Unit1Foodmatters写作之读后续写课件高中英语译林版选择性

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Foodmatters译林版2020选择性必修第一册读后续写：与食物相关读话题写作文高二上

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。12技法点拨

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读后续写中的句子扩展01同位语主要使用名词短语和同位语从句。例1.(2016年10月浙江卷）Shesawherhusband.她看到了她的丈夫。There,shesawherhusband,amanstaringather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.在那里，她看到了她的丈夫，一个正盯着她看的男人，带着宽慰的表情。【分析】在句首添加了地点状语There，在husband后面增加了同位语amanstaringather，其后还有一个分词短语wearinganexpressionofrelief做状语，补充说明丈夫看着她时流露出来的表情。这种形象具体的描写，增加了画面感，也提升了整个句子的层次。1.利用同位语扩充句子添加的状语，可以是副词、非谓语动词、介词短语和状语从句等。例2.(2016年10月浙江卷)Janewalkedon.简继续走。Janewalkedonforquitealongtime.简继续走了很长时间。Withnopathtofollow,Janewalkedonforquitealongtime.因为无路可走，简继续走了很长时间。【分析】添加forquitealongtime和withnopathtofollow两个做状语的介词短语后，句子表达更为生动具体了。2.利用状语扩充句子定语扩句的主要方式是使用形容词、非谓语动词、介词短语和定语从句等。例3.Hismotherworksinabigcompany.他母亲在一家大公司工作。Hislovingmother,whousedtobeanexcellentEnglishteacherinamiddleschool,nowworksinabigcompany.他的慈母，曾经是一名优秀的中学英语老师，现在在一家大公司工作。【分析】我们在主语mother前添加了形容词loving，更形象地说明了hismother的特征；在mother后面添加了whousedtobeanexcellentEnglishteacherinamiddleschool，内容更丰富，让读者更加了解母亲。3.利用定语扩充句子对先后发生的两个或多个连贯动作，可以采用递进式。主要方式有（1）用and连接；（2）用afterthat,additionally,furthermore,what’smore,tomakethingsworse等。例4.Macthenjumpedoffthebicycle.然后麦克从自行车上跳了下来。Macthenjumpedoffthebicycleandhewasreadytofightagainstthewolf.麦克从自行车上跳下来，准备跟狼搏斗。【分析】“跳下自行车”与“准备搏斗”两个连贯动作，让Mac准备跟狼搏斗的形象跃然纸上。4.递进式扩充句子表示转折的有but,however等。例5.Janekeptmoving.简继续往前走。Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.简继续往前走，但她走得越远，就越感到困惑。【分析】添加后面的转折分句后，暗示着“她可能迷路了”。5.转折式扩充句子除了引导原因状语从句和结果状语从句的连词后，还有dueto,owingto,onaccountof,becauseof,asaresultof等表示原因，therefore,asaresult等表示结果。例6.Hehasbrokenhisleg.他摔坏了腿。Hehasbrokenhislegandthereforehecan’twalk.他摔坏了腿，因此不能走路了。【分析】添加后面的因果分句后，暗示着“他不能走路了”。6.因果式扩充句子写作实践：

