读后续写之提分秘籍

1、读后续写之提分秘籍读后续写之提分秘籍一一细节描写考试说明中评分原则部分规定，读后续 写阅卷时按5个档次给分。参考最高档次第五档 (21-25分)的描述并考虑写作部分评分的其它 国素，可以认为一篇优秀的读后续写具备以下特1 .内容丰富充实，与所给短文融洽连贯；2 .连接成分应用得当，行文结构紧凑一体，与 所提供各段落开头语的衔接紧密合理；3 .使用并用下划线标示5个以上短文中标出的关键词语上4 .词汇丰富高级，语法准确多变主被动句式、 各类从句、特殊句式、非谓语动词拿的使用情况 灵活恰当、不拘一格、游刃有余)；5 .词数充分，150词左右。评分细则规定少于 130词的？从总分年减去2分：6 .拼

2、写准确，英式或美式拼法皆可；7 .标点合理，使用得当读后续写基本是以记叙文为主，而记叙文是 以记人叙事为主要内容，以叙述为主要表达方式 来反映丰富多彩的现实生活的一种文体。 一般来 说，完成一篇完整的记叙文写作，需要选取合适 的角度、按照一定的顺序组织素材进行叙述， 其 中包括六个基本要素：时间、地点、人物，事情 的起因、经过和结果，即我们通常所说的五个:W”(what, who, when, where, why ) 和一个 “ H” (hoW)。除此之外，鲜明的主施和生动的语言，也是一篇优秀的记叙文所不可或缺的。人、情感心理描写描写作为记叙文的一种辅助的表达方式对加 强文章的表现力发挥着重

3、要的作用，它要求我们 善于捕捉细节、刻画细节，有时还可以用上比喻、 拟人、夸张等修辞手法。一篇好的作文往往因为 一两处细节描写而出彩。同样地，议论、抒情的 表达方式对记叙文主题的展现也发挥着重要的 作用。1.在写作中，对人物情感的描写常常能使人物的 形象显得生动鲜活。人的情感可以分很多种，时祥翳失秋湿沸野陶斜 箕稀迭致些不同的情氤1. He is very happy and sweet.他又高兴又甜 蜜。.2. They didn' t know what to do with themselves for joy.他桁高兴得不知道怎么 办好。3. He jumped for fun

4、.他iWj将得跳了起来口4. Her face brightened up.她喜形于色。More examples:L The smile on her face shone like a diamond.2. His eyes twinkled with pleasure.3. I was wild with joy,.4. I was pleased beyond description.5. She wore a shining smile on her face.6. Her smile lit up the whole room.7. She shed tears of joy.8.

5、 She was overflowing with happiness*9. Her flushed face was shining with excitement-10. I was floating on air.满意1. The result is satisfactory.结果令人满 意。. . 人s a smile of contentment on3. There is aher face.脸上总是挂着心满意足的微笑2. It is difficult to please everybody* 众 口难调口4. She belongs to those who are very

6、difficult to satisfy-姬属于那种极难讨好 的人口他们感到很满意。5.Seeing their task finished gives them a sense of satisfaction,看到任务完成了,surprised to find you here. 在这里焦讶3 .看判你我很奇怪。4 . 11' s nothing to be surprised about. 不值得大惊小怪。5. To mysurprise, he didn ' t comeyesterday.令我吃惊的是他昨天没有来。-7. Her appearance fairl她的美貌

7、令我神魂颠，took mybreath away.o8. Everyone looked at her in astonishment.大家都惊在:应看着施。悲1. He looks so sad.他看起来很悲伤。2. Heds no stranger to sorrow.伤中。3. His sad story makes her feel pity.悲惨经历使她深表同情。他生活在悲他的4. His wife ' s disease took妻子的病令他茶饭不思。5. The news depresses her.苦。More examples:1. He stood silently

