温州二模读后续写thewindphone

读后续写EverymorningMariovisitedhisneighbor,Mr.Harper.Togethertheysatattheedgeofhisgardenonthehill,lookingdownattheport.TheymadeagameofspottingMario’sdadasheunloadedthemorningcatch,andMr.Harper’sdaughter,Fiona,asshecleanedthefishoneafteranother.“Iseethem!”Mariowouldsay.Mr.Harperwouldlaugh.“Youwinagain,Mario.”Itwastheirfavoritegame.Mario’sdadlovedtheocean.He’dsay,“Listen,Mario,theocean’ssayinggoodmorning.”Thelappingwaveswouldwhisper:O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.Marioalwaysreturnedthegreeting,“Goodmorning,ocean.”Butonthedaythebigwavecame,theoceandidn’twhisper.Itroared(咆哮).Abig,wateryhandsweptintotheport,grabbingeverything—andeveryone—initsgrasp.Everyonelostsomeonethatday.IttookMario’sdad,Fiona,anditeventookMario’svoice.Silencehungoverthevillagelikeadark,heavycloud.Springcame.Hereandtherestoodpeach-treesthatbrokeintodelicateflowersofpink.Oneday:Tap-tap-tap.Bang-bang-bang.Mariowatchedfromhiswindow.Mr.Harperwasbuildingsomethinginhisgarden.Butwhat?Itwasaphonebooth(电话亭),paintedwhiteandwithmanypanes(窗格)ofglass.Mr.Harperwentinsideandhisvoicefloatedout.“Fiona?It’syourfather.Imissyou.”Mariowasconfused.Fionahadbeengrabbedbytheocean,justlikeMario’sdad.WhenMr.Harperleft,Mariocreptinside.Anold-fashionedphonesatonatable.Noplugs,nowires.Itwasaphoneconnectedtonowhere.Mr.Harpervisitedhisphonebootheveryday.Soonothervillagersdidtoo.Theyliftedthereceivertotheirearsandtheirvoicesfloatedonthewind.“Hello,cousin.TodayIfixedtheboat.I’llfishagainsoon.”“Sister,how’reyou?Irodeyourbiketoday.Itfitsmenow.”Forthefirsttimesincethebigwavecame,Mariowantedtousehisvoice.Hewentdowntotheportandscreamedattheocean.“Bringourpeopleback!”Still,thewaveslappedgently.O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.Mariosighedandlookedup.注意：(1)续写词数应为150左右；(2)请按如下格式在答题卷的相应位置作答。Para1:Mr.Harper’sphoneboothsathighonthehilllikealighthouse.Para2:AsMariosteppedout,hespottedMr.Harperdownattheport.Step1：Readingforplotofthegivenpart!Mario每天和邻居Harper先生在山坡眺望港口亲人，玩寻找亲人的温馨游戏；MarioandhisneighborMr.Harperplayedawarmgameofspottingtheirfamilymembersbytheporteveryday.

