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“见义勇为”的小英雄2025年1月浙江高考读后续写目录01PlotAnalysis情节分析02Prediction情节预测03ContinuationWriting续写04ModelVersion下水文05Similartopic类似话题PlotAnalysis

情节分析01逐段分析法PlotAnalysisP1Kevinwasprettybored.Hismotherwasatwork,andhisfatherhadbeenawayonbusiness.Therefore,hewasleftinthecareofMrs.Hill,anoldladywholivednextdoor.Hisparentshadraisedthe12-year-oldtobeagoodboy.Henevergotintotrouble,thoughsometimeshewantedtodoriskythings.Mrs.Hillwasasleep.Kevinsighed(叹息)andhopedsomethingexcitingwouldhappen.Suddenly,amovementoutsidecaughthiseye.P2Mrs.Hill’sfrontwindowfacedMr.andMrs.Green’shouseacrossthestreet.Thecouplehadbothgonetowork,soitwasstrangethatsomeonewasoverthere.Kevinstaredatthemanattheirfrontdoor.Suddenly,themanjumpedthroughanopenwindowintothehouse.Withhisheartinhismouth,KevingrabbedMrs.Hill’shomephoneandcalledthepolice.PlotEmotionAfternoticingamanjumpedintoaneighbor’shouse,Kevincalledthepoliceboredanxious逐段分析法PlotAnalysisP3

Thinkingthatthemanmightgetawaywithwhateverhewantedbeforethepolicearrived,Kevindecidedtodosomething.HerushedoutofMrs.Hill’shouseandcrossedthestreetquickly.Grabbingabranchfromacut-downtree,hejumpedinthroughthewindow.“Stoprightthere!Youmustleaverightnow!”hecalledout,holdingthebranchwithbothhands.P4Themanfrozeforasecond,butwhenhesawtheskinnyboyhebreathedasighofrelief.“Hey,kid,putthatdown.Itwasmyhome.Myparentsusedtolivehereandmyfather’swatchwashere,”heexplained,tryingtoliftafloorboard.PlotEmotionKevinwenttostopthemanbutthemanexplainedhecametorecover(重新取回)hiswatch.calm逐段分析法PlotAnalysisP5

Atthatmoment,thesoundsofapolicecarechoed(回响)intheair.Themanstoodupinapanic,thenranthroughthehousetowardthewindowandjumpedout.Kevinfollowedoutandtoldthearrivingpoliceofficerswhathadhappened.Theypursuedandarrestedtheman.P6KevinwentbacktoMrs.Hill’shouse.Somehowhewasn’tsurehehaddonetherightthing.“Whatifhehastoldthetruth?”hethoughttohimself.Theman’swordssoundedprettyconvincing.PlotEmotionThemanwasarrestedbythepolicebutKevindoubtedifhehadwronged(冤枉)theman.doubtful读后续写常见语篇模式“问题-解决办法”(problem-solution)这一模式的语篇结构中，常常有“情景”(situation)、“问题”(problem)、“解决办法”(solution)和“评估”(evalution)4个部分。（黄国文，2001：203）What’stheproblem?PlotAfternoticingamanjumpedintoaneighbor’shouse,Kevincalledthepolice.Kevinwenttostopthemanbutthemanexplainedhecametorecoverhiswatch.ThemanwasarrestedbythepolicebutKevindoubtedifhehadwronged(冤枉)theman.WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.solutionsituationevaluation主题升华？trust,compassion,andthecomplexitiesoftheworldPrediction

预测02Para.1:WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.

__________________________________________________________________Para.2KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.__________________________________________________________________WhatdidKevintellthem?PredictionWhatdidtheytellthepoliceman?Whatdidtheydothen?如何衔接第一句？如何过渡？如何衔接第二段？如何衔接第一句？结局如何？如何过渡？HowdidMr.andMrs.Greenfeelandsay?主题升华？Whatdidthepolicemandothen?Wasthemanathieforbewronged?HowdidKevinfeelandwhatlessondidhelearnt?Para.1:WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.KevintellthewholestorytoMr.andMrs.Green.Mr.andMrs.GreenpraisedKevin’sbraverybutconfirmtheman’words.Mr.andMrs.Greentookthewatchoutandplanedtogothepoliceoffice.PredictthestorylineDSFT法则：do/say/feel/think衔接1过渡1衔接2Para.2:KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.Theyconfirmedtheman’swords.Thepolicemancheckedeverythingandconfirmedtheman’sinnocence.Kevinfeltguiltyandlearntthepoweroftrust,compassion