食物相关读后续写02阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Special#2,PleaseMyflightarrivedinSanDiegoaroundmidnight,andbythetimeIdrovehomeandgotintobeditwasnearly2:00a.m.Iwastiredandjet-laggedwhenIdraggedmyselfoutofthebed.Nevertheless,Ihadtobeupbrightandearlythatmorning:Iwastheopeningkeynoter（主旨发言人）atanationalconference.Inshort,Ineededtorecoverquickly.AheartybreakfastintheearlymorningsunwaswhatIneeded.IheadedforCarlos&Annie’s,apopularrestaurantlocatedintheheartoftheseasidetown.“I’dlikesteakandeggs,please,”IsaidtothewaitressafterIhadfinallyfoundatableintherestaurant.“Oh,I'msorry,”sheapologized.“We'reoutofSpecial#2.We'veservedthelastofoursteaks.HowaboutSpecial#14?”“Oh,nosteakandeggs?”Icouldn'tseemtoacceptit.I'mnotsureifitwasmyheartfeltsighthatcaughtCarlos,theowner'sattention.Hiswarm,caringbrowneyesseemeddeterminedtopinpointthebestsolution.Hethensaid,“Youknow,IthinkIdidseeonefinalsteakbackthere.”Pressingmyluck,Iquicklydeclared,“Wow,thatwouldbegreat.Butyouknow,I’mnotsureifIwantabreakfaststinkatall.WhatIreallywantisasteak—onethat’stwoinchesthick,tenderandjuicy,servedmediumrare.”“Nottoworry,”Carlosassuredmeandleft.Theyoungwaitressgavemeawink（眨眼）andsaidwithaknowingsmile,“CarlosisbeingCarlosagain!”Ididnotgiveherwordsmuchthought.Then,InoticedCarlosashelefttherestaurantthroughthesidedoorandwalkedintoaneighbourhoodgrocerystoreacrossthestreet.Carlosexchangedmorninggreetingswitheveryoneheknewandevenhelpedtheownerofthebookstorenextdoorbyholdingtheitemsthatfilledherarms.Thenhereenteredtherestaurantwithabaginhishand.典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Withinminutes,anexactSpecial#2wasinfrontofme.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:IwasabouttoleavewhenIlearnedCarloshadalreadysoldtherestaurant.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以时间为线索。讲述了作者希望通过一顿丰盛的早餐来恢复元气，却发现所想要的菜品已售罄。Carlos的做法不仅满足了作者的需求，还让作者体会到了人性中的善意和关怀，成为作者记忆中的一个温暖瞬间，强调了即使是小小的行为也能在他人心中留下深刻印象。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容whenInthemorningwhereIntherestaurantwhoI,waitressandCarlosWhatCarloswalkedintoaneighbourhoodrestaurantacrossthestreettobuysteaktomakeaheartybreakfastforme.WhyAheartybreakfastintheearlymorningsunwaswhatIneeded,butwhatIwantwassoldoutall.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节①由第一段首句“几分钟后，一模一样的Special#2出现在我面前。”可知，本段可以描述Carlos成功地为作者提供了他所期待的早餐，为作者带来了喜悦和惊喜。②由第二段首句“当我得知Carlos已经卖掉了餐厅时，我正要离开，这个消息让我的心一沉。”可知，本段可描述作者得知这个消息后开始反思生活中的变化和遇见的意义，以及每个瞬间的宝贵。2.续写线索：提供食物——去除阴霾——感悟——得知消息——了解缘由——发出感悟思路点拨注：根据技巧点拨，我们可以对部分句子实行扩写，如第一段中我们在描写作者吃早餐后的心情时，可以采用利用状语和状语来扩充句子：AsItookthefirstbite,Icouldn'thelpbutmarvelathowasimpleactofkindnesscouldprofoundlyalterone'soutlook；而在第二段结尾时则可以用从句来扩充句子："It'sthemomentsofgenuineconnectionthattrulyenrichourlives,"IreflectedasIwalkedaway,gratefulforthebriefbutmeaningfulinteractionthatwouldnowbetreasuredinmycollectionofmemories.思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点2022第三步：巧用话题词汇、句式完成句子1.IfCarloshadn'tsteppedin,__________________________________________________(我的一天可能会继续在失望的阴霾中度过).2.AsItookthefirstbite,_____________________________________________________________________(我不禁感叹一个简单的善举竟能深刻地改变一个人的人生观).3."_________________________________________________,(在一个常常充满匆忙和冷漠的世界里，这样的举动显得格外引人注目)"Ithoughttomyself,savoringnotjustthemealbut___________________________(感受到随之而来的温暖和关怀).完成句子mydaymighthavecontinuedinahazeofdisappointmentIcouldn’thelpbutmarvelathowasimpleactofkindnesscouldprofoundlyalterone’soutlookInaworldoftenfilledwithhasteandindifference,gestureslikethesestandoutthewarmthandcarethatcamewithit4.____________________________________________(如果我知道这将是我在这个熟悉的环境中最后一次相遇),perhapsIwouldhavelingeredabitlonger,soakingineverydetail.5.Thisunexpectedchangeservedasapoignantreminder_________________________________________________________________________________(除了我们珍爱的记忆和我们对彼此的影响，生活中没有什么是永恒的).6."It'sthemomentsofgenuineconnectionthattrulyenrichourlives,"IreflectedasIwalkedaway,gratefulforthebriefbutmeaningfulinteraction_________________________________________________(它现在将被珍藏在我的记忆中).完成句子HadIknownthiswouldbemylastencounterinthisfamiliarsettingthatnothinginlifeispermanent,exceptthememoriesweholddearandtheimpactwehaveoneachotherthatwouldnowbetreasuredinmycollectionofmemoriesWithinminutes,anexactSpecial#2wasinfrontofme.ThesteakwascookedjustasIhadrequested,tenderandjuicy,medium-rare(衔接句).IfCarloshadn'tsteppedin,mydaymighthavecontinuedinahazeofdisappointment(if虚拟条件句+心理描写).AsItookthefirstbite,Icouldn'thelpbutmarvelathowasimpleactofkindnesscouldprofoundlyalterone'soutlook(心理感受)."Inaworldoftenfilledwithhasteandindifference,gestureslikethesestandout,"Ithoughttomyself,savoringnotjustthemealbutthewarmthandcarethatcamewithit(无灵主语+心理描写+衔接句).IwasabouttoleavewhenIlearnedCarloshadalreadysoldtherestaurant.Thenewsmademyheartsink(衔接句+心理描写).HadIknownthiswouldbemylastencounterinthisfamiliarsetting,perhapsIwouldhavelingeredabitlonger,soakingineverydetail(倒装句+动作描写).Thisunexpectedchangeservedasapoignantreminderthatnothinginlifeispermanent,exceptthememoriesweholddearandtheimpactwehaveoneachother(心里感悟).“It'sthemomentsofgenuineconnectionthattrulyenrichourlives,”IreflectedasIwalkedaway,gratefulforthebriefbutmeaningfulinteractionthatwouldnowbetreasuredinmycollectionofmemories(神态描写+心理描写+主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