Theplotofgiventext海啸突然来袭，夺走Mario的爸爸、Harper的女儿Fiona，Mario因悲伤失声；AterribletsunamitookawayMario’sdad,Mr.Harper’sdaughterFiona,andMario’svoice.春天，Harper在花园搭建一座无电线、无信号的白色电话亭，用来思念逝去的亲人；Inspring,Mr.Harperbuiltawhite,unpluggedphoneboothinhisgardentomisshislostdaughter.村民们陆续来到电话亭倾诉思念，Mario深受触动，终于重新开口呐喊。Villicianscametotalktotheirlovedonesthroughthewindphone.Inspired,Mariofinallyspokeoutagain.Step2：Writedowngeneralplotofthenexttwoparagraphs.Mario每天和邻居Harper先生在山坡眺望港口亲人，玩寻找亲人的温馨游戏；海啸突然来袭，夺走Mario的爸爸、Harper的女儿Fiona，Mario因悲伤失声；春天，Harper在花园搭建一座无电线、无信号的白色电话亭，用来思念逝去的亲人；村民们陆续来到电话亭倾诉思念，Mario深受触动，终于重新开口呐喊。Para1:Mr.Harper’sphoneboothsathighonthehilllikealighthouse.Para2:AsMariosteppedout,hespottedMr.Harperdownattheport.Forthefirsttimesincethebigwavecame,Mariowantedtousehisvoice.Hewentdowntotheportandscreamedattheocean.“Bringourpeopleback!”Still,thewaveslappedgently.O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.Mariosighedandlookedup.Mario走向电话亭→推门→拿起听筒→终于开口→对爸爸倾诉思念与痛苦Mario走出电话亭→遇见Harper先生→两人相互理解→跳望大海与电话亭→点明主题（思念无碍，心灵相通）。段落主要内容回扣原文细节情感基调第一段Mario走向电话亭→推门→拿起听筒→终于开口→对爸爸倾诉思念与痛苦第二段Mario走出电话亭→遇见Harper先生→两人相互理解→跳望大海与电话亭→点明主题（思念无碍，心灵相通）。Step3：Identifyforeshadowingandanalyzethedevelopmentofemotions段落主要内容回扣原文细节情感基调第一段Mario走向电话亭→推门→拿起听筒→终于开口→对爸爸倾诉思念与痛苦从犹豫到勇敢、从悲伤到释怀第二段Mario走出电话亭→遇见Harper先生→两人相互理解→跳望大海与电话亭→点明主题（思念无碍，心灵相通）。温暖、治愈、充满希望段落主要内容回扣原文细节情感基调第一段Mario走向电话亭→推门→拿起听筒→终于开口→对爸爸倾诉思念与痛苦①

Forthefirsttimesincethebigwavecame,Mariowantedtousehisvoice.

→呼应Mario内心渴望表达的觉醒。

②

Noplugs,nowires.Itwasaphoneconnectedtonowhere.

→电话虽无线路，却能连接心灵。

③

Mariosighedandlookedup.

→象征Mario从压抑转向释怀与希望。④Mr.Harperwentinsideandhisvoicefloatedout.“Fiona?It’syourfather.Imissyou.”......Theyliftedthereceivertotheirearsandtheirvoicesfloatedonthewind.“Hello,cousin.TodayIfixedtheboat.I’llfishagainsoon.”“Sister,how’reyou?Irodeyourbiketoday.Itfitsmenow.”→可参考来写Mario跟爸爸倾诉的内容。(Handstrembling/Heartracingwildly,hepickedupthereceiver/liftedthereceivertohisear,butatalosswhattosay.Afterwhatseemedlikeacentury,Mario'shoarsevoicefloatedonthewind,"Dad?It'sme,Mario.")⑤......andtheirvoicesfloatedonthewind.→可以用在与爸爸倾诉的过程中。从犹豫到勇敢、从悲伤到释怀第二段Mario走出电话亭→遇见Harper先生→两人相互理解→跳望大海与电话亭→点明主题（思念无碍，心灵相通）。①

Thelappingwaveswouldwhisper:O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning....Still,thewaveslappedgently.O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.

→可以把它写成“就像来自亲人的问候”,作铺垫来引出主人公的释怀。（Sidebyside,theystoodinsilence,listeningtothewaveslappinggently:O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.likegreetingsfromtheirlostfamilies.）

②

Marioalwaysreturnedthegreeting,“Goodmorning,ocean.”

→呼应Mario重新拥有了声音和与自然对话的能力。

③

Silencehungoverthevillagelikeadark,heavycloud.