PredictthestorylineDSFT法则：do/say/feel/think衔接3过渡3主题升华ContinuationWriting续写03按问题链及原文提示写作Afterschool,1draggedmyheavyfeetbackhome.WhenIpushedopenthedoor,Jackwassittingonthecouch,reading.Seeinghisleisurelystate,Icried,hardtocontainthejealousyandsadnessinmyheart.Jackimmediatelynoticedthedepressiononmyface.Heaskedwithconcern,“What'swrong,Lara?”Blindedbyfrustrationmixedwithatouchofjealousy,Ishoutedathim“HowIwishyouwerenotsoperfect!"Para.1:WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.

衔接1：WhatdidKevintellthem?思考1.说的内容可以很多，哪个必须重点提到呢？2.“说明详情”有哪些好的不同表达.Hepouredoutthewholestoryindetail,hisvoicetremblingslightlyasheemphasizedtheman'sclaimaboutthehouseandthewatch.Suddenly,themanjumpedthroughanopenwindowintothehouse.Withhisheartinhismouth,KevingrabbedMrs.Hill’shomephoneandcalledthepolice.（para.2）“Hey,kid,putthatdown.Itwasmyhome.Myparentsusedtolivehereandmyfather’swatchwashere,”heexplained,tryingtoliftafloorboard.（para.4）Theypursuedandarrestedtheman.（para.6）

“说明详情”detailedtheday'seventsrecountedtheday'seventsindetailexplainedthewholesituation按问题链及原文提示写作Afterschool,1draggedmyheavyfeetbackhome.WhenIpushedopenthedoor,Jackwassittingonthecouch,reading.Seeinghisleisurelystate,Icried,hardtocontainthejealousyandsadnessinmyheart.Jackimmediatelynoticedthedepressiononmyface.Heaskedwithconcern,“What'swrong,Lara?”Blindedbyfrustrationmixedwithatouchofjealousy,Ishoutedathim“HowIwishyouwerenotsoperfect!"Para.1:Ihurriedintothetheater,onlytofindtherewereevenmorebikersinside.过渡1

HowdidMr.andMrs.Greenfeelandsay？增加动作描写和情绪描写，让叙述更有画面感Mr.Green'sbrowfurrowedinthought,andafteramomentofsilence,henoddedslowly.“Thatman'sstoryringstrue,”hesaid,hisvoicemeasured.“Hisparentsdidresideherebeforewepurchasedtheproperty.Andasforthewatch,Irecallnow.Itwasafamilyheirloom,hiddenawayforsafekeeping.”KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.认真倾听动作链描写：Leanedforward,listenedintently,apensivefrownetchinghisbrow.按问题链及原文提示写作Afterschool,1draggedmyheavyfeetbackhome.WhenIpushedopenthedoor,Jackwassittingonthecouch,reading.Seeinghisleisurelystate,Icried,hardtocontainthejealousyandsadnessinmyheart.Jackimmediatelynoticedthedepressiononmyface.Heaskedwithconcern,“What'swrong,Lara?”Blindedbyfrustrationmixedwithatouchofjealousy,Ishoutedathim“HowIwishyouwerenotsoperfect!"Para.1:WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.

衔接2：Whatdidtheydothen?Withoutdelay,theyheadedtothespotwherethemanhadsignaled,andwithabitofeffort,Mr.Greenliftedthefloorboard.There,nestledinthedust,layanoldwatch,itshandsstill.

“Hey,kid,putthatdown.Itwasmyhome.Myparentsusedtolivehereandmyfather’swatchwashere,”heexplained,tryingtoliftafloorboard.（para.4）KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.升级动词倒装句式动作描写按问题链及原文提示写作Afterschool,1draggedmyheavyfeetbackhome.WhenIpushedopenthedoor,Jackwassittingonthecouch,reading.Seeinghisleisurelystate,Icried,hardtocontainthejealousyandsadnessinmyheart.Jackimmediatelynoticedthedepressiononmyface.Heaskedwithconcern,“What'swrong,Lara?”Blindedbyfrustrationmixedwithatouchofjealousy,Ishoutedathim“HowIwishyouwerenotsoperfect!"Para.2KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.衔接2：Whatdidtheydothen?“去某地”后面最顺畅的衔接Uponarriving/theirarrival,theyexplainedthesituationtotheofficers,presentingthewatchasevidenceoftheman'sinnocence.

