读后续写圣诞节助人故事续写课件-山东省青岛市高一下学期期中学业水平检测英语试题

高一下期中模拟考试

—读后续写（续写一段）第二节（满分15分）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Yesterdayafternoon,studentsrushedoutoftheschoolgateandgreatlyrejoiced(高兴)atthearrivalofChristmasholiday.Theygatheredattheflowerstoretobuyflowersfortheirfriendsorrelativeswithpocketmoney.OppositethedoorofthestorestoodaverysmallboynamedJim.Hisfacewasdirty,withonearmrestingagainstthewall,andhisheadsupportedonit,cryingsadly.TwoorthreeofthegirlscametoJimandasked,“Whatisthematterthatyoucrylikethis?”Buthemadenoreply.Soonmanychildrengatheredthereoutofcuriosity.“Come,telluswhatisthematterwithyouandwhyyouarecrying,”onegirlrepeatedsoftly.AndthenJimliftedhisfacefromhisarmandsaidthroughhistearsthathehadlostthetwentydollarshisparentshadgivenhimtobuypresentsforhisgrandmotherwholivedinanursinghome.Ithadescapedthroughaholeinhispocketandheshowedtheholetothem.Jimdidn’twanttogohomebecausehewasafraidofdisappointinghisparents.Theylivedapoorlife,andthatmoneymeantalottothem.Sayingthat,Jimagaindroppedhisheaduponhisarmsandcriedindeepsadness.读后续写题目注意：

（1）续写词数应为80个左右；

（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

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读后续写题目第一步：读文(2分钟)目标：快速把握主旨、人物情感及核心冲突。方法：圈画关键信息，梳理5W1H和双线情节。作用：为后续构思打下坚实基础。第二步：构思(3分钟)目标：基于段首句，预测合理的情节发展。方法：预判结局，设计关键情节，构思人物动作与心理。作用：搭建故事骨架，避免偏离主题。第三步：成文(15分钟)目标：将构思转化为流畅、生动的文字。方法：活用动作心理描写，保持时态一致，检查修改。作用：呈现高质量的最终写作成果。

续写步骤读文，获故事要素和双线情节

第一步Who：一群放学的学生+小男孩JimWhat：Jim弄丢了给奶奶买圣诞礼物的20美元，不敢回家，在商店门口哭泣When/Where：圣诞节前夕放学后/花店门口Why：钱是家境贫困的父母给的，对他意义重大，害怕让父母失望How：学生们看到了他的困境，想要帮助他读文，获故事要素和双线情节

第一步Para.情节线情感线1学生们放学，聚集在花店买花兴奋、期待（Christmasholiday）2发现门口哭泣的Jim，上前询问好奇→同情3Jim说明钱丢了，钱对他和家人很重要悲伤、绝望构思，审阅段首句，创编续写情节

第二步段首句是“ThechildrenfeltsorryforJimandtriedtofindawaytohelphimout.”，可发散：1.孩子们具体会怎么帮Jim？行动1：大家一起在地上、Jim的口袋周围帮他找钱

行动2：提议凑钱帮他补上这20美元行动3：带他进花店，帮他挑便宜又合适的礼物2.Jim的反应是什么？√从一开始的不敢相信、犹豫，到被大家的善意打动，接受帮助√从悲伤绝望，到惊喜、感动、重拾希望3.故事的结局与主题？Jim买到了礼物，开心地回家了主题升华：圣诞节的意义是分享与善意，微小的帮助也能带来温暖写作素材整理1.动作描写Hishandstrembled（颤抖）withhope.Thechildrenbentdown（弯腰）andsearchedthegroundcarefully.Hewipedhistears（擦掉眼泪）withthebackofhissleeve（袖子）.Theyputthecoinsandbills（硬币和钞票）intoJim'spalm（手掌）.2.心理描写Hiseyeswidenedwithsurprise.（他惊讶地睁大了眼睛。）Agreatwarmthfilledhim./Awarmfeelingspreadthroughhischest.Hefeltasurgeofgratitudewellingupinsidehim.(他感到一股感激之情涌上心头。)Thechildrenweredeterminedtohelpthepoorboy.写作素材整理3.情绪与主题句情绪万能句1：某人感到...或一阵/一种...向某人袭来写作素材整理3.情绪与主题句情绪万能句2：某人感到一股强烈的...在内心升腾奔涌。主题句：ThetruespiritofChristmasliesingivingandkindness.(圣诞节的真正精神在于给予和善意。)主题句：Smallactsofkindnesscanmakeabigdifference.成文，丰富续写内容，协同语言风格

第三步

ThechildrenfeltsorryforJimandtriedtofindawaytohelphimout.Theyfirstkneltdown（跪下）andsearchedthegroundneartheflowerstore,hopingtofindthelostmoney.

（现在分词做状语）Whentheyfailed,theydecidedtopooltheirpocketmoneytogether（把零花钱凑一起）.Onebyone,theytookouttheircoinsandbills,sooncollectingenoughtocoverthe20dollars.Jimstaredatthemoneyinhispalm,hiseyesfillingwithtearsofjoy（独立主格结构做状语）.Hethankedthemoverandoveragain,thenranintothestoretobuyasmall,warmscarfforhisgrandmother.Thechildrensmiledastheywatchedhimleave.Thatday,theylearnedthatthetruespiritofChristmasisnotjustaboutreceiving,butaboutsharingloveandkindnesswithothers.（那一天，他们了解到圣诞节的真正