河南省郑州市高考英语一轮 短文改错、书面表达训练（16）.doc

郑州市 2014高考英语短文改错、书面表达一轮训练（16）附参考范文【重庆市】第一节 短文改错（共10小题；每小题1分，共10分） 以下标有题号的每一行均有一个错误，请找出，并按下列情况改正： 此行多一个词：把多余的词用斜线()划掉，在该行右边横线上写出该词，并也用斜线划掉。 此行缺一个词：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（），在该行右边横线上写出该加的词。 此行错一个词：在错的词下划一横线，在该行右边横线上写出改正后的词。 注意：请在答题卡上作答。dear editor,recently, my classmates have had a heated discussion about that 76. _we should have optional courses in high schools. some students were 77. _in favor of the optional courses. they say interest is best teacher 78. _and our spare time will be colorful and meaningful. students 79. _can not only enlarge their knowledges but also improve their abilities. 80. _however, others are against the idea, said that optional courses81. _will take up too much time as well as energy. in addition to, some optional 82. _coruses have something to do with the college entrance examination. they 83. _are afraid theyll fall behind their classmates if they will take the optional84. _courses. id like to take one or two of the optional coruses, which, i think,will certain benefit me a lot. 85. _ yorus truly, li hua参考答案：dear editor,recently, my classmates have had a heated discussion about that 76. whetherwe should have optional courses in high schools. some students were 77. are in favor of the optional courses. they say interest isbest teacher 78. the and our spare time will be colorful and meaningful. students 79. their can not only enlarge their knowledges but also improve their abilities. 80. knowledge however, others are against the idea, said that optional courses81. saying will take up too much time as well as energy. in addition to, some optional 82. to coruses have something to do with the college entrance examination. they 83. nothing are afraid theyll fall behind their classmates if they will take the optional84. will courses. id like to take one or two of the optional coruses, which, i think, will certain benefit me a lot. 85. certainly yorus truly, li hua*结束 记叙文是以叙述人物的经历或事物的发展变化过程为主的一种文体，是写作训练中最普遍、最基本的一种文体。记叙文要求学生根据所给情景，组织语言材料，编写成文。一般说来记叙文有时间、地点、人物、事件、原因和结果六要素，写作时要表达清楚。记人时，要注意介绍人物的身世、经历和事迹等；叙事时要描写事情发生和发展的过程及前因后果等。【写作点拨】 叙事类记叙文以叙述事件为主，突出事件发生、发展和解决的过程。在写这类记叙文时要做到： 1. 重组材料，确定要点。叙事类记叙文写作前要进行立意、构思和选材等一系列过程，高考中的书面表达一般为控制性写作,通常会提供短文的主题和写作内容,考生要对提供的材料进行再加工,确定写作的顺序、要点和重点,拟定使用的句型和词组。 2. 结构完整、前后呼应。写记叙文必须有头有尾，一般来说，记叙时要把与一件事有关的六要素都交代清楚。文章的主题和内容要一致，文章的结尾与开头要呼应。 3. 人称统一、线索明确。记叙文可用“你、我、他”三种人称，但如果题目要求你使用某种人称，则必须遵循要求；叙事类记叙文一般按照事件发展的前后顺序进行叙述。【常见问题】 1. 要点不全。要点是否齐全通常决定文章的档次。书面表达要上档次，要点齐全是关键。要点提示类书面表达一般不会出现这样的问题，看图作文则常会由于学生观察不细心等原因遗漏要点。 2. 线索不清。有些短文条理混乱，主要原因是没有确定好写作线索。叙事类文章一般按时间顺序来写。 3. 时态不明。叙事时时态混乱是学生常犯的错误之一。叙事类记叙文所记的一般是过去发生的事，原则上用过去时，有时也用现在时。 4. 主次不分。有些同学写作时平均用力，面面俱到，写出来的东西主题不突出，显得呆板乏味。【佳作赏析】请根据下面的要点叙述一次看马戏的经历。 1. 期中考试后放了三天假，我看了一场马戏。 2. 表演非常精彩。有小狗表演，独轮车表演等。最刺激的节目是走钢丝。一个男演 员手里拿着一根平衡杠，头上坐着一个女孩，肩上的钢杠上还挑着两个女孩。当他 小心翼翼走过钢丝的时候，观众报以热烈的掌声。 3. 马戏是一种力与美结合的艺术。通过这次表演，我体会到了中国马戏艺术的博大精 深。参考词汇：马戏表演circus show 刺激的thrilling 钢丝tightrope 平衡杆balancing pole 钢杆steel barwatching a circus show i had a three-day holiday after the mid-term examination, so i decided to relax myself by watching a circus show. a girl appeared on the stage. she rode a one-wheel bike on a small table with a lot of flowers on it. she didnt knock down even one flower. some little dogs also did a good job. the four little dogs did some amusing tricks and one of them could calculate the number! how clever they were! the most thrilling program was to see a young man walking on a tightrope. he stood on the very thin rope with a balancing pole on his hands. on his head sat a little girl. another two girls sat on the ends of a steel bar on his shoulder. the young man took his first step with great care. the rope held. one step! two, three. every viewer held his breath. all the people were anxious about his safety, because the young actor didnt fasten a safety belt. any little carelessness could cost his life! at last he succeeded in walking across the 8-meter-long tightrope. the performance lasted about two hours. i had a good time at the show. the circus is the art of combination of strength and beauty. the chinese circus is so cool! 小作者叙述了一次看马戏的经历。文章以时间为线索，叙述清楚，详略得当，层次分明，描写生动，过渡自然，显示了作者相当扎实的语言功底。在文章最后，小作者还谈了自己的感想，深化了主题。难能可贵的是小作者使用了较多的高级表达方式，使文章增彩不少。如：复合形容词（onewheel, 8-meter-long），with复合结构（with a balancing pole on his hands），倒装句（on his head sat a little girl），感叹句（how clever they were!）等。【巩固训练】 假定你在开学的第一周参加了军训，请按下面的提示用英语叙述你军训第一天的情况。 1. 当起床铃响起的时候，我还在睡梦之中。我迅速起床，穿好衣服，匆忙赶往操场。教官要求我们在五分钟内完成准备动作。 2. 