“Hey,kid,putthatdown.Itwasmyhome.Myparentsusedtolivehereandmyfather’swatchwashere,”heexplained,tryingtoliftafloorboard.（para.4）KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.利用第二段提示句的词汇复现进行衔接按问题链及原文提示写作Para.2KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.过渡2：

Whatdidthepolicemandothen?警察的求证过程及情绪变化要写具体，让男人的释放合理化。Thepolice,initiallyskeptical,examinedthewatchcloselyandcross-referenceditwiththeman'saccount.按问题链及原文提示写作Afterschool,1draggedmyheavyfeetbackhome.WhenIpushedopenthedoor,Jackwassittingonthecouch,reading.Seeinghisleisurelystate,Icried,hardtocontainthejealousyandsadnessinmyheart.Jackimmediatelynoticedthedepressiononmyface.Heaskedwithconcern,“What'swrong,Lara?”Blindedbyfrustrationmixedwithatouchofjealousy,Ishoutedathim“HowIwishyouwerenotsoperfect!"Para.2KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.主题升华：HowdidKevinfeelandwhatlessondidhelearnt?1.Reflectingonthewholeevent,Kevinearnedvaluablelessonsabouttrust,compassion,andthecomplexitiesoftheworld.2.ItwasnotuntilthismomentthatKevinunderstoodthecomplexitiesoftruthandappearances.P1Hisparentshadraisedthe12-year-oldtobeagoodboy.Henevergotintotrouble,thoughsometimeshewantedtodoriskythings.P6

Somehowhewasn’tsurehehaddonetherightthing.“Whatifhehastoldthetruth?”hethoughttohimself.Theman’swordssoundedprettyconvincing.ModelVersion

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WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.Hepouredoutthewholestoryindetail,hisvoicetremblingslightlyasheemphasizedtheman'sclaimaboutthehouseandthewatch.Mr.Greenleanedforwardandlistenedintently,apensivefrownetchinghisbrow.Andafteramomentofsilence,henoddedslowly.“Thatman'sstoryringstrue,”hesaid.“Hisparentsdidresideherebeforewepurchasedtheproperty.Andasforthewatch,Irecallnow.Itwasafamilyheirloom,hiddenawayforsafekeeping.”Withoutdelay,theyheadedtothespotwherethemanhadsignaled,andwithabitofeffort,Mr.Greenliftedthefloorboard.There,nestledinthedustlayanoldwatch,itshandsstill.KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.Uponarriving/theirarrival,theyexplainedthesituationtotheofficers,presentingthewatchasevidenceoftheman'sinnocence.Thepolice,initiallyskeptical,examinedthewatchcloselyandcross-referenceditwiththeman'saccount.Afterprovingtheman’sownershipoftheitems,hewasimmediatelyreleasedbythepolice.MuchtoKeven’sastonishment,themanstillthankedKevinprofusely,acknowledginghiscourageandintegrity.NotuntilthismomentdidKevinbreatheasighofrelief.Reflectingonthewholeevent,Kevinlearnedvaluablelessonsabouttrust,compassion,andthecomplexitiesoftheworld.

WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.He_____________________(详细地讲述了整个故事),_______________(，声音略带颤抖),)asheemphasizedtheman'sclaimaboutthehouseandthewatch.Mr.Green________________________________________________________(倾身向前，认真地听着，眉头紧皱).Andafteramomentofsilence,henoddedslowly.“________________(那个人的故事是真的),”hesaid,hisvoicemeasured.“Hisparentsdidresideherebeforewepurchasedtheproperty.Andasforthewatch,Irecallnow.Itwasafamilyheirloom,hiddenawayforsafekeeping.”Withoutdelay,they__________________________________(向那个人示意的地方走去),andwithabitofeffort,Mr.Greenliftedthefloorboard.There,________________________(在灰尘中有一只旧手表),itshandsstill.KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.______________(一到),theyexplainedthesituationtotheofficers,presentingthewatchasevidenceoftheman‘sinnocence.Thepolice,____________________________(持怀疑态度，但仔细检查了手表)andcross-referenceditwiththeman’saccount.Afterprovingtheman’sownershipoftheitems,hewasimmediatelyreleasedbythepolice.MuchtoKeven’sastonishment,themanstillthankedKevinprofusely,acknowledginghiscourageandintegrity._______________(直到这一刻凯文才松了一口气)____________(反思整件事),Kevinlearnedvaluablelessonsabouttrust,compassion,andthecomplexitiesoftheworld.下水文默写Similartopic

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