8、, tears cheeks.away his appetite.这个消息让她愁rolling down his6. She looked at me in amazement. 她惊奇的 看着我。2. I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.3. Hearing the news, so desperate was he that he drowned sadness in wine.4. She burst into tears and ran out of the room.5. She sobbed, hiding her fa

9、ce in her hands.6. I tried to fight back tears.7. M eyes were filled with tears.8. A frown （皱眉）now stood on his face.9. These days he was in low spirits.愤怒1. She was burning with anger. 她怒火中烧。2. He easily loses his temper. 他很容易发脾3. He was in a rage.他大发雷霆她因为发怒脸涨得4. She was red with anger.通红。More exam

10、ples:1. I was seized by anger.2. His anger boiled over.3. He could hardly/scarcely contain his rage.4. His voice trembled with anger.5. He gave me a look of burning anger.6. He glared at me with burning eyes.7. His face clouded with anger.感动1. Touched deeply/immensely, we 2. Tears filling her eyes,

11、she offered her heartfelt gratitude.3. VUh tears streaming downher face, she.害怕 He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.She was struck with horror when. She was choked by fear. Her face turned pale and stood there tongue-tied. Fear flooded over him. Her heart beat so violently that she felt ne

12、arly suffocated（窒息）. She shook all over, feeling like sittingon pins and needles.二、动作描写动作描写也是描写人的重要一点。利用适当 的词语对表达人们的心理和性格有很大的帮助。表达说话电动同：speak:说，讲，馈话，演说。着重开口发音。say:说，说话。意义非常广泛，是一般用语。着 重内容，指连贯的说话。talk:讲，说话。着重说话的动作，而不着重所 说的话。它多指两个人或多个人在一起讲话。tell：说，告诉，讲。指把一件事情传达给别人 或讲述一个故事等。有连续叙述的意思。1. gossip:只在后面说人是非）闲

13、谈他人的事情。2. Can you child speak yet?你的孩?会说话了吗？chat:闲谈，聊天。多指非正式的，轻松的，愉 快的，没有中心地、没有特殊目的地谈话或聊天 含有亲热的意味。他说他3. He said he wanted to go to town. 想去城里。4. I want to talk to you about an urgent matter.我想和你谈一件紧急的事。5. Tell me what happened.告诉我发生了什么事。6. They dropped in for a chat last night. 他 们昨晚顺便来，闲聊了一会儿。、7. Y

14、Ou shouldn ' t listen to gossip. 你不应 该听流言蜚语。无声的微表示美的动词： smile:今微至"。通常指好意的微笑, 笑，如表示亲切、愉快等。指面露喜色，带有笑容的意思。她看见我时露laugh: "笑"."发笑"指一般的笑。beam: “笑”。出微笑1. She smiled when she saw me.2. We all laughed loudly whenshe madea joke.她说了个烫话，我们都大声笑起来。、微笑3. He beamed on his visitors.他对着客人们

15、 表示哭我们可以说：cry: “哭泣、“流泪”。意义及用法最广泛。多 强调声音？指呼号和叫喊地哭，一般由于痛苦， 悲哀，恐，网 也可能是欢呼引起的。weep: “哭源、“流泪”。指不出声的哭，着重在 由于悲伤而流泪。sob: “哽咽”，“呜咽”，“啜泣”。指尽力抑制自己的感情时发出抽泣的声音。也可以指哭诉1. She started to cry when she heard the sadnews.当她听到翅个悲痛的消息时，她开始哭她哀悼2. She wept the death of the child.这个孩子大声地孩子的死亡。3. The child sobbed loudly.哭泣。

16、表示走的动词：gO: “走” L意义范围较广，是一般用语。表示向 一定的地点运动。少仃_ _ _ _，、一k，pace: te过） wander: “4%回”定路线。“踱步”。尤指以普通的步子走。，“到处走”，“漫游”。侧重无确walk: “步行”走"表示有目的或无目的的步 行、散步、游玩。1. W went by plane.我们是乘飞机去的。>11 B II" , 、-2. I can t walk about in this heat.在这本中.The fence is only ten paces from the house 围墙离屋子只看十步远大热天我简直

