Unit3SeaExploration话题写作之读后续写写作课件高中英语人教版选择性

Unit3SEAEXPLORATION人教版2019选择性必修第四册读后续写读话题写作文高二下

LearningobjectivesAttheendofclass,youwillbeableto：1.指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；2.指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；3.指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。123活用课文

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跟着课文学词汇011.Seeingaflockofstrange⁃lookingbirdsflyingby,she_________________________andfear.看到一群奇形怪状的鸟飞过，她感到既兴奋又害怕。(mixture)(读后续写情感描写)2.Ifweareblindtoourownfaults,wewillnot__________________others.如果我们对自己的缺点视而不见，我们对别人就不会很仁慈。(mercy)(读后续写主旨升华)3.Wheneveryouremotionisoutofcontrol,justkeepinmindthatonlyby__________________________canyouachievesuccess.无论何时你情绪失控时，牢记一点：只有有良好的心态你才能成功。(possession)(读后续写主旨升华)活用写作词汇feltamixtureofexcitementbeverymercifultopossessingagoodstateofmind4.Whenwereacheddeepintotheforestwelostourwayandsuddenlythesmogspreadeverywhereandwewerenotabletoseeeachotherclearly.We____________________________.当我们走到森林深处时，我们迷了路，突然烟雾到处蔓延，我们无法看清彼此了。我们拼命想找到出路。(makeone’sway)(读后续写逃生)5.Iavoidedlookingdowntopreventanysuddenpanic,andwithinafewminutesI____________________________.为了防止任何突然的恐慌，我避免往山下看。几分钟后，我爬到了山顶，自豪地笑了。(make)(读后续写情感细节描写)6.

Whydon'tthepeople_______________________himandsolvethisissueonceandforall？这些人为什么不直接与他进行协商，一劳永逸地解决这个问题？(negotiate)活用写作词汇weredesperatetofindourwayoutmadeittothepeakandproudlysmilednegotiatedirectlywith活用课文：

跟着课文学佳句01细节描写1.你无需如此担忧和紧张，有必要查阅一些关于中国传统文化的书籍。________________________besoworriedandnervous,andit’snecessaryforyoutoconsultsomebooksconcerningthetraditionalChineseculture.2.如果你有一份工作，一定要全身心地投入，最终你会成功的。Ifyouhaveajob,_________________________andfinallyyou'llsucceed.原：Fromascientificpointofview,thereisanurgentneedtostudytheArcticinordertounderstandclimatechangeanditseffects.从科学的角度来看，迫切需要对北极进行研究，以便了解气候变化及其影响。原：Actually,peopleinancienttimesdidbelievesealsandhumanbeingswerethesame.事实上，古代人确实相信海豹和人类是一样的。There’s

noneedforyoutododevoteyourselftoit细节描写3.(2022全国甲改编)这分歧如此尖锐，以至于他和我都不知道如何解决它。Thedisagreement_______________neitherhenorIknewhowtosettleit.4.尽管大卫累得满头大汗，他来到我身边拥抱我，脸上带着他惯常的笑，露出满口牙齿。(2022·新高考Ⅰ卷读后续写动作+神态描写)___________________________,hecametomeforahug,wearinghisusualbigtoothysmile.原：Thesonlovedhisparentssomuchthathepromisednottoswim.儿子非常爱他的父母，他答应不游泳。原:Hopefully,astechnologyimproves,wemayhavemoreoptionsformanagingthisbalance.希望随着技术的进步，我们可以有更多的选择来管理这种平衡。wassosharpthatTiredandsweatyasDavidwas活用课文：

跟着课文学细节01描写类型描写典例动作描写However，merchantsandexplorersfromtheEastsetsailfromeasttowestmanyyearsbeforeColumbusfirstdid.然而，在哥伦布首次出海之前的很多年，来自东方的商人和探险家就从东向西扬帆远航。场景描写Hundredsofyearson，andwiththelatesttechnologyinhand，theneedtotradeandthedesiretoenhancerelationshipswilldriveChinatoreachoutacrosstheseafarintothefuture.数百年过去了，随着最新技术的掌握，贸易的需要和加强关系的愿望将推动中国跨越海洋走向遥远的未来。技法点拨：

