thewindphone温州二模读后续写课件高三英语三轮复习专项

TheWindPhone

Contents01.ProblemsinOurWriting02.ReviewtheStory03.Polish

Your

Writing04.PresentationProblemsexistinginthewritingWedidn’tfullyunderstandthemainideaorthethemeofthepassage.

Wedidn’twriteaboutMario’senteringthephoneboothinParagraph1.

WewrotetoomuchaboutMr.Harperinparagraph1Thereweremanygrammaticalmistakes.

ThewritingwastooshortandunfinishedTheStoryBackgroundAPeacefulBeginningMarioandhis_______________,Mr.Harper,sharedasimple,joyfulroutine.Everymorning,theywouldwatchtheport,playingagametospotMario'sfatherandMr.Harper'sdaughter,________,whoworkedthere.Theirlifewasfilledwithwarmthandquietness.happiness.ASuddenTragedyEverythingchangedwhenaterrible__________struckthevillage.IttookawayMario’sdad,Fiona,andeven_______________.Thewholevillagefellintodeep,heavysilence.neighborhuge

wave

Mario’svoiceFionaCharacterAnalysisOverviewCharacterCoreTraitsWhatwasLostMario

Sad，BraveHis

father;his

voiceMr.HarperKind,CreativeHis

daughter,FionaMario's

DadLost

in

the

waveFionalovelyLost

in

the

waveLovedtheocean,deeplylovedMarioParagraph1:Mr.Harper’sphoneboothsathighonthehilllikealighthouse.

Paragraph2:AsMariosteppedout,hespottedMr.Harperdownattheport.PlotdesignForthefirsttimesincethebigwavecame,Mariowantedtousehisvoice.Hewentdowntotheportandscreamedattheocean.“Bringourpeopleback!”Still,thewaveslappedgently.O-mor-ning.O-mor-ning.Mariosighedandlookedup.What’sthefunctionofthephonebooth?WhatdidMariodo?HowdidMariofeel?WhatandhowdidMariosay?WhatdidMr.Harperdoattheport?WhatwouldMariodoandsaytoMr.Harper?Howdidthestoryend?ThemesoftheStoryHealing&Comfort.HopeLove&Memories非谓语

•Hefinallyspoke,________thesilencethatlastedformonths.•_________

thewindphone,Mariofeltanurgetospeak.

看到这座风之电话，马里奥涌起一股想要倾诉的冲动。马里奥走上小山，心里想着他的父亲。他终于开口了，打破了持续数月的沉默。•

Mariowalkedupthehill,___________abouthisfather.

Seeingthinkingbreaking独立主格❤️

他伸出手，手指颤抖着，拿起了沉重的听筒。🍃🌅•Thesunset,thesky_________abeautifulshadeoforangeandpink.

•Hereachedout,hisfingers___________,andliftedtheheavyreceiver.他在那里站了许久，泪水顺着脸颊滑落。•Hestoodthereforalongtime,____________downhischeeks.太阳落山了，天空变成了美丽的橙粉色。tearsrollingtremblingturning无灵主语句自然主语•Awarmbreezecarriedhiswordstothesky.

•Thequietmountainembracedallunspokensorrows.

•Thewind'ssoundsoftlyansweredhiscall.抽象概念•Timeslowlyhealedthedeepwoundsintheirhearts.

•Memoriesfloodedbackwhenhepickedupthereceiver.

•Hoperoseinhischestashespoketothewind.b•Thewoodenboothwitnessedcountlessgoodbyes.

•Yearsoflongingfoundavoiceatthewindphone.

•Silencebecamehisclosestcompanionafterloss.物体主语BeautifulSentencesNeverlosehopeevenyouareinthedifficultsituations.Thewavebecamehigherandseemedtocomfortthem.Losingisasadthing,butwecantryourbesttoshiftitfromblacknesstoencouragement.Gonewerethesepeople,buttheystilllivedinourhearts.Oncewemissedthem,justliftedthephonereceiver.Hisdad'swordswerestillinMario'smind.Theloveintheworldstillexists.BeautifulSentences"Weallmissedthem,butweshouldn'timmerseinsorrowforalongtime.Weshouldbepositivetowardsthefutureandhugit.""Disasterwillbringterribleandsadness.Butmoreimportantlyitencouragedustowalkforwardandbecomestronger.""Seeingthegentlewaves,theydidnotfeelanyafraidofemotionsbecausetherewasalighthouseonthehillguidingthewaybackhome.""Thebelievethatthewindcanbringtheirvoiceandmisstothefamily.Everythingwillbegoodifwearefullofhope."情感升华句Gentle&Healing(温柔治愈版)Thewindphonegentlywhisperscomforttoeverybrokenheart.Memory&Release(思念与释怀版)Timecarriesourunspokenwordsthroughthewindphonetothosewelove.Hope&Life(生命与希望升华版)Hopewhispersbackthroughthewind,tellinguswearenevertrulyalone.PolishyourwritingElevateyourwords,refineyourmessage.possibleversionParagraph1：Mr.Harper’sphoneboothsathighonthehilllikealighthouse.BeforeMariorealizedit,hisfeethadalreadycarriedhimuphill.Themomenthereachedthewhitephonebooth,however,hestopped.Thiswasaplacemanyhadsetfootinbuthehadnevertrulyentered.Takingadeepbreath,Mariopulledthedooropen,liftedthereceivertohisearand,afteramoment’shesitation,dialedanumberatrandom.“Dad?It’sMario.Iyelledattheoceantoday.Itsaidgoodmorninganyway.”Hesaid,hisheadlowered.Whenheglancedup,thepeachblossomsoutsidecaughthiseye.

“Guesswhat?Thepeach-treesareinfullbloom.Everything’spink!”Withthat,Marioheldthereceivertighterandwhispered,“Imissyou,Dad.”Paragraph2:AsMariosteppedout,hespottedMr.Harperdownattheport.Thescenetransportedhimbacktotheolddays.Hecouldalmostseehisdadthere,unloadinghismorningcatchagain,withFiona.NoonecouldunderstandhimbetterthanMr.Harper---atleast,hestillhadMr.Harper.“Iseeyou!”Mariocalled.AsMr.Harperraisedhishead,Mariowaved.Seeingth