安徽省高三江南十校应用文和读后续写解析课件

在假期，你发现周围许多同学喜欢“宅”在家里观看线上课程、刷视频、浏览社交平台等上网活动。请你就此现象向校英文报“CampusView”专栏投稿，谈谈你的看法。基本内容要求：1.简要描述该现象；2.分析其可能带来的好处与弊端；3.提出你的积极建议。注意：（1）写作词数应为80个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。高分素材短语：begluedtoscreens–盯着屏幕（形容沉迷电子设备）adouble-edgedsword–双刃剑（形容利弊并存）broadenone'shorizons–开阔眼界attheexpenseof–以……为代价face-to-faceinteraction–面对面交流sedentarylifestyle–久坐不动的生活方式strikeabalancebetweenAandB–在A和B之间取得平衡digitaldetox–数字排毒（远离电子设备）fallvictimto–成为……的受害者makethemostof–充分利用二、高分句型1.用于描述现象：Itisnotuncommontoobservethataconsiderablenumberofstudentsspendthebulkoftheirvacationgluedtoscreens,whetherforonlinecourses,socialmedia,orentertainment.（观察到相当多的学生假期大部分时间盯着屏幕——无论是上网课、刷社交媒体还是娱乐——这已相当普遍。）2.用于分析好处：Thereisnodenyingthefactthatonlineresourcesserveasavaluabletoolforself-improvement,enablingstudentstoacquireknowledgebeyondtheconfinesoftraditionalclassrooms.（不可否认，在线资源是自我提升的宝贵工具，能让学生获取传统课堂之外的知识。）3.用于分析弊端（社交影响）：However,excessiverelianceondigitaldevicesmayinevitablygiverisetotheerosionofinterpersonalskills,asvirtualconnectionscanneverreplacethewarmthofgenuine,face-to-faceinteractions.（然而，过度依赖电子设备可能会不可避免地削弱人际交往能力，因为虚拟连接永远无法替代真实面对面交流的温暖。）4.用于分析弊端（身心健康）：Whatismoreconcerningisthataprolongedsedentarylifestyle,coupledwiththebluelightemittedfromscreens,posesahiddenthreattobothphysicalwell-beingandeyesight.（更令人担忧的是，长期久坐的生活方式，加上屏幕发出的蓝光，对身体健康和视力都构成了潜在威胁。）基础版Onholidays,manystudentschoosetostayathomeandspendmuchtimeonline.Theytakeonlinecourses,watchshortvideosandbrowsesocialplatforms.Onholidays,acommonphenomenonisthatmanystudentsstayathome,engaginginvariousonlineactivitiessuchastakingonlinecourses,scrollingthroughshortvideos,andbrowsingsocialmediaplatforms.It’snoticeablethatmanystudentspreferspendingmostoftheirholidaytimestayingindoorsandsurfingtheInternettotakeonlinecourses,watchshortvideosandbrowsesocialplatforms.升级表达：Ithasbecomeincreasinglycommonforstudentstospendtheirholidaysindoors,dedicatingasignificantamountoftimetoonlineactivities,suchastakingonlinecourses,scrollingthroughshortvideos,andbrowsingsocialmediaplatforms.Thisenablesthemtoaccessabundantinformationconvenientlyandrelaxafterheavystudy.Onlinelearninghelpsusmakeupforacademicgaps...

