高考英语 开放作文课件.ppt

2010年开放作文阅卷体会 inyourspokenenglishclass yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture youareaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit 首先 在教学中应该规范学生的书写 连体字注意i f t c r v如credit credot 1分 其次 不交白卷不等于胡编乱造 文章要围绕中心论点展开 与讨论内容之间的关系合情合理 如 icanseefromthepicter abigtree twohouse andthesun 1分 inthepicture wecanseetwobuildinit thereitahightreegrowupbetweeninthetwobuid theskyhaveabigsun inmyopinion atthehardgovernmentalsohavegrowup wemusthardworkandstudy wecangrowupliketree weshouldlearnthehightree don tafraidthebadgovernment 2分 inthepictureicanseetwobuilding liftoneishigherthanrightone inthemiddlehaveatree thetreeishighest thesunontheright itmakemeremembermychildhood iambedkids ilikeplaygames soialwayswantgotooutside whenigotoschool ifeelsoboring soididn tgotoschoolwheniwanttoplaygames butihaveaperfectandoutstandteacher shealwayswaitmeonourschooldoorstate shetellmeshesoworriedme soilovedher shegiveawarmheart whenigetwrong shewilltellmethetrues whenhaveaterrible shenwillhelpmeforall ithinkilikedthepicture strees youwillhaveterribleorlittlesickness yetyoucouldgoon growingaparticulartrees thesunlikeourteachersorourparents believeinyou self 2分 第三 写作套路谨慎使用 2010年高考阅卷评分标准 1 围绕中心论点展开 与讨论内容的关系 2 逻辑是否清晰 看整体通篇逻辑3 内容是否充实 说出图画中的主要元素 但不必包括所有图中的内容 依据立意而定 4 看上下文的逻辑关系 以内容逻辑为首要依据 如何得分 1 训练读图能力 主要论点 1 在逆境中成长2 父母应给孩子更多的发展空间3 城市发展与环境保护4 改变不了环境 改变自己 如何得分 2 训练语言表达能力第四档 看不出描图与解图的关系0分 乱抄 写的内容与图片无关4分 描述与阐述间有联系5分 描述与阐述间有更多联系 lookatthepicture wecanseethesun atreeandtwobuildings andthebuildingsisdifferentofwecanseeinouelive thetreeisbetweenthrteotrees itcannotgrowupstick butitgrowupyetanditcanmeetthesun ithinkthepicturewanttotellmethatwecan tafridthedifficulty ifwecandoitandwecansolveit weshouldbelieveinmymyself 4分 fromthepicturewecanseethereisatreegrowingamongthetwobuildings butthetreeisverytall itistryingtitellusthatwhenwefacethedifficutyweshouldbebrave wemusttrytofindsolutionaboutthedifficuty inmyopinion onlyinthisway canwereachourgoalandhaveamorebeautifullife 5分 asisshowninthepicture therearetwobuildings andthereisatreebetweenthem thetreeistallbutbent andthereisabigsuninthesky ithinkthepicturetriestotellusthatwhenwesosomething weshouldfindarightway weshouldknowwhatissuitus ifnot wewilllivedifficultly justlikethetreeinthepicture ifchoosethewrongplacetolive soitisbent anditisdifficulttilivelong soothingbeforewedosomething weshouldthinkwhetherthiswayissuituscarefully ifwedecited can tregret ifwedosomethingcarefully ourlifewillbemorebeautiful 7分 9分 fromthispicture wecanseethatatreeisgrowingbetweentwohighbuildings whatsurprisedmewasthatthetreeistallbutnotstraight itseemsasifitcan tgrowuptall whatthepicturewantstoconveyisthatweshouldpaymoreattentiontoourenviroment nowadays wecanseemoreandmoretallbuildingsaroundus butitisdifficultforustoseethegreengrassandtalltrees it slikelythatbuildingswilleventuallytaketheplaceofthetrees forthesakeofourhealth we dbetterleavesomespaceforthetrees whichisgoodforourlives onlyinthisway canwehaveanicelife 12分 asthepicturesshows atreeisgrowingtallunderthesunlightbetweentwobuildings thoughthebuildingsshapemanagetopreventthetreefromgrowingtall butthetreejustfollowsthenarrowspacebetweenthebuildings growingtallandstrong thetreeinthepicturetaughtusaphilosophyinourdailylife whenwecomeacrosssomedifficultieswhichseemstopreventusfrombeingsuccess likethebuildingsinthepicture wecan tjuststopoursteps insteadofgivingup weshouldlearntobeflexible thatis weshouldlearntoovercomethedifficultiesandfindthepossiblewaythatcanleadustosuccess justlikethetreeinthepicture oncewecanbeflexibleenough nothingcanpreventusfromreachingourgoals 13分 asisshowninthepicture thereisatreewithawindingtrunkstandinginthesurroundingoftwobuildings asthetwobuildingsblockthewayoffreegrowingforthetree itcanonlytwistitsbodyandtryitsbesttomeetthesun then itsucceeded theunfortunatetreegetsridoftheblockofthetwobuildingandisgrowinginthesunhappilyandhealthily thepictureconveysthemessagethatsuccesscomesfromtryingone sbest thegrowthofthetreeisfullofsetbacksastherearetwobuildingsblockingitswayofgrowing whenitcomestoourlife therearealsoalotofstoneslyinginthepathofoursuccess theonlythingwecandoittotryourbesttoremovethestones withouteffort nothingcanbeachieved withouteffort nosuccesscanwegain rememberthatsuccesscomesfromsweet weshouldlearnfromthetoughtree meetthechallengesandtryourbest inthepicture atreeisplacedbetweentwostrangely shapedbuildings despitethefactthatthetwobuildingsareblockingthetree sgrowth thetreeisstillgrowingaroundtheedgesofthebuildingsinordertoreachtheopenskyandsunlight ithinkthatalotcanbelearnedfromthestrong willedtreeinthepicture notonlydoesthetreenotgiveupinthefaceofdifficulty italsomanagestohandletheannoyingsituationskillfully weareallboundtomeetwitproblemsandchallengesinourdailylives somegiveupwhilesomechoosetoado