心理描写02⑴直接表达心理想法①"Shethoughttoherself,'AmIdoingtherightthing?MaybeIshouldhavelistenedtohisadvice.'"“她对自己说，‘我做的对吗？也许我应该听他的建议。’”（思考与自问）【评析】这句话展示了角色在做出决策时的犹豫和不确定性，使读者能够深入了解角色的心理状态。②"Hewonderedifhecouldeverovercomethisdifficulty.Lifeseemedsotoughatthemoment."他不知道自己是否能克服这个困难。当时的生活似乎很艰难。”（表达疑惑）【评析】这句话通过表达角色的疑惑，展现了他在面对困难时的心理挣扎，增加了故事的情感深度。③Shehopedwithallherheartthathermotherwouldrecoversoon.Thewaitingwasalmostunbearable."“她衷心希望母亲早日康复。等待几乎让人无法忍受。”（表达希望）【评析】这句话描绘了角色对亲人康复的强烈渴望，以及等待过程中的焦虑和不安。1.心理描写技巧⑵通过情感词汇体现心理状态①"Feelingextremelyanxious,hepacedbackandforthinthewaitingroom."他感到极度焦虑，在候诊室里来回踱步。（表达焦虑）【评析】这句话通过描述角色的焦虑行为，传达了其内心的紧张和不安，使读者能够感同身受。②"Themomentshereceivedtheaward,shewassoexcitedthathereyessparkledwithjoy."“当她获奖的那一刻，她非常激动，眼里闪烁着喜悦的光芒。”（表达兴奋）【评析】这句话通过描绘角色获奖时的兴奋反应，展现了其内心的激动和喜悦。③"Afterdaysoffailure,hewasdeeplydepressed,sittingaloneinthedarkcorner."经过几天的失败，他非常沮丧，独自坐在黑暗的角落里。（表达抑郁）【评析】这句话通过描述角色失败后的抑郁状态，传达了其内心的绝望和孤独。1.心理描写技巧⑶借助身体反应描写心理①"Hisheartwaspoundingwildlyasifitwouldjumpoutofhischest.Heknewthiswashislastchance."他的心狂跳着，好像要跳出胸腔似的。他知道这是他最后的机会了。”（表示心跳和紧张）【评析】这句话通过描述角色的心跳，传达了其在关键时刻的紧张和紧迫感。2."Shetookadeepbreathtocalmherselfdown,butherhandswerestillsweatingnervously."她深吸了一口气让自己平静下来，但她的手仍然紧张地出汗。（表示呼吸与焦虑）【评析】这句话通过描绘角色的呼吸和出汗，展现了其内心的焦虑和紧张。1.心理描写技巧⑷利用修辞手法描绘心理①"Feargrippedherlikeacoldhand,squeezingherhearttightly."恐惧像一只冰冷的手紧紧抓住她，紧紧地挤压着她的心。（惊恐的比喻）【评析】这句话通过比喻，将恐惧描绘成一只冰冷的手，形象地传达了角色内心的恐惧和压迫感。②"Doubtwasalittledevilsittingonhisshoulder,whisperingnegativethoughtsintohisear."“怀疑是一个坐在他肩膀上的小恶魔，在他耳边低声说着消极的想法。”（拟人描绘怀疑）【评析】这句话通过拟人，将怀疑描绘成一个恶魔，生动地展现了角色内心的挣扎和矛盾。1.心理描写技巧1.既高兴又兴奋，大卫在越过终点线后立刻向我挥手，表达他的快乐和感激。(adj.短语作状语，doing伴随状语)________________，David_________________________________________afterhecrossedthefinishline,____________________________.2.地震过后，她发现全家人都安然无恙，这使她大为宽慰。(介词短语，固定搭配)____________________________________________________________________________.3.我被他的善良深深打动了，热泪盈眶，以至于我一句话也说不出来。（倒装句，独立主格结构）____________________________________________________________________________.4.“小仙女们，迈克!”她把额头贴在窗户上，惊讶地叫道，“到处都是!”（介词短语，伴随状语）___________________________________________________________________________.5.我们的眼睛里闪烁着喜悦和兴奋的光芒，惊叹于大自然的奇观之美，感觉自己仿佛走进了梅格心爱的童话书的一页。（独立主格，虚拟语气）__________________________________________________________________________.举一反三DelightedandexcitedTohergreatrelief,shefoundallherfamilyweresafeandsoundaftertheearthquakeSodeeplymovedbyhiskindnesswasIthatIcouldn’tutterasingleword,tearswellingupin/blurring/mistingmyeyes“Tinyfairies,Mike!”sheyelledinsurprise,pressingherforeheadagainstthewindow,“Everywhere!”Eyesbeaming/twinkling/sparkling/shining/glistening/glimmering/glitteringwithdelightandexcitement,wemarveledatthebeautyofnature'sspectacle,feelingasifwehadsteppedintoapageofMeg'sbelovedfairybookDavidwavedatmeafterhecrossedthefinishlineconveyinghishappinessandgratitude6.梅格摇了摇头，她的脸写满了恐惧/脸上满是恐惧。(with结构或独立主格结构）____________________________________________________________________.7.看到北京熙熙攘攘的街道和灿烂的中国文化，他觉得他的紧张和恐惧被快乐和兴奋所取代。(伴随状语，givewayto）____________________________________________________________________________.

