化学专业个人陈述范文.pdf

版权声明版权声明 文书的刊登已经过顾客的授权许可 详情请参见我们的隐私条款 如果您的文书在经过我们的修改润色后成 功帮助您申请到心仪的学校 您也可以选择将您的申请文书授权给我们 我们将把您的文书加入到此栏目中 和更多的 同学一起分享 同时我们对愿意提供给我们做范文的客户会有一定的回馈活动 具体活动请联系客服详询 更多修改范 文 欢迎随时来电来函咨询 Statement of purpose With the development of modern industry and the increase of in population environmental problems become more complicated than any other periodever before not only by reasonbecause of the large mount of pollution made created by production means but also because lacking analysis of increasing new type of materials abandon from daily life and other consumption Theseischallengesmadke environmental study need both intensiveunderstandingand innovativatione mind in this field environmental study necessary In order to researching at some professional organization aboutMy goal is to work in research in Environmental Engineering To reach that goal I look enrolled in graduate study to expand my knowledge and experiment skillsschool Because undergraduate study provide me a solid foundation in this subject and also let me realize that delve deeper in this increasingly complicated field I need both breadth and depth knowledge I intend to pursue a MS degree to reach my goal I started began my undergraduate studiesy in Environmental Engineering at Hunan Agricultural University During these three and a half years I have benefited from various curriculums there taken classes such as like Protection of the Agricultural Environment Environmental Chemistry and Environmental Ecology which introduced me a overall understanding of thisto the subject of Pollutant Water Control and Environment Monitoring provided me specific skills in this field More important the undergraduate study helped me built up a career plan to continue researching about Environmental Engineering It was the fields Environmental Chemistry and Pollutant Rudiment Analysis which that particularly capture my interested me Firstly because I was excelled in cChemistry when I was induring high school I used beingranking in the top 3 among out of 60 students and courses like Protection of Agricultural Environment and Environmental Chemistry which I found most attractive offering me vast knowledge of this field Secondly iIn 2009 two serious contaminated contamination incidents taken took place in my hometown oOne of them was involved cadmium pollutant pollution by a chemical factory which just a few miles from my grandparents home Fortunately my family was not affected by this affair but to some other people who were not thatnot everyone was so lucky this was a disaster It also because of theThis incident I found taught me that the quality of the environment surround around us was not that safe and reliable lacking ofand that the lack of a comprehensive standard of environmental pollutant pollution and an efficient strategy to remediation remediate it made this situation exacerbated The In order to create effective standards and plans of remediation we mustmost fundamental way to solve this problem is to assess the character of the pollutant and ravel the interconnecteddetermine the relationship among variousof the diverse factors that cause of pollution Comment ll1 I don t understand what you mean by this Are you trying to say that too many disposable items are being made Comment ll2 Or awareness Comment ll3 This is a big change from talking about environmental issues Comment ll4 It would be better if you mentioned the program degree and or college Comment ll5 You don t need all this it s just saying the same thing over and over Comment ll6 Now you re going backwards Why start with grad school and then mention your undergrad work I suggest moving the reference to grad school after this Comment ll7 Comment ll8R7 You already mentioned these classes don t repeat it again so soon Comment ll9 I see one what was the other Comment ll10 I don t think you mean a standard of pollution You probably mean a standard of quality for the environment Formatted Indent First line 0 29 版权声明版权声明 文书的刊登已经过顾客的授权许可 详情请参见我们的隐私条款 如果您的文书在经过我们的修改润色后成 功帮助您申请到心仪的学校 您也可以选择将您的申请文书授权给我们 我们将把您的文书加入到此栏目中 和更多的 同学一起分享 同时我们对愿意提供给我们做范文的客户会有一定的回馈活动 具体活动请联系客服详询 更多修改范 文 欢迎随时来电来函咨询 Base on this idea Because this is a goal that interests me in my third year in at college I focused on emphasis in the degradation discipline of chemical pollutants and analysis of the character of pollutant rudiment My passion in this field and the goal to achieve experiment skills pursued me led me to participate in my director s lab During thisFor a year I worked in on sample pretreatment and analysis of samples by gas chromatography GC and high performance liquid chromatography HPLC As an undergraduate student my director gave me many opportunities to develop myself I could join in some programs in o Our lab undertook in conjunction withfrom the Institute for the Control of Agrochemicals Ministry Agriculture ICAMA offered