浅谈中考总复习写作训练.ppt

浅谈中考总复习写作训练,陈经纶中学嘉铭分校 师海红,09中考说明对写的要求,能简单描述人物、场所、活动或事件。 能根据所给图示或表格写出简单的段落或操作说明。 能就常见话题表述事实，表达观点、情感和态度等。,近2年北京市中考写作试题分析,08年 根据中文大意和英文提示词，不少于60字。 汶川地震（ Wenchuan Earthquake ）发生后，9岁学生林浩（Lin Hao ）救了两名同学，然后步行7个小时到达安全地点。 请你就林浩同学的事迹，以“ Learn from the Hero ”为题给你小英语专刊投稿。内容包括林浩同学事迹简介，你对这件事的感受，以及你要向他学习什么。 提示词语：a student,nine years old, happen,save, walk, to safety,be deeply moved, brave, give up,07年（大纲卷） 根据中文提示和英文书信内容，写一封意思连贯、符合逻辑、不少于50词的回信。假如你叫李玲，是英国中学生露茜的笔友，你收到了她的电子邮件。请根据她来信的内容写一封回信。针对她的困惑，谈谈你的看法，同时提出一些建议，告诉她应该做什么，不应该做什么。,Hi Lucy, Nice to hear from you. _ Yours, Li Ling,Dear Li Ling, These days Tom Cruise, the film star, always comes into my mind. I think of him night and day. I just sit in my room and watch videos of his films again and again. Ive written hundreds of letters to him and sent e-mails to his fan club, but all I get back are only photos with his names on them. I dream that some day Ill meet him and that hell feel the same way about me. I dont want to learn my lessons any more, and Ill have final exams next month. Im thinking of running away to Hollywood（好莱坞）to meet him. Can you help me with the problem? Yours, Lucy,07年（课标） 你校美籍学生Tom和Mary刚来北京。他们在校园网论坛上各发了一个帖子。Tom想了解北京的基本情况；Mary感到很孤单。假如你是李华，看到他们的帖子，想写一个回帖。首先做自我介绍，然后提出建议，并说一说你将如何帮助他或她。 (请从下面表格A, B中任选一个题目）,不管试题题目如何变化，本质上都是围绕学生的学习或日常生活，结合重大社会事件写人、写事、写看法、感受、提建议。,一：培养学生良好的写作习惯。 二：积累词句，为写作做准备。 三：及时批改、有效讲评。 四：集中进行典型话题写作训练,一：培养学生良好的写作习惯。,（1）仔细审题，明确要点 仔细阅读题目，认真分析题目所提供的信息，多读几遍汉语提示，弄清楚该题目究竟要表达什么，理解透它的要求，有哪些要点，用笔标划出来。即解决写什么（what to write）的问题。 （2）围绕要点，联想表达。 根据要点，展开头脑风暴，联想相关的表达方式。例如，提建议：就要想到提建议的至少三种不同的表达方式，You should/ You can/ Youd better /Why dont you / Try to do/Its a good idea to do, 看法： I think His parents are right. In my opinion, its bad for you to eat junk food. You shouldnt ask for pocket money from your grandparents. 建议： You should eat more vegetables and fruit Youd better do more sports Why not . talk with your parents,(3）抓住线索，组织文章。 以中、英文提示或表格内容为线索，进一步理清脉络,套用熟悉的句型结构，组织文章。要围绕全部要点，把汉语提示转化为合适的英文表达，选好动词，多用简单句，多用熟悉的词、句。充分利用好英文提示，以此为你线索，展开思维，选用合适的提示词语，扩展成句，组织成文。然后再考虑如何运用合适的联结词，使文章过渡自然，富有变化。 即解决如何写(How to write)的问题。,(4) 仔细检查，认真修改。 在完成短文以后，要求学生认真检查。检查时要注意以下几点：体裁、格式是否恰当；要点是否齐全；时态、语态、主谓是否一致，单复数变化是否有错，每句成份是否完整，单词拼写是否有错，总的字数是否合乎要求等等.也就是解决写好(How to write well)的问题。,例：08-09第一学期 期末作文讲评,看法、建议,假设你叫李明,是英国中学生约翰的笔友.请根据他的来信内容写一封回信.