8.我深情地地抚摸着她的头，松了一口气。（伴随状语）__________________________________________________________________________.9.一种成就感油然而生，不仅因为我成功地哄妹妹入睡，还因为我帮助她克服了对黑暗的恐惧。(无灵主语，notonly,butalso并列）___________________________________________________________________________________________________________.10.最让他深刻的是友好的中国学生对他坚定不移的支持和帮助。（doing形式做伴随状语）______________________________________________________________________________________.举一反三Megshookherhead,withfearwrittenalloverherface/herfacefulloffear/terror/fright/panicSeeingthehustlingstreetsofBeijingandthebrillianceofChineseculture,hefelthistensionandfeargavewaytohappinessandexcitementStrokingherheadaffectionately,IbreathedasighofreliefAsenseofachievementroseup,notonlyformysuccessinlullingmylittlesistertosleep,butalsoforhelpingherovercomeherfearofdarknessWhatimpressedhimmostwastheunwaveringsupportandhelp/assistancefromthefriendlyChinesestudents写作实践：

触类旁通03阅读下面材料，根据其内容ImettheManoftheTreesinsummertenyearsago,whenIwasvisitingUncleJita.Thoseweredifficulttimes.Peoplewerecuttingdownourforest,andtherewasoftenflooding.Sometimesourwatersupplywasdirty.Whenourpump(水泵)didhavecleanwater,wehadtowaitinlineforages.Whenthepumpwasn’tworking,wehadtowalkfivekilometrestothecloseststream.ButIwashappy.Iwasgoingtoseemyfavoriteuncle.Whenthedayfinallyarrived,DaddrovemetoUncleJita’shouseandleft.Oncehesawme,UncleJitaannounced,“Tomorrowwe’regoingtoexploreamagicalplace.Hereismycamera,Amy.Youcantakephotosofwhatyousee.”Thefollowingday,wewokeupandleftearlyonaboat.Thetripwasexciting.Butwhenwegotoff,therewas...nothinginfrontofus.“Idon’twanttotakepicturesofthis,”Icomplained.Unclelaughed,“Startwalking,Amy.Ipromiseyou’llbesurprised.”Aftersometime,Icouldseetheoutlineofaforestinthedistance.Alittlecloser,therewasamanwavingtous.“That’sKabir.Theforestyouseeishis.Heplantedeverysingletree.”AswewalkedtowardsKabir,Uncleexplainedthatthirtyyearsago,thewholeareawasawasteland.ButonedayKabirdecidedtochangeallthatandstartedplantingtrees.Thankstohim,partofthewastelandisnowaparadise(天堂).UncleintroducedmetoKabir,whohadgrayhairandadeterminedface.“Jitatoldmeyoulikeanimals.Areyoureadytoseesome?”heasked.“Ofcourse!”Ireplied.Wecontinuedwalkingandsoonwereunderthetrees.Iturnedmyheadandwasamazedatthedifferencebetweenthetwoplaces.Allbecauseoftheeffortsofoneman.LikeUnclesaid,Kabir’sforestwasmagical.Wesawdeer,rhinos,andeventigers.Duringlunchtime,Kabirexplainedhow,byplantingtrees,itwaspossibletostopthelandfromeroding(侵蚀).典例赏析注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:Hearingthis,Iturnedtomyuncle,“Ithinkwecanplanttreestoo”.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Intheyearsthatfollowed,peopleinourvillageworkedhardtocarryoutourplan.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________22第一步：读透文本1.主题分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了十年前，吉塔叔叔带作者去探索一个神奇的地方。那里在30年前是一片荒地，卡比尔决定改变这一切，开始植树，最终变成了森林，并且带来生态环境改变的故事。2.情节梳理：故事要素即故事的人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，也就是我们常说的“5W1H”。要

