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,Iamawriter,牛刀小试Thereisakindoflovecalledletyougo,ThereisaTVprogramcalledImasinger,ThereisanEnglishclasscalledImawriter.有一位女教师叫做张丽莉_,ThereisawomanteachercalledZhangLili,Noonewasbornawriter,everythingstartsfromimitation.,模仿,请根据以下信息以“TheMostBeautifulWomanTeacher”为题写一篇英语报道：张丽莉，24岁，苍南县树人中学教师，2013年9月6日下午2：00左右，树人中学校门口，学生放学，准备坐车回家；一辆大巴失控，撞向(bumpinto)两名学生；张老师猛推了他们一把，使他们脱离了危险；车从张丽莉老师腿上碾压(runover)过去,腿部严重受伤。要求：字数120左右，结尾要有简要评价。,1.Themostbeautifulwomanteacher的体裁：A.描述说明文B.记叙文C.议论文2.主体时态：第一段_和第二段_3.中心人称：第一段_和第二段_4.内容要点：whenwherewhowhathow,一般过去时,一般现在时,第三人称she/they,第一三人称I/we/she/her,torepairthehousebeforeitrains,谋篇布局,1.第一段写什么_第二段写什么_2.主题升华A.staycalmwhenfacingdangerB.valuetherelationshipbetweenteachersandstudentsC.payattentiontotrafficsafetyD.weshouldbealwaysreadytohelpothers,感人事迹,我的感想,Betterstructure,bettersentence.,1.张丽莉，24岁，教师.(定语从句)_2.2013年9月6日见证了一场糟糕的交通事故.(witness/see)_3.在苍南县树人中学校门口发生了一场严重的车祸.(强调句)_,ZhangLiliwhois24yearsoldisateacher.,September6,2013witnessed/sawaterribletrafficaccident.,ItwasattheschoolgateofShurenCangnanthathappenedaseverecaraccident.,4.下午2：00左右学生放学，准备坐车回家.(itwastimeforsbtodosth)_5.一辆大巴失控，撞向(bumpinto)两名学生.(定语从句)_,Atabout2oclockp.m.Itwastimeforstudentstopreparetogohomebybusafterclass.,Abuswhich/thatwasoutofcontrolbumpedintotwostudents.,6.张老师猛推了他们一把，使他们脱离了危险.(so.that.)或用(todo)不定式开头作目的状语1._2._,MissZhangpushedthemawaysofiercelythatshemadethemoutofdanger.,Tomakethemoutofdanger,MissZhangpushedthemtosafety.,7.车从她腿上碾压(runover)过去,腿部严重受伤。(notonly.butalso.)或用itisapitythat.1._2._,Notonlywassherunoverbythebus,butalsoherlegsgotinjuredseriously.,Itwasapitythatshewasrunoverbythebusandherlegswerehurtseverely.,1.Thestudentswerepreparingtogohomebybus_abuslostcontrol.Thestudentswerewaitingforbusbackhome,_abuslostcontrol.Thestudentswerereadytotakeabustogohome,_/_,abuslostcontrol.,when,justthen,suddenly,allofasudden,2.Thebusnearlybumpedintothetwostudents,_,MissZhangrushed.Thebusnearlybumpedintothetwostudents,_,MissZhangrushed.Thebusnearlybumpedintothetwostudents,_,MissZhangrushed.,atthemoment,atthesametime,ontheurgentoccasion,3.Shepushedthetwostudentstosafety,_,shewasrunoverbythebus.Shepushedthetwostudentstosafety,_,shewasrunoverbythebus.Shepushedthetwostudentstosafety,_,shewasrunoverbythebus.,unfortunately,asa,result,much,tooursorrow,一、时态语态：1.Abuslosecontrol.2.Abusoutofcontrol.3.Abuscouldntbecontrol4.Abusbreakdown5.Abusdidntoperatedproperly.,lost,was,controlled,broke,wasnt,Hewhomakesnomistakesmakesnothing,三、词性混乱1.Sheisourproud.2.Sotheywereoutofdangerous3.Teachergivesuswarm4.Thankstoherkind/brave/selfless/devoted.,二、名词单复数1.Sheis24yearold.2.Shesavedthetwostudentslife.3.Thebusranoverherleg.,years,lives,legs,pride,danger,warmth,kindness/bravery/selflessness/devotion,四、用词不当1.(Mrs/Miss/Mr)Zhang2.Anaccident(tookplace/happened)3.Attheschool(door/gate)4.Theaccidents(ledto/caused/resultedin)herlegshurtseverely5.奉献的devoted/dedicated6.恢复retrieve/recover,五、介词乱搭1._about2oclockp.m.2._September6th,20133._theschoolgate4.wait_bus5.leaveschool_home6.Anaccidenthappened_her,注意书写和排版y和gf和tv和rb和dp和qn和h及ro和c及e1.天使anger/angle/angel2.受伤hurt/hunt3.行为behavoier/behavere/behavior,at,on,at,for,for,to,大家来找茬TheMostBeautifulWomanTeacherZhangLili,aged24,isateacherfromShurenhighSchoolofCangnanCounty.Atabout2oclockintheafternoonofSeptember6th,2013,thestudentsoftheschoolwerewaitinginthefrontoftheschoolgateforthebusbackhome.Justthenanout-of-controlbusbumpintotwostudents.Justatthecriticalmoment,MissZhangrushedover,butpushedthetwostudenttosafety.Unfortunatelysherunoverbythebus.Andshewasinjuredsoseriousthatshehadtohaveherlegscutoff.Herbravehasmovedthepeoplealloverthecountrydeep.Asaresult,hehasbeenhonoredasthemostbeautifulwomanteacher.,on,bumped,and,students,was,seriously,bravery,deeply,she,Homework:Recitethearticle,Thanksforyourlistening,请根据以下信息以“TheMostResponsibleManTeacher”为题写一篇英语报道：成立新，45岁，平阳县浙鳌中学教师，2013年11月16日上午7：00左右，高二（6）班教室，给学生上早读课，准备做英语听力训练；突发心脏病倒地，学生们连忙通知学校领导，并赶紧拨打120等待抢救；被送医院后，抢救无效死亡。要求：字数120左右，结尾要有简要评价。,知识目标：masterthebasicwritingstep