TomatoChangedMyLifeDoingthings-withoutbeingplannedwasnevermystrength.Asa14-year-old,IwouldrefusetogoforwalksaroundtheblockwithmyfriendsifIwastheleastbitbehindinmyschoolwork.Unlikemostteenagers,Ilivednotinmyroom,butinanunusedkitchenupstairswhereIspreadmybooksandpapersonalargeroundtable.Ispentconsiderabletimethere,workingcontinuouslyforhours,andmymotherworried.Shewouldtrytolure(引诱)meaway.“Comeandwatchtheparade!”shewouldcallfromdownstairs.“Allneighboursareoutthere!”Shethoughtofallkindsoftricks-theswimmingpool,icecream,straycatsandturtles-toremovemefrommy-studies,butnothingeverworked.Later,incollege,thepatterncontinued.Thelibraryandmycollegedormreplacedtheunusedkitchenathome.WhenspringcamealongfriendswouldstopbymydormorpeerintomylibraryroomtopersuademetoplayFrisbeeonthelawn.“No,Iwouldalmostalwayssay.”Ihavetoomuchtodo.Mycollegestudydaysweregone,butnotmyneedandloveforschedules.Myfriendsandsisterstriedtokeepmeawayfrommyplans,buttheywerehardlyeversuccessful.Thissummer,though,whilehousesittingformyparents,Iwaspersuadedtochangemyplansinthemostunexpectedway.Thesightoftomatoesgrowinginmymother’sgardenluredmeoutofmytightlyscheduledworld.Theydrewmewiththepowerofalover’sgaze.Hundredsofthemwereturningripeandredbytheminute,decoratingthegardenlikedecorationsonaChristmastree.“IfIhavetime,I’llmaketomatosauce(番茄酱).”Itoldmyself.Butmylongweekinthehousebymyselfwasalreadyfilledwiththingstodo:writing,andfinishingaprojectthatIbroughthomefromtheoffice.Then,watchingthefascinatingtomatoescontinuouslyfallingtothegroundinever-greaternumbers,againImentallyarguedaboutallthethingsIhadplannedandneededtodo.实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Finally,Igavein.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para2:Amonthlater,myparentscameback.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________实战演练注：【思路点拨】见书P120页。Finally,Igavein.