→对比现在沉默散去，阳光重现。温暖、治愈、充满希望Step4：Writeoutthespecificplotdetails(Character+Actions(Words/Deeds)/InnerThoughts/Emotions)&Environment/Time&Space)Forthefirsttimesincethebigwavecame,Mariowantedtousehisvoice.Hewentdowntotheportandscreamedattheocean.“Bringourpeopleback!”Still,thewaveslappedgently.O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.Mariosighedandlookedup.Para1:Mr.Harper’sphoneboothsathighonthehilllikealighthouse.马里奥想起村民们在电话亭里，对着话筒向逝去的亲人诉说思念的模样。他望向电话亭的玻璃窗，恍惚间好似看到了那台泛着旧时光晕的老式电话机。一股难以抑制的思念猛地涌上心头，他也想拨通电话，和父亲好好说说话。②马里奥快步冲向电话亭，一把拉开门，抄起听筒贴在耳侧。可千言万语堵在喉咙里，竟不知道该如何开口。阳光穿过桃花枝桠，碎金般的光斑落在桌面，投下一片温柔的阴影。沉默良久，他学着哈珀先生的语气，轻声开口：“爸爸，是我，马里奥。我想你了。”③他的声音随着风飘荡着，思念的洪流再也无法抑制，倾泻而出。他将这些日子里所有的彷徨与无助，一股脑地倾诉出来，泪水不知不觉爬满了双颊。④不知过了多久，心中的郁结终于烟消云散。马里奥轻轻挂上听筒。⑤推开电话亭的门，阳光立刻拥住了他，暖洋洋的，仿佛连未来的生活，也重新有了光亮与盼头。Step5：Translation&LanguageEnhancement（Para1）马里奥想起村民们在电话亭里，对着话筒向逝去的亲人诉说思念的模样。他望向电话亭的玻璃窗，恍惚间好似看到了那台泛着旧时光晕的老式电话机。一股难以抑制的思念猛地涌上心头，他也想拨通电话，和父亲好好说说话。【基础版】Mariothoughtofthevillagersinthephonebooth,speakingintothereceivertoexpresstheirloveandgrieffortheirlostlovedones.Helookedthroughtheglasspanesoftheboothandvaguelysawtheold-fashionedtelephoneglowingwithafaintvintagelight.Asurgeofoverwhelminglongingwelledupinhisheart,andhetoowantedtopickupthephoneandtalktohisfather.【升级版】Thinkingofthevillagersinthephoneboothspeakingintothereceivertoexpresstheirloveandgrieffortheirlostlovedones,Mariolookedthroughtheglasspanesasifvaguelyseeingtheold-fashionedtelephoneglowingwithafaintvintagelight.Withasurgeofoverwhelminglongingwellingup

inhisheart,hetoowantedtopickupthephoneandtalktohisfather.Step5：Translation&LanguageEnhancement②马里奥快步冲向电话亭，一把拉开门，抄起听筒贴在耳侧。可千言万语堵在喉咙里，竟不知道该如何开口。阳光穿过桃花枝桠，碎金般的光斑落在桌面，投下一片温柔的阴影。沉默良久，他学着哈珀先生的语气，轻声开口：“爸爸，是我，马里奥。我想你了。”【基础版】Mariorushedquicklytowardsthephonebooth,pulledthedooropensharply,grabbedthereceiverandpressedittohisear.Yetathousandwordsseemedtobestuckinhisthroat,andhesimplydidnotknowhowtostart.Sunlightfilteredthroughthepeachblossombranches,castinggoldenspotsonthetableandasoftshadowoverit.Afteralongsilence,heimitatedMr.Harper’stoneandwhisperedgently,“Dad?

it’sme,Mario.Imissyou.”Step5：Translation&LanguageEnhancement③他的声音随着风飘荡着，思念的洪流再也无法抑制，倾泻而出。他将这些日子里所有的彷徨与无助，一股脑地倾诉出来，泪水不知不觉爬满了双颊。【基础版】Hisvoicefloatedonthewind,andthefloodoflongingburstforthuncontrollably.