针对他的问题，谈谈你的看法,同时提出一些建议,告诉他应该做什么,不应该做什么?,08-09上期末作文,Dear Liming, How is everything? As you know， I like eating hamburgers and drinking Coke. But my parents have stopped giving me pocket money. They dont allow me to have that kind of things any more only because Im getting a little heavier and getting tired easily. So I feel unhappy and I dont want to talk with them at home. Im now even thinking of asking for some money from my grandparents without telling them. What should I do? Im looking forward to your advice. Yours,要点1：谈看法： Expressions of giving opinions I think I dont think that In my opinion, I believe that . Im sure that,John,要点2：提建议： Expressions of giving suggestions You should do./You shouldnt do You can do. Why not do .? / Why dont you do? What / How about doing.? Youd better do / not do *You are supposed to do. *If I were you, I would,常见连词，行文连贯,To begin with, to start with Lets begin with At first, first of all Firstly, secondly, thirdly Then, next After this, after that Before this, before that Whats more, besides, also 另外，还有,In addition 此外 as well as 也， 还 finally, in the end like, such as for example, for instance but, however on the other hand In other words, that is to say,in fact to tell you the truth according to by the way as for in short, in a word 简而言之 all in all 总而言之,Dear John, Nice to hear from you. Now I know your trouble. I think your parents are right. They love you and what they did is good for you. Its important for us to keep fit, so you shouldnt eat much junk food. Youd better eat more vegetables and fruit. You should drink water instead of Coke. Besides, why dont you do some sports every day. Its good for your health, too. On the other hand, you shouldnt ask for money from,范文 课上领学生做,your grandparents. In my opinion, its a good idea to talk with your parents about it. If you dont spend money on junk food, your parents will keep giving you some pocket money. I hope you can solve the problem soon. Yours, Li Ming,Related Practice 1,假如你是李明,你的美国笔友发给你一份邮件。请针对他的问题， 结合自己的经历, 做做他的思想工作。告诉他你起先是如何做的，后来有了什么变化，在给他提一些建议。 Dear Li Ming, Ive got some serious problems. All the subjects have made me very tired. Ive failed so many exams that I really want to give up my study. What shall I do? Please help me. Tom,Dear Tom, Nice to hear from you. Now I know your problems. Dont worry. I had the same problems last year. I was weak in English and I almost gave up English learning. But I kept on learning hard and doing homework more carefully than before. Now I can follow teachers and catch up with other students. I have made great progress .Ok, Let me give you some advice. First, dont give up,your study. If you listen carefully in class, you are sure to get good grades soon. Second, you can ask your teachers and friends for help when you meet problems. In a word, believe in yourself and work harder, you can solve the problems soon. (范文1 领学生课上完成),Related Practice 2,07年（大纲卷） 根据中文提示和英文书信内容，写一封意思连贯、符合逻辑、不少于50词的回信。