programs such as like Residue Analysis of 25 Buprofezin in Suspensionon Tangerine and Residue Analysis of Difenoconazole and Propiconazole 30 EC in Rice I participated in those as well asalso used to take part in some other projects that our lab undertook fromconducted with various companies like including the treatment efficiency to someof pesticides of a new type of cleaning products Initially I just actedserved as an assistant according to observe and study I was familiarizinge myself with to theexperimental procedure of experiment but Ssince I analyzedsis the residue of Buprofezin I could was able to finish the verification of change process of residue and final residue all aloneon my own One A year of laboratory experiences not only provided me with practicaled skills to operate the instruments applied knowledge of experimental treatment but alsoand helped me cultivate the abilitylearn to think independently Through During my undergraduate years education I took active part in the environmental protection activities and got was elected as a three good student who is good morally a academically and physically excellent leader and some other honors Also I was also a member of the Youth Volunteer Association To my graduate study I hope to enhance my knowledge oflearn more about the nature of environmental contaminants and technical of analysis and verification I would also like want to study and research in safety evaluation of pollutant in water To mMy long term career plan I hope to involves research in a related area of environmental science in for a government organization or some a professional companyies after graduate study I believefound that the MS master s Pprogram inat Syracuse University perfectly matches my interest in thised field theSyracuse offers advanced equipments and an excellent director could help me effectively achieve my goal Also I believe that my strong foundation of knowledge in studies in environmental engineering and my experimentation skills would will be useful tools for my graduate studywork I would grateful to you if give mefor the opportunity to pursue my graduate research in environmental study Comment ll11 What does this mean Comment ll12 What does this mean I can t figure out what you re trying to say in this sentence Comment ll13 Remember that the reader will be an admissions counselor and not someone necessarily familiar with your field Explain the relevance of your lab work to your goals Comment ll14 This doesn t make sense Pesticides and cleaning products are two different things What exactly do you mean here Comment ll15 Have you mentioned this before When did you do this Was it part of a class Comment ll16 What does this mean Comment ll17 Such as what Where What did you do Comment ll18 Voted Awarded Comment ll19 This is very awkward in English Is there a better way to state it Comment ll20 Was this award related to your activities If not then make a separate sentence for it If it s in this sentence it should be related Comment ll21 If you re not going to name them or be specific about them then don t bring 1 Comment ll22 Does this belong in a paragraph about awards What did you do in this group What 2 Comment ll23 This is another sudden change of topic 3 Comment ll24 Why Explain Comment ll25 Do you mean pollution or pollutants 4 Comment ll26 What does this mean Comment ll27 This is a little odd Can you explain why it matches your interest 5 Comment ll28 An excellent director Do you know who this person is What makes him 6 版权声明版权声明 文书的刊登已经过顾客的授权许可 详情请参见我们的隐私条款 如果您的文书在经过我们的修改润色后成 功帮助您申请到心仪的学校 您也可以选择将您的申请文书授权给我们 我们将把您的文书加入到此栏目中 和更多的 同学一起分享 同时我们对愿意提供给我们做范文的客户会有一定的回馈活动 具体活动请联系客服详询 更多修改范 文 欢迎随时来电来函咨询 Comments It feels like you need a more cohesive theme The opening is rather broad and doesn t seem related to your personal story I thought I was about to read a report not a personal statement Can you personalize it If not I would probably get rid of it It s more interesting when you bring up the incident that happened in your hometown and explain how that influenced you Your descriptions of the lab work you did could use a little more detail and clarity I think this is an important part of your statement so make sure it has an impact and that the reader understands what you did Can you add any detail to your extracurricular activities It seems like you bring things up then abandon them without much description as if they aren t very important It leaves the reader confused and frustrated In your closing please be specific about how and why Syracuse is the right school for you Why did you choose it over all the other schools in the world Lots of schools have advanced equipment There must have been something that attracted you to this school You told me this is your passion but I didn t feel your passion Can you add some emotion some evidence of determination or desire to succeed i