高考英语 书面表达系列及参考范文（33）.doc

2014高考英语书面表达系列系列（33）及参考范文作文（*） 目前，家长开车接送孩子上下学已成为一个普遍现象，人们对此做法褒贬不一。下面是就此现象所做的问卷调查结果。 请根据下列图表提示，描述被访者的看法，并就此现象发表自己的观点。 注意：1词数100左右，文章的开头已经给出，不计人总词数。2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 nowadays its a common phenomenon that parents drive their children to school and back home, which causes a heated discussiona survey has just been conducted about it，and the findings are as follows_【参考范文】one possible version： nowadays its a common phenomenon that parents drive their children to school andback home,which causes a heated discussiona survey has just been conducted about it,and the findings are as follows we can see that half of the supporters believe that more valuable time can be saved for students to get enough sleepanother 30think children can rest or have meals comfortably in their own carsabout l5consider it reasonable just for the sake of childrens safetythe rest of them think it offers more chances for parents to communicate with their children however，other people hold different opinions55of them believe that it results in more traffic jauls，especially around schools in rush hoursand 30think that driving kids to and from school will undoubtedly add to the parentsburdens in aspects like time，energy and expensesstill，15worry that in the long term children may be more dependent on their parents，which does no good to themin my opinion，we can take buses to school*结束假设你是李华,你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人学中文,唱中文歌才艺大赛。你的美国朋友peter正在北京一所大学学中文,你觉得他应去试一试。请按以下要点给他写信告知此事,并表示可以提供帮助。比赛时间:7月18日报名时间:截止到6月30日报名地点:北京电视台注意:1.词数:100左右2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯3.参考词汇:才艺大赛-talentshowdearpeter,_ yours, lihua【写作指导guidedwriting:】dearpeter,ireadinanewspapertodaythatalearnchinese,singchinesesongstalentshowwillbeheldinbeijingtelevisionstationonjuly18.itisintendedforforeignerswhoaregoodatchinese.iknowyoulikesinging,andyouareinbeijingduringthatperiod.nowthatyouhavestudiedchineseforseveralyearsatauniversityinbeijing,ithinkthisisagoodchanceforyoutoshowyoursingingtalent,andhowwellyouvelearnedchinese.ifyouwouldliketotry,youllhavetogotothetvstationtosignupbeforetheendofjune.ifthereisanythingicandoforyou,iwouldbemorethangladtohelp.yours,lihu【写作要求】 根据提示的情景，用英文写一篇80-100词的短文。不必根据中文逐字逐句翻译。 我们的学校历史悠久。毕业学生中不少已成为各自领域中的专家。近年来，我们的学校发生了很大的变化。我们为自己的学校感到自豪。 【学生实作】 our school has a long history. it is told that it dated from one hundred years ago. from it was founded on, there were more and more students in it. and the former students all did well in their studying. some of them are outstanding. because of their good studies and hard work, many of the schoolleavers have become experts in different fields. these years our school has changed great, it becomes more and more beautiful. besides, the teachers teaching methods are more advanced than before. at the same time, the students study very hard, and we are determined to make great contribution to our school. we like our school very much! we are proud of it! 【评析】 1 第2句：is told 应为is said。（以下错误均在第一段） 2 第2句：dated应改为dates。 3 第3句：from.on不能表示从过去的某个时间一直到现在的情况，因此这里用since较好。另外，from.on中间应是名词，而不能是从句。 4 第3句：主句中应用现在完成时态，表示从过去一直到现在的情况。把there were改为there have been。 5 第4句：studying最好改为studies，指学业。 6 第5句：本句应是说以前的学生的情况，are应改为were。 7 第7句：great应改为greatly。修饰动词应用副词形式。 8 第7句：our school has changed greatly是一个完整的句子，其后也是一个完整的句子，而两个完整的句子没有连词时是不能并列的。最好中间用句号，使各自独立成句。 9 第9句：study改为are studying更为生动。 10 第9句：very hard最好改为even harder，以对应前面的比较级。 【总评】 优点 ： 1 基本写出了题目要求的几方面的内容。 2 这是一篇半开放的写作。习作者适当地增补细节对内容进行了展开，使内容较为全面、丰富。 3 语句表达较为连贯。 