假如你叫李玲，是英国中学生露茜的笔友，你收到了她的电子邮件。请根据她来信的内容写一封回信。针对她的困惑，谈谈你的看法，同时提出一些建议，告诉她应该做什么，不应该做什么。,2007中考课标卷作文,你校美籍学生和刚来到北京。想了解北京的基本情况，感到很孤独。他们在校园网论坛上各法了一个帖子。假设你是李华，看到他们的帖子，请写一个回帖。首先作自我介绍，然后提出建议，并说一说你将如何帮助他或她。 请从下面表格中选一个题目。,Practice 3: 朝阳区二模,一家英语俱乐部准备在假期组织同学们去国外举办夏令营,请就此发表自己的意见. 内容包括:你是否愿意参加本次夏令营,你对夏令营的活动有哪些建议,以及你的理由. 提示词语:be glad, hear the news, would love, take part in, the summer camp, hold parties, visit, relax, help,Practice 4:宣武,在我们小的时候，父母和老师们就告诉我们要对别人有礼貌，你是如何做的呢？请举出三个以上的例子，并谈谈你对有关讲礼貌的看法和提出建议。 提示词语：young, tell, polite, for example, think, the 29th Olympic Games,Practice 5:西城二模,有些学生不爱吃学校的午饭，常到校外去吃他们所喜欢的食物但有些事物并不利于他们的身体健康“英语角”打算对这个问题展开讨论请你准备一篇讨论稿，谈谈你的看法和建议 参考词汇：not like, go out of school, be afraid, be back, much delicious, offer,假设你是新标准杂志社的编辑戴安娜，你收到魏明同学的一封信，他向你诉说了他沉迷于网络游戏的苦恼，并请求你的帮助。请你给他写封信谈谈你的看法，同时提出一些建议。不少于60字。,Practice 6:,Practice 7:,同学们在进入九年级（初三）之后，感觉到了学习的压力和时间的紧迫。王磊同学因不知如何处理学习和体育运动的关系，在校园网上发贴，请求帮助。 请你以李华的明义给他回帖，告诉他体育运动的重要性，介绍自己何时从事自己喜欢的运动，并对如何安排好学习和体育活动提出合理建议。 注意事项：1）必须包括三个方面的内容； 2）提示词汇供选用； 3）词数不少于60。 4）请不要写出真实校名和姓名。 提示词语：build up muscles, be busy, do well in , do ones best,Practice 8:海淀综合练习三,Lily 是一名初三学生，每天学习时间很长，感到疲惫，精神紧张，脸上还长了一些痘痘。假设你是她的同学，请从饮食、睡眠、学习习惯等方面给她提出至少三条建议，帮助她快乐起来。不少于60词。,二：积累词句，为写作做准备。,听写能力 （词、句、文） 遣词造句能力 （重点词、词组、基本句型） （5种基本句型；80个中考必备句型） 树立句型意识,三：及时批改、有效讲评。,学生习作中经常出现的错误主要有： (1)句子结构错误。不遵循英语句式要求,按汉语思维或习惯拼凑中国式英语,或主要句子成份不全。 (2)时态、语态错误。写作时经常出现前后时态不一致的问题；动作发生的时间不同,不知道运用合适的时态、语态。 (3)词形变化错误。表现在“主谓一致,名词单复数,动词形式,单词拼写及大小写等方面”。经常出现动词第三人称单数问题，写着写着就忘了要主、谓一致。,(4)用词错误。对一些常用词语的区别、使用场合、习惯用法、搭配等不熟悉。 (5)审题不准，谋篇布局失误。词、句子或段落之间缺少必要的联系,东一榔头、西一棒槌，文章显得支离破碎，让人摸不着头脑;往往出现有头无尾,要点不全,或不紧扣主题,随意发挥;还有就是格式不规范、书写潦草,卷面不整洁等问题。,以春节习作为例,四：集中进行典型话题写作训练。,u 描述人物、场景、活动或事件 个人情况 、家庭 、学校 朋友 、 社会 u 表达看法、情感、态度，提建议 （10个方面） （根据中考说明主要话题项目表）,描述人物、场景、活动或事件,个人情况 Self-introduction (appearance/ personality); My hobby; My travel experience ; 家庭 My family; My parents; Family rules; Weekend activities; Winter/ Summer holiday plan;,学校 My school; My school day ; My school life; My Favorite subject; School activities; (school trip/ school sports meeting/ after school groups ); School rules; 朋友 My mother; My father; My best friend My teacher My classmate,社会、文化 How to protect the environment; Important social events; (e.g. 2008 Olympic Games; Earthquake) Introduce a city or a place of interest; Festival customs Good manners,表达看法、情感、态度，提建议,1) About school rules (e.g. wearing school uniforms / not allowed to use mobile phones at school / eating at school) 2) About sports (e.g. have to study, no time to do sports / dont like doing sports) 3)About keeping healthy (e.g. Having healthy diet / doing sports / be happy ) 4)