升级表达：Admittedly,onlineengagementoffersconsiderablebenefits.Itenablesflexibleknowledgesupplementandprovidesmuch-neededrelaxation,allowingstudentstounwindandrechargeafterastressfulschoolterm.论述弊端基础版本Wemayhurtourbodiesandhavenotimetocommunicatewithothers.版本一Excessiveonlinetimeharmsourphysicalhealthandreducesofflinecommunication.版本二OverindulgenceintheInternetcausesphysicalproblemsandlackofface-to-facecommunication.版本三Italsoleadstoinsufficientphysicalexercise,whichharmshealth,andreducesface-to-facesocialinteraction.升级表达：However,excessivescreentimecanleadtoseveraldrawbacks.Itoftenresultsininsufficientphysicalexercise,whichisharmfultotheirhealth,andreducesopportunitiesforface-to-facecommunication,potentiallyleadingtoasenseofisolation.提出建议版本一weneedtosetareasonableonlinescheduleandbalanceonlinetimewithoutdooractivities...版本二weshouldrationallyarrangeonlinetime,andcombineonlinelearningwithofflineactivities...版本三weshouldbalanceonlinetimewithoutdooractivities...Besides,spendingmoretimecommunicatingwithfamilyandfriendsinpersonisalsoadvisable.升级表达：Therefore,itiscrucialtostrikeahealthybalance.Studentsshouldestablishareasonableschedulethatlimitsrecreationalscreentimeandprioritizesofflineactivities.Engaginginoutdoorsports,participatinginvolunteerwork,orsimplyspendingqualitytimewithfamilyandfriendsareexcellentwaystoensureafulfillingandwell-roundedholidayexperience.江南十校续写分析第二节

读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Lilyhadalwayslovedhergrandpa'soldcamera---ablackmodelinawornleathercase,scentedwithpineandtime.He'dboughtitdecadesagoinParis,andoftentoldheritcapturedtheirsummers:chasingfireflies,eatingstrawberryshortcakebythelake,herfirstbikeride.Butsincegrandpa'sweakheartdiagnosislastyear,thingschanged.Hecouldn'twalkfarortalklong,andthecamera---onceaconstant---wasputinadustyattic(阁楼)box,forgottenlikeanunfinishedstory.LastSaturday,momhadhercleantheattic.Movingapileofsweaters,herfingersbrushedcoldmetal---thecameracase.Dustingitoff,thepinescenthither,stinginghereyes.Openingitwithaclick,shesawthecamera(lensstillshiny,asifpolishedyesterday)andasmallunopenedfilmroll.Tapedtoit:grandpa'smessyhand,ForLily---our7thsummer,theonewiththerainbow.Lily'sheartjumped---sherememberedthatsummerwell:they'dgottencaughtintherainpickingblueberries,thenarainbowcurvedoverthefield.She'dbeggedforphotos,buthelaughed,"Saveitforlater,kiddo."Now"later"came.Glancingback,underthecamera,shefoundafadedbrowndevelopingkit,labeling:Emergencyfilmdeveloping.Suddenlysherecalledhowhe'dtaughthertodevelopfilminthebathroomsinkasakid---now,sheknewwhatsheshoulddo.注意：（1）续写词数应为150左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragragh1:Afterdevelopingthefilmroll,Lilyrushedtoherroomandfoundanoldphotoprinter.Paragragh2:Thenextmorning,Lilyheldthephotosandthecameratightlyandrantothehospital.Afterdevelopingthefilmroll,Lilyrushedtoherroomandfoundanoldphotoprinter._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenextmorning,Lilyheldthephotosandthecameratightlyandrantothehospital.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、原文深度解析（一）核心故事脉络本文以爷爷的旧相机为线索，讲述了莉莉与爷爷的温情故事：爷爷因心脏病身体变差，曾承载二人夏日美好回忆的相机被尘封在阁楼；莉莉打扫阁楼时意外发现相机、一卷未开封的胶卷（爷爷标注为“莉莉7岁夏天的彩虹”）和洗相工具，回忆起爷爷教她洗胶卷的经历，决心完成洗相这件事，为故事留下续写的核心动作与情感基调。