高三作文讲评

1、 Assessment & practice of WritingWhich is your preference?neat and tidywell-shapedrich in contentBasic elements (元素元素) of a good compositionconclusion neat handwritingproper structure rich content Dont leave out main contentsYoud better use 3-4 advanced sentence patterns.Be good at using conjunc

2、tion words.Writing:假设你是育才中学学生王林，寒假期间在当地一家假设你是育才中学学生王林，寒假期间在当地一家KFC店当了一周服务员，请你用英语给你的英国笔友店当了一周服务员，请你用英语给你的英国笔友Jack写一封信，谈谈你打工的写一封信，谈谈你打工的经历经历，收获和感想收获和感想。注意： 信的开头和结尾已给出（不计入词数）Dear Jack, How is everything going? Im writing to Best wishes. Yours, WangLin Did you write down all of the main contents?no thou

3、ghts &gainslittle working experienceWhat main contents should be included ?I am writing to tell you my experience about my part-timejob in KFC. It is a very meaningful work?jobI am writing to tell you my experience about my part-timejob at a KFC, which is a meaningful job. at a Non- attributive

4、clause非限制性定语从句非限制性定语从句Did you use some advanced sentence patterns?With a week time went by, my working week came toan end. goingWith复合结构复合结构 With the work began, I have to work seven hours a day, which made me very tiring.beginning,hadtired.I not only knew how difficult it was to make money but also

5、 has improved my ability of getting alone with others.knowisalongNot only do I know how difficult it is to make moneybut also my ability of getting along with othershas improved. Inversion倒装倒装All I had to do was ask customers what would they want to eat .what impresses me most is I find it is not ea

6、sy to gain money. The noun clause名词性从句名词性从句 to askthey wouldthatFinally, I finished the work. I realized that earn money was not easy.Having finished the work finally, I realized that earning money was not easy.The present participle (doing) 现在分词现在分词earning Lets appreciate some beautiful sentences.D

7、escribe the job :1.It was the first time that I had been a waiter. 孟思思孟思思 8班班 2.It was the money that I got by making efforts. 苏宇跃苏宇跃 5班班 3.Only when the evening came could I go home. 鲁芳鲁芳 5班班7. Not only did I get up early in the morning but also I went home late in the evening. 刘佳敏刘佳敏 5班班5.Tired as

8、 I was, I still kept on working. 牟政寰牟政寰 8班班6. As you know, making money is a difficult thing, but working as a waitress is much harder. 董罗申董罗申 5班班4.I met a variety of people, from whom I knew how to get along with other people better. 管灵莹管灵莹 8班班8. Never had I had any experience like that. 尤丹莎尤丹莎 5班班

9、Describe the thoughts & gains: 1.No matter what happens, I must rely on myself to deal with it. 郑雨茜郑雨茜 5班班2. There is no doubt that working can help us improve our ability of communication. 孟思思孟思思 8班班 3. What I want to say is that this experience really has helped me a lot 管灵莹管灵莹 8班班 .7. I think

10、 this is the best holiday that I will always remember. 阮路贻阮路贻 8班班5. It seemed that I was not suitable for the job. 周泱周泱 5班班6. The more we learn today, the better we will be tomorrow. 杨谨杨谨 5班班4. Only in this way can we know making money is very difficult. 曹冰妮曹冰妮 8班班5班班 苏宇跃苏宇跃8班班 孟思思孟思思8班班 管灵莹管灵莹Dear

11、Jack, How is everything going? Im writing to tell you something about my unforgettable and meaningful winter holiday. During the vacation, I managed to take a part-time job as a waiter at a KFC, so I led a busy life in those days, but I benefit a lot from this experience. Being a waiter was more dif

12、ficult than I first expected. Such a large amount of work drove me nearly crazy, especially during the rush hours. I didnt even have time to feel tired. I nearly gave up in the first few days, But I finally overcame all the difficulties. It was my friends who gave me the power to keep working. This

13、winter vacation is an important lesson to me, from which I learn the way to get along with others and the right way to deal with money.Practice Practice 假如你是育才中学学生李华。在假如你是育才中学学生李华。在4月月15日参加了以控制日参加了以控制全球气候变暖为主题的全球气候变暖为主题的“低碳日低碳日”（Low Carbon Day) 活动。请你用英语给你的笔友活动。请你用英语给你的笔友Mary写一封写一封100120个词个词的信，描述此次活动

14、的信，描述此次活动内容内容和和感想感想。Dear Mary, How is everything going? Im writing to Best wishes, Yours, Li Hua Activities on LowCarbon Day Go to school on footor by biketurn off the tap while brushing your teethBe an educator Use fewer plastic bags Avoid using the air conditionerMake full use of bothsides of a pi

15、ece of paperSwitch off the lightsState your ideas by using one of these ways: 1.Doing/ done;2.名词性从句名词性从句;3.状语从句状语从句;4.with ;5.定语从句定语从句 6.倒装倒装 7What can you learn from this activity?2. Even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment .1. Everybody has his duty to pr

16、otect the world.3. .Homework Write the composition using the ways we have talked about today.体裁（夹叙夹议）体裁（夹叙夹议）人称（人称（ the first person）时态（时态（the simple past tense and the simple present tense）内容要点（内容要点（describe the job and describe the thoughts & gains)Dear Jack, How is everything going? Im writin

17、g to tell you something about my unforgettable and meaningful winter holiday. During the vacation, I found a part-time job as a waiter in KFC. I did it for the first time, so I was busy in those days. Being a waiter was more difficult than I first expected. Because Every day I must do a lot of work,

18、 I didnt even have time to feel tired. I nearly gave up in the first few days, But I finally overcame all the difficulties. I want to say that the experience is important to me. I benefit a lot from it. I feel its really hard to make money on my own, which teaches me to value money. It help me improve my ability of communicating with others. And I become more confident and outgoing. How about yours? Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours, WangLinIt was the first time that I had worked as a waiter. Due to it, I led a busy life in those days.With a large