素内容wheninsummertenyearsagowhereAtUncleJita’;onthemagicalplacewhoI；theManoftheTrees；UncleJitaWhatTheyaregoingtoexploreamagicalplaceWhyPeoplewerecuttingdownourforest,andtherewasoftenflooding.Sometimesourwatersupplywasdirty.Whenourpump(水泵)didhavecleanwater,wehadtowaitinlineforages.How?22第二步：构建情节1.构思续写两段情节

①由第一段首句内容“听了这话，我转向叔叔说：“我想我们也可以种树。’”可知，第一段可描写作者通过宣传森林让更多人参与种树。

②由第二段首句内容“在接下来的几年里，我们村里的人努力工作来实施我们的计划。”可知，第二段可描写植树给村庄带来的变化。2.续写线索：想到计划——分享计划——接受计划——实施计划——环境改变思路点拨点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点27

Hearingthis,Iturnedtomyuncle,“Ithinkwecanplanttreestoo.”Grabbingthecamerainmyhand,Iaddedwithexcitement(衔接句+动作描写).“I’vegotaplan!I’llshowthemthephotosofKabir’smagicalforest!”SeeingUncleandKabir’sencouragingsmile,Iimmediatelysetdowntomywork,busilypressingmyshutterandcapturingtheamazingscenesintheforest(动作面描写).WhenUncleandIwentbacktothevillageseveraldayslaterandshowedthesewonderfulpicturestomyneighbour,theywerestunnedbythebeautyoftheforest(场景描写).“Itwasthetreesthatturnedtheplaceintoaparadise!”Wethenexplainedourtree-plantingplantothevillagers,whichwasquicklyacceptedbyallofthem(衔接句+动作描写).Intheyearsthatfollowed,peopleinourvillageworkedhardtocarryoutourplan.Insteadofcuttingdownourforest,westartedtoplanttrees,whichhaseventuallyhelpedprotectthesoilandstoppedthelandfromeroding(衔接句+状语+场景描写).Thankstothetrees,thewaterhasbeenpurifiedandwefinallyhavecleanandstablewatersupply(动作描写).Withourjointefforts,ourvillageisnowsurroundedbysmallthrivingforestswithbloomingflowers,livelyanimalsandcrystal-clearstreamsrunningthrough(场景描写).Witnessingthegradualchangeofourvillage,wecametorealizethatonlywhenweliveinharmonywithnaturecanwehaveabrighterfuture(主题升华).佳作展现Attheendofthelesson,Iamableto：12345planthelayoutofthestory(theplotisnatural,andthenarrativeisgood)useappropriatewordsandsentencestoexpresswhatIwanttowriteancontinuationwritingproperly.自我评价阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Undoubtedly,MotherNatureisalwaysattractivetokids.Inourchildhood,howoftendidweturnadeafeartoourparents’advice?Veryoften!Thus,welandedourselvesinasituationwherewegreatlyregrettedouractofnothavinglistenedtotheadviceofthewise.SuchanunforgettableexperienceIhadattheageof7gavemeaninvaluablelesson,afterwhichIdeeplyunderstoodwhymygentlemotherwasrepeatingtheboringsuggestionsandIwouldtrytotakehersuggestionsseriously.Inmychildhood,Iwassocrazyaboutnaturethatevenplayingamongthecolorfulflowersinourgardencouldmakemyday.Ourhousewasnexttothewoodswhichhadalwaysstirredup(激起)greatcuriosityinmeinwantingtofindoutwhatwaswithin.EverytimeIsawfascinatingbutterfliesdancingfromthewoods,mycuriositygrew.Butmymotherdidn’tlikemewanderingoffonmyownandalwaysensuredthatIwaswithinhersight.Evenifsheallowedmetoexplorethesurroundingareaonmyown,itwasonlytobesomewherenearthehouse.Beingascuriousasthecat,Ialwaysdesiredtoexplorethewoods.Itseemedasifmymotherhadunderstoodmydesire,soshehadwarmedmeonlotsofoccasionsnevertoenterthewoodsalone.“Mom,canIgooutandplayinthegarden?”Iasked.“Sure,”shewouldreplyeachtime.“Kate,youcanplayinthegardenbutyoumustpromisemeonething—onlywhenI’mwithyoucanyougointothewoods.Therearenocasesofanimalattacksonhumans,butit’sstilldangerousforalittlekidlikeyou.It’stooeasytogetlostinthewoods.”“Sure,you’vesaidthatmanytimes!”Iansweredwithoutpatienceatherrepeatedreminders.实战演练注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置