Hepouredoutallhishesitationandhelplessnessfromthesedays,andtearsquietlystreameddownhischeeks.【升级版】Onthewind

floatedhisvoice,andthe

overwhelming/uncontrollabletideoflongingsurged

withinhim

ashepouredoutallhishesitationandhelplessnessfromthesedays,tearsquietlystreamingdown

hischeeks.Step5：Translation&LanguageEnhancement④不知过了多久，心中的郁结终于烟消云散。马里奥轻轻挂上听筒。【基础版】Afterwhatseemedlikeages,theknotinhisheartfinallylifted.Mariogentlyhungupthereceiver.⑤推开电话亭的门，阳光立刻拥住了他，暖洋洋的，仿佛连未来的生活，也重新有了光亮与盼头。【基础版】Pushingopenthedoor,hewasimmediatelywrappedinwarmsunshine,asifhisfuturelifehadonceagainbeenfilledwithlightandhope.【升级版】Pushingopenthedoor,hewasinstantlyenveloped

inwarmsunshine.Itfeltasifhisfuture,too,hadbeenlitupagain,brightwithhopeandpromise.Step5：Translation&LanguageEnhancement（Para2）Mr.Harper’sphoneboothsathighonthehilllikealighthouse.Thinkingofthevillagersinthephoneboothspeakingintothereceivertoexpresstheirloveandgrieffortheirlostlovedones,Mariolookedthroughtheglasspanesasifvaguelyseeingtheold-fashionedtelephoneglowingwithafaintvintagelight.Withasurgeofoverwhelminglongingwellingup

inhisheart,hetoowantedtopickupthephoneandtalktohisfather.

Sohe

rushedquicklytowardsthephonebooth,pulledthedooropensharply,grabbedthereceiverandpressedittohisear.Yetathousandwordsseemedtobestuckinhisthroat,andhesimplydidnotknowhowtostart.Sunlightfilteredthroughthepeachblossombranches,castinggoldenspotsonthetableandasoftshadowoverit.Afteralongsilence,heimitatedMr.Harper’stoneandwhisperedgently,“Dad?

it’sme,Mario.Imissyou.”Onthewind

floatedhisvoice,andtheuncontrollabletideoflongingsurgedwithinhim

ashepouredoutallhishesitationandhelplessnessfromthesedays,tearsquietlystreamingdown

hischeeks.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,theknotinhisheartfinallylifted.Mariogentlyhungupthereceiver.Then,pushingopenthedoor,hewasinstantlyenveloped

inwarmsunshine.Itfeltasifhisfuture,too,hadbeenlitupagain,brightwithhopeandpromise.pleasewriteyourpara2It’syourturn!Step5：Translation&LanguageEnhancement（Mergeintoapassage）AsMariosteppedout,hespottedMr.Harperdownattheport.

He

walkedslowlyovertoMr.Harperandstoodbesidehim.Neitherofthemspokeaword.Theyjuststoodquietly,listeningtothewavescrashingagainsttheshoreagainandagain.Itseemedthe

lappingwaveswere

whisperingagain:

O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.

Rememberingwhathisfatherhadoncetoldhim,Mariocouldnothelpbutraisehisvoiceandcalloutloudly,“Goodmorning!”Mr.Harperturnedsharplytowardhim,hiseyeslightingupwithjoy.“Dearboy,yourvoicehascomeback!That’swonderful!”“Yes,Mr.Harper.Thankyousomuch.I’vebeentoyourphoneboothandtalkedagreatdealwithDadthere.Ifirmlybelievehemusthaveheardme,forthewindwillcarrymylongingstraighttohim.Listen—thesoundofthewavesmustbehisreplytome.”Mr.HarpergentlyputanarmaroundMario’sshoulderanddrewhimintoawarmhug,murmuringsoftly,“Yes,theycansurelyhearus.Aslongaswerememberthem,theywillliveforeverinourhearts.”HiswordsseemedmeantforMario,yetalsoforhimself,andevenforthewindbesidethemandtheseabeforethem.PossibleversionMr.Harper'sphoneboothsathighonthehilllikealighthouse.BeforeMariorealizedit,hisfeethadalreadycarriedhimuphill.Themomenthere