（二）关键要素梳理人物：莉莉（重感情、念旧，想为爷爷做些事）；爷爷（深爱莉莉，曾用相机记录二人时光，如今病重住院）。核心道具：旧相机、未开封胶卷、洗相工具——是情感的载体，也是续写的关键线索，胶卷的内容是核心悬念（7岁夏天的彩虹与蓝莓园回忆）。情感基调：温暖、治愈、亲情浓厚，续写需贴合这份温情，避免悲情，突出“回忆的力量”与“亲情的慰藉”。续写伏笔：①莉莉记得爷爷教她洗胶卷的方法；②胶卷标注“7thsummer，theonewiththerainbow”；③爷爷病重，相机被遗忘——续写需围绕“洗出照片→带给爷爷→爷爷的反应”展开，形成完整的情感闭环。段落开头限定：Para1：洗出胶卷后，莉莉找旧照片打印机（需写洗出的照片内容、莉莉的心情）；Para2：次日莉莉带照片和相机去医院（需写爷爷的反应、二人的互动，升华亲情）。（三）续写核心要求情节逻辑：需紧扣“洗相→打印→送爷爷”的主线，照片内容必须呼应“7岁夏天的彩虹、蓝莓园避雨”的回忆，符合爷爷的标注；情感表达：通过动作、神态、语言描写展现莉莉的期待/感动，爷爷的惊喜/欣慰，突出亲情的温暖；细节呼应：需回扣“相机的松香味、镜头锃亮、爷爷教洗胶卷”等原文细节，让故事更连贯；词数控制：两段合计150词左右，每段约70-80词，语言简洁且有画面感。二、苏格拉底式提问（引导学生梳理续写思路）1.莉莉洗出的胶卷里，会拍到哪些具体的画面？这些画面要和原文中的哪个回忆相呼应？2.看到洗出来的照片，莉莉的心情会是怎样的？可以用哪些动作或神态来表现这种心情？3.莉莉找到旧照片打印机后，打印照片的过程中会有什么小细节？比如她的动作、对照片的珍惜？4.第二天莉莉去医院，见到爷爷时，会先做什么、说什么？爷爷看到照片和相机的第一反应是什么？5.爷爷看到照片后，可能会回忆起什么？会对莉莉说什么话？这些话要贴合爷爷对莉莉的爱。6.故事的结尾，相机这个道具会有什么新的意义？莉莉和爷爷的互动，会让亲情有怎样的升华？续写时，如何回扣原文中的“松香味、镜头锃亮、阁楼、蓝莓园”等细节，让故事更连贯？描写人物时，是用语言描写多一点，还是动作、神态描写多一点？哪种方式更能体现人物的情感？Paragraph1练习Afterdevelopingthefilmroll,Lilyrushedtoherroomandfoundanoldphotoprinter.______________________________________（打印动作）.________________________________________(打印出来的画面）.Everydetailwasasvividasitwasyesterday._________________________(看到照片时的情感描写）.Shecarefullysmoothedtheedgesofthephotosandputtheminasmallalbum,alongwiththecamerathatstillsmelledofpine.打印动作

（1）Shecarefullyloadedthefilmrollintothemachine---fingersstilltrembling-andclicked“print”.（2）Shequicklyconnectedtheprinterandpressedtheprintbutton.Soon,thephotosbegantocomeoutonebyone.打印出来的画面（1）Soonthefirstphotocameout.Itwastherainbowovertheblueberryfield,asvividassheremembered.（2）Theretheywere:theblueberryfieldglisteningwithraindrops,thebrightrainbowcurvinggentlyoverthegreengrass,andalittlegirlwithmessyhairlaughinginhergrandpa’sarms.看到照片时的情感描写1.Awarmwaveofexcitementwashedoverher,mixedwithabittersweetache.TheimagesbroughtGrandpasoclose,yetsofar —herlongingforhimonlygrew.2.TearsblurredhervisionassherealizedthesephotosstoodasatestamenttotheprecioustimeshehadwithGrandpa.Paragraph1示范Afterdevelopingthefilmroll,Lilyrushedtoherroomandfoundanoldphotoprinter.Herhandstrembledalittleassheinsertedthephotopaper,andsoonthepicturescameoutonebyone.Theretheywere:theblueberryfieldglisteningwithraindrops,thebrightrainbowcurvinggentlyoverthegreengrass,andalittlegirlwithmessyhairlaughinginhergrandpa’sarms.Everydetailwasasvividasitwasyesterday.Lilystaredatthephotos,hereyeswetwithtears.Shecarefullysmoothedtheedgesofthephotosandputtheminasmallalbum,alongwiththecamerathatstillsmelledofpine.Paragraph2Thenextmorning,Lilyheldthephotosandthecameratightlyandrantothehospital.Whensheshowedthealbumtograndpa,hiseyeslitupinstantly.Hereachedouthisshakyhandandstrokedthephotos,asoftsmilespreadingacrosshisface.“Mylittlegirl,”hewhispered,hisvoicethickwithemotion,“Iknewthisfilmwouldcapturethebestsummer.”Lilythenplacedthecamerainhispalmandtoldhimshe’dlearnedtotakephotoswellnow.Grandpanodded,andforthefirsttimeinmonths,helaughedaloud._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(主题句)主题句：（1）Itturnsoutthatfamilyloveisjustlikethis.Anoldobject,amemory,andaheartfelt