17、无法走动。4. The children wandered in the woods. 孩子 们在森林里漫步。动作描写美句欣赏1. The first actor was dragging through the snow when the second began walking towards him trembling with cold.第一位演员翟雪地里拖着脚步艰难移动，这时候第二位演员朝他走去，身子在寒气中不仅颤抖。2. I still remember the shock that rooted me flat against the wall.我仍熟记得当时惊呆了，靠在墙上，一

18、动不动。3. The pounding in my ears drowned out the rest of the words, only a word here and there filtered through.我的耳朵里嘿嗡作响，听不见他们后来讲的话， 只是东一点西一点渗入的只言片语。4. I stared at him in shock and a small sound of dismay escaped my throat.我惊愕地盯着他，不紊发出轻轻的沮丧声。5. Standing with all the dignity I could muster, I said not

19、hing.带着所有的尊严，我融在那里一句话都没说。6. I clasped my hands behind my back so he wouldn' t see them shaking.我紧握着双手藏在背后，这样他就看不见我的手7. The last words cameout in an eager rush.最后几个字是急切地蹦出来的。8. He went back to hoeing the weeds that sprang up between the delicate little bean plants.他又去锄生在在青嫩的豆苗间的杂草了。9. The next da

20、y, it was a very sad and withdrawn girl who dragged into the principal's office.第二天？我沉默不语，一副十分伤心的小女孩的 模样，拖着脚步走近校长办公室。10. He looked out of the window, biting his lips, as if thinking.施一边看着窗外，一边咬着嘴唇，仿佛在思考。三、练一练：找找下面的励志美文中动作、神态、 心理描写，If the Dreamls Big Enough, the Facts Don tCountI used to watch he

21、r from my kitchen window, she seemed so small as she muscled her way through the crowd of boys on the playground. The school was across the street from our home and I would often watch the kids as they played during recess. A sea of children, and yet to me, she stood out from them all.I remembered t

22、he first day I saw her playing basketball. I watched in wonder asshe ran circles around the other kids. She managedto shoot jump shots just over their heads and into the net. The boys always tried to stop her but no one could.I began to notice her at other times, basketball in hand, playing alone. S

23、he would practice dribbling and shooting over and over again, sometimes until dark. One day I asked her why she practiced so much. She looked directly in my eyes and without a momentof hesitation. She said, “I want to go to college. The only way I can go is if I get a scholarship. I like basketball.

24、 I decided that if I were good enough, I would get a scholarship. I amgoing to play college basketball. I want to be the best. My Daddy told meif the dream is big enough, the facts don' t count. " I had seen over and over again.Well, I had to give it to hershe wasdetermined. I watched her t

25、hrough those junior high years and into high school. Every week, she led her varsity team to victory.One day in her senior year, I saw her sitting in the grass, head cradled in her arms. I walked across the street and sat down in the cool grass beside her. Quietly I asked what was wrong."Oh, no

26、thing, " came a softreply. "I amjust too short. ' The coach told her that at5 ' 5" she would probably never get to play for a top ranked team much less offered a scholarshipso she should stopdreaming about college.She was heartbroken and I felt my own throat tighten as I sense

27、d her disappointment. I asked her if she had talked to her dad about it yet. She liftedher head from her hands and told methat her father said those coaches were wrong. They just did not understand the power of a dream. He told her that if she really wanted to play for a good college, if she truly w

28、anted a scholarship, that nothing could stop her except one thjng her own attitude.He toldher again, “If the dream is big enough, the facts don' t count. ”The next year, as she and her team went to the Northern California Championship game, she was seen by a college recruiter. She was indeed offered a scholarship, a full ride, to a Division I, NCAA women s basketball team. She was going to get the college education that she