Life in the future 作文点评.pptx

Life in the future 作文赏析 作文评分标准 1. 题目 1分 2. 结构 2分 （开头、结尾）1分 （分段、有过度句 ）1分 3. 主体 5分 （围绕2-3个方面展开，每点2 分） 4. 语言 2分（语法、词汇、标点 1分） （好词好句 1分） Title（题目） Future life My life in the future The prophecy (预言） Twenty years later My life 20 years from now Outline (提纲） 1. age 2. family 3. career 4. life 5. conclusion Out line 1.(Opening) Life will change in many ways in 2020. 2. (Main Body) (1)Technology will improve a lot in the future. (2)In the future, schools will be more different from present. (3)In 2020, new medicine will be discovered and it will save a lot of peoples lives. 5. (Conclusion) I think life in 2020 will be different from present because of new technology. Opening (开头段） Did you ever think about what you are going to do in the future? Did you think about your family and work in the future? Im going to have a fascinating imagination about my life in the future. （戴瑞诚） Opening (开头段） Now, people are getting richer and richer. Lets think, what will the life be like in the future? What do you think about the future in 20 years? Everyone has different ideas. I think the future will be different from now. The human scientists will find and study a lot of new technology and the inventors will invent new things.(汪卓 商） 议论文开头 Some people doubt about whether future life would be improved or not. Some people imagine the future life as like a scenery of movie named “Travel to Future” in which it shows a flying car in the sky. However, other sees the life in the future as a pessimistic view in which people tries escape from natural disaster and moves to Himalayas mountain. In this essay, Iwill examine a both sides of view and present my personal view on this matter. . Main Body（文章主体） 概括性描述的段落 We will have developed traffic. People will work and study at home. The robots will be used everywhere. People who get serious disease can be treated now .With the development of the world economy people will live better and better . But environment problems become more serious . Some people think the earth is not suitable for people to live in .We should look for another planet to live in . Main Body（文章主体） Technology will improve a lot in the future. In past, people didnt know how to use a computer. They didnt have computers at home. They didnt have. If any people wanted to read a newspaper they had to go to store and buy a newspaper then they could read it but now if any body wants to read a newspaper, they dont have to go to a store, they can go to internet and they can read a newspaper online. They can do this at home too. This means that life in 2020 will be more different from present. Maybe people will get the news transferred to their brains via Internet. Ten years from now, I already got my Bachelors degree and Im already a licensed Certified Public Accountant. I worked as an independent accountant in an accounting firm for two years. I passed the civil service exam when I decided to work professionally as an external auditor for the government for almost four years. That is when I decided to put up my own business. After another four years, I achieved my fulfillment on being a successful career woman, running a business of my own. The business grows, it gains profit until its enough for me to build my dream house. Enough for me, my mama, papa, brother and sister to live. I made my brother and sister finish their studies. I dont decide on having my own family yet. Im happy traveling all around the globe, with my soul sisters whom Im sharing the same dreams. I wanted to explore more thoroughly the different aspect of life until such time that I will meet and marry the man that God destined for me to be with and build our own family. Ending （结尾） That s my notions about the future in 20 years. Maybe its only a dream. Who knows what the future will be? Nobody. So, now we need to study hard and make indefatigable(不屈不挠的 ）efforts to our future, to humans future. Maybe we will be builders to a truly glorious future! Good expressions 1. Nowadays people are getting more and more unfit through city life and thats why I want to bring people into a sporty, healthy life, and have fun through sports instead of computers and other electronic devices. 2. And what I wrote above may not be only a dream. Good expressions None of us will ever pick the flowers or throw garbage everywhere and our environment will become more beautiful with flowers blooming, animals leisurely walking, easy breeze whispering and fresh air as well as the cleanest blue sky that is so clean that we nearly can capture the shape of the universe through the bluish glassy “crystal”. 范文参考 Now, people are getting richer and richer. Lets think, what will the life be like in the future? In the future, we wont have to change many clothes every day. We will wear a kind of special clothes. We can be warm when we feel cold and be cool when we feel hot. They will have many beautiful colours. We can change the colour we like anytime. In the future, there are more and more kinds of food we can choose. They will be much more delicious than now. They will not be expensive. We can buy them with little money. Isnt it wonderful? In the future, all of us will live in beautiful houses. It can move anywhere. When we want to change the place we live, it will take us quickly without any trouble. In the future, we wont have to go to work by bus or bike. Everyone will have a small but useful plane, we can go anywhere we like by plane. How great will be ! In the future, maybe each family will have a robot. Our mother wont be