英语写作指导----supporting evidence.ppt

1、Thesis Statements,What are the common mistakes? Writing announcements Too broad of a statement Too narrow of a statement Developing too many ideas,What Did We Do Last Week?,Practice!,With a partner find the mistake with the sentences A, TN, TB, 2, OK,This essay will discuss the people you meet in ex

2、ercise class I made several mistakes in the process of trying to win the respect and affection of my teenage stepson(继子) There are now more single-parent households in our country than ever before Organization is key to being a successful parent I had squash, tomatoes, and corn in my garden last sum

3、mer This paper is about sharing housework In many ways, sports are an important part of American life Widespread gambling has changed professional football for the worse Advertising has bad effects on all of society My roommate has his own unique systems for studying, writing term papers, and cleani

4、ng out room My roommate and I are compatible in most ways, but we still have conflicts at times My life has moved in new directions since the rewarding job I had working with older people last summer,A,TN,OK,TN,A,OK,TB,OK,TB,OK,2,2,Practice!,This essay will discuss the people you meet in exercise cl

5、ass There are now more single-parent households in our country than ever before I had squash, tomatoes, and corn in my garden last summer This paper is about sharing housework In many ways, sports are an important part of American life Advertising has bad effects on all of society My roommate and I

6、are compatible in most ways, but we still have conflicts at times My life has moved in new directions since the rewarding job I had working with older people last summer,Rewrite each of the sentences that contained errors as appropriate thesis statements,The Second Step of Essay Writing,The first st

7、ep of essay writing is to begin with a point (the thesis).,The second step is to Support the Thesis with Specific Evidence,Practice,For the three following outlines add the third local supporting point that will parallel the two already provided,The first day on a new job can be nerve-racking. Meeti

8、ng new people Finding your way around a new place _ College is stressful for many people Worry about grades Worry about the GaoKao _ My mother has three qualities I admire Patience Thoughtfulness _,The Importance of Specific Details,The thesis must be developed with three supporting points. Each sup

9、porting point (topic sentence) must also be developed but with specific details,Two ways specific details are valuable:,Details are interesting and excite the readers interest. Details explain and prove the points you make,The Importance of Specific Details,What always seems to happen! Body paragrap

10、hs only contain vague generalities rather than specific supporting details. Read the following paragraph that has been written with generalities instead of specific details -,The Importance of Specific Details,This is an essay about the annoyance of going to the movies: Some of the other patrons are

11、 even more of a problem than the theater itself. Many people in the theater often show themselves to be inconsiderate. They make noises and create disturbances at their seats. Included are people in every age group, from the young to the old. Some act as if they were at home in their own living room

12、 watching the TV set. People are often messy, so that youre constantly aware of all the food theyre eating. People are also always moving around near you, creating a disturbance and interrupting your enjoyment of the movie,We are going to analyze this paragraph and show how much better it is with mo

13、re specific details,The Importance of Specific Details,Vague Support,Many people in the theater show themselves to be inconsiderate. They make noises and create disturbances at their seats. Included are people in every age group, from the young to the old. Some act as if they were in their own livin

14、g room watching the TV set.,Specific Support,Little kids race up and down the aisles, usually in giggling packs, Teenagers try to impress their friends by talking back to the screen, whistling, and making what they consider to be hilarious noises. Adults act as if they were at home in their own livi

15、ng room and comment loudly on the ages of stars or why movies arent good any more,The Importance of Specific Details,Vague Support,Specific Support,People are often messy, so that youre constantly aware of all the food theyre eating,People of all ages crinkle candy wrappers, stick gum on their seats

16、, and drop popcorn tub or cups of crushed ice and soda on the floor,The Importance of Specific Details,Vague Support,Specific Support,People are also always moving around near you, creating a disturbance and interrupting your enjoyment of the movie,They also cough and burp, squirm endlessly in their

17、 seats, file out for repeated trips to the rest rooms or concession stand, and elbow you out of the armrest on either side of your seat,The Importance of Adequate Details,When adding details its is essential that you provide ENOUGH specific details to fully support the point (topic statement) of the

18、 paragraph.,Far too often your essays rely on redundancy (冗余) instead of adequate details,The Importance of Adequate Details,We are going to read two different paragraphs and you must decide which is adequately developed and which uses mostly vague, general, wordy sentences to conceal the lack of de

19、tail.,Eternal Youth? No, thanks I wouldnt want to be a teenager again, first of all, because I wouldnt want to worry about talking to girls. I still remember how scary it was to call up a girl and ask her out. My heart would race, my pulse would pound, and perspiration (汗) would trickle down (涓滴) my

20、 face, adding to the acne by the second. I never knew whether my voice would come out deep and masculine, like a television anchormans, or squeaky, like a little boys. The one time I did get up the nerve to take a girl from my class to a movie, I was so tongue-tied that I stared silently at the box

21、of popcorn in my lap until the movie finally started. Needless to say, I wasnt very interesting company,Terror of My Teenage Years I wouldnt want to be a teenager again, first of all, because I wouldnt want to worry about talking to girls. Calling up a girl to ask her out was something that I comple

22、tely dreaded. I didnt know what words to express or how to express them. I would have all the symptoms of nervousness when I got on the phone. I worried a great deal about how I would sound, and I had a lot of doubts about the girls reaction. Once, I managed to call up a girl to go out, but the even

23、ing turned out to be a disaster. I was too unsure of myself to act in a confident way. I couldnt think of anything to say and just kept quiet. Now that I look back on it, I really made a fool of myself. Agonizing over my attempts at relationships with the opposite sec made adolescence a very uncomfo

24、rtable time for me.,The Importance of Adequate Details,Practice,Practice Providing Specific Evidence,Prove three details that logically support each of the following points.,Example We quickly cleaned the apartment before the guests arrived Hid toys and newspapers in spare closet Vacuumed pet hairs

25、of sofa Sprayed air freshener around living room,Practice,Practice Providing Specific Evidence,The dinner was a disaster A. _ B. _ C. _ There are several reason I dont study A. _ B. _ C. _ My parents never let me think for myself A. _ B. _ C. _ I have several ways in which I can earn extra cash A. _ B. _ C. _,Remember it must be SPECIFIC!,Pract