（Overwhelm）了，我哭了起来，一句话也说不出来。_______________________bytheshockandhisunexpectedcare,Ibrokedownintears,_________________________________________.Overwhelmedunabletospeakasingleword6.他坚定的握持温暖而令人安心，瞬间融化(melt)了横亘在我们之间多年的坚冰。Thehandholdingmewassowarmandreassuring,instantly___________thethickicethathadseparatedusforsomanyyears.7.我看着他，那一刻，我仿佛看到了小时候那个和我一起玩耍的弟弟。______________________,IlookedathimasifIhadseenthelittlebrotherIusedtoplaywithwhenwewerekids.Para.2Stilltremblingfromtheaccident,Irealizedhewasholdingmyhand.meltingForamoment根据提示完成句子，注意用正确的形式8.他一直跟我说话，让我感觉好受些。这次我们在放什么音乐，开多快，什么时候休息上达成了一致.Hekepttalkingtometomakemefeelbetter.Thistime,weagreedon_________________________________________________________________________________.9.当我们重新上路时，沉重的沉默消失了，取而代之的是关于童年回忆的愉快交谈Whenwehittheroadagain,_________________________

wasgone,replacedbypleasantconversationsaboutchildhoodmemories.howfasttodrive，whatmusictoplayandwhentotakebreakstheheavysilencewithintension10.那次事故虽然可怕，却让我们意识到，即使我们分开很久，家人也永远是家人。我知道我们会重新变得亲密起来。__________theaccidentwasscary,itmadeus_________thatevenifweareapartforalongtime,familyisalwaysfamily.Iknewwewouldbecloseagain.Althoughrealize根据提示完成句子，注意用正确的形式Para.1JustwhenIthoughtthetripwouldbeunbearable,somethingunexpectedhappened.Ahugewildanimalsuddenlydashedoutontothelonesomeroad，runningrightinfrontofthecarwhenIwasangrilyadjustingthemusic.Screaminginterror,Ihitthebrakeandchangeddirectioninahurrytoavoiditbutlostcontrol.Asthecarfinallycametoastop,mymindflashedbacktoourearlierargumentsabouthowfasttodrive,andIregrettedmystubbornness.Ihadexpectedmybrothertoexplodewithanger,butinstead,heimmediatelyleanedovertocheckifIwashurt.Overwhelmedbytheshockandhisunexpectedcare,Ibrokedownintears,unabletospeakasingleword.PossibleVersionPara.2Stilltremblingfromtheaccident,Irealizedhewasholdingmyhand.Thehandholdingmewassowarmandreassuring,instantlymeltingthethickicethathadseparatedusforsomanyyears.Foramoment,IlookedathimasifIhadseenthelittlebrotherIusedtoplaywithwhenwewerekids.Hekepttalkingtometomakemefeelbetter.Thistime,weagreedonhowfasttodrive,whatmusictoplayandwhentotakebreaks.Whenwehittheroadagain,theheavysilencewithintensionwasgone,replacedbypleasantconversationsaboutchildhoodmemories.Althoughtheaccidentwasscary,itmadeusrealizethatevenifweareapartforalongtime,familyisalwaysfamily.Iknewwewouldbecloseagain.亲情类主题----升华句相亲相爱类1.Theearlysunlightstreamingin,thewholefamilywasbathedinhappinessandlove.

清晨的阳光照进来，全家人沉浸在幸福和爱中。2.Bathedinthewarmafternoonsun,Allofthemlaughedwithhappiness,thelaughterechoingintheroom.沐浴在下午温暖的阳光下，他们都高兴地笑了起来，笑声在房间里回荡。解决矛盾类3.ItwasatthatmomentthatIhadafullunderstandingofthesignificanceoffamily