教官对我们要求非常严格。一个动作要反复操练一直到他满意为止，但休息时，他和我们一起唱歌、跳舞、讲故事。我们相处得非常融洽。 3. 训练非常艰苦。太阳很毒，我全身都湿透了，但我们还得继续训练。其中还有位同学晕倒了。 4. 军训既增强了我们的体质，也磨练了我们克服困难的意志。注意: 1. 词数: 100-150左右 2. 参考词汇: 军训 military training 教官 drillmaster （参考答案）key1: the first day of the military training yesterday was the first day of the military training. i was dreaming when the bell for getting up rang. the moment i heard the bell, i rose immediately, dressed quickly and then rushed to the playground. the drillmaster asked us to finish preparations within only five minutes. the drillmaster was very strict with us. we had to drill an action again and again until he was satisfied. at break time, he joined us in singing, dancing and telling stories. we were getting along very well. the sun was so strong that my clothes were all wet. but we still went on drilling. one of my classmates fell to the ground in a faint. the life of the military training is very hard, but i think it is meaningful. not only does it build up our bodies, it also strengthens our determination to overcome difficulties.*结束短文改错 mr. turner turned over in bed from time to time in last night, for he wasvery excited that he could not fall asleep. yesterday morning, he went to a big gardening company, knowing as green fingers, for the interview. mr. turner, that liked to help his grandfather grow flowers in the garden, looking forward to the job offered by the company. when he got to the company, he found there were many people waiting there and he had no ideas whether he could get the job. while waited, he helped the workers there to remove the fallen trees and clear the road. unluckily, he was the only one who finally got the job, so the manager decided to give the job to whoever he believed was helpful.参考答案：mr. turner turned over in bed from time to time in last night, for he was very excited that he could not fall asleep. yesterday morning, he went to soa big gardening company, knowing as green fingers, for the interview. known anmr. turner, that liked to help his grandfather grow flowers in the garden, wholooking forward to the job offered by the company. when he got to the wascompany, he found there were many people waiting there and he had no ideas whether he could get the job. while waited, he helped the idea waitingworkers there to remove the fallen trees and clear the road. unluckily, he luckilywas the only one who finally got the job, so the manager decided to give becausethe job to whoever he believed was helpful.*结束高考英语书面表达讲义：议论文写作3如今世界粮食短缺，价格飞涨，给部分地区造成社会动荡。假设在你校开展的研究性学习中，你们小组以“world food crisis”为题进行研究，现在请你代表你们小组向全体同学简要介绍你们的研究成果。主要内容如下：造成的原因 1. 气候变化，造成粮食减产 2. 工业发展，城市化加速，耕地减少 3. 世界能源价格上涨，使用粮食生产生物燃料应对的措施 1. 注重环保，改善生态 2. 严格保护耕地 3. 富国支持穷国，促进世界和谐你如何做出自己的贡献1 2注意：1. 内容包括以上要点，但不要逐句翻译 2. 字数150左右，文章开头已提供，不计入总词数3. 参考词汇：城市化urbanization 生物燃料biofuelshello, everyone,now ill tell you something about our research project the world food crisis on behalf of our group. as you know, food shortages have hit many countries in the world and even caused social unrest in some areas. _【命题方向与写作提示】这是一篇提纲式的议论文写作素材，探讨国计民生的社会热点话题：粮食价格上涨。写作时要注意避免逐句翻译，并适当增加细节以使行文连贯。【参考范文】(one possible version)hello, everyone,now ill tell you something about our research project the world food crisis on behalf of our group. as you know, food shortages have hit many countries in the world and even caused social unrest in some areas. but who is responsible for the current world food crisis? first, annual world grains output has declined because of climate change. then lots of farmland has been lost due to the rapid development of industry and urbanization. besides, faced with the rising energy prices, people have turned to the production of biofuels, which has worsened the severe situation.then what should we do to deal with the problem? on one hand, we should focus on the environmental protection and improve the ecology. on the other hand, strict measures should be taken to protect farmland. of course, to build a harmonious world the developed countries should take their responsibilities to help the poor ones experiencing food shortage.as for me, i will call on the people around me to live thriftily. and for the moment, i think, we should study hard to develop science and help solve the food shortage in the future.*结束6. 为纪念汶川大地震三周年，某英文报发起关于灾区新貌的征文活动。请根据以下图片提示，以“great changes”为题，用英语写一篇短文应征。内容要点如下：1.某中学灾后三年来的变化，如教学与活动场所，以及师生精神面貌等；2.发生变化的原因；3.你的感想。注意：1.短文标题与开头已给出，不计入总词数；2.可根据图片提示适当发挥3.词数：120左右great changesi am deeply impressed by the grea