不足： 1 有一处句与句之间没有连词连接的情况，这是不符合英语习惯的。 2 谓语动词的时态有几处运用不当。 【修改之后】 our school has a long history. it is said that it dates from one hundred years ago. since it was founded, there have been more and more students in it. and the former students all did well in their studies. some of them were outstanding. because of their good studies and hard work, many of the schoolleavers have become experts in different fields. these years our school has changed greatly. it becomes more and more beautiful. besides, the teachers teaching methods are more advanced than before. at the same time, the students are studying even harder, and we are determined to make great contribution to our school. we like our school very much! we are proud of it!*结束仔细观察下面图画，请你给china daily写一篇100字左右的短文，描述一下你在路上所见的事，并就骑车人-李平的行为，简单阐明自己的感想。参考范文one possible version one day li ping was riding fast when she suddenly saw an old woman before her. but it was too late to stop immediately. the old woman was knocked down. li pin didnt help her. instead, she scolded her and rode away. when li ping stopped her bicycle, she was surprised to find her new shoes missing. she hurried back and found the old woman there holding her shoes in her hands. she was sorry for what she had done and apologized to the woman. from this, i learned everybody should be kind to each other. never do as li pin did to the old, or you will feel greatly sorry.*结束 （5） 充分发挥你的想象力，写一篇100词左右的文章。题目为my dream house。内容包括以下几点： 1 房子由什么建成； 2 有什么优点（如：不怕水火、保温隔热、随处移动等）； 3 家具，能源。 参考范文one possible version my dream house my dream house is made of a kind of special paper, which cant be easily destroyed by floods or fires. when floods hit our area, it can float on the surface of the water. and all the doors will be closed at once. the furniture in the house is also made of special materials, which cant be broken, either. our house can keep us warm in winter and cool in summer. we use solar energy instead of traditional fuels, so our house is environmentally friendly. made of paper, it is so light that it can move to anywhere you like, whats more, it has wheels and wings. such is my dream house.*结束 （6） 你的家乡是一个依山傍水的小镇。过去，这里人们生活极其贫困。解放以后，人们生活的各个方面都发生了很大变化。请根据下面表格的提示，写一篇120词左右的短文，介绍该镇的变化情况。 人口约20万面积约360平方公里地理概况坐落在大山脚下，面临一条大河，新建有许多工厂、商店、医院、学校教育状况解放前只有一所学校，只有富家子弟可以上学，现在有10所学校，每个孩子都可以上学生活状况丰富多彩，人们工作之余，可以逛商店、看电影、跳舞、参加体育活动等参考范文one possible version my hometown is a small town. it has a population of more than 200 thousand people and an area of 36 square kilometers. it is at the foot of a mountain. in front of the town lies a big river. before liberation, people there lived a hard life. great changes have taken place there since liberation. they have built many factories, shops, hospitals and schools. the school education has also improved. before liberation there was only one school. only the rich children could go to school. now there are 10 schools. every child can go to school. peoples lives are colorful. after work they go shopping, see films, go dancing and have sports. they all live a happy life. 作文（*） 假如你是高中三年级的学生李华，你在学校组织了一项“有烦恼向谁说”的调查 活动。请用英语给校报编辑写一封信，反映相关情况。内容包括：调查结果(如图所示)、持相应想法的理由及你对调查结果的看法。 注意：1词数100左右。 2信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。dear editor， i am a senior three studentrecently we have carried out a survey-“to whom do you go when in trouble?” the main findings are as follows_ yours sincerely， li hua【参考范文】one possible version：dear editor, i am a senior three studentrecently we have carried out a survey“to whom do you go when in trouble?the main findings are as follows 61of the students surveyed sele